1. 00:27:320 (92) - tu peux le mettre en big note si tu veux emphasis ton build up. tho, en simple d, il est fine
2. 00:37:319 (149,150,151,152,153,154,155) - ce choix me semble ok. Le fait de faire le triplet drum. Puis ensuite le k ddk sur la melody. Si tu veux être un peu plus fidèle à la mélodie. Tu peux ignore le triplet est simplement mapper les notes de mélodies içi : 00:37:683 - 00:38:047 - .
3. 00:40:228 (162,163,164) - Je ressens aucun emphasis sur ce triplet full d (surtout sur cette note : 00:40:410 (164) - ). Il fait aussi fade que celui la 00:41:683 (173,174,175) - (sauf que celui la a rien de spécial). Pourtant, je ressens bien le fait que tu veux suivre la mélodie içi : 00:40:592 (165,166) - . Peut être qu'un ddk ou kkd serait mieux.
4. si t'as fix précédemment, fix celui la : 00:46:047 (204,205,206) -
5. 01:17:683 (382) - Au vu du follow que tu fais, mieux vaut bouger cette note içi 01:17:683 (382) - ?
6. 01:23:865 (409) - Juste moi, mais j'aime bien cette note en big K. Vu que le "ta" du vocal est un peu plus différent du reste.
7. 02:22:228 (780,781,782,783,784) - change en ddkdk , ça passe hyper bien avec le vocal.
8. 02:39:501 (883) - Si t'as fix pour le "ta" mentionné précédemment, fix celui la aussi.
9. 03:52:592 - skip cette note me parait assez louche quand même.
10. 03:52:047 (1288,1289,1290,1291,1292) - J'aurais plutôt vu la dernière note en k, vu la tonalité du synth. Mais du coup, pour pas ruin le flow, autant change le tout en kkddk si tu compte faire en sorte que ça se finisse sur un k.

Kin wrote:

cc lé bb

[Arrival]

1. 00:27:320 (92) - tu peux le mettre en big note si tu veux emphasis ton build up. tho, en simple d, il est fine Je vais leave en simple
2. 00:37:319 (149,150,151,152,153,154,155) - ce choix me semble ok. Le fait de faire le triplet drum. Puis ensuite le k ddk sur la melody. Si tu veux être un peu plus fidèle à la mélodie. Tu peux ignore le triplet est simplement mapper les notes de mélodies içi : 00:37:683 - 00:38:047 - . Ca a un effet que j'aime particulièrement ce triplet d, je vais le garder.
3. 00:40:228 (162,163,164) - Je ressens aucun emphasis sur ce triplet full d (surtout sur cette note : 00:40:410 (164) - ). Il fait aussi fade que celui la 00:41:683 (173,174,175) - (sauf que celui la a rien de spécial). Pourtant, je ressens bien le fait que tu veux suivre la mélodie içi : 00:40:592 (165,166) - . Peut être qu'un ddk ou kkd serait mieux. Pas faux, swap en kkd
4. si t'as fix précédemment, fix celui la : 00:46:047 (204,205,206) - ^
5. 01:17:683 (382) - Au vu du follow que tu fais, mieux vaut bouger cette note içi 01:17:683 (382) - ? T'as mis la même Kappa
6. 01:23:865 (409) - Juste moi, mais j'aime bien cette note en big K. Vu que le "ta" du vocal est un peu plus différent du reste. Applied
7. 02:22:228 (780,781,782,783,784) - change en ddkdk , ça passe hyper bien avec le vocal. Applied
8. 02:39:501 (883) - Si t'as fix pour le "ta" mentionné précédemment, fix celui la aussi. ye
9. 03:52:592 - skip cette note me parait assez louche quand même. Oui, et j'ai rework le passage en quelque chose de plus streamy, qui fit mieux.
10. 03:52:047 (1288,1289,1290,1291,1292) - J'aurais plutôt vu la dernière note en k, vu la tonalité du synth. Mais du coup, pour pas ruin le flow, autant change le tout en kkddk si tu compte faire en sorte que ça se finisse sur un k. Done

