PROgj2 wrote:

03:23 PROgj2: なんか途中３連おかしくなかった？
03:24 PROgj2: ズレてたよｗ
03:25 PROgj2: 01:18:434
03:25 PROgj2: だね
03:26 xNyamx: ああ。　ほんとだ。。

• 00:05:309 (1)(2)(3)(4) - I'm not a big fan of this sliders, i think it's acceptable but idk i prefere adding long slider or something
  just my personal opinion here :')
  00:40:934 (2)(3) - You can blanket this if you want
  01:04:059 (2)(3) - The (3) stop as 1/2 red tick it's a bit confusing for beginners in my sense add a sliders here can make this easier
  01:14:996 (6) - Follow the vocal here is a mistake i think, you have a strong beat here 01:15:152 - that you can follow instead of the voice
  01:16:871 (9) - You're sliders end finish in a weird place i mean if you follow the vocal the slider should finish here 01:16:871 -
  (And i know you have a little sound here 01:17:027 - but it's not neccesary too follow this :/)
  01:17:496 (1) - Same thing here but this time you following nothing i don't hear something here (or i'm just deaf idk :') )
  01:55:152 - mute the end of the spinner

• 00:19:684 - don't really like this stream specialy this part 00:19:996 - the space is really annoying to take, you should reconsider this
  (oh and you can NC btw)
  00:23:277 (3)(4)(5) - You're not following the song at this part you should have something like this instead
  00:24:684 - You can start you're stream here i think 00:24:996 -
  00:37:574 - this part of the stream is a little bit spaced i think but this is my opinion
  00:38:277 (3) - You can overlap this note too the slider end at 00:39:059 (1) -
  00:49:840 - add a note ?
  00:57:340 (5) - This note is not overlap too (1)

fLaw wrote:

HELLO! Mod for the Insane difficulty.

A lot of the things that bothered me were just sliders not being curved, or being too sharply curved. Some of the straight sliders I thought were fine though and went nicely with the music.

00:08:277 (4) - Curve here going down would look cleaner

Example

00:15:152 (1) - Curve slider more towards the next note. Flows better with the song.

Example

00:35:777 (4) - This slider seems a bit too high, I suggest moving it lower, then maybe curving it again towards the right

Example

00:36:715 (8) - Also this slider would go well with the previous if it were curved towards it, like on opposite.

Example

00:37:496 (3) - This part also feels like its a bit too high. Not a lot, just a litttttttlleee bit
00:48:902 (1) - Maybe move this slider a little more right, or curve it to the right? Both are good

Example

00:59:527 (2) - Maybe move this note a little higher so it doesn't feel like a straight line? more bouncy

Example

01:02:809 (1) - I would suggest another curve coming from the left, can't go wrong with curves sometimes
01:04:527 (1) - This slider would look nice flipped over the previous one

Example

01:15:621 (2) - Space this note a little more between these two notes

Example

01:17:496 (1) - Slider feels way too high, maybe move it down and left a bit?
01:19:059 (1) - This curve would flow better if it were flipped upside down and maybe curving to the left

Example

01:22:652 (1) - Maybe move this slider up a tiny bit?
01:32:652 (1) or 01:33:121 (2) - I think it would be nice if there were a curve on at least 1 of these
01:37:652 (1) - This would be nice with a big curve on it

Example

All the sliders with sharp curves bugged be a bit, but feel free to ignore them. I just think the map had a nice smooth sound to it, so the jagged edges bothered me.

(smooth curve)

00:18:434 (4) - Sharp curve at the end feels awkward, moving the point more in the middle or making it more smooth looks nicer
00:43:434 (3) - The sharp curve on this feel weird again (smooth curve)
00:43:746 (4) - The sharp curve on this feel weird again (smooth curve)
00:44:684 (4) - (smooth curve)
00:46:559 (1) - (smooth curve)
00:48:277 (4) - (smooth curve)
00:52:809 (1) - (smooth curve)
00:56:246 (4) - (smooth curve)
01:02:184 (4) - (smooth curve)
01:08:121 (2) - (smooth curve)
01:10:777 (3) - (smooth curve)
01:14:527 (3) - (smooth curve)
01:17:027 (4) - (smooth curve)
01:18:746 (5) - (smooth curve)
01:21:090 (5) - (smooth curve)
01:22:027 (3) - (smooth curve)
01:23:121 (2) - (smooth curve)
01:27:184 (4) - (smooth curve)
01:30:309 (1) - (smooth curve)
01:34:059 (1) - (smooth curve)
01:36:871 (2) - (smooth curve)
01:38:121 (2) - (smooth curve)
01:38:121 (2) - (smooth curve)
01:40:934 (4) - (smooth curve)
01:45:934 (3) - (smooth curve)
01:46:246 (4) - (smooth curve)
01:47:809 (1) - (smooth curve)
01:48:434 (3) - (smooth curve)
01:48:746 (4) - (smooth curve)

Other than these, this was a good difficulty.

