DukeDukeDura wrote:

M4M

Inner Oni

00:34:027 (172,173) - d->k , k->d cymbal→D
00:35:428 (180) - +k　nice!!!
00:36:500 (186) - d->k ok
00:44:000 (227,228) - d->k , k->d sounds is up↑
00:53:065 (302) - +d　00:46:390 (241,242,243) - pattern change
00:53:642 (305) - k->d cymbal→D
00:53:972 (306) - d->k drum follow
00:54:302 (309) - d->k ^

00:59:989 (356) - remove 01:00:071 - too conspicuous
01:00:648 (362,363) - remove drum is too conspicuous
01:01:472 (371) - remove drum follow
00:59:576 - 01:01:884 fix the d and k if you removed the notes

01:54:298 (33) - +d 01:55:704 (43,44) - 01:58:341 (63,64) - 01:59:165 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 02:01:802 (21,1) - pattern
01:54:381 (33) - remove ^
01:54:463 (34) - d->k ^

02:30:892 (266) - +d drum follow
02:35:507 (297) - +d ^

tatatat wrote:

[General]

Place the offset further back at 00:00:072 - ? That's not necessary
00:01:967 - Place a drum roll from here to 00:02:380 - ? Another way to make scores differ from each other is nice, and it fits well here.
I think the BPM from 00:22:489 - to 00:33:038 - should be 91. All sounds happen every 1/2 beat and there is a noticeable change in tempo.
01:41:940 - There isn't a new BPM section here, but you may still want to use SVs to reflect the different mood.BPM needs to be unified.

[Futsuu]
00:19:686 (43,44,45,46,47) - I think these should all be dons, for the same reason as in the Kantan 00:19:686 (43,44,45,46) - change d
02:39:137 - Why is there is a spinner here but not in the Kantan? kantan is GD. There is no need to adjust accordingly

[Muzukashii]
00:19:686 (61,62,63,64,65,66,67,68) - I think all the dons should be changed to kats here, and all the kats changed to dons. 00:20:346 (63,65,67) - are definitely higher pitched than 00:19:686 (61,62,64,66,68) - Same with the other difficulties cymbal -> I will unify it to K
02:02:709 - place a kat 1/4th triplet from here to 02:02:874 - ? Because the pattern collapses

Overall I couldn't find very much wrong. Good luck! C:

_Rise wrote:

こんにちは

[Inner Oni]

1. 01:00:648 (359) - Delete or Move to 01:00:318 ここには音符は置かないほうがいかなと思います。drum follow
2. 01:01:225 - ~ 01:01:884 - こんな感じの配置はいかがでしょうか。01:01:637 - ここを空けないとdrumをfollow出来ないため
3. 01:59:165 (1) and 01:59:330 (3) - Delete? 少しオーバーマッピングな気がします。ここだけ赤線からはいるのも統一感が崩れそう
4. 02:42:434 (348,349,350) - Change to dKK(1/2)? ここ一帯のBigがすべてKなので、ここもKにしたほうが統一感が出ていいのではないでしょうか。統一感よりもここで変化を加えた方が最後を強調出来るので。

[Muzukashii]

1. 00:15:731 - Add d? 微妙に間が空いていて違和感を感じました。無限に指摘されるので折れた、、、
2. 02:34:357 - Add k? 理由は^と同じです。
3. 02:42:599 (95,96) - Change to K? Inner Oniと同じで、前にある大音符の色と合わせてしまおうという提案。おなじ理由で

[Futsuu]

1. 00:16:226 (33) - Add finisher? Muzukashii以上ではここがBigだったので。ok
2. 02:30:401 (37) - 強めのシンバル音が鳴っているのでBigでもいいと思います。^

指摘箇所が少なめになってしまい申し訳ありません。ランクド頑張ってください。

_Rise wrote:

こんにちは
[JuDa's Oni]

1. 00:15:401 から 00:16:061 - Change to k_dkk(1/2)? ドラム音が無視されているのが少し気になりました。

   JUDYDANNY wrote:

   意図的に00:06:500 (17,18) - との方の一貫性とって　ここ周辺の配色の単調感の緩和の方に焦点当ててます

   まぁ何よりdkkがくどい..

