- General: (Considerations and things you need to check/fix for the whole map)- Remove commas from the tags; add "donald", "kinghts" to tags
When you re-compress the video, be sure to remove the audio from it.
The .osb file doesn't match to the .osu. Please remove it.
- "":- .Opinions: (Just some thoughts, I'd personally like if you follow them)
Give a name to the difficulty.
Yeah missing hitsounds, but you know that xD
00:03:433 (11) - 00:06:099 (11) - 00:11:099 (9) - you're mapping the stream on the voice, but there's no voice here.
.Suggestions: (Fixing this should make gameplay/aesthetics a bit better)
00:11:516 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - very un-natural to play
00:16:183 (7) - this slider is different from the Owen Was Her's one.
00:17:506 (3) - un-natural. The beat is actually 1/4 after.
00:18:089 - add a beat
00:24:506 (6) - add a repetition
00:26:839 (4,5) - add a repetition to (4), move (5) 1/6 before and fix (5)'s spacing.
00:40:173 (10) - new combo highly recommended
00:42:756 - add a beat?
00:43:506 (2) - add new combo; 00:42:839 (1) - remove new combo
01:14:339 - where's the spinner? xD
00:24:839 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - un-natural
01:32:839 (14) - new combo, really.
01:34:756 (1) - really unintuitive.
01:43:506 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ugly spacing usage.
02:11:006 (6,7,8) - ^
02:17:506 (3) - new combo
.Errors/Mistakes: (Bad gameplay issues or badly applied changes)
00:18:256 (8,9,10,11,12,13,14) - this is random, it doesn't follow anything.
00:20:506 (7) - there should be something like 4 beats here, not one.
00:21:673 - add a beat here and fix 00:21:756 (15)'s spacing
00:29:644 (8,9,10) - this part should be mapped using 1/8 (and it's unsnapped too): 00:29:673 (8) - red line; 00:29:714 (9) - yellow line; 00:29:756 (10) - blue line. Suggesting a Short slider for these three. Same thing for 01:33:673 (22,23,24) and 02:37:672 (8,9,10)
00:51:506 (1) - No please. Everyone will misread this for a 1/2 spacing.
00:58:673 (5) - No please. Everyone will misread this for a 1/4 spacing.
From 01:15:506 (1) to 01:20:256 (5) - All Off-timed. Sadly, this pattern just doesn't fit here. You should try the triplets that Reikin used in Owen was her at ~01:15:000. The stream right after these is not so right too (but at least a bit more playable)...
01:37:173 (2,3) - the end of the sliders is snapped to nothing.
01:59:506 (9) - 02:02:173 (9)- where are the other beats?
02:00:173 (14) - 02:02:839 (14) - 02:06:839 (6) - move 1/4 before and in the previous stack.
02:05:006 (1) - No please. Everyone will misread this for a 1/2 spacing.
02:07:173 (9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6) - they don't follow anything
This kind of map you're trying to make usually follows the "vocals" very strictly.
Since it seems that following "vocals" was your intention (you also used well-known patterns from other maps) you can't afford to make variations unless they're absolutely easy to read; all underlined "
un-natural"s are an example of this.
Also, about this matter, my opinion is: using some patterns from well-known maps (like using them as a citation) is not bad, but i think you have to use those patterns in the exact same part of the song as the original ones (or at least a part that's fairly similiar); some of those patterns feel awkward because of this (like 00:11:516 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8), as i wrote above).
Your own patterns are quite good, instead: quite original patterns and a good flow. Why don't you make the whole map using your own patterns instead of forcing the well-known ones? I told you by chat that imho it wasn't a problem, but your patterns are good and i think it's better to make something completely new since you did good.
Good luck