Shapy wrote:

Random mod cause why not (^^;)

[Easy]
You're following the voice too much in this diff i think, this is not a bad thing but sometimes is really consfusing for a difficulty
like this you should really re check that

• 00:05:309 (1)(2)(3)(4) - I'm not a big fan of this sliders, i think it's acceptable but idk i prefere adding long slider or something
  just my personal opinion here :') okay
  00:40:934 (2)(3) - You can blanket this if you want ok
  01:04:059 (2)(3) - The (3) stop as 1/2 red tick it's a bit confusing for beginners in my sense add a sliders here can make this easier ok
  01:14:996 (6) - Follow the vocal here is a mistake i think, you have a strong beat here 01:15:152 - that you can follow instead of the voice fixed
  01:16:871 (9) - You're sliders end finish in a weird place i mean if you follow the vocal the slider should finish here 01:16:871 - finish point changed
  (And i know you have a little sound here 01:17:027 - but it's not neccesary too follow this :/)
  01:17:496 (1) - Same thing here but this time you following nothing i don't hear something here (or i'm just deaf idk :') ) changed~
  01:55:152 - mute the end of the spinner okay

[Secret]

• 00:19:684 - don't really like this stream specialy this part 00:19:996 - the space is really annoying to take, you should reconsider this hmm.. keep
  (oh and you can NC btw)
  00:23:277 (3)(4)(5) - You're not following the song at this part you should have something like this instead
  fixed~
  00:24:684 - You can start you're stream here i think 00:24:996 - keep
  00:37:574 - this part of the stream is a little bit spaced i think but this is my opinion little changed
  00:38:277 (3) - You can overlap this note too the slider end at 00:39:059 (1) - stack
  00:49:840 - add a note ? keep
  00:57:340 (5) - This note is not overlap too (1) fixed

You're mapset is pretty nice but i need a bit off cleaning particulary you're slide i see some sliders very weird sometime ^^'
Sry if i don't mod more my modding "skill" is not very good i try too find the most thing than i can :/
Good luck for rank (*^▽^*) (Need too rank my set too ;w;)

YukiZura- wrote:

Extra Diff

firstly im not the greatest at modding but i can help you a little bit (im also still learning a bit >,<)

00:09:762 - try put some sound here .. 00:09:684 - replace this with small slider

image

overmap... keep

00:13:121 - Try make the slider shape like this one 00:12:652 - (i think it will look more tidy without too much slider shape and it feels more
comfortable) okay

00:15:152 - This slider also the same.. make it look like 00:15:621 - this one okay

00:34:684 (3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - love this part tho >,< Thanks^^

01:08:121 - = 01:07:652 - sliderz xD okay

01:11:559 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - to 01:12:496 - this part is a bit weird (to be honest i dont like that part) OK changed!!
01:16:559 - to 01:17:574 - same at this part

Try making like this

sorry if this vid is lagging hehehe .. (just a suggestion)
if you dont like that placement .. try rearraged it
click this link to see the vid ---> https://puu.sh/sRq0L/8ca356d8c1.mp4

overall i really enjoy this diff
also i love this song xD
hope to see it ranked ^o^

^^

Examples

For example, I would prefer this one to be round:


While I feel like this one fits the song

• 
  00:27:809 (1) - I'd change this slider in a more fluent slider
  
  Example

  
  01:05:777 (2) - Following the song it should be half a measure longer.
  01:07:652 (1) - This is a slider that follows the beat while all other circles/sliders follow vocals. For consistency I would change that. Not really the best way, but I made 'something' up
  01:10:621 (2,3,4,5,6) - This might be too demanding (not wrong, it does follow the song). At least, I feel like it flows better if you remove circle 2.
  01:30:934 (2,3,4,5) - With the circle size that you have chosen, this is rather busy. I know you can't have too much spacing, but maybe something like this:
  SPOILER

  
  01:39:059 (5) - Move the slider a little bit to the left.
  
  Example

  

zz-e wrote:

[Normal ]

^^

First of all, raise the OD/HP (or at least one of them) to 4.

Overall, a few sliders are better off being fully curved, and they have small inconsistencies in terms of curves. Note that I do like most of the pointy sliders! I especially like the short curved sliders (like 00:10:621 (2) and 00:16:246 (4) ), though I would recommend to make them symmetrically curved (or at least the same inequality in every short slider).

Examples

For example, I would prefer this one to be round:


While I feel like this one fits the song

• 
  00:27:809 (1) - I'd change this slider in a more fluent slider
  
  Example

  
  01:05:777 (2) - Following the song it should be half a measure longer.
  01:07:652 (1) - This is a slider that follows the beat while all other circles/sliders follow vocals. For consistency I would change that. Not really the best way, but I made 'something' up
  01:10:621 (2,3,4,5,6) - This might be too demanding (not wrong, it does follow the song). At least, I feel like it flows better if you remove circle 2.
  01:30:934 (2,3,4,5) - With the circle size that you have chosen, this is rather busy. I know you can't have too much spacing, but maybe something like this:
  SPOILER

  
  01:39:059 (5) - Move the slider a little bit to the left.
  
  Example

  

Hopefully some points are useful. I liked your map and the song!

Dailycare wrote:

Random mod

[General]
*Do you really use the file 4159842898-1686323-J6Q2-1366x768-MM-100.jpg? If no, just remove this. sorry! okai
*What about adding the romanized name of the game as tags? ok-
*Uncheck Widescreen support at all diffs except for Secret

[Secret]
*00:13:668 (6) - There's no sound here. You can put a circle at 00:13:512 - ok fixed
*00:14:684 (5) - What about chaging the slider to two circles? I think emphasizing 00:14:840 - is more better than the current slider change (all circle)
*00:18:512 (5) - Considier removing this note and putting a note at 00:18:355 - ok fixed
*00:19:684 (5) - 00:19:996 (9) - 00:24:684 (5) - 00:27:184 (5) - I think it would be nice if you set NCs here. nice!
*00:30:309 (1) - What about making a spacing bigger like 00:30:934 (4) - ? hmm... ok (maybe)
*00:32:340 - You ignored here but it's a bit awkward for me. It's not a big issue tho. ok keep
*00:44:371 (2) - The spacing is too small. So I think you can do ctrl+g 00:44:059 (1) - for a better distance setting keep
*00:52:574 (6,7) - If you want to follow the vocal then you are also able to remove these notes. And I think it's better. ok
*01:13:121 (2) - What about avoiding overlap? It may make players a bit confused. fixed

