Nichiyouki wrote:

Hi, yanlu

My mod from your request in pm forum

Red = Unrankable
Blue = You should modified
Black = My suggestion

General

1. Add "(TV Size)" in title name like this: http://osu.ppy.sh/s/72805

Easy

1. 00:13:443 (3,4,5) - Make to this picture and code. It will play to more smoothly.
   
   SPOILER

   

   120,236,13443,1,2,0:0:0
   44,264,13904,2,0,P|84:308|144:312,1,120,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
   220,292,15058,1,2,0:0:0

2. 00:33:981 (1) - Add NC here, since this note follows a spinner.
   
   Comment: Nice diff. I can't find the problem more than this.

Normal

1. 00:26:135 - Add circle here.
2. 00:38:827 (2) - Add clap in slider end.
3. 00:41:135 (3,4) - Slider of 00:39:289 (3) is conceal them. You should avoid overlapping of them.
   
   Comment: Nice diff as well.

Hard

1. 00:02:597 (2) - Move to down 3 grids.
2. 00:17:135 (4,5) - If you want to make it more beautiful, make to this picture and code.
   
   SPOILER

   

   332,92,17135,1,0,0:0:0
   252,84,17366,2,0,P|220:112|208:148,1,80,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

3. 00:18:289 (7) - The sound on slider end is too low. May increase volume about 40~45% or remove a green line in 00:18:635.
4. 00:39:058 (4) - It's weird when I listen rhythm of notes. You should end the slider at 00:39:289 to following the rhythm.
5. 01:03:520 (3) - Ctrl+G. It will be able to more smoothly.
6. 01:09:657 (2,3,4) - Spacing are too far.
7. 01:10:741 (5) - Unsnapped slider. Please resnap it, and resnap a green line sections.
8. 01:10:881 - Resnap a green line sections.
   
   Comment: Some notes may weird for me, and I see some notes in before end of the song part are unsnapped, too. So I think that this diff should more work.

That's all that I can find them, and hope that my mod will be useful for you.

Good luck~

stevemin wrote:

hello~
(m4m)
i am a newb mapper and modder so feel free to just ignore me~

[Easy]
00:21:289 (3) - clap, sounds better
00:46:674 (3) - finish
00:47:597 (4) - finish, its in the music
really nothing to fix~ perfect~

[Normal]
00:28:443 - maybe this slider looks better
http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/248/56736203.png/
00:33:520 (3) - maybe clap here? oops miss
nothing to fix here too...

[Hard]
00:10:212 (6) - the triple here is too much, change like this
http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/841/49624064.png/
00:48:751 (1) - this is a minor thing but how about rotating this slider more anti clockwise so the curve flows smoothly~
01:01:443 (4) - nc
01:02:135 (5) - "
01:05:827 (4) - "

So well made and awesome story boarding star~

1. Put 藤田咲 as Artist?

1. Uhm, fine ><

1. 00:25:212 (6) - Hold shift while placing this, so it's directly underneath (5)?
2. 00:28:443 (4) - Endpoint 1 gridlvl4 to the right.
3. 00:43:212 (1) - Place this somewhere else? With both the slider not fading completely out, and the hitburst from (5), this can be a bit hard to read for beginners.

1. 00:23:827 (3) - Move to 204;228, and then move the endpoint 3 gridlvl4 up.
2. 01:03:520 (3) - Make a heart-shape? To go with the Storyboard
   

   256,224,63520,2,0,P|283:155|415:205|383:18|301:32|256:64|256:64|210:32|128:18|96:205|

3. 01:10:776 (5) - Put in the center?

CXu wrote:

Hi yanlu

Randomly modding from here.

Please take anything I say as a suggestion, and feel free to ignore my mod post~

[General]

1. Put 藤田咲 as Artist?

[Easy]

1. Uhm, fine ><

[Normal]

1. 00:25:212 (6) - Hold shift while placing this, so it's directly underneath (5)?
2. 00:28:443 (4) - Endpoint 1 gridlvl4 to the right.
3. 00:43:212 (1) - Place this somewhere else? With both the slider not fading completely out, and the hitburst from (5), this can be a bit hard to read for beginners.