• 
  02:02:709 add kkk
  
  これだけかなXD

• 
  Innerと同じ　effectの音ははっきりだけど、最初と似てるような感じでいいと思います
  00:07:160 del
  00:08:314 move to 00:08:478 and change to k
  00:08:643 del
  00:10:127 add a k
  
  
  01:00:565 d?
  
  nice kiai >w<bbbb

• 
  00:08:808 effectの音ははっきりだけど、最初と似てるような感じでいいと思います
  00:07:160 del
  00:08:149 d , 00:08:314 del , 00:08:808 k
  
  01:33:863 ~ 01:36:500 ここは01:28:588 ~ 01:30:566と同じなのにノーツが少なすぎると思う
  
  01:54:302 add d , 01:54:385 and 01:54:467 change (ddkkd)
  01:59:165 del
  元の配置はちょっと曲と合わせない感じがしますが。。　個人的にはこう作る
  複合のとこDTで楽しい

stu00608 wrote:

Mod request ///

[Muzukashii ]

• 
  02:02:709 add kkk 2/1休憩を入れたいので
  
  これだけかなXD

[Inner Oni ]

• 
  00:08:808 effectの音ははっきりだけど、最初と似てるような感じでいいと思います　音をはっきりさせたいので
  00:07:160 del
  00:08:149 d , 00:08:314 del , 00:08:808 k
  
  01:33:863 ~ 01:36:500 ここは01:28:588 ~ 01:30:566と同じなのにノーツが少なすぎると思う drum follow
  
  01:54:302 add d , 01:54:385 and 01:54:467 change (ddkkd)　ちょっと自分で変えてみた
  01:59:165 del　1/2から始まるpatternは統一感に欠けます
  元の配置はちょっと曲と合わせない感じがしますが。。　個人的にはこう作る
  複合のとこDTで楽しい

がんばれー

1. 02:19:357 - , 02:19:852 - remove? it seems lacking of break here until the end.

1. 00:03:039 - , 00:05:347 - maybe remove to make better build-up for the intro, since it is very calm?
2. 00:53:313 - consider to remove to make some break, rhythm is a bit complex and too continuous for newer player.
3. 01:00:730 - move to 01:00:565 - to follow the melody in more accurately?
4. 01:31:720 - , 01:36:995 - , i think removing these notes would give more emphasis to previous kD and give a fair break length.
5. 02:28:588 (30,31,32,33,34) - maybe change to kdk-d-d in contrast with 02:23:973 (15,16,17,18,19) - ? you may also remove 02:29:907 - for consistency

1. 01:11:939 - add d for the drum?
2. 01:35:017 - move to 01:34:687 - , and add d at 01:35:182 - , for consistency with 01:29:412 (187,188,189,190) -
3. 01:50:017 - consider to create 1/4 ddd here for better spread with Oni.
   01:51:006 - same as ^
4. 02:29:412 - remove for melody emphasis and consistency

1. remove bookmarks
2. 00:13:753 - , 00:18:369 - maybe remove to have more focus on the melody?

1. 02:04:110 - maybe change to k? i think it's more interesting to combine with next kddkddk
2. 02:29:577 - consider to change to d so it's consistent with 02:24:962 -

Volta wrote:

[JuDa's Oni]

1. remove bookmarks
   I'm very sad... fixed.
2. 00:13:753 - , 00:18:369 - maybe remove to have more focus on the melody?
   hmm..... keep for bass drums.

Volta wrote:

as promised.