[Extra]
*00:16:559 (1,2,3) - 01:39:059 (1,2,3) - There's no reason for kick sliders. If you want to keep it then just make the volume of each slider's end lower
*00:19:684 (5,6,7,8) - They can be replaced by kick sliders.
*00:39:996 (5) - Add a clap instead of whistle
*01:03:512 (4) - Removing it is more better for me but idk lol
*01:09:137 (2) - Remove this. You didn't put a circle here even in the highest diff
all fixed

[Insane]
*00:12:652 (1) - Did you intend the body's hitsound? ..?? okai fixed
*00:36:246 (5) - Add a NC for dividing patterns? okai
*01:12:652 - 01:17:652 - I really don't recommend ignoring these strong beats. Please put any notes here even though you wanted to follow vocal. ok changed
*01:28:746 (5) - Add a NC too ok

[Hard]
*The distance setting you used for emphasizing strong beats feels awkward because you used x1.3 ~ 2.1. All in all it makes the quality a bit lower. But the whole flow is good enough. Nice work. thanks..
*00:52:496 (4,5) - Can you change them to a 1/2 slider?fixed
*01:16:559 (1) - Did you intend the body's hitsound too?fixed

[Normal]
*00:05:309 - Remove this green line. And you can adjust a volume of the timing point.ok

Julie wrote:

Mod

[Secret]

00:07:809 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - yay jump, but how about emphasizing more the snare and cymbal, is not all the same drum. Emphasize my making 00:07:496 (4,1) - , 00:08:121 (3,4) - , 00:08:590 (6,7) - and 00:08:902 (8,1) - longer spacing then the normal one.

00:11:871 (3,4,5) - How about ctrl+g the rhythm http://puu.sh/sSi6f/a91b009ffc.jpg, since this 00:12:027 - is pretty low, while the main sound at 00:12:184 - ,00:12:340 - are pretty important and player can feel more while tapping note that they are tapping on a sound. ok

00:13:668 (6) - Move this to here 00:13:355 - , the triplet drum stream is here not at 00:13:668 - , there is no new drum sound at 00:13:668 -
If you apply this, remove the clap hitsound at 00:13:590 - fixed

00:14:371 (3,4,5) - Same reason as 00:11:871 (3,4,5) - , try to ctrl+g. Since the main sound at 00:14:684 - , 00:14:840 - and 00:14:996 - have the same pitch and volume, can do a nice jump. ok but all circles

00:18:590 (6) - Move to 00:18:355 - that's where the drum triplet is.
Then for hitsound to fit the actual drum in the song.
00:18:434 - whistle
00:18:590 - whistle
00:18:746 - clap okai fixed

00:19:684 (5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - All these clap feel so loud, change these 2 00:19:684 (5,9) - to whistle, just like from the actual drum in the song.fixed

00:52:496 (5,6,7) - These triplet clap sound so loud, and also from the song, remove clap on these 00:52:574 (6,7) - , there is no snare there. removed

01:41:715 (2,3,4) - This is pretty tricky to play, mostly hitting that last notes, since you are making it as hard as 2->3. How about stacking 3 and 4, since they have the same sound and pitch. keep

01:42:184 (5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1) - The drum vary once again owo, make 01:42:184 (5) - and 01:42:496 (8) - into whistle and make 01:42:809 (1) - into a finish.okay

• 
  [General]

1. Tags
   
   1. op opening
   2. visual novel vn
   3. feng9th
   4. short ver. (not sure if this would go into the title, as the sources I found had it. Could check with IamKwaN before calling nominators to be sure. This way you'll save yourself from interruptions later in the ranking process)
2. Is the storyboarded hitsound in Hard at 00:59:059 - really necessary? I'm sure there'd be more blind spots like this in Easy and Normal, right?
   
   [Normal]
3. Regarding your aesthetics
   
   1. 00:05:309 (1,2,3,4) - In general people won't like this because of the way it interacts aesthetically. One example is the way that approach circles don't line up very well. There's a bunch of stuff you could do to make it look neater, even minor things like making a triangle out of 00:06:559 (3,4,1) - , the tails and the head of (1).
   2. 00:49:371 (6,1,6) - Using sharp angles on shorter sliders will often make them look very cramped, and it's something you'd usually want to avoid.
   3. Some other patterns also look a bit strange, even directing a slider weirdly or not using the same shape can make it look odd, so the best thing to do is to just to keep as consistent as possible while reflecting the song.
      
      Anyway, aesthetics could use some work in my opinion. Not too important right now, but I'd like you to at least know of it for your future maps. Try using techniques like symmetry, parallelity, geometrical shapes, etc. more, anything that will make people notice that you tried making it look neat.
4. 00:05:309 (1,2) - Speaking of this pattern, try moving (1) further to the left in order to get a similar flow to the others in this pattern.
5. 00:15:934 (3,4) - Consider swapping their places rhythmically in order to cover 00:16:090 - better. Comparatively 00:16:402 - isn't as important.
6. 00:18:121 (2,3) - There's a bit much holding going on here, try using some circles like you've done in previous patterns for consistency. 00:10:621 (2,3,4) - 00:13:121 (2,3,4) - 00:15:621 (2,3,4) - .
7. Regarding your hitsounding
   
   1. 00:08:121 - There's no clap or snare in the song here, but there is on 00:07:809 - 00:08:277 - 00:08:746 - 00:09:059 - .
   2. 00:09:059 - Similarly to how finishes are hitsounded at 00:08:277 - 00:07:809 - , this could also use one.
   3. 00:16:246 - This is meant to be a clap, following the previous pattern.
      