[Hard]

1. 00:23:827 (3) - Move to 204;228, and then move the endpoint 3 gridlvl4 up.
2. 01:03:520 (3) - Make a heart-shape? To go with the Storyboard
   

   256,224,63520,2,0,P|283:155|415:205|383:18|301:32|256:64|256:64|210:32|128:18|96:205|

   eh...it' cann't work orz
3. 01:10:776 (5) - Put in the center?

That's all~ Good luck!

256,216,63520,6,0,P|274:133|388:195|400:59|326:-1|256:61|256:61|186:-1|109:63|130:182|232:153|235:187,1,560,6|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

BounceBabe wrote:

Hi, from the Queue!

General

SB Wise
You have two osb files, delete one! ahhh~dele ><
Light -2.png should be 640x480, once you have this fix the scale coding to 1 fix~
The BLACK.png should be 640x480, once you have this fix the scale as well to 1 fix too~
lyrics 1.png is cut off, fix this! okay,I make all lyrics sb change again now>~<
http://puu.sh/1XVo0
sb1 should start at 00:00:751 - with the music fix
Make sure the pictures go over the edges!
The Light -2.png effect should end here 01:11:335 - , its too much fix lol
The transition between sb7 and sb8 isnt good, fix this too fix now~

Hard

00:05:135 (2,3) - Even for symmetry, should be consistent spacing it's okay i nc next jump..
00:07:212 (8,1) - ^ ^
00:14:135 (5,6,9) - ^, jump feels nonsense
00:18:289 (7,8) - Why ? Keep the spacing consistent please want to keep that..i think it's okay to readable and playable ;O00:23:827 (3,4) - ^ ^
00:28:212 (9,1) - ^ ^
00:29:135 (4,5) - ^ Really needed? ^
00:36:520 (2,3,4,5,6) - Make the star pattern so it has similar spacing and not changing, or better just make it symmetric fix..it's star already imo..
00:49:905 (4,1) - Spacing fix
00:57:058 (5,1) - this jump feels so forced, dont make this i'll think about..
00:58:443 (2,3,4) - You stack 2 and 3 but 4 is single, why dont you make a triangle pattern i think it's okay and fit with vocal ><
01:10:776 (5) - Theres no matchable sound to it, just add a single circle fix><!


Only things to fix, not more on Easy or Normal, well done and good luck

1. Maybe you want to use some fading on SB. or is it just me?

1. So many sliders that end on red tick, and then the next slider is started at white tick. afaik this could confuse new players and player who never heard this song before. Change it...
2. 00:06:058 (3) - delete the clap hitsound and put whistle on the tail of this slider?
3. 00:08:827 - 00:10:904 - did you stop the whistle hitsound here? Put Whistle on 00:08:827 and 00:09:751, do the same to all diffs...
4. 00:13:904 (4) - delete the clap hitsound and put whistle on the tail of this slider?
5. 00:19:212 (1) - whistle on the start of this slider?
6. 00:43:674 (3) - imho ugly shape, the head and tail of this slider are blocking each other... try this :
   
   SPOILER

   

1. Set the hitsounds like [Easy]
2. 00:02:366 (3) - - delete the clap hitsound and put whistle on the tail of this slider?
3. 00:09:751 (3) - ^
4. 00:07:212 (5) - delete the clap and put whistle
5. 00:18:404 (7) - just in case if you want better flow..
   
   SPOILER

   

1. set the hitsound like [Easy]
2. 00:06:289 (4) - delete?
3. 00:09:981 (5) - ^
4. 00:10:327 (7) - ^, well the song is quite slow and calm, a stream is not good on that part
5. 00:13:443 (4,5,6,7) - make it like this :
   
   much better
6. 00:21:289 - an object here is useless, especially that you silence it, try this :
   
   don't forget to delete the inheriting sections..
7. 00:31:904 (6,1,2,3) - try this :
   
8. 00:38:597 - 00:38:712 - delete these inheriting sections, it's useless imo
9. 00:39:520 (1,5) - delete finish on these slider
10. 00:39:058 (4) - put finish in the end of this slider, and put finish in the start of 00:40:904 (7)
11. there's also other wrong placement of soft finish, fix it..

