1. 00:52:729 (3) - I understand that you're following the instrument here, but I think the vocal is much more prominent here, and that you should map to the vocals since they form an important transition to the next section. As such, I recommend using 1/1 spaced circles at this part instead of the long repeat slider.
2. 01:23:513 (4) - Maybe consider changing to two circles. It will have more impact on the strong beat at 01:23:709

1. 00:19:788 (1) - Just my opinion, but I think reversing this would flow better.

1. 00:24:494 (1,2,3) - Flow here is a bit awkward. How about making (1) have more of an upward motion?
2. 00:36:062 (2,3) - Jump here would be nice for accent on (3). Same suggestion from 00:42:337 (2,3)

Little wrote:

Hi, sorry for the looooong loooooooooong delay.

[Normal]

1. 00:52:729 (3) - I understand that you're following the instrument here, but I think the vocal is much more prominent here, and that you should map to the vocals since they form an important transition to the next section. As such, I recommend using 1/1 spaced circles at this part instead of the long repeat slider.I think now pattern is okay.
2. 01:23:513 (4) - Maybe consider changing to two circles. It will have more impact on the strong beat at 01:23:709

[Hard]

1. 00:19:788 (1) - Just my opinion, but I think reversing this would flow better.already

[Insane]

1. 00:24:494 (1,2,3) - Flow here is a bit awkward. How about making (1) have more of an upward motion?
2. 00:36:062 (2,3) - Jump here would be nice for accent on (3). Same suggestion from 00:42:337 (2,3)

The mapset is already very good, so I don't have much to say.

1. No video?
2. Optional tags: Sodate-kata Saekano: How to Raise a Boring Girlfriend
3. I have my doubts on the romanized title. I'm pretty sure it should be Colorful.(AnimeVer.) If you go to the source page (http://www.mikuweb.com/artist/mikusawai ... /SRCL-8676), you can get カラフル。（AnimeVer.）, which is correct. However, that dot is not the same dot in most keyboards. That is not actually a space, it's part of the dot itself. Try and remove it, there's no space. (More info https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Halfwidth ... idth_forms)
   
   edit: wafu explained it better lol p/4255991

1. Looks clean overall, but I'd like to mention that I find AR4 a bit high for such a low BPM song and considering how low the density is.

1. 00:17:239 (2,3) - Just a minor thing, but stuff like this flows just much better by moving it down a little...
2. 00:21:356 (4,5,6,7) - Found this rhythm really unintuitive for an easier difficulty. The sliders are clickable on the least important sounds here, while the rest is offbeat. An easy fix would be taking (4,5,6) and CTRL+G'ing them rhythm-wise.
3. 00:49:592 (3) - 00:52:729 (3) - Not sure how I feel about these though... it's not like the Normal has to be super low in density, because you do have an Easy. They skip over quite some sounds too, especially the second one where vocals also kick in, whereas the first one is still acceptable. (you don't have these in Easy either?)

1. 00:20:964 (3,4,1,2,3) - Having two stacks right after each other with each different snapping respectively doesn't seem too player-friendly, especially at this level. Would change that 1/2 stack into a slider, also for consistency with the rest of the section.
2. 00:46:258 (6,1) - Putting a stack on downbeats really takes away the emphasis here, would rather stack (1,2).
3. 01:21:945 (2) - Optional, but I don't recall offbeat rhythms being used often/at all. Consider making the clap clickable.

1. 00:03:121 (3,4,5,6) - Would either shorten the distance here, or increase the distance at 01:09:984 (1,2) - 01:24:101 (1,2) - . These are following the same sounds and one is even in KIAI.
2. 01:04:395 (4) - 01:20:768 (5,6) - Normal sampleset?
3. 01:12:729 (7,8,9,1,2,3) - Didn't really play too comfortable, as the sound on 01:13:023 - is skipped, while (2) is overmapped. Would reconsider the rhythm here.
4. 01:13:317 (3,4) - // optional \\ When I use a kickslider I want to continue movement, so having a stacked triplet right afterwards felt awkward to me. Having ongoing moment feels more natural after a kickslider (like 00:34:101 (2,3,4) - ), at least to me.
5. Perhaps more a tip for future maps, I personally find that having the jumps on the snares like 01:21:748 (3,4,5,1) - express the song much better than stacks like 01:02:925 (5,6,7) - that force the player to stop on stronger sounds.

appleeaterx wrote:

M4M!

