Bewww wrote:

Так так так...ну сейчас пойду в разгром.

Тайминг:
offset 1427
Основное:
Учись маппать патернами ис соединять их и слушай музыку, некоторые моменты, можно выделять увеличением/уменьшением спейсинга. Много интересных ритмических задумок впринципе по ритму хорошо. А по объектов, все в 1 куче, так что поработай над этим, посмотри карты других мапперов.
00:14:838 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Вот так будет правильнее по музыке http://puu.sh/v5q4g/5c0ab77879.jpg
00:16:250 (4,5) - можно сделать аналогично^
00:17:662 (1,2) - ^
00:21:191 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - очень страшный паттерн, во 1, на основании чего изменять спейсинг? во 2, если хочешь сделать разорванный стрим то ладно, но сохраняя форму, а то он заворачивается странно. Тут только эксперементировать или найти подобные стрим-паттерны и сделать на их основе.
01:03:544 (3,1) - звучит очень странно, правильнее убрать 3 и переместить все эти слайдеры на сильный бит http://puu.sh/v5quD/3bf80e0a61.jpg
01:07:780 (7,1) - там такого и близко нет, лучше замени на 2 слайдера http://puu.sh/v5qyp/a602b2fcef.jpg
01:30:368 (1) - конец спинера должен быть тут 01:31:426 -
01:31:956 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - все это должно начинаться вот от сюда 01:31:779 - (Поработай над ритмом после перемещения, сома по себе она странно звучит.
03:21:897 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - уже говорил про спейсинг и разорваность. подумай по эксперементируй.
03:23:309 (1) - конец слайдера тут. 03:23:485 -
03:23:662 - исходя из этого^ тут нужна нотка.
03:35:309 (1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - Странно, вот если бы паттерн из 4 ты сделал через "1,2" а 1,2 из "4" было бы обоснованно. http://puu.sh/v5qZ8/f48a34cacd.jpg
03:46:603 (1,2,3,4) - не заходят сюда 1/8 слайдеры лучше в 1/4 сделай.
04:07:074 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Лучше чем все предыдущие, хотя спейсинг так сильно можно было и не увеличивать.
05:40:250 (1) - лучше довести до конца этого гудения имхо тоесть где то вот тут 05:40:250 (1) -

P.S работай работай работай! и посмотри видосики по маппингу.

nm

00:03:103 (3) - make it normal rounded slider
00:04:250 (7) - put it on the middle of 00:04:074 (6,1,2) - but at the top
00:26:838 (1) - polish this slider
00:36:015 (3,4) - unnecessary overlap, overlap at least slider ends
00:37:426 (8,9,1,2) - same here, but slider starts
00:40:250 (9,1) - overlap
01:31:956 (1,3) - probably supposed to be blanket, but well, its not
01:36:015 (1,2) - blanket it
02:37:779 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - I think this spaceing is kinda too big, lower it to at least 0,900 (ctrl shift s)
02:38:309 (2,3) - blanket
03:01:250 (1,2,3,4) - use ctrl+shift+d for stuff like squares

overall, your hitsounds and rthythm sense is fine, but work on placement, blanket and slider look, gl!

Akitoshi wrote:

yo.

1. 00:05:485 (6) - u can move this to 133|186 for blanket with 00:04:956 (4) - if ur wondering how to move on that exact area easier, there's a guide for you with my sik paint skillz
2. 00:07:074 (1) - i aware that what you're emphasizing here but hey maybe this should be same as 00:01:427 (1,2,3) - or vise versa
3. 00:11:309 (1,2) - you just skipped the 00:11:574 - that used to map on previous parts
4. 00:14:838 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I'm pretty sure it's overmap, there's no audible sound on 00:14:926 - 00:15:279 - so appropriate rhythm will be like this
   