BounceBabe wrote:

Much better improvment on SB, but you still didnt fix the "Light -2.png" Scale, also I'm deliberate...i want it not too much><!

00:18:289 (7,8) - Why ? Keep the spacing consistent please want to keep that..i think it's okay to readable and playable ;O
00:23:827 (3,4) - ^ ^
00:28:212 (9,1) - ^ ^
00:36:520 (2,3,4,5,6) - Make the star pattern so it has similar spacing and not changing, or better just make it symmetric fix..it's star already imo..
00:58:443 (2,3,4) - You stack 2 and 3 but 4 is single, why dont you make a triangle pattern i think it's okay and fit with vocal ><

Really advise you to fix these please! The spacing is something im strict on unless its really suiting

rEdo wrote:

[// Timing check]
751, 130.00 BPM
67904, 120.00 BPM
69137, 110.00 BPM

I guess that should work a lot better.
i think it's fine now >_<

[Easy]
00:19:212 (1) - add a whistle at its beginning fix
00:53:597 (2) - that whistle sounds pretty random... consider deleting it. okay

also, maybe map it until the end? t's a waste when it's not mapped! i want it....keep ;w;

[Normal]
00:26:135 (7) - new combo here fix
00:29:597 (5) - ^ fix

you should map it until the end as well! ;w;

[Hard]
00:08:135 (1) - the finish on its beginning is way too loud, you should decrease the volume on its timing section to 20%, like in previous difficulties. fix
00:18:981 (8) - you should try to set new combos on the beginning of patterns like this one. it doesn't look cool when you've got extra two circles from the previous pattern in the wrong combo >< fix
00:26:827 (2) - new combo here, instead of current (1). you shouldn't stick to the white lines in setting up the combos, they are supposed to help you only~ fix
00:31:904 (6) - here too, I think it looks a lot better when the new combo would start on that note instead of your current (1). no
00:33:058 (4,5,6,1) - something like that fits the music a lot better~ okay ><much better
00:37:443 (6) - new combo fix
00:40:904 (7) - a pattern like this might play a lot better imo, the jump is on a more important moment in the song~ fix but not your way~
00:44:943 (5) - new combo fix
00:59:366 (4) - ^ ^
01:02:135 (5) - ^ ^


that's a nice map you've got there~ :3

1. Moe Cute Kawaii lovely song have NOTHING to do with song or sb. I don't think people will look for song using tag "kawaii".
2. If you remove tags as I suggested above, you need new ones. A1-pictures and wagnaria will be ok, I think.
3. I can clearly hear 1/2 ticks, so, try to use Slider Tick Rate 2. It will fit here better, imo.
4. clap hitsounds sometimes feels weird.

1. 00:00:751 - Check SB load here. According to osu! editor it is above recommended SB load (x5.00). Make sure that you have reasons to break this guideline and use higher SB load :<
2. 00:08:135 - same as above. Try to reduce SB load, please!

1. Nazi - I'd recommend you to use distance spacing x1.1, so circles will not touch each other and it will look the way better. (In other words, it will make your patterns neater
2. 00:02:366 (2,1) - this kind of overlap (overlap with previous slider's hitburst) will confuse some beginners. example (00:05:597 (2) - is stacked with 00:02:366 (2) - )
3. 00:21:289 (3) - for calm song and Easy diff this slider is TOO short. It will stress beginners, I STRONGLY recommend you to avoid using 1/2 sliders here.
4. 00:37:674 (1,2) - why don't you re-arrange this part a bit to follow vocals closer? Just swap (2) and (3) this way
5. 00:43:674 (3) - nazi - why don't you create better (softer) shape for this slider? Curent one may confuse some beginners and it doesn't look good, imo.
6. 00:54:981 (4,1) - Swap New Combos to follow Storyboard and music? Current combo placement here feels weird.