      Overall I think hitsounding could use more consistency. This way your hitsounds will actually form a pattern, in accordance to the song. So for example if I place a finish on a cymbal crash in the song, then I'd often do the same for whenever a cymbal crash is heard again. The more you try to differentiate feedback to reflect the song, the better. So parts like 00:19:371 - and 00:19:996 - may not want to be the same hitsounds, for example.
8. 01:17:652 - I'd suggest you to make this clickable, in order to reflect what the song is doing. You'll also be able to NC precisely as well as hitsound a finish on it by doing this. Try a rhythm like this. 01:17:496 - isn't as important as 01:17:652 - in this case, since the vocal is mostly idle anyway.
9. Speaking of rhythm: Sounds which are relatively weak in comparison with the next sound, for example 01:11:402 - , should preferably be slider ends, in my opinion. This way you'll cover the sound, yet the emphasis will actually be placed on the stronger sound by forcing a brief lift. By only using circles, it'll get really monotonous, and it's especially noticeable around 01:15:777 (2,3,4,5,6) - .
   
   [Insane]
10. 00:05:309 - I think lower SV would fit a lot better here in the beginning up until 00:07:809 - , and it can be utilized a lot more overall in higher difficulties like this to reflect the song further. Personally I'd have tried making 00:07:184 - lower SV than 00:05:934 (3) - in accordance to the pitch of the piano. Would become a nice transition into 00:07:809 (1,2,3) - as well.
11. The way some objects have variable spacing, 00:13:434 (3,4,5,6) - 00:10:934 (3,4,5,6) - , makes 00:16:871 (2,3,4) - a bit hard to read. You could make (3) and (4) into 1/2 sliders instead, in order to cover 00:17:184 - and 00:17:496 - , for instance. Then to emphasize then you'd use some unique shape or pattern, for example like this. By using sliders you'll also force the player to move their cursor faster between the notes, making it feel more intense.
12. Been noticing it for a while now, but a lot of the objects that are supposed to be parallel aren't completely parallel, for example 00:47:184 (4,5) - 00:50:777 (4,5) - , etc. but then at other parts they're fine 00:49:684 (4,5) - 00:55:621 (2,3) - . When making objects like this, consider using copy pasting and the flipping, or ctrl+g, shortcuts to make it perfectly parallel.
13. 01:02:652 (6) - The section is building up and this is also a different instrument compared to 01:01:871 (2,3,5) - , so I'd suggest you place some emphasis on it. Try spacing this a bit further from 01:02:496 (5) - , for example.
14. 01:06:559 - These hitsounds are intruding on the song a bit here. I'd have simply remove the hitsounds like the song is suggests here.
15. 01:17:262 - Considering the amount of spacing you have, adding some difficulty through a stream here wouldn't be a problem. (psst, it'll give more pp if you have one or two longer note streams in the map as well)
    
    
16. 01:19:605 - 01:20:855 - I was going to mention this, but then I realized this is still insane, so I went on to look at the extra instead and noticed something more important, so I will switch to that diff.
    
    [Extra]
17. Looking very briefly at this, I can tell that you're trying to emphasize the vocals above anything else. It can work, yes, but not to this degree. You're essentially ignoring half of the song by not mapping the drums or any other instruments, and it gets really awkward to play because of this. Triples like 01:13:902 (6,7,1) - and 01:17:027 (3,4,5) - 01:18:434 (4,5,6) - should not exist when 01:14:605 - 01:17:262 - 01:17:418 - are completely skipped over. This isn't even overmapping, since you're not mapping all that you can. All this is, is not following the song properly. Some sections are also inconsistent in this regard, for example 01:20:777 (3,4,5) - compared to 01:19:527 (3) - and 01:27:574 - with 01:27:418 - etc.
    
    Rhythm could really use some work here. I'd highly recommend you to reconsider the way instruments are prioritized and the way triples and streams are arranged in accordance to the song in this difficulty.
    
    [Secret]
18. Similarly in Secret, rhythms like 01:42:809 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6) - are just pure wack-a-mole to the beat, and it really destroys the potential emphasis that parts like 01:43:277 - 01:43:902 - 01:45:309 - 01:46:559 - 01:47:027 - would normally have, to reflect the song provided. I wouldn't blame you if you'd like to keep it though, decisions like these are all completely up to the mapper, after all. Whether those decisions would provide for a "quality map" is another question though.
19. Also consider changing the HP up 7, as it was with the previous difficulty, Extra. Either that or changing Extra's HP accordingly. See no reason to make a more challenging difficulty easier than the previous.

Naxess wrote:

Greetings

• 
  [General]

1. Tags
   
   1. op opening ok
   2. visual novel vn ok
   3. feng9th ok
   4. short ver. (not sure if this would go into the title, as the sources I found had it. Could check with IamKwaN before calling nominators to be sure. This way you'll save yourself from interruptions later in the ranking process)
   okai
2. Is the storyboarded hitsound in Hard at 00:59:059 - really necessary? I'm sure there'd be more blind spots like this in Easy and Normal, right?
   