5. 00:18:015 (1) - isn't should be ended on red tick? then it's technically unsapped even AiMod didn't tell you
6. 00:22:603 (1) - would u mind to adjust the volume here? that 1/8 hitnormals are way too noisy lol
7. 00:24:368 (2) - 00:42:720 (6) - consider to give more spacing from 00:24:015 (1) - as you using constant 1/2 rhythm until 00:45:721 - and also please add variation on rhythm too, (like, adding 1/1 or 3/4 sliders)
8. 01:39:721 (3,4) - so your sliderheads were red ticks (which is good based on music cuz background instrument was started on reds) then u suddenly switched to white ticks on 01:40:426 (1,2,3,4,1) - and later on while that instrument (idk what to call with that sound lol) is still there. This can give really awkward play for those following the rhythm of the song than reading the Approach Circle. Pls make their rhythms consistent as the music is consistent too
9. 01:46:075 (1,2) - this is awkward rhythm as you started your sliders in red ticks instead of whites (yes this time it's opposite). Please listen carefully on 01:43:074 (1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2) - especially on every white ticks, their clickable objects (circles/sliderheads) are emphasized with instruments. Pls start ur slider on 01:46:250 - instead.
10. 02:06:897 (7,8) - 02:14:662 (4,5) - unstack them to avoid disturbing the stacked doubles.
11. 03:09:191 (1,2) - inconsistency with 03:07:779 (1,2) - 03:10:603 (1,2) -
12. 04:04:250 (4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - the cymbals/drum sounds are obviously started on 04:04:250 - yet your singletap/stack section is started on 04:04:426 - which is late as you see you can only put 3 combo on 04:06:544 (1,2,3) - while others can be put 4 notes cuz your placements were wrong
13. 04:09:191 (3,4,5) - you can use 1/4 rhythm here
14. 04:45:368 (2,3,4) - please stack them correctly
15. 04:55:956 (6,7) - 05:01:603 (3,4) - spacing inconsistency with 04:57:368 (6,7) - 05:04:250 (6,7) -
16. 05:40:250 (1) - also don't forget to adjust the volume (decrease the volume by the time passes and make 5% on the end)

i wanted to point our more but ye i suk at english and i bet it's full of "my taste" if I'll do that :< (people have their own taste and we know dat)
this can be polished a lot in future, just find more modders and hear several people's opinion. Good luck!

my map for m4m : https://osu.ppy.sh/s/525926
just mod 1 or 2 diffs for fair drain time thx

1. 00:01:956 (4) - do not make 1/2 sliders finish on a white tick that have a strong sound without a solid structure and rythm that gives reason for it, you gotta make that white tick something clickable
2. 00:03:015 (2,3) - same as above, this feels and plays weird
3. 00:03:103 (3,4,5) - this makes the pattern looks clustered with those unecessary overlaps of 3 and 5, also the flow/rythm is weird here because the sliders are finishing in the white tick and they don't have any ''flow'' between themselves, they're just placed there
4. 00:05:662 (7) - NC and I suggest making it a 1/2 slider so you don't have that ''weird'' pause with no clicks
5. 00:07:074 (1) - this is a strong sound, it requires a higher DS, also there are importante sounds at the red tick which resembles a triplet, I highly suggest you replace this 1/1 slider for a different rythm
6. 00:10:074 (1,2) - Last time i'm going to point these kind of things so I don't keep reapeating myself >.< this happens over and over again during entire map, please adjust that
7. 00:10:956 (6,1) - again with the uncessary overlaps...this is the biggest issue on your map, there are just way too many of it...it makes your map look inexperienced and inconsistent, by simply removing them your map will look and feel 10x better structured. This will also be the last time I'll point out an unecessary overlap so I don't keep repeating myself over and over again
8. 00:15:368 (5) - the only thing that is worse than finishing a 1/2 slider into a white tick (which yes, there are exceptions where it works, but not here), is finishing a 1/2 slider into a big white tick, it's a transition, you MUST have something clickable here...yes, it also have exceptions, but not here.
9. 00:16:956 (6) - higher DS will be good here, too close to slider
10. 00:17:662 (1) - uncessary NC
11. 00:38:485 (2,3) - this happens during entire section, but I'm going to use this one as example...the flow of your map is really fast but this note is too close into a weird angle...your map feels really fast but the DS from the notes are too similar, you could either lower the SV and make a cleaner structure/flow or increase the DS of notes...it happens during the entire section.
12. 00:40:603 (1) - Last time I'm going to point out the end of sliders on a big white tick, you can't make a transition be just ''another slider end'' without a good reason/structure/moment.
    
