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00:01:698 (3,4) - too close
00:05:031 (3,4) -
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/661615700:07:031 (3,4) - too close
00:24:365 (10,11) - Bad flow here
00:27:698 (1,2) - ^
00:30:865 (1,1) - Why NC two of these? Also remove NC at 00:30:865 (1) - and NC 00:30:365 (2) - instead. Remove NC at 00:31:365 (1) - as well
00:40:365 (7,8,9,10,11,12) - Don't stack these. It'll be hard to read + so close to each other
00:42:031 (4,5,6) - Poor structure and placement here
00:46:031 (10,11,12) - Make it parallel to 00:45:698 (7,8,9) -
00:51:448 (11) - Unnecessary beat here. Let 00:51:365 (10) - as a sole beat so that the triplet 00:51:531 (12,13,1) - can follow the piano
I did a little differently00:57:865 (4,5,6) - I don't know about the slider. Making it normal is better because there is no electronic element there
01:03:698 (8,9) - This is so different and bad structure at the same time
01:04:865 (1) - I think make this a 1/1 slider, deleting 01:05:198 (2) - because i think it fits better
01:06:698 (9,10,11) - I get the idea you're trying to do. But you're doing it wrong. It should be tiled 45 degrees and blanketed properly
01:07:698 (1) - weird slider tbh
I like 01:11:365 (1) - This should end on big white tick
01:11:698 (1) - why end this a bit earlier and add a beat on 01:12:698 (1) - ? the spinner could have ended on 01:12:698 (1) - and also giving the players the room to recover from spinner. In this case, it might be cased for disqualification
01:16:031 (3,4,5) - I think people would not expect 4 to actually be a 1/4 beat. Bookmark this just in case people might point this out
01:16:698 (6,7) - blanket error
01:18:365 I would map this part If i were you
I do not understand01:29:031 ^
^01:40:365 (3,4,5,6) - bad overlap here
01:55:698 (1,2,3) - I don't hear a decent beat to make it a triplet. change this
02:08:865 (1,2,3,4,5) - I'd say this is inconsistent compared to how you map 02:06:698 (2,3,4,5,6) - . Making the mentioned part the same as 02:06:698 (2,3,4,5,6) - would be better
02:15:031 really strong 1/3 here
02:17:031 (5,6,7) - bad structure here.
02:20:198 (1) - move NC to 02:19:698 (16) -
02:39:698 (9,11) -
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/6616595 I like my version02:48:698 (8,1) - could be a burst stream
02:49:531 (1,2,3,4,5) - unnecessary stream here because i dont hear anything decent here
02:51:031 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^
No02:52:531 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^
02:55:031 (1,2,3,4,5) -
02:56:031 (9,10,11,12,13,1,2,3,4,5) - I'm not sure I hear 5-hit beat here. why map in a stream zz
02:58:531 (6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - ^
03:11:198 I hear a strong drum here
03:16:198 (16,17) - 1/2 fits better here
I like my version03:17:698 (10,11,12) - I dont hear a strong beat that supports the triplet
03:22:031 (13) - ^
03:23:365 (7,8,9,10,11) - overmapped
03:28:365 (4) - wow so long slider. so much beat is missed here
For a beautiful slider, need a victim03:35:031 (1,1) -
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/661668903:46:365 (1,2) - blanket error
04:08:698 (1,2,3) - I think making a triangle shape would do good
04:16:031 (1) - remove nc
04:17:031 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16,17,18,19) - at least have an NC? 19 beat here is blehhh
04:20:365 (1,1) - remove NC on these two z
04:23:031 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16,17,18,19) - D00D NC PL3S