1. 00:09:751 (3) - uh.. It seems like you can follow vocals closer and make pattern more consistent. Make slider end at 00:10:212 - and put circle at 00:10:443 - you did the same with 00:13:904 (4,5), so it's ok to do it here as well.
2. 00:17:135 - I'm sure you've missed some vocals here. It really feels wrong to me without circle here.
3. 00:43:674 (2,3) - how about removing (3) and adding repeat to 00:43:674 (2) - it will follow vocals better.example (personally, I feel like vocals here should end at 00:44:597 - that's why I want you to end slider here)
4. 00:54:981 (5)/00:56:597 (1) - - same as Easy? Swap new combos to follow vocals and storyboard? It feels weird the way it is now, imo.
5. 00:58:443 - don't you feel like this beat sould have louder slider-tick? It feels REALLY loud, simple slider-tick is not enough here, make it louder, please!
6. 01:02:135 (4) - New combo for vocals and storyboard? I'd place NC here, to be honest.

1. Song is calm, but your patterns are not calm. Use AR8 to make them easier to read. It will fit with your slider velocity better, too!
2. 00:39:058 (6) - end it 1/2 earlier, please! There's no ANY beat at 00:39:404.
3. 00:46:674 (7) - nazi - it feels like NC here will fit good enough. It will make your comboing more consistent + long combos don't look good.
4. 01:10:916 - ultimate-nazi - pointless green line, remove it, please!

-Bakari- wrote:

Hi~ Map finally got anime-related SB and BG. Now I'm happy to mod it. I'll grave my version of this song as soon as possible, ofc. nooo you don't have to! D:

[General]

1. Moe Cute Kawaii lovely song have NOTHING to do with song or sb. I don't think people will look for song using tag "kawaii". lol I know...okay dele them ;_; but i want lovely song keep seems it really is ;D
2. If you remove tags as I suggested above, you need new ones. A1-pictures and wagnaria will be ok, I think. A1-pictures and wagnaria?? i want to know why..
3. I can clearly hear 1/2 ticks, so, try to use Slider Tick Rate 2. It will fit here better, imo. okay! silder tick rate 2 now~
4. clap hitsounds sometimes feels weird.

[Storyboard]

1. 00:00:751 - Check SB load here. According to osu! editor it is above recommended SB load (x5.00). Make sure that you have reasons to break this guideline and use higher SB load :< fix :<
2. 00:08:135 - same as above. Try to reduce SB load, please! fix too>_<!

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Pretty nice map, good luck.

yanlu wrote:

-Bakari- wrote:

Hi~ Map finally got anime-related SB and BG. Now I'm happy to mod it. I'll grave my version of this song as soon as possible, ofc. nooo you don't have to! D: i want to

[General]

1. If you remove tags as I suggested above, you need new ones. A1-pictures and wagnaria will be ok, I think. A1-pictures and wagnaria?? i want to know why.. that anime is created by A1-pictures. and wagnaria is a name of a cafe where they work.. go and watch this anime, you'll like it

-Bakari- wrote:

[Easy]

1. Nazi - I'd recommend you to use distance spacing x1.1, so circles will not touch each other and it will look the way better. (In other words, it will make your patterns neater it's okay now >.<...
2. 00:02:366 (2,1) - this kind of overlap (overlap with previous slider's hitburst) will confuse some beginners. example (00:05:597 (2) - is stacked with 00:02:366 (2) - ) fix~
3. 00:21:289 (3) - for calm song and Easy diff this slider is TOO short. It will stress beginners, I STRONGLY recommend you to avoid using 1/2 sliders here. fix
4. 00:37:674 (1,2) - why don't you re-arrange this part a bit to follow vocals closer? Just swap (2) and (3) this way fix
5. 00:43:674 (3) - nazi - why don't you create better (softer) shape for this slider? Curent one may confuse some beginners and it doesn't look good, imo. i want it..keep
6. 00:54:981 (4,1) - Swap New Combos to follow Storyboard and music? Current combo placement here feels weird. fix