    I decided to stop here because the issues are repeating itself over and over and over again and I've only saw 50 seconds of it on editor (besides the testplay I made and I know they'll keep repeating) it will be pointless to write them all, I would stay here entire day x.x Read and try to understand, if you want you can come to my irc to ask stuff whenever you need, will be more usefull than just pointing out stuff to fix >3<
    
    peace

Seto Kousuke wrote:

in case you're interested for future mods, here's my Modding Queue without a self esteem

[General]
Flow: You have many issues with the flow speed of your map, making it feel/look inconsistent and even weird on some moments that I'll put on the notes below because of the weird DS you've used
Structure:Your map have many issues with clustered patterns and pointless overlaps (yes, there are intentional overlaps and there's also bad overlaps that simply doesn't look any differerent than mistakes...the second type is the one i'm talking about)

[Doctor Priaa]

1. 00:01:956 (4) - do not make 1/2 sliders finish on a white tick that have a strong sound without a solid structure and rythm that gives reason for it, you gotta make that white tick something clickable
2. 00:03:015 (2,3) - same as above, this feels and plays weird
3. 00:03:103 (3,4,5) - this makes the pattern looks clustered with those unecessary overlaps of 3 and 5, also the flow/rythm is weird here because the sliders are finishing in the white tick and they don't have any ''flow'' between themselves, they're just placed there
4. 00:05:662 (7) - NC and I suggest making it a 1/2 slider so you don't have that ''weird'' pause with no clicks
5. 00:07:074 (1) - this is a strong sound, it requires a higher DS, also there are importante sounds at the red tick which resembles a triplet, I highly suggest you replace this 1/1 slider for a different rythm
6. 00:10:074 (1,2) - Last time i'm going to point these kind of things so I don't keep reapeating myself >.< this happens over and over again during entire map, please adjust that
7. 00:10:956 (6,1) - again with the uncessary overlaps...this is the biggest issue on your map, there are just way too many of it...it makes your map look inexperienced and inconsistent, by simply removing them your map will look and feel 10x better structured. This will also be the last time I'll point out an unecessary overlap so I don't keep repeating myself over and over again
8. 00:15:368 (5) - the only thing that is worse than finishing a 1/2 slider into a white tick (which yes, there are exceptions where it works, but not here), is finishing a 1/2 slider into a big white tick, it's a transition, you MUST have something clickable here...yes, it also have exceptions, but not here.
9. 00:16:956 (6) - higher DS will be good here, too close to slider
10. 00:17:662 (1) - uncessary NC
11. 00:38:485 (2,3) - this happens during entire section, but I'm going to use this one as example...the flow of your map is really fast but this note is too close into a weird angle...your map feels really fast but the DS from the notes are too similar, you could either lower the SV and make a cleaner structure/flow or increase the DS of notes...it happens during the entire section.
12. 00:40:603 (1) - Last time I'm going to point out the end of sliders on a big white tick, you can't make a transition be just ''another slider end'' without a good reason/structure/moment.
    
    I decided to stop here because the issues are repeating itself over and over and over again and I've only saw 50 seconds of it on editor (besides the testplay I made and I know they'll keep repeating) it will be pointless to write them all, I would stay here entire day x.x Read and try to understand, if you want you can come to my irc to ask stuff whenever you need, will be more usefull than just pointing out stuff to fix >3<
    
    peace

-Fluffy wrote:

Hi!,
From modding queue p/5928090

Lets start : ^)
00:31:426 (6,7) - don't stack them, nothing else in this section was stacked. Keep it consistent.
01:42:015 (2,3,4,5) - Random jumps don't go with anything in the song.
01:45:544 (3,1,2,3,4) - Same sounds as section before this, change is okay but this doesn't go as well with the music as the pattern before.
02:05:485 (4) - The doubles are already stacked, so stacking this can make it a bit confusing.