   [Normal]
3. Regarding your aesthetics
   
   1. 00:05:309 (1,2,3,4) - In general people won't like this because of the way it interacts aesthetically. One example is the way that approach circles don't line up very well. There's a bunch of stuff you could do to make it look neater, even minor things like making a triangle out of 00:06:559 (3,4,1) - , the tails and the head of (1). ok-
   2. 00:49:371 (6,1,6) - Using sharp angles on shorter sliders will often make them look very cramped, and it's something you'd usually want to avoid.
   3. Some other patterns also look a bit strange, even directing a slider weirdly or not using the same shape can make it look odd, so the best thing to do is to just to keep as consistent as possible while reflecting the song. ok fixed
      
      Anyway, aesthetics could use some work in my opinion. Not too important right now, but I'd like you to at least know of it for your future maps. Try using techniques like symmetry, parallelity, geometrical shapes, etc. more, anything that will make people notice that you tried making it look neat.
   thanks
   
4. 00:05:309 (1,2) - Speaking of this pattern, try moving (1) further to the left in order to get a similar flow to the others in this pattern.
5. 00:15:934 (3,4) - Consider swapping their places rhythmically in order to cover 00:16:090 - better. Comparatively 00:16:402 - isn't as important. ok
6. 00:18:121 (2,3) - There's a bit much holding going on here, try using some circles like you've done in previous patterns for consistency. 00:10:621 (2,3,4) - 00:13:121 (2,3,4) - 00:15:621 (2,3,4) - . ok^^
7. Regarding your hitsounding
   
   1. 00:08:121 - There's no clap or snare in the song here, but there is on 00:07:809 - 00:08:277 - 00:08:746 - 00:09:059 - . fiixed
   2. 00:09:059 - Similarly to how finishes are hitsounded at 00:08:277 - 00:07:809 - , this could also use one. fiixed
   3. 00:16:246 - This is meant to be a clap, following the previous pattern. fiixed
      
      Overall I think hitsounding could use more consistency. This way your hitsounds will actually form a pattern, in accordance to the song. So for example if I place a finish on a cymbal crash in the song, then I'd often do the same for whenever a cymbal crash is heard again. The more you try to differentiate feedback to reflect the song, the better. So parts like 00:19:371 - and 00:19:996 - may not want to be the same hitsounds, for example.
   ok
   
   
8. 01:17:652 - I'd suggest you to make this clickable, in order to reflect what the song is doing. You'll also be able to NC precisely as well as hitsound a finish on it by doing this. Try a rhythm like this. 01:17:496 - isn't as important as 01:17:652 - in this case, since the vocal is mostly idle anyway. okay
9. Speaking of rhythm: Sounds which are relatively weak in comparison with the next sound, for example 01:11:402 - , should preferably be slider ends, in my opinion. This way you'll cover the sound, yet the emphasis will actually be placed on the stronger sound by forcing a brief lift. By only using circles, it'll get really monotonous, and it's especially noticeable around 01:15:777 (2,3,4,5,6) - . keep
   
   [Insane]
10. 00:05:309 - I think lower SV would fit a lot better here in the beginning up until 00:07:809 - , and it can be utilized a lot more overall in higher difficulties like this to reflect the song further. Personally I'd have tried making 00:07:184 - lower SV than 00:05:934 (3) - in accordance to the pitch of the piano. Would become a nice transition into 00:07:809 (1,2,3) - as well. nice!
11. The way some objects have variable spacing, 00:13:434 (3,4,5,6) - 00:10:934 (3,4,5,6) - , makes 00:16:871 (2,3,4) - a bit hard to read. You could make (3) and (4) into 1/2 sliders instead, in order to cover 00:17:184 - and 00:17:496 - , for instance. Then to emphasize then you'd use some unique shape or pattern, for example like this. By using sliders you'll also force the player to move their cursor faster between the notes, making it feel more intense. keep but i wll change if come same suggestion
12. Been noticing it for a while now, but a lot of the objects that are supposed to be parallel aren't completely parallel, for example 00:47:184 (4,5) - 00:50:777 (4,5) - , etc. but then at other parts they're fine 00:49:684 (4,5) - 00:55:621 (2,3) - . When making objects like this, consider using copy pasting and the flipping, or ctrl+g, shortcuts to make it perfectly parallel. ok fixed
13. 01:02:652 (6) - The section is building up and this is also a different instrument compared to 01:01:871 (2,3,5) - , so I'd suggest you place some emphasis on it. Try spacing this a bit further from 01:02:496 (5) - , for example. littele changed
14. 01:06:559 - These hitsounds are intruding on the song a bit here. I'd have simply remove the hitsounds like the song is suggests here. ok
    
15. 01:17:262 - Considering the amount of spacing you have, adding some difficulty through a stream here wouldn't be a problem. (psst, it'll give more pp if you have one or two longer note streams in the map as well) keep but i wll change if come same suggestion
    
    
16. 01:19:605 - 01:20:855 - I was going to mention this, but then I realized this is still insane, so I went on to look at the extra instead and noticed something more important, so I will switch to that diff. ok
    
    [Extra]
17. Looking very briefly at this, I can tell that you're trying to emphasize the vocals above anything else. It can work, yes, but not to this degree. You're essentially ignoring half of the song by not mapping the drums or any other instruments, and it gets really awkward to play because of this. Triples like 01:13:902 (6,7,1) - and 01:17:027 (3,4,5) - 01:18:434 (4,5,6) - should not exist when 01:14:605 - 01:17:262 - 01:17:418 - are completely skipped over. This isn't even overmapping, since you're not mapping all that you can. All this is, is not following the song properly. Some sections are also inconsistent in this regard, for example 01:20:777 (3,4,5) - compared to 01:19:527 (3) - and 01:27:574 - with 01:27:418 - etc.
    