[General]

1. No video? Maybe I will add?
2. Optional tags: Sodate-kata Saekano: How to Raise a Boring Girlfriend
3. I have my doubts on the romanized title. I'm pretty sure it should be Colorful.(AnimeVer.) If you go to the source page (http://www.mikuweb.com/artist/mikusawai ... /SRCL-8676), you can get カラフル。（AnimeVer.）, which is correct. However, that dot is not the same dot in most keyboards. That is not actually a space, it's part of the dot itself. Try and remove it, there's no space. (More info https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Halfwidth ... idth_forms)
   
   edit: wafu explained it better lol p/4255991

[Easy]

1. Looks clean overall, but I'd like to mention that I find AR4 a bit high for such a low BPM song and considering how low the density is.

[Normal]

1. 00:17:239 (2,3) - Just a minor thing, but stuff like this flows just much better by moving it down a little...looks fine for me.
2. 00:21:356 (4,5,6,7) - Found this rhythm really unintuitive for an easier difficulty. The sliders are clickable on the least important sounds here, while the rest is offbeat. An easy fix would be taking (4,5,6) and CTRL+G'ing them rhythm-wise.
3. 00:49:592 (3) - 00:52:729 (3) - Not sure how I feel about these though... it's not like the Normal has to be super low in density, because you do have an Easy. They skip over quite some sounds too, especially the second one where vocals also kick in, whereas the first one is still acceptable. (you don't have these in Easy either?)I think this looks okay now..

[Hard]

1. 00:20:964 (3,4,1,2,3) - Having two stacks right after each other with each different snapping respectively doesn't seem too player-friendly, especially at this level. Would change that 1/2 stack into a slider, also for consistency with the rest of the section.It doesn't matter imo
2. 00:46:258 (6,1) - Putting a stack on downbeats really takes away the emphasis here, would rather stack (1,2).Avoided all stack.
3. 01:21:945 (2) - Optional, but I don't recall offbeat rhythms being used often/at all. Consider making the clap clickable.consider it.

[Insane]

1. 00:03:121 (3,4,5,6) - Would either shorten the distance here, or increase the distance at 01:09:984 (1,2) - 01:24:101 (1,2) - . These are following the same sounds and one is even in KIAI.Just for avoiding overlaps.
2. 01:04:395 (4) - 01:20:768 (5,6) - Normal sampleset?
3. 01:12:729 (7,8,9,1,2,3) - Didn't really play too comfortable, as the sound on 01:13:023 - is skipped, while (2) is overmapped. Would reconsider the rhythm here. Changed other way
4. 01:13:317 (3,4) - // optional \\ When I use a kickslider I want to continue movement, so having a stacked triplet right afterwards felt awkward to me. Having ongoing moment feels more natural after a kickslider (like 00:34:101 (2,3,4) - ), at least to me. Think about it.
5. Perhaps more a tip for future maps, I personally find that having the jumps on the snares like 01:21:748 (3,4,5,1) - express the song much better than stacks like 01:02:925 (5,6,7) - that force the player to stop on stronger sounds.

Should be good to go soon, good luck!

IamKwaN wrote:

alright

Unicode Title: カラフル。(Anime ver.) or カラフル。（AnimeVer.）
Romanised Title: Colorful. (Anime ver.) or Colorful. (AnimeVer.)
Unicode Artist: 沢井美空
Romanised Artist: Miku Sawai
Source: 冴えない彼女の育てかた

References:
http://www.saenai.tv/music/
http://www.sonymusic.co.jp/artist/mikus ... /SRCL-8676
http://media.vgm.io/albums/74/49447/494 ... 111194.jpg
http://www.mikuweb.com/
http://media.vgm.io/albums/74/49447/494 ... 111116.jpg

good luck then!

