1. Kyouaku (8,25 stars, 3141 notes)

Aia wrote:

IRC stuff.

SPOILER

2016-06-06 04:36 DoKito: i need you to mod my map
2016-06-06 04:36 Aia: uh
2016-06-06 04:36 DoKito: ACTION is listening to [https://osu.ppy.sh/b/988830 Imperial Circus Dead Decadence - Yomi Yori Kikoyu, Koukoku no Tou to Honoo no Shoujo.]
2016-06-06 04:36 DoKito: it's a nice song :<
2016-06-06 04:40 Aia: how am I suppsoed to mod this
2016-06-06 04:40 Aia: ok well
2016-06-06 04:40 DoKito: you go in the editor and point out flaws
2016-06-06 04:40 DoKito: this is how you mod
2016-06-06 04:40 Aia: 00:22:615 (13) - I think these sliders should start here
2016-06-06 04:40 Aia: Because the sound changes there
2016-06-06 04:41 Aia: not where they start now
2016-06-06 04:42 DoKito: but there is a really dominant sound starting right here 00:22:888 -
2016-06-06 04:43 Aia: Okay, to me it just just sounds weird
2016-06-06 04:46 Aia: 02:09:797 (1,2,3) - This looks very awkward to play
2016-06-06 04:48 Aia: Move it to the end of 02:10:479 (4) - ?
2016-06-06 04:48 Aia: Even that would make it better to play
2016-06-06 04:50 Aia: 02:54:524 (1) - Feel like the spacing here is just a bit too much
2016-06-06 04:50 Aia: on these 1/3's
2016-06-06 04:52 Aia: 04:12:932 (4,5,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - What
2016-06-06 04:56 Aia: 06:08:977 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - This rhythm isn't correct here
2016-06-06 04:57 Aia: http://puu.sh/pijDv/deaaaef305.png ^
2016-06-06 05:00 Aia: Can't say much else

Kroytz wrote:

Here's my mod, aka the fix ur NCs and rhythms mod xp

mod

00:04:888 (3,4) - Flow seemed a bit edgy with these (mostly just the 4) but I tried to make something more smoother. http://puu.sh/pikNW/8c8c2aeb17.jpg

00:06:524 (1) - When I see this, it makes me wonder why not just start off the map with a repeat slider? It's literally the same as 00:01:070 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15) - or 00:03:251 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16) - that's why. Starting the map with repeat slider first gives a cue to the player that shit's gonna go down. Starting with deathstream already and you come to 00:06:524 (1) - just seems a bit odd but it's not a big deal I suppose since it only repeats itself for half a measure. Something you might wanna be careful for future I guess.

00:10:888 (13) - NC should be here as its the start of the new measure not 00:11:024 (1) -

00:13:615 (1) - don't think these need NC's but since theyre sliders theyre okay

00:15:251 (17) - Someone might call for this to be NC'd but personally I think it's okay too lol

00:17:365 (1) - slider has one too many repeats and it should start on the new measure. It's gonna be extremely misleading to the player if you keep it like this.

00:25:479 (4) - & 00:25:888 (4) - Remove NC. I don't think they need to be separated xp

00:27:115 (2) - I think this would be pretty neat if it was overlapped against 00:26:706 (1) - but then your next jump sequence 00:27:251 (1,2,3,4) - would have to be rearranged. This just an example: http://puu.sh/piln5/0ae7341b09.jpg circles (3,4) are overlapped on the slider-ends of (1) and (2).

00:29:842 (5) - this might sound good with triple

00:32:024 (5) - same here. triple on the red tick is usually better than triple starting on the white tick. But tbh, the whole jump sequence is weird because I think the drums in the back stay consistent but then in the later half you introduce most of their triples so it's a bit odd. I'd probably work around creating a consistent rhythm for it

00:38:092 (16,1,2,3,4,5) - not perfectly straight if that was the intent

00:40:615 - there's a few beats around here if you wanted to map them

00:43:206 (1) - this wouldn't need to be NC'd. For it to make sense that it's part of the same measure as 00:42:933 (5,6,7) - you'd have to move the triple a bit elsewhere and make it flow as though it's part of the same measure. 00:44:024 (6,1) - this is okay cuz yknow, the music splits the measure in half.

00:49:070 (1) - yo man, this could be so much better x-x

01:05:433 (1,2,3,4) - Might work better as two 1/2 sliders.