    Rhythm could really use some work here. I'd highly recommend you to reconsider the way instruments are prioritized and the way triples and streams are arranged in accordance to the song in this difficulty.
    
    okay change (wip) changed
    
    [Secret]
18. Similarly in Secret, rhythms like 01:42:809 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6) - are just pure wack-a-mole to the beat, and it really destroys the potential emphasis that parts like 01:43:277 - 01:43:902 - 01:45:309 - 01:46:559 - 01:47:027 - would normally have, to reflect the song provided. I wouldn't blame you if you'd like to keep it though, decisions like these are all completely up to the mapper, after all. Whether those decisions would provide for a "quality map" is another question though. keep
19. Also consider changing the HP up 7, as it was with the previous difficulty, Extra. Either that or changing Extra's HP accordingly. See no reason to make a more challenging difficulty easier than the previous. okk

Good luck!

Narcissu wrote:

moeeeeeeee

DylanSan wrote:

Hello from #modreq

Easy

00:06:246 (2,3) - This is kind of anti flow, maybe making slider point into previous note would look better
00:09:059 (2,3) - same here, but for this one especially because player could get confused by 00:10:152 (1) -
First side note, You do this a lot, i wont point out all of them, but basically for easthetic reasons you should probably make them look a little bit nicer, because right not it is kind of an eyesore
00:24:684 (4,1) - Nazi blanket

not much to say Fixed

Normal

00:16:246 (4,5) - these two overlap kind of awkwardly, as in i would expect a blanket visually, but because of the rhythm its not possible so its just shoved a bit to the side, maybe trying to move (4) bit to the left will help a lot.
00:40:934 (2) - Maybe go for blanket with normal curve instead, there isn't anything in the music providing such an awkward shape out of no where
00:54:059 (4,5) - Maybe for aesthetic reason make these 2 curve about the same and then using the change rotation tool to make it kind of offset to make it look nicer
00:57:809 (1,2) - Nazi blanket
01:17:340 (7) - same for this one like the first one, moving it to the left for a bit makes it look better Fixed

Hard

The SV is kind of high for a hard, especially because of the step up from normal which is 1.1 to 1.6 while the later diffs only increase by 0.1, you probably wont like what i am about to say, but really do consider changing it.
Might also help with the spread after change so that the SR isnt as high for that hard, I mean only 0.04 more and it'd be an insane

hmmm.... i think no plobrem

Insane

00:44:684 (4) - How about making this a curve instead, you dont really do this slider anywhere else so it feels unfit
You do it like 3 or so more times which is really confusing because there isnt like anything in the music that is really trying to enforce such a shape, its kind of random keep
01:35:152 (1,4) - Nazi blanket
01:39:371 (2,3,4) - Nice, but moving 01:39:840 (4) - a little more down would make it better, so that the followpoint goes over itself, makes it a little more neat

Extra

00:08:980 - Missing a note here? I hear a triplet, you also missed it on the other diffs
00:17:027 (4) - Maybe add timing point to indicate its part of the previous things but a little slower
00:57:809 (1) - remake slider lol, you accidentally made the old type of slider, its kind of an eyesore
01:22:184 (5,3) - Fix the stack pls

Secret

00:08:902 (8) - Here just like Extra is supposed to be a triplet i think
00:10:855 - Here too
00:11:480 - Here too
00:11:480 - ^
00:12:105 - ^
00:13:434 (4,5,6) - This one should be half a beat earlier nice suggestion
00:13:902 (8) - Missing here a triplet
00:14:527 (4) - I Think you get the idea, this is supposed to be harder right? There are bunch of places that are implying triplets but you somehow disregarded that all the way through the map, Maybe adding another Extra which is more difficult? Like 6.5* where you can add in those implied triplets that imo fit really good

EzOzu wrote:

Hey, I received your mod request. (Un)fortunately, your Insane and Extra difficulties are already fine tuned to a degree where I can't add anything substancial anymore. Good luck getting it ranked ;-)

Even with mods, everything checks out when it comes to the drain and everything, so all I can do here is to give you a star

joker- wrote:

いくで（細かいとこまで書いていくので壁が予想されます）いまこのmodを書いてるときpuushパイセンが謎のサーバーエラーに陥ってるので画像はないです。

General

1. ローマ字アーティストは"Yamazaki moe"ではなく"Yamazaki Moe"だと思います。metadata見る感じでは公式にはどこにもYamazaki moeとは書いてないのでここはranking criteria通りにfirst nameも大文字です。
2. あと細かいですが、曲のタイトルの”片想いのメロディを short ver.”となってますが、”を”と"s"の間が全角スペースになってます。metadata見る感じでは半角スペースなので、それも直しておいたほうがいいです。ローマ字のほうも忘れないでくださいね！
3. あと１つ、これも"melody"ではなくて"Melody"です。そういうことになってるんです…
4. HP drain 全diff-1しませんか、今の流行は一番上でもHP7ないのが好かれる時代なので…(HR勢並感) 一番上hp6.5まで落としてみましたー。（HRじゃ6.5でもきついかな。。）

fixed('ω')

Hitsound

1. 00:12:184 - 00:14:059 - 00:14:684 - 00:15:152 - 00:16:559 - 00:17:027 - 00:17:340 - 00:17:652 - ここにringの音が鳴ってるので近い音のデフォルトwhistleいれてもいいかもです
2. 00:20:309 - 00:24:527 - この区間の赤線には小さいシンバルの音が鳴ってるので、サンプルセットdrumのwhistleでおとを取ってあげてもいいかもしれないです。少しnoisyになるのでお任せです。