Sonnyc wrote:

01:27:239 - 전체적으로 여기 힛사 너무 작은듯 하네요.

mp3 바꾸실 수 있으신가요? 초반 드럼이 너무 시끄러운듯 합니다.
인게임에서 말씀드린대로 힛사 작업 하시고, 그외에는 없을듯

1. 00:08:219 (4,5) - actually it's very annoying to play so i suggest you to use a 1/6 kickslider only and delete the circle
2. 00:27:436 (7,1,2) - not a good flow to me, maybe try something like http://puu.sh/tGSpU/1f100250f9.jpg
3. 00:35:278 (11) - this circle should be different with the triples, suggestion http://puu.sh/tGSyr/d74f7cb75f.jpg
4. 00:36:062 (2,3) - should be a jump here, http://puu.sh/tGSFg/b5f3ee854d.jpg
5. 00:42:337 (2,3) - ^
6. 01:26:454 (3,4,1) - add hitsounds on the slider heads?

1. 00:09:984 (2) - NC like insane diff
2. 00:18:219 (1) - ctrl+j for better looking with 00:17:239 (2) -

1. 00:48:611 (2) - ctrl+j?
2. 00:58:219 (3) - curved too much orz, make it more smooth like http://puu.sh/tGTc3/e01c96e4de.jpg
3. 01:23:513 (4,5) - it's kinda hard to read, maybe

Karen wrote:

m4m

Insane

1. 00:08:219 (4,5) - actually it's very annoying to play so i suggest you to use a 1/6 kickslider only and delete the circle00:08:415 (5) - I want to make this note clickable.
2. 00:27:436 (7,1,2) - not a good flow to me, maybe try something like http://puu.sh/tGSpU/1f100250f9.jpg
3. 00:35:278 (11) - this circle should be different with the triples, suggestion http://puu.sh/tGSyr/d74f7cb75f.jpgNo, I don't like this,
4. 00:36:062 (2,3) - should be a jump here, http://puu.sh/tGSFg/b5f3ee854d.jpgI didn't made jump at 00:36:062 (2,3) - 00:38:611 (1,2,3) - 00:42:337 (2,3) - 00:45:474 (2,3) -
5. 00:42:337 (2,3) - ^^
6. 01:26:454 (3,4,1) - add hitsounds on the slider heads?

Hard

1. 00:09:984 (2) - NC like insane diff
2. 00:18:219 (1) - ctrl+j for better looking with 00:17:239 (2) - Flow could be bad.

Normal

1. 00:48:611 (2) - ctrl+j?I like this one,
2. 00:58:219 (3) - curved too much orz, make it more smooth like http://puu.sh/tGTc3/e01c96e4de.jpg
3. 01:23:513 (4,5) - it's kinda hard to read, maybe

set is fine, won't be hard to rank, good luck.

Sonnyc wrote:

인센 언스냅이랑 하드 00:33:513 (3) - 간격 1.2x로.

Sonnyc wrote:

Nominated.

Nozhomi wrote:

Poping for hitsounds issues.

The hitsounding is really poor on some sections and don't provide enough feedback, I'll take first example on Easy diff because it's for me the one who suffer most of it.
From 00:10:376 - to 00:35:474 - you use almost only clap, who is quite poor and don't provide the best feedback here. It could be much better to use whistle on bic white tics to emphasis vocal here, and seems you had this idea in mind because you putted a whistle at 00:33:905 - without any apparent reason. Same apply from 00:52:729 - to 00:59:395 - .

2nd concern is on the section at 00:35:474 - you use some drum finish like 00:37:043 - . It's k ofc, but using them on the calmer part of the song when you could have used it on kiai seems quite strange tbh. They work much better on a more intense part of the song than this one. I have no idea why you only used it here.

Last concern is 01:27:239 (1) - . There is no reason to put volume lower on slider head when the beat is composed with vocal and piano here, and don't put volume at 5% at the end when vocal is still enough loud, making them inaudible. It's not a fade out note. 40% for the head and 30% for the end is much better.
And ofc that for all diffs.

In addition :

All diffs :

1. 00:52:729 - Missing Normal hitsound
2. 01:22:337 - If you want to let this whistle, put one at 01:09:003 - / 01:12:141 - / 01:23:121 -

Easy :

1. 01:06:846 - / 01:19:396 - Missing whistle.
2. 01:26:846 (2,3) - Little spacing issue.