01:14:433 (2) - starting here there's room for six 1/3 beats. so prevent confusion with the following stream I'd probably make two repeating 1/3 sliders or a way to make three 1/3 sliders flow into the next stream.

01:17:433 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - This is bit weird looking since this section doesn't really ask for two hard angles. Id imagine something more curvy

01:17:979 (1) - doesn't need NC

01:18:797 (1) - ^

01:20:570 (1,3) - this is a pretty big flaw i think since the new measure should be where the kink in the stream is. the new measure should also be NC'd cuz then you end up with this weird thing 01:21:183 (10,1) -

01:26:706 (1) - & 01:26:979 (1) - doesn't need to be NC since they share the same measure and its really the same pattern too. I'd personally try to make a neater more original pattern than what you have tho since yours is both aggressive for the section and also quite boring to look at lol

01:33:797 (1,2) - nice meme sliders dood

01:35:979 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - I really like jumps like this

01:41:706 (2,3) - the idea is nice here but the sliders could be shaped a bit better for impact. I know you wanna blanket over that (1) but maybe just try a different design.

01:46:888 (17) - stream should stop here and this should be repeat slider or the beginning of your kick slider section. your kick slider section also doesn't need so many NCs'.

01:59:024 (2) - move to 512;50 looks better imo

02:06:524 (1,2,3) - a pattern like: http://puu.sh/pimQZ/67f6bc24e1.jpg flows better for a finish

02:08:842 (7,1) - spacing too close. could move 02:08:842 (7) - to 152;232 and it'll be alright

02:08:570 (6,7) - Probably better that the circle is on the red tick and the slider start on the new measure. Slider-ends on new measures are rip

02:10:751 (5,6) - ^

02:16:342 (1,2,1,2,1) - with the NCs it gets iffy when you try to judge consistency cuz its like you have this thing but then this pattern 02:17:706 (1,2,3,4) - should be identical right but then it only has one NC so its unusual. Same thing happens with 02:08:842 (7,1,2,1,2,1,2) - & 02:11:433 (2,3,4,5) -

02:19:479 (1) - for consistency this would also be 1/1 slider like you did here 02:17:297 (2) -

02:28:342 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - personally I think the design of the stream is quite lacking. I would've done something simpler like http://puu.sh/pin88/a845a6e2c9.jpg and since the part over here 02:29:160 (1,2,3,4) - shifts in tone, probably just use kick sliders

02:33:797 (5,1,1) - examples of bad undermapped ;^; TOO MUCH UNDERMAP D: This rhythm works 10000% better trust http://puu.sh/pineU/f38bc54035.png all up to here 02:37:070 (1) -

02:42:183 (1) - should be on white tick. I also believe you can make another art slider here 02:42:524 - to fill in the empty space. The vocal stretches near the end as well, so you could get creative with slider art there imo ye

02:47:251 (1) - dunno how effective the NCs here are but I guess it can pass..

02:58:342 (1) - remove NC

03:05:979 (1) - ^

03:39:251 (2,3) - these aren't perfectly lined up I dont think

03:47:977 (5) - bad undermap :<

03:49:068 (4) - NC

03:50:159 (4) - NC

03:50:909 (1) - I think this is overmapped o,o and then 03:51:250 (2) - would be NC'd and remove the NC on the slider afterwards xp

03:52:341 (1,2) - also not so good undermapping.

03:57:796 (17) - NC, remove NC on 03:58:614 (1) - and then 03:58:887 (5) - gets NC'd.

03:57:659 (15,16,1) - this part might need a little tweak with the NCs so you could add in one of those kinks that emphasize the drums claps or w.e

04:05:159 (1,2,3,4) - I'm unsure about these notes in how they fit with the song... but if they work then remove NC and start NC 04:05:432 (5) -

04:12:523 (1) - remove NC

04:13:614 (1) - ^ also this stream looks pretty ugly lol

04:21:796 (11) - juicy

04:28:068 (3) - shorten this by 1/4 and include a 1/2 slider on the new measure (with NC ofc).

04:30:250 (3) - could also do it here.