[Normal]

1. 00:09:751 (3) - uh.. It seems like you can follow vocals closer and make pattern more consistent. Make slider end at 00:10:212 - and put circle at 00:10:443 - you did the same with 00:13:904 (4,5), so it's ok to do it here as well. no..it's consistent with 00:01:904 (2,3) -
2. 00:17:135 - I'm sure you've missed some vocals here. It really feels wrong to me without circle here. fix but change to slider
3. 00:43:674 (2,3) - how about removing (3) and adding repeat to 00:43:674 (2) - it will follow vocals better.example (personally, I feel like vocals here should end at 00:44:597 - that's why I want you to end slider here) fix and snap too.
4. 00:54:981 (5)/00:56:597 (1) - - same as Easy? Swap new combos to follow vocals and storyboard? It feels weird the way it is now, imo. fix
5. 00:58:443 - don't you feel like this beat sould have louder slider-tick? It feels REALLY loud, simple slider-tick is not enough here, make it louder, please! okay"
6. 01:02:135 (4) - New combo for vocals and storyboard? I'd place NC here, to be honest. fix

[Hard]

1. Song is calm, but your patterns are not calm. Use AR8 to make them easier to read. It will fit with your slider velocity better, too! okay
2. 00:39:058 (6) - end it 1/2 earlier, please! There's no ANY beat at 00:39:404. okay..
3. 00:46:674 (7) - nazi - it feels like NC here will fit good enough. It will make your comboing more consistent + long combos don't look good. fix
4. 01:10:916 - ultimate-nazi - pointless green line, remove it, please! fix too

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Pretty nice map, good luck.

No_Gu wrote:

Request from The Lazy Queue@がんばらない

[General/All diffs]
好像缺个black.png 欸..有阿"
我觉得可以找custom clap..因为这首我觉得真的不适合默认的 okay
00:40:212这边出来这张在16:9里看是这样的。。 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/615900 ..看了下 00:26:597 这边这张也是。。改完版我就没做过SB了所以hhh 我不知道怎麼解決寬屏問題;w;
为啥EN不做完
hhh我原来开过这首
然后这首不是伊波的吗！..其實我沒看過..不知道lol

[Easy]
其实不用tick调音的话我觉得tick1在easy里够够的
00:41:366 (1) - 把5包住? 已修改

[Normal]
00:40:674 (2,3) - 不得不说这边好像被挡的挺厉害 恩...現在應該好一點了

[Hard]
00:13:212 (3,4) - 我觉得这边还是跟前面弄个三角形比较好。不过个人习惯问题 好吧 改了
我觉得可以一条长白线1NC.或者看看超过10的comboNC一下。。 都沒有超過10combo呀

整体还不错。。感觉好像remap过？。。原来看好像没这么整齐。EN补全了我叫pokie来看看

Pokie wrote:

Request from The Lazy Queue@がんばらない

Hello yanlu! A further modding here:

　General

1. Is that adding a tag for lovely song necessary? If not, I'd recommend to remove that. There's no need to have a customized tag for yourself. okay ;(
2. Timing is totally off'd on 01:07:903 - . Please apply rEdo's timing. And remind that don't forget a resnap after changes. fix
   

   rEdo wrote:

   751, 130.00 BPM
   67904, 120.00 BPM
   69137, 110.00 BPM

3. Pretty weird that you only have a silenced sliderslide for Normal set, please consider adding one for Soft set too. add

　Storyboard

1. Storyboard部份用中文說明好了(汗
2. 優化(?)了一下代碼… http://puu.sh/24Vwa 用這個代替現有的osb, SB Load應該不會有超過5.00的地方了… (替代後請刪除BLACK.png) 恩~非常感謝!
3. 製作Storyboard時請避免使用Black覆蓋無需使用的背景, 這樣會佔用2.00的SB Load.
   