[Futsuu]

1. 00:03:039 - , 00:05:347 - maybe remove to make better build-up for the intro, since it is very calm?
2. 00:53:313 - consider to remove to make some break, rhythm is a bit complex and too continuous for newer player.
3. 01:00:730 - move to 01:00:565 - to follow the melody in more accurately?
4. 01:31:720 - , 01:36:995 - , i think removing these notes would give more emphasis to previous kD and give a fair break length.
5. 02:28:588 (30,31,32,33,34) - maybe change to kdk-d-d in contrast with 02:23:973 (15,16,17,18,19) - ? you may also remove 02:29:907 - for consistencyall fixed

[Muzukashii]

1. 01:11:939 - add d for the drum? fixed
2. 01:35:017 - move to 01:34:687 - , and add d at 01:35:182 - , for consistency with 01:29:412 (187,188,189,190) - i want to drum follow
3. 01:50:017 - consider to create 1/4 ddd here for better spread with Oni. fixed
   01:51:006 - same as ^ ^
4. 02:29:412 - remove for melody emphasis and consistency ^

[Inner Oni]

1. 02:04:110 - maybe change to k? i think it's more interesting to combine with next kddkddk 02:04:028 (7) - avoid the same color to emphasize the drum
2. 02:29:577 - consider to change to d so it's consistent with 02:24:962 - make the piano a little conscious

you may call me back after +12 SP~

Charlotte wrote:

irc log

11:01 Charlotte: こんにちは、lorikeet irc出来ますが今時間ありますか?
11:01 yassu-: おｋです
11:02 Charlotte: re-dlします
11:02 *yassu- is listening to [https://osu.ppy.sh/b/1144904 Tedjimo Yomigy - Lorikeet]
11:04 Charlotte: MuzuのSRが3超えててOD4はさすがに弱いので4.5 もしくは5。Muzuが5ならOniは5.5でも可
11:07 yassu-: 了解です
11:08 yassu-: 4.5に変更
11:10 Charlotte: 01:23:478 - sliderここから始めませんか? 1/4の頭抜きになってるので叩き損じが出るよりか1/1の目盛りに合わせたほうが良いと思いました
11:12 yassu-: 01:24:467 - ここからでもokですか？drumに合わせる感じで
11:13 Charlotte: あぁ　すいません Futsuu見てます
11:14 Charlotte: okです。その場合スライダー前にnotes入れたほうが良いです
11:15 Charlotte: 00:49:357 - ここ削除かなぁ。1/2の偶数、奇数が連発して出てくるポイントなので問題なければ1/1 break入れてもいい気がしました
11:18 yassu-: そこは少し統一感が崩れそうなのでkeepで
11:18 Charlotte: 01:49:852 - notes or slider
11:19 Charlotte: ずんずんfinishが鳴り、いろんな音が鳴ってるここはspinnerよりsliderが良いかと。notesでmo
11:19 Charlotte: ok
11:21 yassu-: fixed
11:22 Charlotte: 02:39:302 - 同様に^?
11:24 yassu-: fixed
11:24 *Charlotte is editing [https://osu.ppy.sh/b/1145336 Tedjimo Yomigy - Lorikeet [Muzukashii]]
11:26 Charlotte: 00:40:950 - 01:03:203 - この間どこかで1/1 break作りませんか?
11:28 Charlotte: 20秒程度なんでまぁ大丈夫だと思いますが、入れれそうならぐらいで大丈夫です。崩れたり、あまり良い配置が置けなさそうならkeepでもokです
11:29 yassu-: 2/1?
11:30 Charlotte: 1/1だと思います
11:31 Charlotte: 01:19:852 - 削除して易化させてもいいかも
11:31 yassu-: 00:56:280 - ここ消しました
11:32 Charlotte: VERY GOOD!
11:33 Charlotte: 01:23:561 - Muzuなんでこのままでも良いですがやっぱり長い+頭が抜けてるスライダーは抜けやすいのでFutsuu同様にnotes + sliderお勧めしたいです
11:34 yassu-: 01:19:852 - タイムスタンプ上にnotesがないのですが。。
11:34 Charlotte: 01:19:769 - ここでした
11:35 yassu-: fixed
11:36 yassu-: sliderもfixed
11:39 Charlotte: 02:18:368 (77,78) - 削除...?
11:39 Charlotte: kiaiも適度に1/1break 挟んでたんでここも休憩で良いかなぁと思いました
11:41 Charlotte: 02:18:863 - 02:19:357 - どちらも単音なので、keepでも全然いいです
11:42 yassu-: うーん、ちょっと考えます
11:42 *Charlotte is editing [https://osu.ppy.sh/b/1144904 Tedjimo Yomigy - Lorikeet [Inner Oni]]
11:50 Charlotte: うーん、全く見つけられないです=w=...
11:50 Charlotte: 01:40:209 - add d?
11:52 yassu-: そこはちょっと加えにくいですね、、、
11:52 Charlotte: ok
11:54 Charlotte: 01:40:951 - 個人的にもっとdon要素欲しいです...1/6 kkkkkkdがあるので 1/4にdつけたい
11:57 yassu-: このくらいの単色連打があったほうがむしろバランス的に良くなるのでは？
11:59 Charlotte: 1/4だけなら良いかなと思うんですけど同色kkkkkkkkk (1/6kkkkkkd)がどうかなと思っただけです
12:00 Charlotte: keepでもいいですよ
12:00 yassu-: 01:40:951 - ここからdrum的にkの方が良いとおもいますし
12:00 yassu-: keepで
12:01 Charlotte: 02:29:247 - kdd or k-d (02:29:330 - 削除)
12:01 Charlotte: 以上です