Normal :

1. 01:23:513 (4,1) - Little spacing issue

Hard :

1. 00:08:219 (2) - Could this reverse have a more logic positioning and be parallel to 00:08:611 (1) - like this https://puu.sh/tLxVB/185dc5f595.png ? Like this you just want to click the arrow instead of the sliders head.
2. 00:21:945 (4) - Change it for 1 reverse only. You just did a 1/4 reverse with 1 arrow at 00:16:258 (4) - and now a 2 arrows without any reaction time to read it, that's just a Hard diff so remove one reverse from this slider.
3. 01:08:023 (4,5,6,1) - The stacking makes spacing too close here https://puu.sh/tLywS/172b22d7eb.png .
4. 01:12:925 (1) - I know you did that for the pattern, but there's no sound to emphasise this jump here.

Insane :

1. 00:08:415 (5,1) - I would swap NC here to make 00:08:415 (5) - more visible.I think looks not so good for me

Feel free to contact Sonnyc or any BN to rebub after fixing these issues.
Mukyu~

Nozhomi wrote:

Okay we did some more improvements with hitsounds. That's much better now.

Have it again~

SPOILER

22:00 Nozhomi: 00:08:219 (2) - you didn't wanted to do them parallel in hard right ? XD
22:02 Neoskylove: http://puu.sh/tMvby/b91595b1e1.jpg
22:02 Neoskylove: Can I fix like that?
22:02 Nozhomi: that's too far
22:03 Nozhomi: could you enable the note stack option on Editing menu ?
22:03 Nozhomi: no not editing menu
22:03 Nozhomi: Display menu
22:03 Nozhomi: XD
22:03 Nozhomi: the 3rd one
22:03 Nozhomi: wa
22:04 Neoskylove: 00:08:219 (2,1) - I didn't intended parallel
22:04 Nozhomi: because 01:08:023 (4) - if you move it at 408:124 it will be like this https://puu.sh/tMvix/8c901df71d.png
22:04 Nozhomi: 00:08:219 (2,1) - k that's fine it's much better like this anyway ^^
22:05 Neoskylove: btw,00:48:219 (2,3) - ?
22:05 Neoskylove: Just add whistles?
22:06 Nozhomi: yeah
22:06 Nozhomi: do it on all diff (if possible ofc)
22:06 Neoskylove: shat part?
22:07 Neoskylove: 00:48:219 (2,3) - in here?
22:07 Neoskylove: what part*
22:07 Nozhomi: just whistle 00:48:219 (2,3,2,3,2,3,2) - on Insane and do same for other diffs
22:08 Neoskylove: oakt
22:08 Neoskylove: okay
22:10 Neoskylove: fixed
22:11 Nozhomi: if you fixed all I said here it should be much better
22:11 Nozhomi: go update and let's see if you didn't forget anything ^^
22:11 Neoskylove: update
22:11 Neoskylove: d
22:12 Nozhomi: 00:06:846 (5) - is it intended you put Normal and Soft Whistle in same beat ?
22:13 Neoskylove: 2,4beats= Normal
22:13 Neoskylove: And this part looks special sounds
22:14 Nozhomi: kk
22:14 Neoskylove: 00:03:709 (4) -
22:14 Neoskylove: too
22:14 Nozhomi: 00:20:572 - Still no whistle on Easy XD
22:14 Nozhomi: 00:26:062 (1,2) - same
22:15 Nozhomi: 00:53:513 - same
22:16 Neoskylove: oakt
22:16 Neoskylove: okay
22:17 Neoskylove: fixed
22:17 Neoskylove: updatead
22:17 Nozhomi: Easy is clean
22:17 Neoskylove: Okay
22:17 Neoskylove: Thanks
22:18 Nozhomi: let's see other diffs ^^
22:19 Neoskylove: k lol
22:20 Nozhomi: Normal is clean
22:21 Neoskylove: okay
22:23 Neoskylove: Hard is?
22:24 Nozhomi: k
22:24 Neoskylove: thx
22:27 Nozhomi: AR9 > all
22:27 Nozhomi: XD
22:28 Nozhomi: okay hitsounds are much much MUCH better now
22:29 Neoskylove: Doyak said 9could be too high
22:29 Neoskylove: That's why I selected 8.5ar
22:30 Nozhomi: don't worry that's just me rattle about AR
22:30 Nozhomi:
22:30 Neoskylove: Then can I fix?
22:31 Nozhomi: fix ?
22:31 Neoskylove: fixed
22:32 Nozhomi: yep it's done nothing to touch again
22:32 Neoskylove: Okay