   • - 在背景layer加一條這樣的代碼可以去掉背景, 需要使用到背景的時候再另外加進去

Sprite,Background,TopLeft,"BG.jpg",0,0

:OO (還是不會用囧"..

1. 唔…為何Light -2.png的代碼裡會有一行Rotate效果? 建議刪除 (目前使用Rotate會導致在寬屏的位置也顯示出storyboard元件…)
2. 00:59:827 - 這裡明明是同一句歌詞, 但卻fade out了 orz …將lyrics 12.png分成will reveal our / golden day 兩張圖? 恩..其實是故意的orz

　Easy

1. Slider tick rate 1 should be enough for Easy difficulty.
   00:03:981 (3,1) - Adding a whistle on downbeat wasn't nice, please swap the whistle just like how you did on 00:07:674 (4,1) -
   00:09:751 (3) - (slider's head) To keep the consistency with 00:02:366 (2) - and 00:06:058 (3) - , add a whistle here?
   00:11:366 - Consider adding a circle/slider with whistle, instead of leave it blank?
   
   
   01:03:520 (1) - I-I tried to shape this but it took over 15 minutes Dx
   
   SPOILER

   

266,187,63520,6,4,P|311:164|331:140|360:95|342:40|288:36|254:75|254:75|224:36|171:40|150:100|189:147|197:149,1,400,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

　Normal

• 00:28:443 (5) - For the slider's end, seems there's no point for ending this slider at such timing point. Please extend it by 1/2 beat (00:29:366 - )
  01:03:520 (1) - Wha- again?! Well thanks god that we've a scale tool.
  
  SPOILER

  

265,187,63520,6,4,P|305:166|323:145|349:104|333:55|284:51|254:86|254:86|227:51|179:55|160:109|195:151|202:153,1,350,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

　Hard

• 00:27:981 (6,7,8) - If you ever wanted to add triples here, please don't leave 00:27:404 (4) - blank.
  00:31:674 (5) - Just to let you know that rhythms aren't even according with the music, I could say it's totally off'd here...Please use this rhythm instead of the current one.
  
  00:35:827 (1) - If you're trying to follow vocal, please move this slider to 00:35:597 - . (I've fixed the pattern for you until 00:38:135 (4) - )

320,300,35597,6,0,P|304:264|328:228|328:228|356:192|340:148,1,160,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
213,53,36289,1,8,0:0:0
256,176,36520,1,0,0:0:0
293,51,36751,1,0,0:0:0
189,129,36981,1,0,0:0:0
319,127,37212,1,8,0:0:0
257,176,37443,5,0,0:0:0
257,208,37558,1,0,0:0:0
253,240,37674,2,0,P|245:284|257:316,1,80,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
338,337,38135,1,8,0:0:0

• 00:39:520 (1) - Swap the whistle to 00:39:058 (6) - 's slider's end.
  00:45:751 (5,1,3) - (slider's head) Kind of ridiculous that you've added plenty soft/normal finishs through the chorus part, but missing them here. Please add finishs to both slider's head properly.
  00:49:905 (4) - Same suggestion with 00:31:674 (fixed until 00:51:751 - )

424,236,49904,2,0,P|460:256|498:256,1,80
316,244,50366,6,0,P|240:192|172:192,1,160,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
136,296,51058,1,2,0:0:0
76,212,51289,1,2,0:0:0
48,236,51404,1,0,0:0:0
28,268,51520,1,2,0:0:0
64,349,51751,1,0,0:0:0

• 00:53:135 (3) - ^ (fixed until 00:54:058 (1) - )

344,296,53135,2,0,P|328:236|348:184,1,120
372,160,53597,2,0,P|396:128|400:88,1,80,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
343,27,54058,6,0,P|308:55|314:101|314:101|269:178,1,160,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

fix =A=
(愛心修的好漂亮喔...我都拉的不好看;w;

That's all, good luck

neonat wrote:

Minor suggestions.