mod急かしてしまったようで申し訳ない
アリです！

Volta wrote:

Mapset looks fine. Song is interpreted nicely for every difficulty level with reasonable spread. Let's try.

Bubbled~

Nwolf wrote:

weff

[Futsuu]

00:49:192 (1) - Feels odd to me that this is a dd doublet, when all other doublets that are placed similarly to this are kd doublets (for example 00:50:511 (4,5) - ). Should probably change the highlighted note to a kat.

00:59:576 (31) - I think this note is very disturbing. It doesn't clearly follow anything and makes this spot a little bit too much of a difficulty burst (it's more dense than any other pattern, as far as I can see).
All fixed

[Muzukashii]

01:56:445 (36,37,38,39) - This 1/3 feels odd. Sure it follows something in the song, but it doesn't fit to the other notes here rhythm-wise. I'd replace it with a more simple rhythm that fits to the rest better, like http://puu.sh/xtEX6/5d52ecc72f.jpg
1/3 was deleted in kiai

[Inner Oni]

01:41:610 - 1/6 that has been removed already.

02:16:885 (143,144,145,146,147,148,149,150,151,152,153,154,155,156,157,158,159,160,161,162,163,164) - I have a lot of trouble with this stream. Not just because it's only dkkdkkd repeated, I feel like it doesn't fit the song anymore, and in my (and another taiko player I asked) opinion it also plays slightly odd, having to repeat the same pattern 7 times without any obvious reason.. 02:17:791 (153,159) - Changing these to dons, for example, would highlight the high piano notes a little bit better. 02:16:995 (144,147) - Could be dons as well. Just suggestions, but I believe this last stream segment shouldn't stat dkkdkkd til the end.
>> Another suggestion brought up by that player: 02:16:995 (144,147) - 02:17:791 (153) - to don,02:17:791 (153,159) - swap these two (kd --> dk)
02:16:995 (144,147) - fixed 02:17:791 (153,159) - fixed

02:20:017 (174,175,176) - 02:20:511 (178,179,180) - Maybe consider changing these to dkd for playability.
no fixed, I want to let player various patterns. dkd pattern is same as 01:17:215 (472,473,474,475,476,477,478,479,480) -

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