2017-04-15 17:50 Electoz: ACTION is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/1234705 Yooh - Las ta Fear feat.akaandsia [Doctor Priaa]]
2017-04-15 17:50 Electoz: I only have 10 mins so I'll do it very quickly and not detailed
2017-04-15 17:50 Electoz: 00:01:427 (1,2) - Don't space objects in 3/4 snaps
2017-04-15 17:50 stickAcc: Thanks a lot for your help
2017-04-15 17:50 Electoz: currently it can be misleading as 1/2 stuff
2017-04-15 17:50 Electoz: which can trip up players
2017-04-15 17:50 Electoz: the solution on this are either
2017-04-15 17:51 Electoz: overmap on 00:01:515 - a bit to make the rhyyhm gap 1/2
2017-04-15 17:51 Electoz: or
2017-04-15 17:51 Electoz: 00:01:427 (1,2) - make this a slider
2017-04-15 17:51 Electoz: 00:02:838 (1,2) - idk if there's more of these but the same also applies whenever you did 3/4 rhythm gaps
2017-04-15 17:52 stickAcc: So, should i move 00:01:427 (1) - a bit far away from 00:01:427 (2) - to prevent misreading?
2017-04-15 17:52 Electoz: no
2017-04-15 17:52 Electoz: moving objects won't help much
2017-04-15 17:52 Electoz: mmmm
2017-04-15 17:52 Electoz: have you
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: ever watched
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: videos
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: from pishifar
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: *pishifat
2017-04-15 17:53 stickAcc: Yes, i have seen the,m
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: watch the one with the titile uh
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: or something
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: irregular rhythm
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: he can do that in more detail
2017-04-15 17:53 stickAcc: I think i missed that one
2017-04-15 17:54 Electoz: alright
2017-04-15 17:54 Electoz: 00:18:368 - so back to this
2017-04-15 17:54 Electoz: the intensity is gradually increasing
2017-04-15 17:54 stickAcc: I feel like i should make a tripples instead of doubles at the beginning 
2017-04-15 17:54 Electoz: so whatever you do should reflect that too
2017-04-15 17:54 Electoz: up to you
2017-04-15 17:54 Electoz: overmapping a little bit is fine if it's for playability
2017-04-15 17:54 Electoz: now uh
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: lemme continue on 00:18:368 - I guess
2017-04-15 17:55 stickAcc: Yeah
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: what you did
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: in this part
2017-04-15 17:55 stickAcc: Im thinking about making an increasing spacing between sliders
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: is reflecting that it's more intense than the part before
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: yes
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: that is what you should do
2017-04-15 17:55 stickAcc: I forgot the map for example
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: currently it's like you're putting
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: patterns
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: separately
2017-04-15 17:56 stickAcc: but nvm
2017-04-15 17:56 stickAcc: I know what do you mean
2017-04-15 17:56 Electoz: so they didn't reflect the "gradually" increasing intensity from the song that much
2017-04-15 17:56 Electoz: ye
2017-04-15 17:56 Electoz: ok
2017-04-15 17:56 Electoz: then
2017-04-15 17:57 stickAcc: I think i will just do like you said
2017-04-15 17:57 stickAcc: 00:01:427 (1,2) - replace parts like this with slider
2017-04-15 17:57 stickAcc: i mean, like
2017-04-15 17:57 stickAcc: slider + double
2017-04-15 17:57 Electoz: ok