voila.
jtm bb t un amour

xfraczynho wrote:

hi! some mod req in-game:p

[Arrival's Inner Oni]
00:36:047 (141) - you should add a note here, i think it breaks the fluent of the song ;; I think it's alright there
00:48:683 (223) - d because pitch I'll try to diversify the map by not using ddk as much as possible.
00:58:410 (274) - k since you're following vocals Done
01:22:592 (407) - I think this is even nicer https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7786910 Overmapping the vocals here defeat the purpose of this part which is just a build up towards the kiai. But I changed a note to K which differs from what I did before.
you should move 01:29:410 (445) - to 01:29:319 (445) - to not making these breaks during kiai (or making a triplet maybe) These breaks are done by purpose !
01:34:501 (482) - ^
01:35:501 (489) - you can try something like it: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7786919 (maybe not these colours) Doing that would break any kind of flow.
01:37:410 (503) - same as above
01:38:138 (508) - ^
same suggests for doubles on second and third kiai, i feel everything nice from here to next comment
03:15:047 (1104) - you should change it to k (main sounds) Sticking the drum sounds here
03:15:774 (1112,1113) - ctrl+g (^) ^
03:27:683 (1172) - maybe from here add some little triplets to make a difference between the first part of this and make this one more fun (03:29:228 (1181) - adding k for example) Done
04:44:773 (57) - personal opinion: i don't like this break :/ you can make it a little harder and fun I'm not aiming at making a hard map !

I think that's all Good luck on your mapset! Thanks ! :)

• DELETE COMBO COLORS HEATHEN.

1. 01:07:138 (324,325,326) - Triplet better placed around 01:12:501 - so that the second happening is tougher, no?
2. 01:25:319 (418) - Kill, and make previous not K for OH! emphasis? Drums don't even hit here, so double k seems odd.
3. 01:38:047 - Kinda just wondering why the break, nothing else has had it and it makes less sense in the middle of kiai.
4. 02:51:865 (971,972,973,974,975,976) - d kkddk? Some emphasis on what vocals do here would be nice.
5. 03:37:683 (1230,1231) - Swap these, I think it seperates the vocals better.
6. 03:52:138 (1296) - d? kdddk makes the kat heavy streams a bit nicer.
7. 03:58:228 - This is a copy of the first happening at 01:13:865 - , which is lame because 02:29:501 - is harder etc.
8. 04:09:531 - SV anything? Underwhelming to keep this the same.
9. 04:15:683 - 04:18:410 (1458,1459) - Swap these, the vocal emphasis switches up here.
10. 04:21:501 - Can't help but feel that this part is mapped cooler in 2nd kiai.

OzzyOzrock wrote:

[A river]

• DELETE COMBO COLORS HEATHEN.

1. 01:07:138 (324,325,326) - Triplet better placed around 01:12:501 - so that the second happening is tougher, no? Okay
2. 01:25:319 (418) - Kill, and make previous not K for OH! emphasis? Drums don't even hit here, so double k seems odd. Done
3. 01:38:047 - Kinda just wondering why the break, nothing else has had it and it makes less sense in the middle of kiai. Tried a sort of rhythm but nvm
4. 02:51:865 (971,972,973,974,975,976) - d kkddk? Some emphasis on what vocals do here would be nice. Done
5. 03:37:683 (1230,1231) - Swap these, I think it seperates the vocals better. Applied
6. 03:52:138 (1296) - d? kdddk makes the kat heavy streams a bit nicer. Alright
7. 03:58:228 - This is a copy of the first happening at 01:13:865 - , which is lame because 02:29:501 - is harder etc. Made the last one harder
8. 04:09:531 - SV anything? Underwhelming to keep this the same. Alright put x1.3
9. 04:15:683 - 04:18:410 (1458,1459) - Swap these, the vocal emphasis switches up here. Done
10. 04:21:501 - Can't help but feel that this part is mapped cooler in 2nd kiai. Changed to be like the 2nd kiai

Rest is fine! yay !

