This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 8. heinäkuuta 2009 at 2:03:55

Artist: Unsraw
Title: Enshoku No Yume
BPM: 103,5
Filesize: 3418kb
Play Time: 02:14
Difficulties Available:

1. Hard (4,58 stars, 247 notes)
2. Normal (4,38 stars, 201 notes)

Download: Unsraw - Enshoku No Yume
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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Pretty much complete now.. Although I am considering of making one more difficulty.

Edit 1. Offset fixed. Sound effects improved and an image added.
Edit 2. New difficulty (NOT FINISHED)
Edit 3. Normal finished + Almost hard more length.
Edit 4. Fixed stuff that Saturos-fangirl pointed out including inheriting, hitsounds, sliders and repetitive beat.
+ added custom colors.
Edit 5:. Fixed stuff that Saturos pointed out once again.
Edit 6. Minor fixes
Edit 7. Hard difficulty redone for more spacing and slider velocity.

I wont do that "Edit.#" stuff anymore but I will be updating when a modder cares for my map.

Bump.

Oh yeah.. The topic title is still wrong. Its supposed to be Enshoku No Yume.

[Normal]
00:17:21 (1) - move out from under 4
00:27:93 (3,4,1,2,3,4,5) - overusing clap
00:51:12 (3) - add a break here
is there a reason your inherit points arent set to inherit the previous timing section?
01:11:70 (2) - align with 1
01:21:26 (2) - make this symmetrical please
01:22:86 (1,2,3) - move so 3 isnt under 1,2
01:24:31 (4) - delete and replace break
i think timing may be off, try asking someone to time this for you i suck at timing
01:46:48 (3) - finish
02:09:38 (3) - claps
02:14:02 (4) - sounds kinda awkward as the ending
could use more finishes imo and less streams of claps but more claps in general


[Almost Hard]
00:20:97 (1,2,3,4) - constant rhythm is getting annoying...add or delete a note
00:42:71 (1,2,3,4,5) - needs hitsounds
00:49:09 (2) - finish
00:51:12 (2) - insert break after this
00:55:76 (3) - mix claps and finishes, dont just grind one hitsound like this
01:14:31 (3) - hitsounds
01:18:94 (3) - insert break
01:21:26 (2) - sliders are not permitted to overlap themselves like this this is unrankable
01:42:71 (3) - ^
01:46:19 (2) - remove finish
02:04:74 (1,2,1,2,1) - again your rhythm is getting repetitive please break it up a little!
and watch out for those inherit timing sections. once you fix this and your streamed hitsounds and those unrankable sliders call me back and ill remod for a star

The reason with the inheriting is that I dont know how.

Gonna work on those other minorities soon :d

And the timing shud be correct. I even checked it with the BPM analyzer.




EDIT: Okay I asked about inheriting in the chat and found out. Now I have fixed the stuff you pointed out.

[Normal]
00:15:18 (2) - a bit close to 1
00:19:24 (1) - make this fit better with prev. 2
00:49:09 (3) - 1/2 after this feels like a note is missing
01:22:86 (1) - the note sounds 1/4 earlier on the red tick
01:23:58 (3) - move to the time shown (i fiddled with the pattern to make it sound right its uh...red, blue, white, blue)
01:39:23 (2) - finish the end?
01:46:19 (2) - align w 1


[Almost Hard]
00:17:21 (1,2,3,4) - really, add a note or subtract a note the repetitive rhythm is zzz...oh you did that later itd still help in the first stream
00:49:09 (2) - hitsound
01:11:12 (2) - should end 1/4 earlier
01:23:00 (3) - either new combo to warn of a jump or move closer to 2, and also align with 2 plz
01:23:87 (6) - move the end of the slider so it isnt partly under 5
01:38:08 (1) - misleading spacing


have a nice pretty star...

Saturos-fangirl wrote:

[Normal]
1: 00:15:18 (2) - a bit close to 1
2: 00:19:24 (1) - make this fit better with prev. 2
3: 00:49:09 (3) - 1/2 after this feels like a note is missing
4: 01:22:86 (1) - the note sounds 1/4 earlier on the red tick
5: 01:23:58 (3) - move to the time shown (i fiddled with the pattern to make it sound right its uh...red, blue, white, blue)
6: 01:39:23 (2) - finish the end?
7: 01:46:19 (2) - align w 1


[Almost Hard]
8: 00:17:21 (1,2,3,4) - really, add a note or subtract a note the repetitive rhythm is zzz...oh you did that later itd still help in the first stream
9: 00:49:09 (2) - hitsound
10: 01:11:12 (2) - should end 1/4 earlier
11: 01:23:00 (3) - either new combo to warn of a jump or move closer to 2, and also align with 2 plz
12: 01:23:87 (6) - move the end of the slider so it isnt partly under 5
13: 01:38:08 (1) - misleading spacing


have a nice pretty star...

1. No I dont think so o_O Its placed exactly by the spacing I created to this beatmap (according to the grid atleast)
2. What do you mean? Hitsounds?
3. Fixed o/
4. Fixed o/
5. Fixed o/
6. Fixed o/
7. Fixed o/ (I think)

8. Fixed o/ (I think)
9. Fixed o/
10. Fixed o/
11. Fixed o/
12. Why? Wryyy? It looks nice and symmetric the way it is.
13. Fixed o/

Thank you for your cooperation.