04:32:432 (3,1) - and here

04:33:796 (14) - nc's bro. remove this nc 04:34:341 (1) -

04:38:705 (6) - better to repeat the same rhythm as 04:38:159 (1,2,3,4,5) - for consistency's sake. You could also do repeat sliders starting from 04:38:159 (1) -

04:41:977 (1) - remove NC

04:43:068 (3) - split into two as to not mislead players

04:44:159 (1) - probably doesn't need NC

04:47:432 (9,10,11) - can't really change this cuz the whole stream would get fucked but just know this turn is a bit jagged-y so, for future reference try make this smoother. Now that I look at it some more even 04:46:887 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - seem a bit uneven

04:48:523 (1) - dunno if need NC or not

04:52:341 (1,1) - I mean, I'm sure you could create better looking sliders but ye

04:54:523 (1,1,2,3) - This rhythm works better http://puu.sh/pioaI/860db37be5.jpg

04:58:068 (3) - remove NC fits better imo

04:59:977 (5) - NC

05:01:750 (6) - since there's that "shi" vocal you could make that as triple. there's also some NC stuff here too but idk how i'd change it to match your patterning

05:06:250 (1) - should be 4 circles and the repeats start on the new measure. with 4 circles you could kink the stream or if you really wanted to separate the vocal you can turn it into two kick sliders.

05:06:523 (2) - I wouldve made this into a longer stream that kinks at 05:06:932 (3) -

05:11:637 - add beat over here

05:13:614 (1) - undermap bad

05:19:068 (1) - remove NC

05:20:159 (1) - ^

05:21:250 (1) - ^

05:22:341 (1) - ^

05:22:887 (1) - shorten this by 1/4 and turn 05:23:296 (2) - into circles because having an odd amount of kick sliders is nasty in regards to rhythm

05:25:341 (1) - remove NC

05:29:432 (3) - NC. Would also work better as slider too

05:31:341 (1) - remove NC. The SV change is too subtle for it to matter

05:34:904 (1) - snap to blue tick better.

05:41:432 (1) - zzzz

05:44:432 (1) - better as repeat so that you can NC and start stream on 05:44:705 (4) -

05:46:750 (4,5) - should also be kick slider because odd # kicks is bad. then you can NC and start stream 05:46:887 (6) -

05:47:091 (1) - cancerous blue ticked slider lmao. that should be on the following white tick.

05:55:477 (5) - turn into circle on red and slider on new measure. stack circle over slider does well

05:56:705 (1,2,3,4) - here might work better if not undermapping. The map is already like kill-me-deathstreams and jumps so there shouldn't be a reason to tone it down for weak vocals. If wanting to follow vocals keep rhythm simple at 1/2 stuff as to not be so underwhelming when reaching these vocals. Otherwise it feels kind of random to have kill-me mapping followed by easy stuff at unusual times.

06:02:023 (3,4) - circle on red and slider on new measure + NC. I'm telling you man, it works better >>;;;

06:04:205 (5,1) - ^

06:05:432 (1,2,3,4) - undermapping thing again should be fixed

06:13:068 (2) - slider could be a long version of 06:11:977 (2) -

06:33:750 (3) - too much undermap with that slider

06:39:796 (1) - since the violin thing starts here you could also start kick slider for deviation.

06:41:977 (1) - kick sliders work here too cuz undermap is SUCC

06:43:250 (1,1) - better to remove NC. also, this is pretty cool pattern nj

06:57:250 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - also could be kicks for same reasoning as before

07:01:614 (1) - ^

07:07:341 (3) - stack on previous (3) ?

07:07:614 (1,1,1,1,1,1) - this is pretty hard to sightread just saying..

07:08:705 (1) - blegh

07:13:068 (1,1) - and the slider from here on out are also blegh lol

07:34:886 (2) - this ones good

07:47:362 (9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16) - the music changes here so the stream would look good if it had kinks in them or smth as well

07:48:453 (9) - same here

07:49:544 (9) - ^

07:51:862 (1) - repeat should start 07:51:725 (9) - and there would be two repeat sliders of the same length. 07:51:862 (1,2) - these are terrible to play with and not to mention sliders on red ticks is kill

07:56:089 (9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16) - kinks in this section would also be pretty cool to add

08:00:453 (1) - remove NC

08:02:089 (17) - add NC. Instead of repeat I'd just do a low DS at like 0.2 or something

08:05:089 (1) - remove NC

08:05:379 (1) - better to snap all these spinners to the blue ticks

I like the song, its a pretty neat map.
Still has a lot of work to be done but with enough mods I'm sure it can pass for approval.