MBmasher wrote:

take control: 01:26:228 (4,6) -
not meant to be blanketed or what?

Realazy wrote:

02:19:047 (6) - lol why is this snapped on 1/3

[Taiga] wrote:

Few questions:

Take controll diff:

Ar9.2 intentional or there is something behind this considering it's a slow song? yes it's intentionnal, and there is a lower diff on the map,
so it's just a spread

01:20:774 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - This could be a one pattern, why "1-2-1-2" when nothing in music/vocals fits this specific pattern?
01:35:683 (1,2,1,2) - ^ - one pattern without "1-2-1-2" fits way better
01:36:411 (1,2,1,2) - ^
02:51:319 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - ^ (1-2-3-4-1-2-3-4 works better imo)
04:05:138 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - ^
04:21:501 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - ^ (1-2-3-4-1-2-3-4)
04:34:410 (2) - extend with slider, connect to 04:34:956 (1) - ? i don't understand what you mean here
04:46:228 (1,2,1,2) - 1-2-3-4, remove new combo
04:57:138 (1,2,1,2) - one combo, one pattern, inconsistent towards what is earlier i could have but you can see the buildup to the last pattern easily lol
04:58:774 (2,1,2) - could you explain why earlier you either doesn't map this part / make it a slider towards vocals, here make it like that? i mapped it earlier ???? and if you mean here 04:34:410 (2) - then you must listen to the song before please because there is no beats or neither vocals here while there is at the part you mentionned

Sorry for lack of formatting etc, mods in the morning on good song are hard *hides*

Overall besides in my personal opinion abusement of 1-2 it's solid, i definitely see myself farming this.

Irohas wrote:

gratz!!

1. 00:18:956 - clap missing
2. 02:14:228 - Normal hitsound add + clap missing
3. 03:50:956 - ^

1. 00:25:138 (4) - Could this slider have the same shape than 00:24:410 (1) - (right now https://puu.sh/vEcod/defc98452c.png ) ?
2. 01:28:410 - Weird to play drum beat passively when you do exteded sliders like 01:26:592 (3,1) - to make them playable during the same section.

1. 04:14:956 (4) - This slider shouldn't be extended like you did on other kiai (01:29:138 (3) - / 02:44:774 (4) - ) ?
2. 04:36:047 (1) - Why this slider is the only extended one of this section ? Also miss the vocal change at 04:36:228 - .

Nozhomi wrote:

1. 00:18:956 - clap missing
2. 02:14:228 - Normal hitsound add + clap missing
3. 03:50:956 - ^

In addition about more subjective points:
[Kalitarks' Insane :]

1. 00:25:138 (4) - Could this slider have the same shape than 00:24:410 (1) - (right now https://puu.sh/vEcod/defc98452c.png ) ?
2. 01:28:410 - Weird to play drum beat passively when you do exteded sliders like 01:26:592 (3,1) - to make them playable during the same section.

[Take Control! :]

1. 04:14:956 (4) - This slider shouldn't be extended like you did on other kiai (01:29:138 (3) - / 02:44:774 (4) - ) ? ya
2. 04:36:047 (1) - Why this slider is the only extended one of this section ? Also miss the vocal change at 04:36:228 - . i wanted to marks the "yeah" which is 3/4 there,

:/

Mir wrote:

In addition to Noz's post:

[Take Control!]

