YokesPai wrote:

From my queue~

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• Our evil little love story

1. 00:13:351 (4,1) - If this is a blanket you can make it better.
2. 00:15:397 (5) - Move a tiny bit up for better blanket.
3. 00:16:931 (4) - Move to x:330 y:134 so it fits better with 00:16:249 (4,1,2,3) - ?
4. 00:21:192 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - This shape looks a bit weird (most likely since you didn't have enough space to map), you should adjust it a bit so it doesn't seem so messy. May I suggest something like this? (Though you'll need to adjust the objects after that) looks fine for me tho
5. 00:28:692 (4,1,2,3) - You could make this more symmetric maybe? (Right now 00:29:203 (3) - seems really off) reworked abit
6. 00:29:885 (6) - Change this to a reverse like 00:23:238 (4) - ? The 1/4 slider into a 1/2 pause just feels unexpected. yes
7. 00:32:782 (1,2,3,4) - Make this a curve? The zigzag stands out too much for a part that really doesn't feel special. (Because you didn't use zigzags until here) it fits the piano pretty well imo
8. 00:49:658 (4) - Pretty much the same as over, this sharp angle after linear placement (which isn't even on a white tick) stands out, you've used curves for these parts and you shouldn't break that when the song repeats the same sounds. I'd suggest something like this. cool
9. 01:26:647 (1) - Ctrl+G? nah
10. 02:55:027 (4) - This could be hard to hit for players in this skill range, as they have to hit a slider 1/8 beat off what they've gotten used to. I know you want to keep the symmetry of 02:53:919 (1,2,3,4) - but you should consider changing this. its not that unexpected imo since no test players have had problems with this
11. 04:13:522 (4) - Weird placement you got there. I'm pretty sure this should be on the right with 04:14:203 (4) - .100% intentional
12. 04:28:010 (1) - Barely noticable imo, should delete this. but i want to map her breath :c
13. 05:08:919 (3) - Blanket can be better.
14. 05:13:522 (6) - This doesn't really fit with the star pattern, you could put it on 05:13:351 (5) - and still get the effect of uncomfortable flow? it looks good for me tho
15. 05:15:397 (4) - Blanket can be better.
16. 05:21:533 (3) - Emphasize this? not necessary imo, since i want to emphasize the synth in this section
17. 05:37:556 (3) - Blanket can be better.
18. 05:53:578 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - I'm sure you can come up with a better pattern for the last jumps in the map. This doesn't look very good. ye
19. 06:00:056 (1) - The red anchor in the loop annoys me (the little bump), please fix. how lol
20. 06:15:056 (1) - Blanket can be better.
21. 06:17:783 (1) - Imo a spinner would be more fitting here. this slider fits better imo

Good luck!

1. màu xấu quá e ơi
2. 00:01:249 (2,1) - , 00:02:612 (5,1) - , 00:03:976 (5,1) - concept ko đều hay cố tình đây
   00:06:703 (6,1) - , 00:08:067 (5,1) - , 00:09:430 (5,1) - ít ra thì ba cái này rời stack rời như cái pattern trên hoặc stack hết hoặc rời hết chứ để tùy hứng vậy kì lắm.
3. 00:11:561 - mute slider end
4. 00:14:033 (1) - ctrl+g cái này
   00:14:374 (2) - ctrl+g cái này. Tại vì cái âm ở slider(1) nó ko cần spacing xa, để ở slider(2) có lý hơn
5. 00:11:647 (1,2,3) - và 00:17:101 (1,2,3) - inconsistent này. Thấy để rhythm 1 slider cho piano rồi circle cho vocal ổn hơn
6. 00:33:294 (4,1) - chỗ này đâu cần jump nhỉ
7. Với cả concept ko đồng đều 00:33:465 (1,2,3,4,5) - , 00:34:828 (1,2,3,4,5) - 00:36:192 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - . Mấy cái này chắc cho stack hết được hoặc là spacing không có khoảng trống ( tức là overlap lên nhau ). Để làm cho nó khác cái phần trước
8. 01:27:840 - từ đây cho tới cái chỗ nghỉ, nhiều cách sắp xếp slider hơi robotic. Giống như copy pattern nhưng lại không nghĩ tới lúc nào để spacing xa, gần để nhấn mạnh âm cho tốt.
9. 01:53:238 (3) - như slider này ko dc nhấn mạnh trong cái pattern như vầy và flow cái này ko thoải mái lắm
10. 01:49:147 (3,4,3) - stack error
    02:29:715 (2,3) - stack
    02:31:078 (6,7) -
11. 02:59:374 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - cực sharp angle jump chỗ này ko hợp. Vì tiếng piano không mạnh và cũng ko to, nó emphasize kì lắm. Đang có đà của triangle pattern trước thì làm cái này star jump thử xem
12. 04:13:010 (1,2,3,4) - sao spacing ở 4 thấp vậy? Âm 4 nó nghe giống 2 mà, có thể để 4 cái này thành 1 square nhỏ. 04:13:692 (1,2,3,4,5) - cái này thành 1 square lớn ở ngoài rồi nốt 5 cuối ở giữa hoặc hay hơn là 5 cái này thành star pattern, cứ để cái circle(5) nó spacing xa đi, tuy là âm trên đó nó yếu nhưng mà nối đuôi cái 04:14:374 (5,1) - bằng cách overlap. Như vậy phần tiếp theo sẽ có cảm giác dc bắt vô mượt hơn.
13. 04:53:919 (1,1,1,1) - cái này có đổi SV gì đâu, combo từng cái chi
14. 05:30:056 (1,2,3,4) - pattern emphasize ko đều vì âm nào cũng mạnh mà cái 3,4 nó yếu quá
    