Hard

00:28:327 - add a note (you can hear in the background) no..
00:33:635 - add a note (I think it would be nicer rather than just starting when the vocals do) ^
00:39:058 (6,1) - try this rhythm? (emphasizes 00:39:289 -) better but i have another way..fix now~

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Love the song I love it too

Zhengster wrote:

Hello! This is M4M from your queue. I hope you find my mod helpful, but i'm a newbie mapper and still learning D: Take these as suggestions~

[Easy]
01:03:520 (1)- I think the heart shape could be improved how..i think it's good enough now :/

[Normal]
00:27:289 - add note nop..it'll be harder
00:35:366 - ^
01:00:520 - ^
01:03:520 (1) - Heart shape could be improved same as easy :/

[Hard]
00:02:135 (4,5) - Consider switching these two to fit better with the music hmm..it's fine i think
00:10:442 (7,8) - move to the next white tick ..? I can't understand your mean =A=
0:26:597 (10)- NC, remove NC from 00:26:827 (1) change nc before like now..i think no to change again ><
01:08:654 - add note no..

Goodluck on your maapppp

tony8128 wrote:

Sorry for the late mod
The music is great~ And I like your mapping style

[SB]
The first picture seems to be appearing suddenly from pitch black. Consider changing to some fade-in effect.

[Easy]
01:10:227 (2) - This clap seems a bit strange... Change it to whistle and remove the whistle on the end seems better.
01:03:520 (1) - You can try this: First make a symmetry pattern of a heart with lower grid level, without considering the length. Then use "Scale by..." in the "Edit" menu to adjust its length, using the largest possible number. The shape will look better that way.

Btw, b/178353 in this map on Nogard diff, at 03:27:404 there is a good example of heart-shaped slider. You can take that as a reference.

[Normal]
00:02:366 (3) - The clap on the end is a bit inconsistent to the music... How about changing to whistle?
00:07:212 (5) - ^
00:14:597 (5) - ^
01:03:520 (1) - Same as Easy


[Hard]
OD 6? Maybe +1 would be better... (I SSed on the first try)
Flows are great.

00:10:904 (10) - Move the whistle to the beginning (optional)
00:14:135 (5) - Add a clap here
00:14:597 (8) - Remove this clap (optional)
00:18:289 (3) - Add a whistle on the beginning
01:10:227 (4) - Maybe adding a whistle sounds better...

Frostmourne wrote:

ok

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General
sorry for inconvenience
for the only 1st offset (751) , change it to 756(+5) since it's a bit early , don't need to touch the other offsets
don't forget to resnap all green lines, preview time,SB and notes
I'm sorry for inconvenience really ;_;

Easy
00:54:981 (1) - remove this NC and add NC here instead 00:56:135 (5) - , it makes sense better since it follows the phrase in the song

Normal
00:32:366 (1) - add clap for the head of this slider too , as you hear , it sounds the exactly same as the tail of this slider so it will work correspondingly better too
00:33:058 (2) - this finish is weird , you shouldn't let the pre-part (a part before the kiai) be the more important part than kiai part
you should emphasis the kiai part best , so what I suggest is you should lower volume this note to 30% or lower than this
so the finish at 00:33:981 (1) - will stand out and fit the song perfectly

Hard
I find AR7 play better , the thing is the way you map , you didn't put jumps everywhere + the song itself is quite calm. so AR7 fits the song much better
00:32:139 (1) - this new combo is weird , when players play on this part, they might feel a bit astonished (at least to me) so I suggest you remove NC here
and keep long combo like you did in other points in this diff
00:51:524 (5) - without this whistle sounds much better because it doubles with 00:51:293 (3) - and it feels strange
01:01:447 (7) - finish?
01:02:139 (1) - ^
as I heard from the music, and this is the very end of the song so adding them will fit better

let me know when you have fixed this

no kudosu (you gave me for the timing fixes before)

Loneight wrote:

Hi~
Request from PM but sorry for late.