Lyawi wrote:

Hiii

- 02:42:524 (1) - Mach das Sliderende leiser. Man hört nicht so viel, außer die Stimme.
- 03:11:978 - Ich kenne den Begriff dafür jetzt nicht, aber zieh die Pause bis dorthin, denn da passt's, weil da so ein guter Ton für gegeben ist.
- 04:18:522 (1,2,3,4,1) - Kann man lassen, würde ich persönlich aber anders machen.
- 05:02:705 (1,2) - Kurve die beiden Slider passend zu 05:03:387 (2) - dem Circle: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5327736
- 05:22:614 (10,11,12) - Je nach dem würde ich hier einen Stream empfehlen, in etwa so: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5327760
- 08:14:089 - Den könnte man noch einbeziehen.

Ja, das ist wenig für 8 Mins. Aber sei mir nicht böse, ich kann dich für den Rest nur loben. <3
Ich hoffe, dass das trotzdem hilfreich war. :3

Sebu wrote:

blanket-san

01:13:070 (1,3) - blanket
01:44:570 (6,2) - move (2) to blanket (6) please
01:51:797 (2) - 1 right
02:06:524 (1,3) - blanket
02:21:115 (2) - move last slidertick 1 to the right
02:21:388 (3,5) - blanket
02:38:706 (3) - blanket 2 pixels to the left(i think)
02:46:160 (3) - 1 pixel to the left
why is this 02:58:888 (1) - not on top of this 02:57:797 (1) - <.>
this isnt completely wrapped around the circle and it bothers my eys D: 03:29:433 (1) - please move second slider point 2 up
03:42:796 (4,1) - blanket pls
03:51:796 (2) - this 1 up and this 03:52:068 (3) - 1 to the right(i think)
03:53:705 (4) - pretty sure this needs end sliderpoint to be 1more to the right
04:15:523 (3) - 1 left
04:27:250 (1,2,3) - blanket please ;;
04:42:250 (4) - 1 down 1 left
04:50:705 (1,1) - blanket (might be more that needs checking around that area)
05:11:023 (3) - probably move one to the right
05:28:614 (3,1) - blanket
05:31:068 (1,3) - blanket
05:32:023 (1,2,3) - 1 right
05:34:341 (1,2) - blanket
06:05:841 (2) - up and left 1.
06:23:977 (1) - 1 right(or 2 maybe)
06:35:068 (2) - 1 up
06:44:705 (1,3) - check blanket
07:34:886 (2,1) - ^
08:03:453 (2) - 1 down

theres ur blanket mod Kappa b

1. i believe you can't name the diff with your own username, find something related to the song maybe xd
2. 00:14:160 - i don't actually agree about the spacing of this stream, the music has still a lot of variations so keeping the cursor in the same place doesn't make sense for me
3. 00:25:683 - missing note here?
4. 00:39:251 - kinda weird that you decided to decrease the spacing of the stream here, when the guitar sounds higher... you could also improve the spacing here... there are too much notes overlapping themselves and it doesn't look that great.
5. 00:40:342 - this section feels kinda empty, you could add some 1/1 notes here just to set the pace... like stacking and make jumps on the very noticeable beats 00:41:433 - this one, for example
6. 00:41:160 (1,1) - i don't actually agree with the NC spam, the second one is useless because there's nothing special
7. 01:00:251 - this part is confusing. i guess these jumps 01:00:251 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - are because of guitar but then you suddenly change to follow vocals on 01:01:070 - with those 1/2 sliders... 01:01:888 (2,3,4,5,6) - is also overmapped and it doesn't follow anything
8. 01:02:229 - shouldn't be a note here? i mean... there are guitar and drums here xd
9. 01:04:342 - the reverse arrows arround this sections doesn't fit well imo, they doesn't emphasize the rhythm here and it plays really plain, the drums are rather technical here so maybe try something like ?
10. 01:08:160 (4,5) - this rhythm doesn't fit imo, guitar goes with drums here, as you can hear on 01:08:024 - there are a snare and a guitar note, so that's worthy to map as a clickable object but the problem comes in the next two notes, guitar and claps are on 01:08:297 - 01:08:570 - so would be better to make these palces clickable. i'd personally go with something like
11. 01:08:774 (2) - feels overmapped
12. 01:50:160 - you're ignoring a lot of beats here... mapping the voice isn't the best option for a 7 star difficulty map lol, specially when the drums are really noisy
13. 02:00:797 (1,1) - how about stacking these 2? (i would say the same for 02:05:160 (1,1) - )
14. 02:25:479 (3) - i don't personally agree with the usage of reverse arrows for this type of rhythm, the claps are 1/2 so would be better to map them
15. 03:44:978 - how about this? 1/12 guitar ornament lol
16. 04:08:705 - uh... not sure about this stream, the previous was ok because there was the drums... but the guitar is clearly 1/3 in this phrase, and the drums are kinda muted, so... you should either remove some notes to properly follow the drums or just convert the whole stream to 1/3 to follow guitar
17. 04:14:159 (12,1) - swap nc?
18. 04:17:432 - same as previois stream... the guitar is 1/3, sadly
19. 05:19:614 (1,2,3,4) - would be cool if they were equally spaced (visually)
20. 05:34:750 (3,1) - why so low spacing :'( feels so awkward
21. 05:51:796 - i was expecting the 1/4 spam here, stacking the stream with 05:52:068 (5) - might be a nice idea
    suggestion