- 00:40:047 (6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6) - Why is this so different from 00:45:865 (6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2) - ? The first one has way fewer circles but the second is just jump-spam. The music hasn't even changed to justify this imo. yeah you're right
- 01:29:865 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,1) - The triple here is on the white tick but in 01:41:501 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2) - it's before the white tick? The music is still the same so I don't really understand why the triple suddenly shifted a beat. Then at 02:45:501 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - you don't even USE a triple. 02:51:138 (6,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - here I can understand because the vocals are different, though. Then suddenly 02:57:138 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2) - we have a triple again. Overall the usage of triples in the jumps are very inconsistent and I suggest looking over and making them more consistent. well,
for thoses i've been listening closely with .25% or .50% and there's a 1/4 beat on different spots so
- 00:58:592 - Missing a whistle.
- 02:17:865 - From here you start mapping to the background synths and 1/1 drums which is fine, the vocals here are pretty boring I'll admit, but then why at 02:23:683 - do you switch to following vocals? There's still the synth in the back and it's still at the same intensity. This switch in rhythm focus doesn't feel right imo. i've been following the vocals here for both parts (and the whole map)
- 02:28:956 (1,2,3) - This doesn't feel very transition-y either, it's the same movement, the same pattern, just more spacing and an NC. Something to give it more differentiation would be cool. i've been thinking about swapping 02:28:956 (1,3) - so yeah
- 03:10:228 (1,2,3,4,5) - The song hasn't really changed, there's only more emphasis on 03:10:228 - which can easily be covered with a spacing increase. Suddenly mapping triples after this point and not before when the song again, hasn't really changed, also feels quite inconsistent. 03:29:138 - Same deal here, the song hasn't changed other than a pitch/key increase, but the triples you start mapping already existed before, so they should have been already mapped imo. to be honest i admit there is a mistake of mine, but with the next changes i'll do only vocal without the mentionned 1/4s to highlight more the vocals (which i follow)
- 03:36:774 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - I don't feel like this jump section is really justified because it's practically the same as parts like 03:31:319 (3,4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2) - where you don't map purely jumps like this. Using the excuse "it's transitioning into the next part" doesn't really fit here imo because this part 03:37:865 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - is the transition part, not 03:36:410 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7). to be honest i think that's fine, i had in mind like you said "it's transitioning into the next part", and only 4 circles would feels too little, and introducing a full jumps pattern earlier would feel soo out of place
- 03:53:047 - Doesn't really need to exist because there's no note here in the synth you're following. The song leaves a break here, so maybe make 03:52:956 (6) - a kickslider instead to take off the click but still keep the constant 1/4. theres a note here
- 03:55:683 (3) - You skip a synth at 03:55:774 - you normally would have mapped, no? but i think what i was following here is pretty clear,
if i'd map it with a kickslider or a note on the blue tick it'll feel too out of place imo
- 03:56:774 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Same thing about transitioning parts, this isn't the place to use a transition imo, it should be at 03:57:138 (5,6,7,1,2,3) - because the rhythm at 03:55:319 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - repeats itself at 03:56:774 (1,2,3,4) - but you instead mapped a stream. the melody is clearly different here
- 04:27:319 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Pretty sure these should be 1>2 jumps considering 04:33:138 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - are. Depends on your intention because the last ones are "transitional" ones I suppose. Up to you.
- 04:32:592 (5) - This 5 seems to be in the wrong place consistency-wise considering 01:46:592 (4) - is mapped to the vocals before the snare so it stays --clickable, whereas in 04:32:592 (5) - the snare is not clickable and feels like it should be. yeah
- 04:57:138 (1,2,1,2) - And these shouldn't be 1>2 jumps because you use them for emphasis purposes when the vocal goes up, right? but... they should be 1>2 because i'm emphasizing the vocals xD

Nozhomi wrote:

[Kalitarks' Insane :]

1. 00:25:138 (4) - Could this slider have the same shape than 00:24:410 (1) - (right now https://puu.sh/vEcod/defc98452c.png ) ? i disagree. it's not really noticeable while playing, also not planned to make them same shape. diffirent styles i guess.
2. 01:28:410 - Weird to play drum beat passively when you do exteded sliders like 01:26:592 (3,1) - to make them playable during the same section. ? i just wanted to express vocals in this part of song, as you can see i did the same rhythm in this whole kiai :c

