From my modding queue
[Jon's Kantan]
> 00:09:138 - / 00:42:154 - / ...The melody starts joining here, I think there should be some contrasting notes to state it out clearly for this bar. How about K k k D at 00:09:138 - ? 00:10:408 - as an on-beat of a new session, D is relatively more familiar than K (unless 00:20:567 - , you can say there's pitch difference).
> 00:09:138 - / 00:42:154 - / 01:12:630 - in case you want to keep k k k D, it's still preferable to change 00:09:138 - to a Finish note because it has an extra strong dynamic shown comparing with the previous introduction part.
> 00:15:488 - / 00:48:503 - there is a hidden cymbal crash right here. How about adding a Finish?
> 00:23:107 - / 00:56:123 - d suits here because the tone goes down a bit (just a bit).
> 01:08:821 - It's quite obvious that the instrumental part has some variation for the second Kiai. A clear cymbal crash is added right here, Finish should be put. It is fine and not too clumsy since it's already 4 bars away from the last Finish (01:03:742 - ).
> 01:23:424 - Keep it as k d K is fine when you are screening for patterns like 00:09:138 -
[Oni]
> 00:09:138 - pretty much the same as mentioned in Kantan, where's the Finish for the hidden cymbal crash? It is definitely okay to have a ddd K pattern since it is an Oni.
! 00:10:408 - I think you keep the mapping channel as melody too stiff, you can make more variations like inserting more 1/4 patterns before or in the middle of the melody phrases. The current patterns are not balanced since at 00:19:297 - , there is an emerge of densely built up patterns. That's why some 1/4 patterns, or relatively densed or extra notes should be put in the melody phrases. Moreover, Muzu-Oni this gap looks too narrow, more notes should be put in Oni for sure to make the spread look better.
> 00:11:837 - / 00:21:996 - / 00:28:980 - You can put a d here to maintain a relatively close connections between notes and notes (maintain density). It is not strange as you use off-beat patterns for the introduction part already. Certain off-beat pattern usages are expected and not weired right here.
> 00:13:424 - It's a good place to put triplet tbh. This note itself is an accompaniment, why not even putting one more at 00:13:503 - to enrich the pattern?
> 00:14:853 - another place you can use a triplet, kkd should suit here.
> 00:15:170 - a calp exists, changing to k despite the pitch should be more consistent in overall mapping style.
> 00:19:932 - definitely you should keep it as a Finish too! You make a very good contrast in terms of pattern usage. Apart from that, I think some colour should be altered: 00:19:297 (61) -
In this session, Finishers are stated out as D K D according to their pitches. 00:20:408 - changing to k to emphasize the upcoming on-beat D. 00:19:297 - / 00:20:567 - They should be identical to 00:10:408 - .
> 00:20:567 - Fix some patterns I mentioned above, the whole song is quite repetitive and you ought to know what to do :^)
> 00:24:853 - triplet is available (maybe kkk)
> 00:37:075 - / 01:10:091 - / 01:20:249 - A finish seems suiting the pattern you are going to use. O o O o O is beautiful!
> 01:12:154 - / 01:12:313 - they should be d k instead of k d, k should match on every clap, right?
> 01:22:313 - / 01:22:472 - same as above
> 01:24:059 - Yeah I think the last note with K should be better due to its high pitch ending. Then 01:23:742 - is changed to D for a better emphasis effect.
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