    
22. 06:43:068 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - this is really awkward to play, wouldn't you like to use sliders instead? ;w; or maybe just stacking all these circles
23. 07:38:295 (1) - this is unreadable xD like... no one will expect such a slowdown... i think it's better to use more sv (increasing the bpm ofc) and maybe make an interesting shape
24. 07:54:453 (1) - wouldn't be better to change the stream direction on the strong beats like you did before?
25. 08:01:203 (4,5,6) - feels really overmapped

KoTo wrote:

I'm not good at modding, so just my suggestions.
00:23:433 (1,2,3,4) - Don't like how it looks. Maybe something like this http://puu.sh/pioNo/d3ea2eda84.jpg
00:25:888 (4) - NC
00:43:888 (4) - ^
00:44:433 (4) - ^
01:07:070 (4) - ^
01:07:479 (6) - ^
01:07:615 (1) - remove NC
01:07:888 (2) - NC
01:31:888 (1) - remove NC
01:32:433 (1) - ^
01:44:979 (2,3,4,5,6,1) - It looks uncomfortable. I would do something like this http://puu.sh/pjM1a/7aabfd3e07.jpg
02:20:160 (1) - NC
02:33:797 (5) - ^
04:21:250 (1) - ^
06:51:796 (1,2,3) - How about this http://puu.sh/pjNaJ/56d71287a1.jpg
07:54:316 (15,16) - Fix this. Or it's ok?

Kagetsu wrote:

[DoKo]

1. i believe you can't name the diff with your own username, find something related to the song maybe xd
2. 00:14:160 - i don't actually agree about the spacing of this stream, the music has still a lot of variations so keeping the cursor in the same place doesn't make sense for me
3. 00:25:683 - missing note here?
4. 00:39:251 - kinda weird that you decided to decrease the spacing of the stream here, when the guitar sounds higher... you could also improve the spacing here... there are too much notes overlapping themselves and it doesn't look that great.
5. 00:40:342 - this section feels kinda empty, you could add some 1/1 notes here just to set the pace... like stacking and make jumps on the very noticeable beats 00:41:433 - this one, for example
6. 00:41:160 (1,1) - i don't actually agree with the NC spam, the second one is useless because there's nothing special
7. 01:00:251 - this part is confusing. i guess these jumps 01:00:251 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - are because of guitar but then you suddenly change to follow vocals on 01:01:070 - with those 1/2 sliders... 01:01:888 (2,3,4,5,6) - is also overmapped and it doesn't follow anything
8. 01:02:229 - shouldn't be a note here? i mean... there are guitar and drums here xd
9. 01:04:342 - the reverse arrows arround this sections doesn't fit well imo, they doesn't emphasize the rhythm here and it plays really plain, the drums are rather technical here so maybe try something like ?
10. 01:08:160 (4,5) - this rhythm doesn't fit imo, guitar goes with drums here, as you can hear on 01:08:024 - there are a snare and a guitar note, so that's worthy to map as a clickable object but the problem comes in the next two notes, guitar and claps are on 01:08:297 - 01:08:570 - so would be better to make these palces clickable. i'd personally go with something like
11. 01:08:774 (2) - feels overmapped
12. 01:50:160 - you're ignoring a lot of beats here... mapping the voice isn't the best option for a 7 star difficulty map lol, specially when the drums are really noisy
13. 02:00:797 (1,1) - how about stacking these 2? (i would say the same for 02:05:160 (1,1) - )
14. 02:25:479 (3) - i don't personally agree with the usage of reverse arrows for this type of rhythm, the claps are 1/2 so would be better to map them
15. 03:44:978 - how about this? 1/12 guitar ornament lol
16. 04:08:705 - uh... not sure about this stream, the previous was ok because there was the drums... but the guitar is clearly 1/3 in this phrase, and the drums are kinda muted, so... you should either remove some notes to properly follow the drums or just convert the whole stream to 1/3 to follow guitar
17. 04:14:159 (12,1) - swap nc?
18. 04:17:432 - same as previois stream... the guitar is 1/3, sadly
19. 05:19:614 (1,2,3,4) - would be cool if they were equally spaced (visually)
20. 05:34:750 (3,1) - why so low spacing :'( feels so awkward
21. 05:51:796 - i was expecting the 1/4 spam here, stacking the stream with 05:52:068 (5) - might be a nice idea
    suggestion