[Normal]
28:515(4)-> Too close from (3)
33:732(1)-> Sound doesn't go with the music. 1/4 beat backward.
1:23:153(2)-> 1/4 beat backward
1:24:312(4)-> 1/4 beat backward
1:46:196(2,3)-> Too close from (1)

[Hard]
30:399(1,2,3,4)-> 1/4 beat forward
1:20:689(1)-> Move down a bit

Starred~

But for me, the 30:399 suggestion doesnt make sense. I'll keep wondering. Thanks for starring
-> Why? Listen to the music with 25%/50% playback rate!

star, nice map

minyeob's normal suggestions done.

But for me, the 30:399 suggestion doesnt make sense. I'll keep wondering. Thanks for starring

Very Nice map.... Good job Mukku!

I'm sure there are plenty of tiny issues but I'll leave them to the nazis. Technically there's nothing wrong with this map but the sliders are incredibly slow and make it kinda boring. It'd be more fun if you doubled the BPM or the slider velocity but I guess it's too late for that. Oh well. Starred.

Normal

-00:33:587 (1) move this circle to 00:33:877
-01:23:298 Suggestion: put a circle here
-01:23:587 (3.4) Suggestion: move circle 4 to 01:24:457 and lenghten the number 3 slider a tick
-01:28:225 (4) lenghten this slider a tick

Hard

-00:30:399 (1.2.3.4) move them all a tick back

Nice map
Star~

Found more

Normal

-01:18:950 (3) replace this slider with a circle
-01:45:037 (1) shorten this slider a tick

Hard

-00:21:558 Suggestion: add a circle here
-00:22:718 Suggestion: add a circle here
-00:35:471 remove this circle. Then add circles to 00:35:037, 00:35:327 and 00:35:761. Try it out
-01:38:080 (1) move this slider to 01:37:790

It's called editing your post....


DO NOT GIVES KUDOS TO THIS POST!

Mianki wrote:

Found more

Normal

-01:18:950 (3) replace this slider with a circle
-01:45:037 (1) shorten this slider a tick

Hard

-00:21:558 Suggestion: add a circle here
-00:22:718 Suggestion: add a circle here
-00:35:471 remove this circle. Then add circles to 00:35:037, 00:35:327 and 00:35:761. Try it out
-01:38:080 (1) move this slider to 01:37:790

Normal fixed. I just dont know why didnt I realize these myself.

Hards two suggestions circles were there in the past but were taken out becouse of repetetive rhythm. The other two are fixed now.

Thanks Mianki

Normal:
00:38:95 (4) - move down and right a bit to form a right angle with 3
00:42:71 (1) - line up with 5,6 line
01:03:00 (1) - line up with the end of 1 and 2
01:08:51 (1) - no need for new combo
01:11:99 (3) - align with 2
01:12:86 (5) - do you want this jump in spacing?
01:14:60 (3) - not spaced correctly
01:16:63 (2) - do you want this jump in spacing?
01:22:71 (1,2,1,2,3) - every single beat in this set has a spacing larger than normal and the spacing between the red 2 and blue 1 is huge for this difficulty
01:25:90 (3) - I don't like how the ending is covered by 1 and 2
01:27:93 (3) - do you want this jump in spacing?
01:28:22 (4) - sounds better if you end a half note earlier
02:07:35 (4,5) - this breaks the flow by being the only double note stack after the break

I mentioned it a few times already, but your song seems a little inconstant on spacing. There are combos like this 02:03:58 (1,2) and like this 02:11:70 (3,4). I did not catch all of them, but this feels starnage. I hope you will put one uniform spacing for these.

Hard:
00:25:03 (5) - the placement of this is quite random. You should place this on 3 or right in the middle of 3 and 4
00:35:03 (1) - align with 5.
00:35:32 (2) - why is this placed so randomly
00:37:50 (1) - align with 5
00:38:37 (2) - might want to place a break after this beat
00:49:09 (2) - " "
01:03:00 (1) - align with 5
01:13:73 (1) - place this exactly on the repeating point on 3 (few pixels off)
01:17:79 (1) - the positioning of this looks bad because it overlapped by 3 and 5. I would put it on 3 or in another location.
01:18:94 (3) - might want to place a break after this beat
01:23:87 (6) - I don't like how this is overlapped by 5
01:36:34 (3) - I don't like how this is overlapped by 2
01:37:79 (3) - I don't like how this is overlapped by 1
02:01:84 (1) - this is a different distance from purple than blue is
02:03:87 (4) - align with the red 1 2 combos ago
02:05:90 (1) - it would be nice to put this in between the black and red combos before it
02:11:41 (5) - align with 3

I guess I do not like overlapping things that are not directly on top of each other. Here is your star.

blissfulyoshi wrote:

Normal:
00:38:95 (4) - move down and right a bit to form a right angle with 3
00:42:71 (1) - line up with 5,6 line
01:03:00 (1) - line up with the end of 1 and 2
01:08:51 (1) - no need for new combo
01:11:99 (3) - align with 2
01:12:86 (5) - do you want this jump in spacing?
01:14:60 (3) - not spaced correctly
01:16:63 (2) - do you want this jump in spacing?
01:22:71 (1,2,1,2,3) - every single beat in this set has a spacing larger than normal and the spacing between the red 2 and blue 1 is huge for this difficulty
01:25:90 (3) - I don't like how the ending is covered by 1 and 2
01:27:93 (3) - do you want this jump in spacing?
01:28:22 (4) - sounds better if you end a half note earlier
02:07:35 (4,5) - this breaks the flow by being the only double note stack after the break

I mentioned it a few times already, but your song seems a little inconstant on spacing. There are combos like this 02:03:58 (1,2) and like this 02:11:70 (3,4). I did not catch all of them, but this feels starnage. I hope you will put one uniform spacing for these.

Hard:
00:25:03 (5) - the placement of this is quite random. You should place this on 3 or right in the middle of 3 and 4
00:35:03 (1) - align with 5.
00:35:32 (2) - why is this placed so randomly
00:37:50 (1) - align with 5
00:38:37 (2) - might want to place a break after this beat
00:49:09 (2) - " "
01:03:00 (1) - align with 5
01:13:73 (1) - place this exactly on the repeating point on 3 (few pixels off)
01:17:79 (1) - the positioning of this looks bad because it overlapped by 3 and 5. I would put it on 3 or in another location.
01:18:94 (3) - might want to place a break after this beat
01:23:87 (6) - I don't like how this is overlapped by 5
01:36:34 (3) - I don't like how this is overlapped by 2
01:37:79 (3) - I don't like how this is overlapped by 1
02:01:84 (1) - this is a different distance from purple than blue is
02:03:87 (4) - align with the red 1 2 combos ago
02:05:90 (1) - it would be nice to put this in between the black and red combos before it
02:11:41 (5) - align with 3

I guess I do not like overlapping things that are not directly on top of each other. Here is your star.

Highlighted ones are the ones that I fixed. Inconstant spacing that you are talking about is propably becouse I used grid snap with distance snap. If its not that, then I dont know whats going on.

And I like overlapping, which is the reason I didnt "fix" those :>

This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.

J-Rock! *___*

[Normal]
Nothing here, i think, great job.

[Hard]
00:36:341 (5, 6, 7) - Maybe slider here? Becouse of lyrics...
00:43:877 (3) - Hmm~ Down 2 grid, maybe? Lvl3 grid.
00:56:921 (4) - Down 3 grid?

Starred.

played through pretty smoothly. Not my favorite kind of music so I dun wanna try a detail mod ._.

One issue i had was that sometimes the overlap hits covered up a Repeat image. Making the map a little more confusing than it needed to be (played hard)

just droppin a star

Timing:

Offset : 9.393 (Remember to resnap all notes)
BPM : Fine.

Overall:

In some place you abuse a bit much of hitsounds like : 00:17:79 (2). Try to change maybe.

[Normal]

00:34:17 (2,3) - Too far from (1).

[Hard]

On the start of the map, you use too much new combos.

00:35:03 (1) - 1/4 forward.
00:38:950 - Remove this break.
00:49:384 - ^
01:19:529 - ^

Nothing left to mod, why haven't you told you had uploaded map
Nice map and song=nice star :>

Blue = design/minor issues. you do not have to change these if you don't want to
Orange = moderate issues. it would be best if you change these, but you may be able to get away with not changing it
Red = major issues. you need to change these

9,373 offset works better for me IMO

[NORMAL]

01:28:23 (4) - spacing between this and (1) is too close

[HARD]

00:12:85 (1) -spacing issues. too close to 3. turn on distance snap and move it so this is the same distance between (3) and (2)
00:22:12 (3) - spacing. too close to (1)
00:40:67 (3) - spacing. too close to (4)
00:42:12 (7) - spacing again, too close to (1).

maybe make an Insane diff? Hard seems a little too easy to be the hardest diff.

so yeah, some spacing issues to deal with. not a bad map. needs a it more work before rankage though

star'd

[Normal]
00:27:21 (2) - remove some finish
youre very slightly overusing finish throughout this section, i think you should go through and take a few out
00:44:46 (5) - triple hitsounds four times in a row? Dx
00:51:13 (3) - no jumps in the lowest diff
01:25:33 (1,2,3) - messy
01:28:23 (4) - extend by 1/4
this is too hard to be a Normal/Easy requisite lowest diff. generally on these maps you should map mostly to whole beats and rarely if ever use 1/4 snap. also the ending is repetitive and boring, mix up the rhythmic pattern a bit


[Hard]
00:14:59 (1) - half-hidden
00:18:64 (5) - ^
00:25:60 (1,2,3,4) - put the finishes on 1,3 instead of 2,4 plz
01:00:09 (1,2) - move the new combo to 2
01:00:67 (1) - remove new combo
really, tone down on the finishes dood o.o;
in the ending part i would prefer that the new combos follow the MUSIC rather than the MAP but up to you. i think you can do a lot better on this map than you are, clean it up a bit

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