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• 
  "re" is means "remove"
  Black is just suggestion, if you don't like , you can skip it
  Blue is recommended to fix
  red is unrankable issue

[general]

1. for SB, it is weird that sb1.jpg suddenly appear on 00:00:751 - , try to use fade to get it slowly appear ok

[Easy]

1. Useless green line:
   00:33:520 -
   
   
2. 00:00:751 (1) - re finish at start, because music should start at a quite sound, add nothing would be better for music, don't you feel weird because of the finish?>~< nop:/
3. 00:08:135 (1) - same as ^, there also add nothing would be better, finish is too weird for there :/
4. 00:21:981 (4) - I think there flow isn't comfortable, try to ctrl+j, ctrl+h, ctrl+g and move to x:168 y:288, would be much smoother. If you change, remember to fix 00:22:904 (1) - distance
5. 00:54:981 (1,2) - swap NC, I feel there vocal is same as 00:40:443 (4,5,1) - , but NC is different.
6. 01:03:520 (1) - slidertick is too loud for there, why don't you make there like Hard? try to reduce volume because there is quite place
7. 01:09:404 (1) - unsnapped slider (end)

nice diff !~

[Normal]

1. Useless green line:
   01:03:058 -
   01:03:174 -
   
   
2. 00:00:751 (1) - same as Easy, also 00:08:135 (1) - :/
3. 00:29:827 (2) - add clap to make 00:28:443 (5,1,2) - have a hierarchical sense
4. 00:33:058 (2) - this finish is too weird for music, try to use Drum-clap, I think would be very suitable xD
5. 00:40:212 (1,4) - swap NC, why don't you make NC like Easy? I think NC should on 00:41:366 (4) - because have stress or make 00:41:366 (4,5) - length same as 00:43:212 (1,2,3) - . also 00:54:981 (1,3) - like there (I also think it is still readable)
6. 00:59:827 (3,1) - swap NC, I think there vocal like 00:45:058 (1,4) - 's part
7. 01:03:520 (1) - same as Easy

good diff :3!

[Hard]

1. AR is not suitable for this diff, it feels faster a bit. try to -1, would be much better for the diff ok
   
   
2. 00:18:981 (1,3) - swap NC, stress is on 00:19:212 (3) -
3. 00:26:597 (10,1) - same as ^, because I feel stress is on 00:26:597 (10) -
4. 00:31:904 (6,1) - I think 00:32:135 (1) -'s start dosen't follow anything with music, only could follow approachcircle to hit, and weird rhythm for me, try this rhythm want to keep ;w;
5. 00:33:058 (4) - same as Normal
6. 00:33:751 (1,3) - swap NC, because 00:33:981 (3) - have a stress or kiai time's start-time
7. 00:51:289 (3) - re whistle, because too many soft-finish sound make noisy , and 00:51:981 (7) - add whistle at start to make a new rhythm with 00:51:058 (2,3,5) -
8. 00:58:674 - add a note, I think would be better for rhythm or more readable
9. 01:07:904 (3) - I feel weird on 01:08:154 - , can't hear anything to follow, try this

smooth SV for this diff ~ good ! only AR is a bit fast

good luck for rank~! lulu >w<!
star~

Frostmourne wrote:

Recheck
Offset 67904 (01:07:904 (3) - this note in Hard) change to 67909 , please resnap all notes in between 01:07:909 to 01:09:409 interval as well
(also snap something before 67909 such as 01:07:217 (2) - in Easy diff too

Easy
01:01:217 (2) - shorten this slider end at 01:01:448 (1/2 back) because there is no music supporting at the next 1/2 beat
also it's not too hard for the beginner I believe

Normal
00:56:602 (4) - NC
00:57:986 (1) - remove NC
00:59:832 (5) - NC
01:02:140 (1) - remove NC
^ these are for better look and you can see that it makes sense more than before (the new NC will follow the new phrase accordingly)

no kd

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