    
22. 06:43:068 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - this is really awkward to play, wouldn't you like to use sliders instead? ;w; or maybe just stacking all these circles
23. 07:38:295 (1) - this is unreadable xD like... no one will expect such a slowdown... i think it's better to use more sv (increasing the bpm ofc) and maybe make an interesting shape
24. 07:54:453 (1) - wouldn't be better to change the stream direction on the strong beats like you did before?
25. 08:01:203 (4,5,6) - feels really overmapped

good luck

-vEa- wrote:

Few things that caught my eyes and ears.

01:08:774 (2) - What beat did you map this to? I cannot hear anything but silence with the drums
00:42:251 (1,2,1) - If mapped to voice (ok) if mapped to drums its stream speed here.
01:30:524 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6) - Is this really necessary? I think the spacing should be reduced, not by much but it needs reducing in my opinion.
01:50:160 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - You are missing alot of beats here, it feels like you ignored them completely which is weird considering what the rest of the map is mapped to.(drums)
02:07:615 - Remove kiai, this is a verse not a chorus, hence not a highlight in the song, kiai feels really out of place here
02:16:342 - Keep Kiai, this is where the song pushes power.
02:25:070 - Remove kiai, this is a build up section.
02:45:797 - Add Kiai, (choir singing and triumphant rythms/chords implies this.)
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03:06:524 (1,2) - Reverse hits are out of beat completely with the toms. (They are in 1/6)
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03:34:887 (4) - Just make this a normal circle, no need for a reverse.
03:50:909 (1) - Cool to highlight the "halt" the singer creates here with his voice(which you did) but feels overmapped, (still cool)
04:13:614 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - Reduce spacing abit or change the pattern this is excessive
04:17:432 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - Creative considering how the guitar ascends and descends but this ( 04:18:522 (1,2,3,4) - ) gets hard to read, maybe reverse slider those 4 instead?
05:11:500 (6) - This ghost circle you added before appears again, I understand that it feels right to play, but there really is no beat that this is placed on
05:28:000 (5,6,7) - Really awkward pattern, all I can say about this, creative but weird
06:43:068 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - ?? Why
07:03:250 - End kiai
07:52:271 - Kiai here to mark that this is where the finale is

Good luck

Cheers! // -vea-

pishifat wrote:

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what is sentence structure

00:02:756 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - tbh different spacing from 00:02:211 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - to show guitar is doing hold thing. 00:07:120 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - may need to do somehting consistent with this if that's done
00:09:847 (1) - 3/4 > 1/1. starting long af streams on whtie tick > blue tick
00:17:415 (16,1) - 05:27:232 (8,1) - 04:50:141 (16,1) - spacing slightly2small minorinconsistency oook
00:39:301 (1) - tfw you hit ctrl w instead of just w (hitsound is borken)
00:35:483 (5,6) - ew use sliderbody in a way indicative of movement instead of lolitworksgoodenough
00:49:120 (17) - 04:21:846 (3) - nc t b h
01:10:938 (1) - no emphasis pourquoi below 01:11:074 (2) - works k for spacingemphasis
01:12:028 (2,1) - tfw hitsounds are set up for tickrate2 but ur using 1. would be able to get those snares easy with a custom hitsound for drum-slidertick20
(ignoring the 1/2 here is actually silly but o k)
01:14:210 (1,2,3) - UH this really isnt 1/3 tho it's just bassy1/4
02:30:574 (1) - more lack of emphasis:( in 1/2 spam, downbeats are like the most important thing to emphasize :(:( the lack of emphasis is kinda everywhere on the map but this was just the easiest example to show lol.
02:46:938 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - ew groupings of 3 tho like song doesnt support groups of 2 lol. u did it right the second time at least
02:53:847 (1,2) - tbh for unintuitive rhythm, a revesre slider's gonna be a lot more understandable. rn it's like a spam click cant-tell-if-1/4-or-1/3-from-approach-cirles-sf dvsvcvx-fsd ok
03:07:120 (2) - ctrlg'd without the nc makes for cooler symmetry cuz it'll be like actually symmetrical lol
03:28:392 (1) - like basics of sliders dont do the ew. not ew
03:31:119 (3) - tail tho it's the same sound you're lcikcing as 2 and 3 so should be clicking there too o o o o. 03:39:846 (3,1) - is bueno
03:34:937 (4,1) - this baby spacing tho wha larger >
03:43:937 (1,2) - 1/8 sliders in calm section so intense. the 1/8 thing you're hearing is like not even a distinct sound it's the guitar coming in for the red tick where 1 starts:( reverse or just going with 1/4 slider >
03:49:118 (1,1) - double nc tho removing second one is strong
03:50:959 (1) - how to cause combobreaks people are gonna assume this is starting on mr white tick because that's what your constant 1/1 clicking so far has taught the player to do. starting slider on white tick despite vocal being barely earlier >
04:12:982 (12,13,1) - tbh equal spacing better. kinda awkward to emphasize last object of a triple throguh increased spacing. works fine for actual streams tho
04:51:300 (1,2) - remember the ew from 3:28 dont do the ew
05:19:664 (1,2,3,4) - equalspacing like 05:18:573 (1,2,3,4) - i dont get the smaller 2-3 logic lol
05:24:300 (2) - sounds like you're trying to follow guitar with the surrounding notes but guitar does 1/2 here yet you're doing 3/4 wh a t
05:50:209 (1) - tail snapping tho
05:49:664 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - uh thesre are like the only 1/4 jumps u sure about this
if anything replacing the 3,4 with 1/4 sliders would work to separate. the 1/4 circlejumps are like not fitting with what u do everywhere else tho
06:42:027 (7) - nc for reasons z
06:44:664 (6,1) - should just have a jump cuz lolgic 06:56:209 (1) - ok ur just giving up on the emphasis spacing thing here ok ok ok could u consistency or
06:54:937 (1,2,3) - confusing af holy would you ever do this it's like one spaced circle in the stream lol. either reverseslider for 1,2 or make 1 part of el streamo
07:08:027 (1,2,1,1) - ncs on white ticks only makes awk snaps like this easier to interpret tb h
07:37:118 (1,2) - consdering things slowing down gonna be pain to know when to click 2 here. tail of 1 ending where 2 is rn >
(also timing here is kinda what)
08:04:321 (1,2,3) - same as that other 1/3 stream where like it's legit just 1/4 i forgot the timestamp rip

here is the essay portion of the exam:

the way you place circles in the section 00:27:301 (1) - here is k and it makes it look like you understand sharp angles are ez playability wise
but then there's stuff like 00:22:938 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 01:15:710 (2,1,2,1,2,1) - which is ouch because movement between each object is wide and anti-snapping. some guy made a video explaining why a few days ago he's saying exactly what id be saying so listenpls
00:42:983 (5,6,7,8) - 01:26:483 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - are similar momentum-stressful things (even tho they're not necessarily 1/2 jumps). it's like slow down for triple, speed up for gap, slow down for triple. sucks when it's all linear but it's okay when directions change between triple->gap
01:38:483 (2,3,4) - even stuff like this is the same concept, but most mappers sitll do this anyway lol im probably the only one triggered by it
oh and using less comfortable movement like these isn't always required. like when music is doing something unique, using movement that isn't normal works great. switching between comfy movement and uncomfy movement without regard to that tho is less great

the other complaint is essentially how clean your placements are. like it's so general i dont really know how to explain it.
people handle clean placements by using certain concepts throughout the map that make their placements structured in some way, and while your map does use concepts throughout, there's still a lot of whatsgoingon
like using overlapping objects as an example, 01:00:301 (1,1,1,1) - 01:06:847 (3,2) - 01:09:847 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - stuff like this i understand. they have musical reasons and have consistent amounts of object overlap
but then there's 02:49:983 (2,3) - 00:23:347 (4,3) - 00:24:983 (7,8,3) - 00:25:938 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - 01:09:029 (3,6) - 02:08:074 (3,6) - 02:16:938 (1,2) - etc its just overlaps becasue thats where it flows or something idk
05:03:437 (2,3,4,1,2,3) - things like this are like half okay, where if you were to create a context of "this is how much overlap objects get" like you did with 01:09:847 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - , you could make this thing cleaner while still including overlaps
anyway, the same sort of "why is this overlapping this amount/at all" idea could apply to non-overlaps through "why is this object this close to this other object" like 03:47:209 (2,3,4) - not seeing logic in spacing between 2-3 and 2-4 (yet can with zzz), 03:51:573 (1,2,3) - 2 complementing 1 but not 3 (yet better with zzz) 04:07:664 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - being like not symmetrical, yet zzz. legit just tons of ways to make things look less random with low effort

ik these probably sound like dumb things, but when they are relevant like everywhere it becomes something i dont care about words im sleeping gn

