1. Newbie (4,77 stars, 139 notes)
2. Nightmare (5 stars, 916 notes)

_LRJ_ wrote:

_LRJ_Haii~
Can i make an guest diff? >.<

ZLOdeuka wrote:

мб сделать звук на 8 всё таки? прям бьёт лишнее... сделаем 7

(00:19:506 - добавь комбо 00:16:923-00:19:589 - it's not completed :3
я не знаю как на всей карте но... 01:12:423 до брейка...ты расставляй фихи по шкалам вверху...помоему звучит ужасно.. начиная с с слайдера тут же...прислушайсо... ._.
разберись с этим )) I changed offset and the result

• Remove commas from the tags; add "donald", "kinghts" to tags
  When you re-compress the video, be sure to remove the audio from it.
  The .osb file doesn't match to the .osu. Please remove it.

• .Opinions: (Just some thoughts, I'd personally like if you follow them)
  Give a name to the difficulty.
  Yeah missing hitsounds, but you know that xD
  00:03:433 (11) - 00:06:099 (11) - 00:11:099 (9) - you're mapping the stream on the voice, but there's no voice here.
  .Suggestions: (Fixing this should make gameplay/aesthetics a bit better)
  00:11:516 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - very un-natural to play
  00:16:183 (7) - this slider is different from the Owen Was Her's one.
  00:17:506 (3) - un-natural. The beat is actually 1/4 after.
  00:18:089 - add a beat
  00:24:506 (6) - add a repetition
  00:26:839 (4,5) - add a repetition to (4), move (5) 1/6 before and fix (5)'s spacing.
  00:40:173 (10) - new combo highly recommended
  00:42:756 - add a beat?
  00:43:506 (2) - add new combo; 00:42:839 (1) - remove new combo
  01:14:339 - where's the spinner? xD
  00:24:839 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - un-natural
  01:32:839 (14) - new combo, really.
  01:34:756 (1) - really unintuitive.
  01:43:506 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ugly spacing usage.
  02:11:006 (6,7,8) - ^
  02:17:506 (3) - new combo
  .Errors/Mistakes: (Bad gameplay issues or badly applied changes)
  00:18:256 (8,9,10,11,12,13,14) - this is random, it doesn't follow anything.
  00:20:506 (7) - there should be something like 4 beats here, not one.
  00:21:673 - add a beat here and fix 00:21:756 (15)'s spacing
  00:29:644 (8,9,10) - this part should be mapped using 1/8 (and it's unsnapped too): 00:29:673 (8) - red line; 00:29:714 (9) - yellow line; 00:29:756 (10) - blue line. Suggesting a Short slider for these three. Same thing for 01:33:673 (22,23,24) and 02:37:672 (8,9,10)
  00:51:506 (1) - No please. Everyone will misread this for a 1/2 spacing.
  00:58:673 (5) - No please. Everyone will misread this for a 1/4 spacing.
  From 01:15:506 (1) to 01:20:256 (5) - All Off-timed. Sadly, this pattern just doesn't fit here. You should try the triplets that Reikin used in Owen was her at ~01:15:000. The stream right after these is not so right too (but at least a bit more playable)...
  01:37:173 (2,3) - the end of the sliders is snapped to nothing.
  01:59:506 (9) - 02:02:173 (9)- where are the other beats?
  02:00:173 (14) - 02:02:839 (14) - 02:06:839 (6) - move 1/4 before and in the previous stack.
  02:05:006 (1) - No please. Everyone will misread this for a 1/2 spacing.
  02:07:173 (9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6) - they don't follow anything

Card N'FoRcE wrote:

- General: (Considerations and things you need to check/fix for the whole map)

• Remove commas from the tags; add "donald", "kinghts" to tags done
  When you re-compress the video, be sure to remove the audio from it.
  The .osb file doesn't match to the .osu. Please remove it.

- "":

