hi /me collects another ticket
[General]
od things for meg and your extra maybe make meg's 7.5? or yours 8.5?
lower ar could work for normal?
rest okay
metadata link somewhere would be good for future reference
[Kinomi's Insane]
Kiai requires and end point. 01:38:336 - or 01:37:990 - will do.
- 00:04:644 (4,5) - Not too much a fan of this rhythm, might be better to ctrl+g so you get the vocals all clickable.
- 00:05:682 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Quite high density here for the intro? Maybe remove some 1/4 since it's super quiet already.. like 00:07:413 (9) - or something.
- 00:08:913 (7) - End of this is really strong and might play nicer clickable. Try making slider + circle?
- 00:11:220 (1) - Feels lacking in terms of emphasis. Could be spaced more obviously like
this maybe?
- 00:13:067 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - What are these following exactly? There's quite obvious 1/1 emphasis but these jumps don't really show that or even follow it rhythmically. The vocals on 00:14:220 (6,7,8) - that come in get no emphasis at all since you didn't map the previous 5 circles with more sliders. It all feels the same and the song isn't doing that.
- 00:22:182 (1,2) - Swap NC? // 00:31:297 (4,1) -
- 00:33:836 (2,3,4) - Stack view
http://i.imgur.com/UCy4gAg.png can you fix overlap?
- 00:56:220 (1,2,3) - I don't think these are all symmetrical so maybe adjust it?
- 01:00:144 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - Seems a bit excessive spacing-wise, maybe something like
this would be less diff-spikey?
- 01:03:894 (1) -
Too fast, not enough time to actually realize there's a spinner there. Would recommend removing it especially since you started it on a yellow tick :l
- 01:05:220 (2,3,4) - Spaced 3 here but not 01:07:067 (2,3,4) - why exactly? To me the song sounds pretty similar so I would think you'd space the 3 here too.
- 01:14:220 (2,3,4) - What happened to the rhythm of 01:12:605 (2,3,4,5) - ? There's still the da da dadaaaa sound or something here
and with 01:15:836 (1,2,3,4,5) - it's different again..
- 01:19:067 (3,4) - Could be an actual stream because there's more 1/4 drums here than 01:18:605 (1,2) - and it would be cool to differentiate them.
A lot of inconsistencies in rhythm to be fixed and looked at, especially in the kiais. The visuals are also kinda meh like 01:25:759 (1,2,3,4,5) - for example I can't really see a pattern here it just looks like random sliders. Rhythms sometimes feel very weird to play like 01:06:605 (1) - skips a beat on 01:06:836 - but 01:08:451 (1) - doesn't then 01:15:836 (1) - does and it's really confusing to what you're trying to follow. 01:16:759 (4,5) - As well skips a really loud vocal on 01:16:990 - :/
As for 01:24:605 (4,5) - you skip 01:24:836 - when you could have just done
this to keep consistency with following drums/vocals.
Overall this diff needs some more work before it can be pushed to rank imo.
[Meg's Extra]
- 01:02:913 (13) - NC? xD
The kiai rhythm confuses me because I'm not really sure what you're going for with things like 01:08:682 (2,3,4,5,6) - which have the same musical rhythm as 01:06:605 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - yet are mapped completely differently? 01:09:605 (8,9,10,11,12,13) - 01:21:374 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - I also don't hear this much 1/4 in the song, in fact the song is fairly devoid of 1/4 in this part. 01:23:682 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - Seems to just ignore the song because there's vocals going on but they're not emphasized through either spacing, rhythm, or flow. If you wanted to emphasize vocals something should be done with 01:24:144 (5) - and 01:24:836 (8) - but nothing really is done and just 1/4 sliders are slapped over all the sounds.
- 01:37:644 (1) - Also there's no 8 in the lyrics, that's -ven from se-
ven so
[Extreme]
- 00:16:297 (1) - This has the same quad that 00:15:375 (1,2,3,4) - has so maybe use a reverse slider to represent it if you want to keep vocals in focus?
- 00:18:144 (1,2,3,4,1) - This is a weird pentagon.. did you run out of space? If you moved it down you could make it more star-shaped.
I think the rest is okay.
Good luck!