    Khi mà copy pattern ấy, nên suy nghĩ coi là cái pattern đó có phù hợp trong trường nhạc của mình hay không, nếu không thì đi kiếm cái khác lắp vào và để cái mà bỏ ra ấy vào bộ nhớ tạm. Khi nào gặp đúng trường hợp mình có thể xài thì lấy ra. Chứ đừng thấy hay rồi đem vào map mình hết.
15. 05:11:647 (1,2,3) - caí này wide angle trong khi slider(3) nó có Finish hs thì xem có hợp lý ko? Âm càng mạnh thì nên dùng gốc càng nhỏ (và/hoặc spacing xa) để nhấn mạnh tốt hơn, mapping cơ bản 101. 05:03:294 (2,3) - Cái này thì có thể chấp nhận vì vocal cũng còn yếu

Asaiga wrote:

đẩy thôi

1. màu xấu quá e ơi chọn đại chị e
2. 00:01:249 (2,1) - , 00:02:612 (5,1) - , 00:03:976 (5,1) - concept ko đều hay cố tình đây
   00:06:703 (6,1) - , 00:08:067 (5,1) - , 00:09:430 (5,1) - ít ra thì ba cái này rời stack rời như cái pattern trên hoặc stack hết hoặc rời hết chứ để tùy hứng vậy kì lắm. ok,bỏ stack 1 số chỗ cho hạp concept
3. 00:11:561 - mute slider end yep
4. 00:14:033 (1) - ctrl+g cái này
   00:14:374 (2) - ctrl+g cái này. Tại vì cái âm ở slider(1) nó ko cần spacing xa, để ở slider(2) có lý hơn f
5. 00:11:647 (1,2,3) - và 00:17:101 (1,2,3) - inconsistent này. Thấy để rhythm 1 slider cho piano rồi circle cho vocal ổn hơn ok
6. 00:33:294 (4,1) - chỗ này đâu cần jump nhỉ e nghĩ là cần để nhấn cái piano transistion, nhưng thôi giảm spacing xuống 1 chút
7. Với cả concept ko đồng đều 00:33:465 (1,2,3,4,5) - , 00:34:828 (1,2,3,4,5) - 00:36:192 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - . Mấy cái này chắc cho stack hết được hoặc là spacing không có khoảng trống ( tức là overlap lên nhau ). Để làm cho nó khác cái phần trước did sth else
8. 01:27:840 - từ đây cho tới cái chỗ nghỉ, nhiều cách sắp xếp slider hơi robotic. Giống như copy pattern nhưng lại không nghĩ tới lúc nào để spacing xa, gần để nhấn mạnh âm cho tốt.
9. 01:53:238 (3) - như slider này ko dc nhấn mạnh trong cái pattern như vầy và flow cái này ko thoải mái lắm ctrl+g và để nó ra xa hơn 1 chút
10. 01:49:147 (3,4,3) - stack error f
    02:29:715 (2,3) - stack
    02:31:078 (6,7) -
11. 02:59:374 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - cực sharp angle jump chỗ này ko hợp. Vì tiếng piano không mạnh và cũng ko to, nó emphasize kì lắm. Đang có đà của triangle pattern trước thì làm cái này star jump thử xem rip illuminati
12. 04:13:010 (1,2,3,4) - sao spacing ở 4 thấp vậy? Âm 4 nó nghe giống 2 mà, có thể để 4 cái này thành 1 square nhỏ. 04:13:692 (1,2,3,4,5) - cái này thành 1 square lớn ở ngoài rồi nốt 5 cuối ở giữa hoặc hay hơn là 5 cái này thành star pattern, cứ để cái circle(5) nó spacing xa đi, tuy là âm trên đó nó yếu nhưng mà nối đuôi cái 04:14:374 (5,1) - bằng cách overlap. Như vậy phần tiếp theo sẽ có cảm giác dc bắt vô mượt hơn. reworked the whole thing
13. 04:53:919 (1,1,1,1) - cái này có đổi SV gì đâu, combo từng cái chi maximum empahsis, vs lại có follow point nhìn ko đẹp
14. 05:30:056 (1,2,3,4) - pattern emphasize ko đều vì âm nào cũng mạnh mà cái 3,4 nó yếu quá f
    
