hi
[not a pp map]
00:05:492 (21) - change to k for the tone difference between 00:05:149 (19,20) - and 00:05:492 (21,22) - ?
00:08:920 (36,37,38,39,40,41,42) - change to k d k k d d k so you cover both the main and background synth?
00:16:463 (79) - and 00:16:977 (82) - change to d and D? 00:16:463 (79) - for the same reason as 00:05:492 (21) - and 00:16:977 (82) - to make it easier to read
00:18:692 (92) - change to k? I just think it looks nice contrasting with 00:19:206 (94,95,96) - :V
00:20:235 (99) - change to k? since this and 00:20:406 - are basically the same note.
00:28:463 (17) - honestly think this section up until the stream would look nicer with just a simple k d k d k theme, to match the simplicity of the stream. up to you though.
00:43:463 (160,161) - invert since the bass hit is on 00:43:549 - ? I know it has the buzz sound but it'd help make the stream a bit less cluttered with all the kats.
00:44:492 (172) - change to d to improve readability? also sounds like there's a bit of a dip before 00:44:577 (173) - which I think would be nice to emphasise.
00:45:263 (179,180,181,182,183,184,185,186,187,188,189,190,191) - change pattern to kkkdkkkdkkddk? would fit your previous rhythms a lot better.
00:46:635 (193) - I don't see why only this stream starts with a d? I'm already getting lazy so I'll just post one of
these as a pattern suggestion. Again I feel like it'd match your previous rhythms better.00:54:692 (272,273,274) - while this stream seems fine, it's a little boring. If you invert these three you'll incorporate part of 00:52:463 (250) - this stream AND 00:51:092 (236) - this stream, idk I think it'd be neat.
01:22:292 (421) - For the sake of my sanity please change either this to k or 01:18:177 (412) - and 01:19:549 (415) - please, why aren't they the same D:
01:37:377 (538) - k for consistency with 01:35:835 (522,523) - and to highlight the higher pitch buzz on 01:37:377 (538) - ?
01:42:863 (592) - ^
01:46:034 (623) - change to d? I think it'd improve readability. Same for all the other instances. of (kkkd)k
01:49:377 (657) - change to d since 01:49:549 (658) - is basically the same note? (also for a nicer pattern)
01:54:177 (699,700,701,702,703,704,705,706) - kkkdkkdd looks a lot nicer imo, otherwise you have the 1/6 starting on the same color as the note before it, and that'd be the only place in the map this happens (kinda off-putting tbh)
02:11:663 (45) - same as 00:05:492 (21) -
02:22:292 (106,107,108,109,110,111,112) - with the amount of finishers here I think a simple k k d d k k d would be nicer, mustly for readability.
02:24:520 (117) - change to d to (kind of) match 00:18:349 (90,91,92,93) - ?
02:40:977 (190) - and 02:42:349 (206) - change to k for no other reason than to spice up the stream a bit?
02:45:863 - missed note? Don't see why you'd skip this one since you mapped it at 02:54:092 -
02:48:692 (254,255,256,257,258,259) - k k d k k d would cover the kicks a lot better imo.
02:50:663 - add k? it's an 8* map so a little 1/4 wouldn't hurt right? :^)
02:58:977 (330) - change to d? there's a little woop in the background where a different note would look nice plus it'd improve playability.
03:03:092 - weird skipped note again? the woops deserve emphasis my dude!
03:04:463 (368) - d for the same reason as 02:58:977 (330) - ?
03:05:920 (383) - k here? sounds the same as the rest of the stream so I don't see why it should be mapped differently
03:07:549 - change this sv to 1.25x as well please. Would avoid a really weird overlap that way.
03:55:892 (202) - change to d for the same reason as 00:05:492 (21) - ?
04:08:749 (21,22) - change to k for a nice mirror with 04:09:435 (27,28) - ?
04:09:692 - strongly suggest adding a k here and inverting 04:09:777 (29,30) - , the pause is kind of weird since the drum beat doesn't actually "stop" at all.
04:11:835 (46,47,48,49) - move this to 04:11:749 - and change to dkkd? If you then move 04:12:263 (50,51,52) - to 04:12:177 - and add a k at 04:12:520 - I think it'd look pretty nice.
04:12:692 (54,55,56,57,58,59,60) - change to dkkdkkd if you apply the previous suggestion?
The great stream pattern suggestion of 2017[Stream 1]
Only apply this if you apply all of them, otherwise it'll probably look like shit idk. Ask me if you need clarification on any points.
04:15:349 (83) - swap with 04:15:520 (85) - ? Making the patterns really complex at the very end of the map is a bit big of a diff spike if you ask me.
04:19:292 (125,126,127,128) - kdkk? same reason as the last point, this stream really is a ton harder than the rest of the map :S
04:20:320 (137) - k sounds nice here and would add some variety.
04:21:092 (146,148,150) - swap colors? bring back the kdkkdkkk from 00:51:092 (236) - :^)
04:21:777 (154) - since I'm lazy again I'll just suggest another screenshotted stream pattern like
this04:24:006 (180,181,182,183) - change to kdkk, 04:24:520 (186,187,188,189,190,191,192) - into kdkdkkd and 04:25:206 (194,195,196,197,198,199) - into kdkkdk?
04:25:720 (200,201,202,203) - change into ddkk?
04:27:006 (215,216) - inverting these sounds nice if you change the following stream pattern to something like
this04:29:835 (248) - another stream suggestion starting from here.
boom04:32:235 (248) - and then starting from here.
bam04:36:177 (322) - change to d?
04:37:549 (338) - ^?
04:39:263 (358) - ^?
[Stream 2]
04:44:749 (413) - k would fit the melody you followed before the 1/6
04:47:063 (441,442,443,444) - change to kddk for smoother playing?
04:47:492 (446) - k for the same reason as the last one?
04:48:006 (452,453,454,455,456,457,458,459,460,461,462,463,464) - kkkdkkddkdkdk would look nicer imo, and fit the previous rhythms better.
04:55:720 (536) - k for the same reason as the last one?
04:58:120 (565,567) - change to k to emphasise the stuff you did at 04:52:806 - ?
Hope some of this is comprehensible, I just woke up. So yeah bubble pops hurt, but I'd hate to see you give up on one of your first maps. So ganbatte, Axer-chan!