Vert wrote:

懒 就看了一遍，感觉没啥大问题（主要是个人不喜这种曲目）

00:21:718 - 这可以加个1/4滑条，后面类似 这里故意停顿的
02:38:795 (1,1) - 其实这个地方你可以每隔一个换一个梗 保留
有些地方比如03:33:256 (2,1) - 感觉可以稍微调一下，影响也不是很大，可能还有一些就提着一鸽好了 √后面的我都把卡手的移一下

Garden wrote:

有没有metadata 我找骏喵了

关countdown? √
00:35:718 (1) - 00:45:564 - finish √
00:46:949 (2) - 建议缩间距，这里在这一段显得略大，和后面那段对比很不够，你可以比较一下跳的间距 √
00:51:410 (1,2) - 00:54:487 (3) - 02:29:564 (1,2,1,2) - 02:32:026 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - 同上 ^ √
01:12:026 (1,2) - 这里两个比较强的音就不要stack了？好和 01:11:102 (2,3) - 01:11:718 (2,3) - 有一定区分度 √
01:14:795 - 01:34:487 - etc. 总觉得这种地方不加点有趣的音效很可惜啊233 √我加多了1组新音效，加在了01:14:795 - 02:13:872 - 03:32:641 - 有些地方加了不太好啊
01:25:872 (3,4,1) - 这里移动等于是甩了个大钝角绕回去啊，要不要1挪到3下面附近 √
01:27:410 (1) - 个人感觉没理由搞不顺的吧，考虑ctrl-g，你后面 01:29:564 (1,1) - 01:32:026 (1,1) - etc. 也都是顺的移动 √
01:44:026 (3,4,5,6) - 这里节奏和五连本身下得我觉得没有突出 01:44:256 - 这里特别的蓝线音，考虑改一下 √ 好，我蓝线用滑条突出
01:47:102 (1) - 这里应该正常snap到1/4的吧你仔细听 √ 这里不知道出了什么BUG放错位了2333
01:54:179 (1) - 下面可以弯那么一点，包这里 01:54:641 (2) - √
02:12:641 (3) - 25%听了下貌似这个尾巴snap到1/4更合适 这里应该是1/3没错，一般节奏都遵循节分距离，看这两个节拍距离 02:12:231 (1,2) - 和 02:12:641 (3,1) -
02:34:487 (1,2,3,4) - 02:36:949 (1,2,3,4) - 我觉得这里上下上下/左右左右更合曲调 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7649212 √
02:40:641 - 02:40:795 - 这两个一样的下一种节奏比较好吧 主要是这个02:40:795 - 有重音
03:29:872 (1,2) - ^ 同
02:45:564 (1,2,3,4) - 02:50:487 (1,2,3,4) - 02:55:410 (1,2,3,4) - 有个主观意见.. 就是3可以换个方向，因为1 2 4都是同一个音，我感觉这样会更加合曲，不过不改也没事就是了 这里应该是递增的12 34这样的音吧，放25来听可能会有一点偏差，如果100%打起来应该是顺着的递增音
03:33:564 (1,2,1,2) - 也是关于滑条flow，我也是感觉不同向这里会比较合曲.. 嗯我是指音调 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7649291 后面一些地方也是，个人感觉flow方向比较随性比如 03:38:487 (1,2,1,2) - 03:40:949 (1,2,1,2) - 你回完摸以后我可以游戏里再找你讨论一下 音调方面我都是跟12 34 的12一组 34一组，就类似24clap那样，主要是我比较偏好用加速跳来表达节奏的快慢，其实没什么问题吧~其实个人主观随意一点也好，如果说要合曲的话有些图基本上就一种flow的排列不变循环会有点重复
03:37:410 (1,2) - swap nc 后面几个部分都是nc在后面那个滑条上的 √
03:37:564 - 我建议全部白线重音切出kiai，红线好像有点怪怪的 √ 好
04:03:718 - 漏finish √
04:12:026 (1) - 尾巴和头可以稍微再分开点，我初见的时候有点分不清往哪儿转。还有顺时针旋转一点形状flow过来会更加顺 √
04:31:256 (1) - 要不要ctrl-g或者挪近点看着这1/6间距有点慌（ √
04:33:872 (1,2,3,4) - 04:38:795 (1,2,3,4) - 04:43:718 (1,2,1,2) - etc. 我觉得这里不适合这种跳，最后一个听上去比123弱不少 √ 削

Hanazawa Kana wrote:

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-Haise wrote:

awesome map <3

Pentori wrote:

hi

00:57:256 (2,1,2,3) - 01:02:179 (2,1,2) - rhythms are quite awkward here, you have the strong snare mapped to the slider end 00:57:564 . a rhythm like 00:59:872 (1,2) - is much nicer cos you can click this beat √ find~ i have changed it and re some rhythms and flow
01:33:564 (1,2) - can be pretty confusing tbh, the snapping changes but the pattern looks the same as everything else. maybe try increasing spacing? or use a rhythm like 02:11:718 (1,2,3) - to make the change easy to read √ because 01:33:667 - here no rhythm point so i can't make it same as 02:11:718 -so i think i can use 1/2 slider at there01:33:872 -
02:35:410 (1,2) - why put the jump? stacking would make more sense with what u did previously 02:34:179 (2,3) - 02:36:641 (2,3) . also u can remove nc √ but 02:36:641 - here i will not NC，i will nc at02:35:410 -
02:43:564 (1) - really hard to read this slider, cause its covered by 02:43:102 (1) - and 02:43:333 (2) - points in the general direction toward 02:43:718 (1) . √ del the slider and use circle
03:00:333 (4,5,1) - triplet doesnt work here, the snare on 03:00:333 (4) - is really strong so that should be emphasised. a rhythm like http://puu.sh/vdhMq/17aed97a1f.jpg could work i del the triplet and try your way，but i feel something strange cause i think 03:00:487 - here is a more important begin than03:00:333 - so no change
03:15:102 (2,1,2,3) - 03:20:026 (2,1,2,3) - same as mentioned before √
03:24:641 (1) - 03:27:102 (1) - dont think u need nc? 03:23:410 (2) - and 03:24:026 (2) - dont have ncs √
04:20:949 (1) - doesn't really address the 1/3 change that well either √

at last ，i have little change at 04:59:410 (2,3,1,2,3,4) - ，this will make its flow more easy than the previous flow
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Kencho wrote:

[General]

1. BG分辨率1366x874並不是16:9，我幫你重新剪了一下 √
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[Rhythm Crisis]

1. 00:02:641 (2) - 好像歪了，要往下和往右移1像素 √
2. 00:09:102 (1) - ^往下1像素 √
3. 00:41:718 (2) - 感覺放太左了，00:41:256 (1,2,1,2) - 可以弄個平行四邊形的形狀 https://puu.sh/vng9r/d401ca423c.jpg √
4. 00:40:949 (2,1) - 沒疊好 √
5. 01:10:179 - 這個地方重音我覺得用圓圈比較好，所以也許把01:09:872 (1) - 改成1/2滑條然後01:10:179 - 用圓圈 这里我还是保留吧，主要是想体现那段电音
6. 03:03:102 (1) - 有點太擠的感覺，我不建議滑條頭和滑條尾overlap，你可以把滑條尾拉右邊一點 https://puu.sh/vnguE/a7dd4b7507.jpg √
7. 04:20:949 (1) - 和04:22:179 (1) - 也許可以疊好點 √

终于能飞了，谢谢仙球啦~~

[ Abhor ] wrote:

无敌!
妙芙SENSEI请教我作图!

Cellina wrote:

wow