Mir wrote:

- 04:27:319 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Pretty sure these should be 1>2 jumps considering 04:33:138 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - are. Depends on your intention because the last ones are "transitional" ones I suppose. Up to you. it would be inconstant with kiais tho like 02:57:138 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4) -

Mir wrote:

I'm fine with most of it but I still don't think 04:57:138 (1,2,1,2) - should be NC'd (call me petty yes) and here's why:

For most of the map the only emphasis you ever use in vocal jumps in the kiais is 1>2 NC'ing and increased spacing. When you do this at the end of the map here you remove one of those tools to emphasize the final vocals that start at 04:57:865. Because the previous notes were already 1>2 you can't use the NCing to show a change, thus the emphasis is actually weaker than in other parts of the map like 03:02:228 (1,2,1,2). Come to think of it isn't 01:46:592 (4,5,6) - supposed to be all circles? And if it isn't, this is a good example of how your NCing can provide some emphasis for the increase in intensity on the downbeat.

I'm not saying it's bad to have them 1>2 before the downbeat, but you don't make use of many flow changes so the emphasis gets very lost when you NC before a major song change. That coupled with 04:56:228 (2,1,2,3) - not being normally NC'd ruins the NC patterning imo.

That's my two cents, but I feel it would definitely benefit the map to keep the NCing for the downbeat instead of before it.

1. 00:04:047 - to 00:27:319 - is lacking in variety concepts, which makes this over 20sec section very stale, repeating only d k d k d in the first part although the vocals are somewhat varied and could make for more interesting and varied combinations at some parts
   then the second half from 00:15:683 - is also repeating the same pattern, using the same kd doublet every time... a solution would be to change 00:17:774 - and 00:23:592 - to dd, 00:20:683 - and 00:26:592 - to kk for some interesting variation which emphasizes the vocals quite well too, starting from 00:27:319 - clear variation concepts are being used, which is good
2. 01:25:138 - could be a cool ninja note cos of the unexpected and unique nature of the sound
3. 01:25:501 - structure and use of the doublets in the kiai could be improved a bit, i feel like at the moment there are kinda too many doublets breaking the flow and some breaks are happening while not cohering to the existing structure. for instance you mapped the note to the vocal at 01:25:683 - and didn't map it at 01:37:319 - . I can see why you wanted to have a bit of a flow break here and not at the start, but as it is now it's kinda incoherent... also the doublet is mapped the same as the other ones in the kiai at 01:28:683 - even though they sound very different. My suggestion to keep a more solid and coherent flow in the kiai would be to delete 01:25:683 - and add notes at these places 01:34:410 - (i would suggest making the triplet there something that doesn't pop up in other parts of the kiai though to give it a kind of unique feel.. this may be kdk or kkk but you'd need to change one triplet at 01:40:956 - or 01:43:683 - to something else if you did this). Of course there are also other ways to make it better, if you want to keep all the doublets you could just delete 01:36:956 (501,502) - and add 01:37:319 - or delete 01:25:683 - and make one set of doublets different.