なるほど　了解です。　あとで色々試してみますー。

Easy

1. これhitsound copier使ってます？easyは全く緑線ないのでそれはよくないです。ほかのdiffと合わせて最低でもaメロ,bメロ変わるとこくらい緑線引っ張ってvolume変えましょう
2. 00:06:559 (3) - これはもうちょっと上に持ってきましょうx244y74ですか。このくらいにもってくると３のスライダーのbendぐらいと流れが一致するのできれいだと思います
3. 00:09:059 (2) - これもうちょっと垂直方向に角度緩めませんか？今の位置から-4°くらいがいいかなと
4. 00:09:684 (3) - これを前のスライダーの延長線上にもって来るほうが好きです
5. 00:10:152 (1) - これoutです。ほぼunranked issueです。低難易度においてデフォルトスキンのhpバーに触れるのはだめです。
6. 00:17:027 (4) - これはたしかに00:15:934 (2) - これとシンメトリーにしてるのはわかるんですが00:16:559 (3,4) - ここは1/1のブレイクがありますし、どちらかというと00:17:027 (4,1) - こっちのflowをみてやったほうがプレイヤーは心地いいと思うのでCtrl Jを提案します
7. 00:19:059 (3) - これはもう少し右にずらしましょう00:18:746 (2,3) - この３つの丸が直線状になるほうがみためきれいです。
8. 00:24:684 (4) - これもちょっと上ですね、直線状(ry
9. 00:27:184 (4,1) - ２回連続で直線のスライダーというのはシンメトリーでもないですし、あまりきれいに見えないかもです。どっちかまげたほうがいいですね
10. 00:27:809 (1) - ここからはボーカルメインで音とってるように見えたんで、それなら00:28:746 - ここもとりましょう
11. 00:32:809 (1) - これの進行方向逆にしませんか、00:29:684 (2,3,1,2,3,4) - これとおなじとこ２回回ることになるのでだめってわけではないですが、あまり好ましくないかもです。これ直すのはめんどくさい
12. 00:44:996 - これとったほうがいいんじゃない？
13. 00:47:809 (1,2,3) - ここボーカルメインでとったほうがちぐはぐにならずにやりやすいと思う。もしここかえたなら00:50:309 (1,2,3) - これもおなじね
14. 01:04:996 - これもとってあげるべきかなぁ
15. 01:07:652 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - easyというdiffで考えると密集しすぎかなぁと思うな

てゃんくす！　allfixed

puushないと説明に限界あるんでpuushのサーバー復活したらここからまた書きます

Time Capsule wrote:

16/12/20

20:58 Time Capsule: 今はどう？
21:00 xNyamx: 今easyを修正してるから normal以上をお願いします！！
21:02 xNyamx: ああ　英語の方が書きやすかったら　英語でおｋ　　（あとで翻訳しながら修正するから！）
21:03 Time Capsule: 簡単英語で？
21:04 xNyamx: 英語なら　できれば簡単英語でｗ
21:05 Time Capsule: well, first i will testplay it to make me easier pointing mayor issues
21:05 Time Capsule: 分かりやすいか？
21:07 xNyamx: なんとなーくわかる気がするから　大丈夫！ｗ
21:07 xNyamx: でもすぐに返信はできないと思うから　許してｗ
21:08 Time Capsule: 始めます
21:08 xNyamx: おねがいします
21:09 Time Capsule: 00:09:684 (6,7) - prefer using 1/2 slider here. it will emphasisng the upbeat softer
21:10 Time Capsule: 00:16:246 (4,5) - this could be blanket considering the current curve of (5) is not good looking
21:11 Time Capsule: 00:10:152 (1,2) - this ok, 00:17:652 (1,2) - this a bit nope
21:13 Time Capsule: 00:22:809 - try this pattern [https://gyazo.com/5c8101b1d89f47d9d482ddd86f886116 x]
21:14 Time Capsule: 00:26:559 (3,4,5) - for me this ok, but maybe a bit hard for new player to read that kind of pattern 
21:16 Time Capsule: 00:30:934 (2) - up curve make transtition (3,4) easier to catch 
21:17 Time Capsule: 00:40:934 (2) - right curve instead, same reason with earlier
21:18 Time Capsule: 00:45:777 - i see that you repeating earlier rhytm selection here. but the vocal is diffrent. this included to overmapping for normal. simply delete it
21:21 Time Capsule: 00:48:746 - pattern again [https://gyazo.com/73028eb88ae1482904f9cf85ca8f90a7 x]
21:22 Time Capsule: 00:51:871 (6) - this [https://gyazo.com/7d904dcf798a01f3378f6f23abbf626d x]
21:22 Time Capsule: 00:59:059 (3,4) - just blanket it
21:23 Time Capsule: 01:06:246 (4,5) - move to x200 y116 e in diff, so i would reccomend to use 1/1 slider 
21:26 Time Capsule: 01:43:902 - pattern [https://gyazo.com/04d48cb54d49639f3b8b827dc1423540 x]
21:28 Time Capsule: for a note theres actually a lot of inperfect blanket, but well not really matter i think 　
21:33 Time Capsule: 何かがわからないなら聞ってね
21:36 xNyamx: いや、大体なんとなくわかったよー　（簡単英語のおかげ）