• .Opinions: (Just some thoughts, I'd personally like if you follow them)
  Give a name to the difficulty.
  Yeah missing hitsounds, but you know that xD
  00:03:433 (11) done - 00:06:099 (11) done - 00:11:099 (9) i think, that not - you're mapping the stream on the voice, but there's no voice here.
  .Suggestions: (Fixing this should make gameplay/aesthetics a bit better)
  00:11:516 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - very un-natural to play ok
  00:16:183 (7) - this slider is different from the Owen Was Her's one. I know, but this is Mix, I wanted to do a little harder (1,5x) ._.
  00:17:506 (3) - un-natural. The beat is actually 1/4 after. Thanks :3 done
  00:18:089 - add a beat done
  00:24:506 (6) - add a repetition why D:
  00:26:839 (4,5) - add a repetition to (4), move (5) 1/6 before and fix (5)'s spacing. done
  00:40:173 (10) - new combo highly recommended done
  00:42:756 - add a beat? no :3
  00:43:506 (2) - add new combo; 00:42:839 (1) - remove new combo done
  01:14:339 - where's the spinner? xD On video, Ronald points his finger to the next slide D:
  00:24:839 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - un-natural don't want to repeat
  01:32:839 (14) - new combo, really. done. I reworked the map, probably forgot to press
  01:34:756 (1) - really unintuitive. done
  01:43:506 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ugly spacing usage. done
  02:11:006 (6,7,8) - ^ ok
  02:17:506 (3) - new combo done
  .Errors/Mistakes: (Bad gameplay issues or badly applied changes)
  00:18:256 (8,9,10,11,12,13,14) - this is random, it doesn't follow anything. done
  00:20:506 (7) - there should be something like 4 beats here, not one. done
  00:21:673 - add a beat here and fix 00:21:756 (15)'s spacing done
  00:29:644 (8,9,10) - this part should be mapped using 1/8 (and it's unsnapped too): 00:29:673 (8) - red line; 00:29:714 (9) - yellow line; ok
  00:29:756 (10) - blue line. Suggesting a Short slider for these three. Same thing for 01:33:673 (22,23,24) and 02:37:672 (8,9,10) ok
  00:51:506 (1) - No please. Everyone will misread this for a 1/2 spacing. done
  00:58:673 (5) - No please. Everyone will misread this for a 1/4 spacing. done
  From 01:15:506 (1) to 01:20:256 (5) - All Off-timed. Sadly, this pattern just doesn't fit here. You should try the triplets that Reikin used in Owen was her at ~01:15:000. The stream right after these is not so right too (but at least a bit more playable)... ok
  01:37:173 (2,3) - the end of the sliders is snapped to nothing. not, i think thats ok
  01:59:506 (9) - 02:02:173 (9)- where are the other beats? done
  02:00:173 (14) - 02:02:839 (14) - 02:06:839 (6) - move 1/4 before and in the previous stack. ok
  02:05:006 (1) - No please. Everyone will misread this for a 1/2 spacing. done
  02:07:173 (9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6) - they don't follow anything ok

This kind of map you're trying to make usually follows the "vocals" very strictly.
Since it seems that following "vocals" was your intention (you also used well-known patterns from other maps) you can't afford to make variations unless they're absolutely easy to read; all underlined "un-natural"s are an example of this.
Also, about this matter, my opinion is: using some patterns from well-known maps (like using them as a citation) is not bad, but i think you have to use those patterns in the exact same part of the song as the original ones (or at least a part that's fairly similiar); some of those patterns feel awkward because of this (like 00:11:516 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8), as i wrote above).
Your own patterns are quite good, instead: quite original patterns and a good flow. Why don't you make the whole map using your own patterns instead of forcing the well-known ones? I told you by chat that imho it wasn't a problem, but your patterns are good and i think it's better to make something completely new since you did good. Maybe you right, I'll think about it

Good luck
Awesome moding, Awesome Card N'FoRcE Thanks so much <3

IceBeam wrote:

Файл .osz весит всего 13.6 мб,так что я не уверен в том,что видео надо сжимать.

А вот БГ всё же найди,да,без него не ранкнут.

[Tags]
"Donald, Touhou, Kinght"

Убирай запятые,пиши через пробел. сделано

Nico Nico Douga это скорее в Source,но если не найдешь что написать в Artist,то пусть будет как есть уж.

[Stack Leniency]
У тебя стоит на минимальной отметке,я знаю что это анранкбл,но вот пойдёт ли для апрувда - не знаю точно.

[Nightmare]
00:40:839 (1) - Я бы сюда финиш добавил. сделано
00:41:506 (1) - ^ сделано
00:45:173 (4) - Сделай его вертикальным,смотрится не очень рядом с остальными. ладно :3
00:53:089 (x) - Может убрать брейк и замапать эту часть? Как-то слишком внезапно прерывается.
01:14:173 (1) - Может на спиннер заменить? Неплохо бы подошло. он там пальцем на слайд показывает, но да ладно, спиннер так спиннер
01:19:506 (1,2) - Если бы не эдитор,никогда бы не увидел что тут.Мне кажется даже для апрувда это не подойдёт,т.к. по сути это невозможно прочесть.Так что лучше измени эту часть. омг, там же одно и тоже
01:25:506 - Без хитсаунда плохо звучит,добавь что-нибудь сюда. финишь запилил
01:30:173 (1) - Забыл финиш? да, спасибо
01:37:173 (2,3) - Почему они на синем тике заканчиваются? Может всё же на красном? ок
01:43:506 (1) - Подравнять под слайдер? спасибо
02:18:173 - Спиннер? хорошо
02:27:506 (6) - Как-то близковато к предыдущему,может выделить новое комбо здесь? сделано
02:31:506 (1) - Финиш? ок
02:36:839 (1) - ^ ок

[Newbie]
Slider Velocity не соотвествует скорости,нужно уменьшить. сделаю 1,3
А вообще..здесь легкая сложность не нужна,да и как звучат эти 11% мне не очень нравится на самом деле. даже не знаю, не делать же мапу исключительно для скилловиков
Лучше создай какую-нибудь TAG4 сложность,будет лучше. посмотрим

Вроде всё,удачи~