JinGwang wrote:

already ranked congrats owob

Xinely wrote:

random bubbled map check lol

General :
- meta is ok http://media.vgm.io/albums/74/49447/494 ... 111116.jpg http://media.vgm.io/albums/74/49447/494 ... 111194.jpg (posting here because im lazy to save it)

Easy :
- maybe AR 3,5 for more friendly to newbie
- 00:21:356 (3) - add finish for cymbal?
- 00:57:435 - ^no cymbal in there
- 00:32:337 (1,2) - maybe change rhythm like http://puu.sh/tP6Uy/7e083f741d.jpg for map cymbal at 00:33:709 - as well?It looks not so good for me.
- 00:59:788 - use drum sampleset only since the drum is same with 01:00:180 - ?
- 01:00:572 - sounds better with whistle tbh because its only a bell sound
- 01:22:729 - add whistle too because vocal is strong?
- hitsound work for all diffs xD

Normal :
- 00:06:846 (6) - 0.95x spacing can be fixed here
- 00:17:239 (2) - ^
- 01:23:513 (4,1) - make curve on (4) looks same with (1) for neater design?

Hard :
- increase OD like 5,5 or 6 for better spread with insane
- 01:02:729 (2) - just my taste maybe 80,192 for make circular flow instead for continuing from 01:03:513 (4) -
- 01:10:572 (2,4) - nazi, better stack? because current stack isnt perfect and can be noticed in gameplay
- 01:16:454 - remove whistle for consistency with 01:03:905 - ? if yes then do for insane diff too

Insane :
- 00:06:846 (7) - a bit dumb tho but nc for spacing change here (from 0,7x to 0,5x)?It doesn't matter with reading.
- 00:47:631 (7) - imo it doesnt make sense when drums are strong in here (they are louder than 00:47:435 (5,6) - ) but mapped with 1/4 slider repeat. so try use 2 of 1/4 sliders instead?00:47:239 (3,4,5,6) - and 00:47:631 (7) - sound looks different and 00:47:631 (7) - sound looked low.
- 01:09:984 (1,2) - imo 1/4 sliders repeat dont fit because those weak snare sound exist in everywhere. better make 4 circles or 1/2 sliders I felt their sounds wes stronger than others, anyway fixed/

feel free to poke me back

Xinely wrote:

01:00:572 - for the hitsound, no reply yet (for all diffs)? Just adding symbal could be good

01:16:454 - insane, remove the whistle for consistency with hard diff

also hitsound which you fixed in easy diff, pls fix for other diffs (i already told you lol) for consistency

Xinely wrote:

mawaru

RyoKazuka wrote:

congratz on rank !

Agatsu wrote:

gratz neo!

S A V E R Y wrote:

예스

_Spectrum wrote:

I think 'Romanized Artist' should be 'Sawai Miku' not 'Miku Sawai'
so this should be dqed

Neoskylove wrote:

IamKwaN wrote:

alright

Unicode Title: カラフル。(Anime ver.) or カラフル。（AnimeVer.）
Romanised Title: Colorful. (Anime ver.) or Colorful. (AnimeVer.)
Unicode Artist: 沢井美空
Romanised Artist: Miku Sawai
Source: 冴えない彼女の育てかた

References:
http://www.saenai.tv/music/
http://www.sonymusic.co.jp/artist/mikus ... /SRCL-8676
http://media.vgm.io/albums/74/49447/494 ... 111194.jpg
http://www.mikuweb.com/
http://media.vgm.io/albums/74/49447/494 ... 111116.jpg

good luck then!