    Khi mà copy pattern ấy, nên suy nghĩ coi là cái pattern đó có phù hợp trong trường nhạc của mình hay không, nếu không thì đi kiếm cái khác lắp vào và để cái mà bỏ ra ấy vào bộ nhớ tạm. Khi nào gặp đúng trường hợp mình có thể xài thì lấy ra. Chứ đừng thấy hay rồi đem vào map mình hết.
15. 05:11:647 (1,2,3) - caí này wide angle trong khi slider(3) nó có Finish hs thì xem có hợp lý ko? Âm càng mạnh thì nên dùng gốc càng nhỏ (và/hoặc spacing xa) để nhấn mạnh tốt hơn, mapping cơ bản 101. 05:03:294 (2,3) - Cái này thì có thể chấp nhận vì vocal cũng còn yếu tăng khoảng cách và tạo góc nhỏ hơn 1 chút

gúc lắc

1. 00:14:033 (1) - blanket is a bit off
2. 00:50:510 (3,4) - why are these stacked? maybe just separate them, because too me there are no real noticeable changes in music
3. 00:50:851 - there is a sound here
4. 02:33:465 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - maybe put some circles on the blue tick, there is still a sound there
5. 04:51:874 (1) - this SV seems to me a bit high maybe lower it a bit
6. 05:17:783 (1) - ctrl-g this so its the same as the sliders after it
7. 05:28:692 (1) - ^

Nevo wrote:

01:40:453 (6) - you could bring this in just a little so visually its the same distance from 01:40:283 (5) - as the slider yes

like

04:43:351 (3) - you could increase the spacing before this since it's a pretty loud note did sth simliar

you dont have to kds this lol still found this helpful enough
really cool map tho

Zero__wind wrote:

NM from my queue

Red: unrankable issues
Purple: highly recommend to fix

General
your drum-hitclap4.wav is a little too short which is unrankable, please make the wav file last just a bit longer, over 100ms, and it shall be fine
your bg is with too big resolution, plz use at most 1920*1080 all fixed

[Our deviant love story]
oh you changed diff name o.o
00:33:976 (4,5) - why aren't they stacked while 00:35:340 (4,5) - and 00:36:703 (4,1) - being stacked? the reason for not stacking this is the difference in the piano pitch, the one representing the lower pitch piano is not stacked while the one with the higher pitch is, you can actually see this concept quite clearly in the intro
01:08:578 - add a circle here to also catch the vocal? as you already followed vocal at most point in this part, such as 01:12:669 (3,4) - 01:14:374 (1,2,3) -changed to fully following the vocal here instead
01:22:215 (4,1) - the overlap looks a bit messy, maybe move 01:23:238 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - down together to avoid the overlap? fixed
01:28:010 (1) - should have a finish on head instead for the cymbal sound fixed
02:10:897 - as you changed AR after finishing the map, the breaktime became weird at their ends, plz drag it back to natural, same for the breaks around 03:52:556 - fixed i think
02:22:215 (3,4) - CTRL+G flows better to 02:22:556 (1) - imo, similar to this feeling 02:32:783 (3,4,5,6) - fixed
03:07:556 (5) - this pattern is kinda weird as this slider should actually be grouped with 03:07:897 (1,2,3) - instead of with 03:06:533 (1,2,3,4) - no matter referring to vocal or to the instruments. so it would be better to make a curve slider here like 03:07:897 (1,2,3) - and make a patter with these 4 sliders instead of having it parallel with 03:07:215 (4) - didn't fully understand what you are saying but i did made a new pattern with the slider you mentioned grouped with the next 3, i also grouped 03:07:215 (4) - this with the previous straight slider pattern so that it would better represent the vocal
03:09:942 (4) - missing hitsounds, drum clap (maybe with drum whistle) fixed
03:20:851 (7) - hitsound fixed
04:35:169 (1) - ^ you need quite some more drum hitsounds in the kiai parts I suppose, sucha as on 04:37:897 (6) - 04:43:351 (3) - and more, you'd better recheck the whole kiai part once more by yourself all fixed
04:49:828 (1) - remove NC for consistency with 04:38:919 (3) - fixed
04:54:431 (1,1) - maybe avoid this overlap, doesn't look so nice imo it looks nice for me tho xd
05:00:738 (1) - better remove NC for consistency fixed
05:06:192 (1) - ^ fixed
05:32:783 (1) - maybe remove the kiai from here on, I think it's not the chorus anymore removed
05:54:601 (1,1) - sadly, these two sliders are out of screen with 4:3 resolution so you need to make them smaller to be rankable fixed