4. 02:06:228 - this part is again lacking variety concepts for better emphasis of the changing vocals, the pattern at 02:12:047 - is the same as before even though the vocals are different, while pattern matches the vocals for 02:06:228 - pretty well, it goes okay but not as well as it could potentially go for 02:12:047 - since the vocals are different, just change the second half up a bit to match better and give more variety to the player
5. 02:40:956 - delete this for more impact on 02:41:138 - like you had at 01:25:319 - and then you can put a finish (+ninja?) on 02:40:774 - since it's a pretty unique and unexpected sound
6. 02:41:138 - basically the same thing goes for the second kiai as i said for the first
7. 03:08:774 - since this repetition of the rythm has a distinct change in melody i'd suggest making it slightly different from the previous ones for a more interesting variation
8. 03:21:865 - i don't really think the finisher here fits, i know there's that very faint cymbal crash in the background but it's kinda quiet and breaks the way you're following the vocals here.. if you want to focus on the crash though you're missing the finisher at 03:16:047 - (same goes for the other similar finishers in this section)
9. 03:39:319 - idk, maybe you could do some interesting SV shenanigans here since stuff kinda gets distorted a bit and sounds interesting enough to warrant it
10. 03:44:956 - i'd suggest ending the 1/6 pattern with a k since there's both a very high vocal thingie and a cymbal crash there, so maybe kddk or kkdk would work.. or actually since the pitch goes up at 03:44:865 - you could make the whole pattern dk(dddk) to match the pitches perfectly
11. 03:46:228 - could be ninja
12. 04:09:683 - i think 1.2 SV would be more appropriate here, i don't have a problem with the SV itsself but rather with the increase from the notes before, since it isn't that much more intense to warrant an increase by 0.3x SV, if you had the notes before as 1.1x SV it would be fine though (would need to apply before the other kiais too then)
13. 04:11:138 - i'd suggest deleting this note to leave more impact on 04:11:319 - like you did before the first (and second?) kiai
14. 04:11:319 - last kiai may need changing a bit depending on what you did about the previous kiais, if you chose the option which involved adding a note at 01:37:319 - it's fine as it is tho
15. 04:35:865 - delete this, for further emphasis on 04:35:683 - and 04:36:047 - ... as it is now the note kinda looks very bad sitting in the middle there
16. 04:38:956 - dropping down the density this drastically here isn't a good idea imo, the intense vocals are gone but the music in the background is still just as intense so i would suggest making it a bit denser... you can compensate for the effect you were trying to go for by adding some flow breaks through doublets (goes for the other parts like this in the kiai too)
17. 04:57:865 - to 04:59:319 - is kinda the climax/end of the song and you map it with only 1/2, i know what you were going for (trying to emphasize this and go out smoothly through a longer 1/2 pattern which contrasts itsself from what was going on in the rest of the kiai) but i feel like rowing several 1/4 patterns in a row here (04:58:047 - kdk 04:58:410 - dkd 04:58:774 - kdkkd or something like that) would be better emphasis