2017-04-15 17:50 Electoz: ACTION is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/1234705 Yooh - Las ta Fear feat.akaandsia [Doctor Priaa]]
2017-04-15 17:50 Electoz: I only have 10 mins so I'll do it very quickly and not detailed
2017-04-15 17:50 Electoz: 00:01:427 (1,2) - Don't space objects in 3/4 snaps
2017-04-15 17:50 stickAcc: Thanks a lot for your help
2017-04-15 17:50 Electoz: currently it can be misleading as 1/2 stuff
2017-04-15 17:50 Electoz: which can trip up players
2017-04-15 17:50 Electoz: the solution on this are either
2017-04-15 17:51 Electoz: overmap on 00:01:515 - a bit to make the rhyyhm gap 1/2
2017-04-15 17:51 Electoz: or
2017-04-15 17:51 Electoz: 00:01:427 (1,2) - make this a slider
2017-04-15 17:51 Electoz: 00:02:838 (1,2) - idk if there's more of these but the same also applies whenever you did 3/4 rhythm gaps
2017-04-15 17:52 stickAcc: So, should i move 00:01:427 (1) - a bit far away from 00:01:427 (2) - to prevent misreading?
2017-04-15 17:52 Electoz: no
2017-04-15 17:52 Electoz: moving objects won't help much
2017-04-15 17:52 Electoz: mmmm
2017-04-15 17:52 Electoz: have you
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: ever watched
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: videos
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: from pishifar
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: *pishifat
2017-04-15 17:53 stickAcc: Yes, i have seen the,m
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: watch the one with the titile uh
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: or something
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: irregular rhythm
2017-04-15 17:53 Electoz: he can do that in more detail
2017-04-15 17:53 stickAcc: I think i missed that one
2017-04-15 17:54 Electoz: alright
2017-04-15 17:54 Electoz: 00:18:368 - so back to this
2017-04-15 17:54 Electoz: the intensity is gradually increasing
2017-04-15 17:54 stickAcc: I feel like i should make a tripples instead of doubles at the beginning 
2017-04-15 17:54 Electoz: so whatever you do should reflect that too
2017-04-15 17:54 Electoz: up to you
2017-04-15 17:54 Electoz: overmapping a little bit is fine if it's for playability
2017-04-15 17:54 Electoz: now uh
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: lemme continue on 00:18:368 - I guess
2017-04-15 17:55 stickAcc: Yeah
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: what you did
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: in this part
2017-04-15 17:55 stickAcc: Im thinking about making an increasing spacing between sliders
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: is reflecting that it's more intense than the part before
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: yes
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: that is what you should do
2017-04-15 17:55 stickAcc: I forgot the map for example
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: currently it's like you're putting
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: patterns
2017-04-15 17:55 Electoz: separately
2017-04-15 17:56 stickAcc: but nvm
2017-04-15 17:56 stickAcc: I know what do you mean
2017-04-15 17:56 Electoz: so they didn't reflect the "gradually" increasing intensity from the song that much
2017-04-15 17:56 Electoz: ye
2017-04-15 17:56 Electoz: ok
2017-04-15 17:56 Electoz: then
2017-04-15 17:57 stickAcc: I think i will just do like you said
2017-04-15 17:57 stickAcc: 00:01:427 (1,2) - replace parts like this with slider
2017-04-15 17:57 stickAcc: i mean, like
2017-04-15 17:57 stickAcc: slider + double
2017-04-15 17:57 Electoz: ok

1. 00:18:015 (7,1) - I dislike the idea of antispacing here, consider giving it more gap?
2. 00:21:015 (4,1) - ^
3. 00:45:897 (1,2,3,4) - since it's a repeating synth, clap is not necessary here. Also, consider making the spacing lower to emphasize the repeat?
4. 01:00:015 (1) - the idea of starting a new pattern here is too sudden. It would be wise to stick with the previous pattern, especially since you go back to the previous pattern on 01:02:838 (1) -
5. 01:03:544 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - If you want to toy around here, you can try gradual SV increase along with gradual big spacing. It's fun, trust me.
6. 01:09:279 (1) - make sure to leave this HS soft
7. 02:38:838 (3,4) - this can be a 5plets, you see.
8. 03:13:426 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - For the given slider speed, the spacing needs to be widen
9. 03:47:309 (1) - From this part why don't you follow the synth? It's catchy and also refreshing to have a new rhythm pattern rather than spam 1/2 across the whole map. For example : https://saturnalize.s-ul.eu/Ut45w5jP or https://saturnalize.s-ul.eu/YVUAC2Zh
10. 04:09:191 (3,4,5) - another possible 5plets

1. 00:18:015 (7,1) - I dislike the idea of antispacing here, consider giving it more gap?
2. 00:21:015 (4,1) - ^
3. 00:45:897 (1,2,3,4) - since it's a repeating synth, clap is not necessary here. Also, consider making the spacing lower to emphasize the repeat?
4. 01:00:015 (1) - the idea of starting a new pattern here is too sudden. It would be wise to stick with the previous pattern, especially since you go back to the previous pattern on 01:02:838 (1) -
5. 01:03:544 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - If you want to toy around here, you can try gradual SV increase along with gradual big spacing. It's fun, trust me.
6. 01:09:279 (1) - make sure to leave this HS soft
7. 02:38:838 (3,4) - this can be a 5plets, you see.
8. 03:13:426 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - For the given slider speed, the spacing needs to be widen
9. 03:47:309 (1) - From this part why don't you follow the synth? It's catchy and also refreshing to have a new rhythm pattern rather than spam 1/2 across the whole map. For example : https://saturnalize.s-ul.eu/Ut45w5jP or https://saturnalize.s-ul.eu/YVUAC2Zh
10. 04:09:191 (3,4,5) - another possible 5plets