decent map, call me back after you fixed the issues

Zero__wind wrote:

recheck, no kd

the drumclap4 is still too short, please use this instead

can you provide metadata for the romanized title please? from what I can see, it should be writen with caps like I'm Glad You're Evil Too referring to this

05:36:192 (3,4,5,1) - this part flows kinda weird imo, the stack is uncommon and the heavy drum on 05:36:874 (1) - wasn't emphasized, maybe you can rework this part a bit to have a jump to 1
05:44:374 (3,4) - this 1/2 gap also feels kinda weird as well, you didn't seem to use such a 1/2 in any other strong parts, maybe change it to a slider
06:20:510 - I think you don't need to mute the slider end, just have 50% volume for it and add a whistle at end of 06:17:783 (1) - , it would sound great

nothing else

MrSergio wrote:

- 00:10:283 (4) - you had a jump on this white tick for all the previous instances, it would be cool to be consistent here too, since the jump on the next object feels kinda weak // same for all the similar ones: 00:37:556 (4) - sounds good
- 01:22:215 (4) - kinda bland in rhythm here, since there is a strong beat on this tail. What about this instead? changed to 2 circles instead because i feel like it would fit the piano better
- 01:23:238 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - I see the idea, but I believe you did it the other way around lol. What about a Ctrl G on each combo, to make it like this? Emphasis is surely better this way imo fixed
- 03:10:539 (2) - I would reduce the spacing with 1 here, since atm you have the same visual spacing on two different snaps, namely 1-2 and 2-3 Screen // 03:21:448 (2) - same here, but this one looks better. If you change the first in any way make sure to keep consistency with this one fixed, made it somewhat similar to 03:21:448 (2) -
- 04:28:010 (1) - really personal and minor, but I find just a circle a better choice. If you stack it on top of the next slider, that is i feel like the slider would do a better job since its a held sound
- 05:13:522 (6) - this last jump felt kinda awkward, since you decided to break out of your star shaped pattern. I would rather stack this under 05:12:669 (1) - and move 05:13:692 (1) - like this to make it flow better fixed
- 06:15:056 (1,1) - kinda loud, but your effect would go to waste if you silence those slider slides. Too bad, but you can at least silence the first one's tail tho ok
- "hatsune_miku" looks like a useless repetition in tags, since those words alone give you the map anyway (and I don't think people usually searches for this by using the underscore between those words lol) metadata was directly copied from monstrata's ranked set but i guess it'd make sense to delete it lel

KittyAdventure wrote:

Congrulations! :3

You forget add HUMAN to tags because this song from PinocchioP album, HUMAN xd

KittyAdventure wrote:

http://pinocchiop.com/discography/160 (no.12) :^)

Just help a bit

[-obee58-] wrote:

04:30:056 (1) - doesn't there need to be a metronome reset here
it's probably not necessary but idk maybe some guy will play NC mod

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Hikan wrote:

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[-obee58-] wrote:

04:30:056 (1) - doesn't there need to be a metronome reset here
it's probably not necessary but idk maybe some guy will play NC mod

Doyak wrote:

Oh my bad, I should have read through the thread before requaifying. Well, you definitely need to handle this.

KittyAdventure wrote:

Re-Congrulations! <3