Chromoxx wrote:

taiko things before this get requalified, since i noticed quite a bit when playing

[Oni's Inner Arrival]

1. 00:04:047 - to 00:27:319 - is lacking in variety concepts, which makes this over 20sec section very stale, repeating only d k d k d in the first part although the vocals are somewhat varied and could make for more interesting and varied combinations at some parts
   then the second half from 00:15:683 - is also repeating the same pattern, using the same kd doublet every time... a solution would be to change 00:17:774 - and 00:23:592 - to dd, 00:20:683 - and 00:26:592 - to kk for some interesting variation which emphasizes the vocals quite well too, starting from 00:27:319 - clear variation concepts are being used, which is good -> Changed for the second half
2. 01:25:138 - could be a cool ninja note cos of the unexpected and unique nature of the sound -> Applied
3. 01:25:501 - structure and use of the doublets in the kiai could be improved a bit, i feel like at the moment there are kinda too many doublets breaking the flow and some breaks are happening while not cohering to the existing structure. for instance you mapped the note to the vocal at 01:25:683 - and didn't map it at 01:37:319 - . I can see why you wanted to have a bit of a flow break here and not at the start, but as it is now it's kinda incoherent... also the doublet is mapped the same as the other ones in the kiai at 01:28:683 - even though they sound very different. My suggestion to keep a more solid and coherent flow in the kiai would be to delete 01:25:683 - and add notes at these places 01:34:410 - (i would suggest making the triplet there something that doesn't pop up in other parts of the kiai though to give it a kind of unique feel.. this may be kdk or kkk but you'd need to change one triplet at 01:40:956 - or 01:43:683 - to something else if you did this). Of course there are also other ways to make it better, if you want to keep all the doublets you could just delete 01:36:956 (501,502) - and add 01:37:319 - or delete 01:25:683 - and make one set of doublets different. -> Made the doublets more logical to fit the song, but not a whole lot has been changed
4. 02:06:228 - this part is again lacking variety concepts for better emphasis of the changing vocals, the pattern at 02:12:047 - is the same as before even though the vocals are different, while pattern matches the vocals for 02:06:228 - pretty well, it goes okay but not as well as it could potentially go for 02:12:047 - since the vocals are different, just change the second half up a bit to match better and give more variety to the player -> Small changes
5. 02:40:956 - delete this for more impact on 02:41:138 - like you had at 01:25:319 - and then you can put a finish (+ninja?) on 02:40:774 - since it's a pretty unique and unexpected sound -> Applied
6. 02:41:138 - basically the same thing goes for the second kiai as i said for the first
7. 03:08:774 - since this repetition of the rythm has a distinct change in melody i'd suggest making it slightly different from the previous ones for a more interesting variation -> Changed to kd
8. 03:21:865 - i don't really think the finisher here fits, i know there's that very faint cymbal crash in the background but it's kinda quiet and breaks the way you're following the vocals here.. if you want to focus on the crash though you're missing the finisher at 03:16:047 - (same goes for the other similar finishers in this section) -> Removed
9. 03:39:319 - idk, maybe you could do some interesting SV shenanigans here since stuff kinda gets distorted a bit and sounds interesting enough to warrant it -> Added
10. 03:44:956 - i'd suggest ending the 1/6 pattern with a k since there's both a very high vocal thingie and a cymbal crash there, so maybe kddk or kkdk would work.. or actually since the pitch goes up at 03:44:865 - you could make the whole pattern dk(dddk) to match the pitches perfectly -> I'll still follow the d k d k structure that the big notes gave a bit before, most of all now since the SV is increased
11. 03:46:228 - could be ninja -> Changed
12. 04:09:683 - i think 1.2 SV would be more appropriate here, i don't have a problem with the SV itsself but rather with the increase from the notes before, since it isn't that much more intense to warrant an increase by 0.3x SV, if you had the notes before as 1.1x SV it would be fine though (would need to apply before the other kiais too then) -> Done
13. 04:11:138 - i'd suggest deleting this note to leave more impact on 04:11:319 - like you did before the first (and second?) kiai -> Alright
14. 04:11:319 - last kiai may need changing a bit depending on what you did about the previous kiais, if you chose the option which involved adding a note at 01:37:319 - it's fine as it is tho
15. 04:35:865 - delete this, for further emphasis on 04:35:683 - and 04:36:047 - ... as it is now the note kinda looks very bad sitting in the middle there -> Applied
16. 04:38:956 - dropping down the density this drastically here isn't a good idea imo, the intense vocals are gone but the music in the background is still just as intense so i would suggest making it a bit denser... you can compensate for the effect you were trying to go for by adding some flow breaks through doublets (goes for the other parts like this in the kiai too) -> Changed
17. 04:57:865 - to 04:59:319 - is kinda the climax/end of the song and you map it with only 1/2, i know what you were going for (trying to emphasize this and go out smoothly through a longer 1/2 pattern which contrasts itsself from what was going on in the rest of the kiai) but i feel like rowing several 1/4 patterns in a row here (04:58:047 - kdk 04:58:410 - dkd 04:58:774 - kdkkd or something like that) would be better emphasis -> Kind of changed

One general thing i noticed about the map that could possibly be done better is the use of doublet flow breaks after a new measure in nearly all parts of the map, which may make the pattern become kinda repetitive in the progress, since it's a 5min map and it repeats itsself a lot... maybe try to make that a bit more varied (if you need further explanation about what exactly i mean hmu ingame)

Pretty nice map in general though, stream patterns were nice and a lot of stuff flowed pretty interestingly, loved how the stream at 03:14:774 - follows the music perfectly while playing really interestingly, good job overall!