21:36 xNyamx: 後で修正します！
21:36 xNyamx: 時間まだあったら　hard以降もお願いしていい？？？
21:40 Time Capsule: 続きますね
21:42 xNyamx: はい
21:43 Time Capsule: 00:19:215 (2,3) - hard is basically a mayor empasis diff, so this kind of rhytm usually will be stacked, same for 00:19:840 (5,6) - 
21:45 Time Capsule: 00:24:996 - quite sure you also hear the drum tap, you can apply 3x 1/8 reverse slider to emph it [https://gyazo.com/54b49d864993174c4d3e5dd2a7680d52 x]
21:46 Time Capsule: 00:26:871 (3,4,5,6) - try to make softer pattern here
21:47 Time Capsule: 00:30:465 (2,3) - and 00:31:090 (5,6) - hold (stack) prefered
21:48 Time Capsule: 00:37:184 (1,2) - in case you apply that drum emphasis earlier, do same for this two slider as well
21:49 Time Capsule: 00:43:434 (3,4) - tips if you want t make it more simmilar
21:50 Time Capsule: make a slider, then just copy and paste it, after it if you want to mirror it press (ctrl+h) then (ctrl+j)
21:50 Time Capsule: 00:44:527 (3,4) - you can also hold this one
21:53 Time Capsule: 00:46:559 - this looks better [https://gyazo.com/8e74d26d5f579391c1a133bb37921726 x]
21:54 Time Capsule: 00:47:809 - try this rhytm (start on blue) [https://gyazo.com/7178868a57dfa29215888d1810536f86 x]
21:56 Time Capsule: 01:05:934 (3,4,5) - considering this intro to reff, you may add more ds there
21:57 Time Capsule: 01:41:715 (2,3) - 01:42:340 (5,6) - last hold
21:59 Time Capsule: and for note, this diff spamming angle slider too much i think. there will actually fine if you use curve>angle in hard. but its all your choise
22:02 Time Capsule: hardできた
22:04 xNyamx: ありがとう！
22:04 *Time Capsule is playing [https://osu.ppy.sh/b/1153122 Yamazaki Moe - Kataomoi no Melody o  short ver. [Insane]] +Hidden
22:04 Time Capsule: 一番好き
22:05 xNyamx: ｗｗ
22:05 xNyamx: ありがとうｗ
22:08 Time Capsule: 00:17:027 (3,4,1) - こっちらはちょっと読みにくい、少し遠くしたほうがいいかな
22:11 Time Capsule: insaneにそれだけですｗ
22:11 xNyamx: まじかｗ　　　さんくすｗ
22:13 xNyamx: extraは自信がない。。
22:14 xNyamx: flowをもっと良くしたいなっておもうんだけど。。
22:14 Time Capsule: まだたくさん勉強しないと
22:15 xNyamx: ですね…
22:15 Time Capsule: いつかにきっとできるよ
22:15 Time Capsule: 頑張って！
22:16 xNyamx: はい！
22:16 Time Capsule: もう寝る時間になった
22:17 Time Capsule: またねー
22:17 xNyamx: おｋ～
22:17 xNyamx: あ
22:17 xNyamx: postしといてちょー

1. 
   01:04:996 (3,1) - Avoid overlapping! Something like this should work
   01:16:559 (9) - The red tick polarity is kinda confusing to play, so maybe extend this slider to 01:17:184
   01:19:059 (4,5,6) - Weird rhythm! I assume you wanted to map the voice here 01:20:309 (6) ? If that's the case, do it like this
   01:25:152 (1,2) - Rhythm! Something like thisis better

1. 
   00:11:559 (5) - Make this slider with reverse face the next slider for better flow, like this
   00:21:402 (4,5) - Feels kinda hard to play. If you want to emphasize the guitar, do this
   00:34:059 (4) - This is a less intense part, so a slider here would be the best instead of a slider with a reverse
   00:44:059 (4) - A slider sounds better here than a slider with a reverse in my opinion
   01:04:996 (6,1,2,3,4,5) - Looks like a hard pattern here. Try to make it simple by emphasizing only the white ticks. Something like this
   01:12:496 (7,1) - hmmm, what about this?
   01:23:902 (3) - Would be better if you end it on the previous white tick
   01:26:402 - Missing note? Maybe a 1/1 slider would work
   01:30:309 (1,2,3,4,5) - Kinda hard pattern for begginers. Do something like this and add a circle on 01:31:871
   01:49:527 (1) - I think you should delete this! Sounds better and simple

1. 
   00:15:152 (1,2) - Move this down a little bit so 00:15:621 (2) stacks on 00:14:527 (2)
   00:15:621 (2,1) - Try to move 00:16:559 (1) a little bit so it doesn't overlap with 00:15:621 (2)
   00:45:934 (3,1,3) - Hmmm, overlaps. Try to stack 00:46:559 (1) - slider tail on 00:45:934 (3) - slider head and blanket these two 00:47:027 (2,3) like this
   00:50:152 (5) - Move this circle so it doesn't overlap with 00:50:777 (2)
   00:51:090 (3) - Stack the slider head on 00:49:996 (4)
   00:52:496 (4,1) - Bad flow!
   01:11:871 (2) - Stack this with 01:10:621 (2)

1. 
   00:17:652 (1,2) - Bad flow 1 > 2
   00:18:434 (4) - Unfitting slider shape. Do something like 00:18:746 (5)
   00:20:777 (2,3) - CTRL + G these two for better flow
   00:30:309 (1,2) - This part is unfitting. Maybe you should've kept the rhythm from 00:29:059 (1,2,3,4)
   00:44:684 (4) - Copy 00:43:746 (4) - and CTRL+H it!
   01:45:934 (3) - Stack it with 01:44:996 (5)