Vell wrote:

00:25:392 (3) - stacking this with 00:25:256 (2) - would make the emphasize on 00:25:529 (1) - much better and feels more fluid to play since there isnt really something in the song that justifies this jump having similar spacing as 00:25:392 (3,1) -

00:31:801 (2) - I kinda expected this to be the start of a jump but instead I had to wait for the second circle here which really surprised me, I suggest ctrl+g on 00:31:801 (2,3) -

01:03:710 (3,4) - the distance between these two compared to 01:03:301 (1,2) - and the fact that 01:03:710 (3) - is a tick longer than 01:03:301 (1) - feels...weird . Maybe try the following:
make 01:03:710 (3) - a 1/2 slider and move 01:03:574 (2) - really close to 01:03:301 (1) - , like its done here 01:03:710 (3,4) - . makes this part play more consistent and less unpredictable

07:06:846 - maybe remove the clap from the tick? since there actually isnt a sound like this in the song either

Thats all I can say sorry, the stream parts are solid and the rest of the map is consistent in terms of rhythm, cant really judge the playiblity of certain things that well since the map in general is just way out of my league. One other thing that did concern me is this part 05:25:118 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5) - . their intended movement is to make you go in a circle but really if u try to fc them u just focus on snapping them and jump-like movement works alot better with that.
Good luck with this though, the song is awesome!

1. no need tag 'DoKo' you already have DoKoLP. enough search.
2. add tag 'Symphonic Black Metal' this song genre.
3. BG size 1365x768 now. fix 1366x768 more better.
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1. 03:06:574 (1,2) - (1) slider reverse is 03:06:745 - . (2) slider reverse is 03:07:290 - imo. unsnapped now. and gleenline please fix.
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2. 07:38:345 (1) - slider end is 07:43:254 - right imo. not 1/16.
3. 03:07:665 (1) - move x:256 center more seems nice. (now x:255)
4. 03:12:028 - nothing note this part. so, should be delete this gleen line.It's unrankable issue.

P o M u T a wrote:

promised mod
[General]

1. no need tag 'DoKo' you already have DoKoLP. enough search.
2. add tag 'Symphonic Black Metal' this song genre.
3. BG size 1365x768 now. fix 1366x768 more better.
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[Decadence]

1. 03:06:574 (1,2) - (1) slider reverse is 03:06:745 - . (2) slider reverse is 03:07:290 - imo. unsnapped now. and gleenline please fix.
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2. 07:38:345 (1) - slider end is 07:43:254 - right imo. not 1/16.
3. 03:07:665 (1) - move x:256 center more seems nice. (now x:255)
4. 03:12:028 - nothing note this part. so, should be delete this gleen line.It's unrankable issue.

That's all

Mei wrote:

HIhihihihi

[Decadence]

1. 00:09:847 (1) - use a 1/2 slider would be better
2. 00:18:029 (1) - I guess you can remove this NC
3. 00:27:029 (1) - remove this NC either
4. 00:31:392 (3,4) - how about change it to a slider, the beat on 4 is weak I guess a slider can make it easier
5. 01:09:301 (5) - NC following the vocal?
6. 01:14:756 (3) - ctrl+g will be better
7. 01:15:301 (8) - 1/2 slider would make more sense
8. 01:31:665 (1) - ctrl+g?
9. 01:41:756 (2) - actually I dont think it is a good idea you miss these beats, but since you use hitsound to recover it, I would same it is better to use 1/2 sliders or notes but not nessessarily
10. 01:47:756 (5,1) - how about switch NC, it will make more sense on replacement but not on music
11. 01:51:029 (10,1,2) - combine these to a slider like 01:50:756 (9) -
12. 01:55:801 (3,4) - this jump is kind weird
13. 05:51:846 (1,2) - too close you might want to rey this

such a easy pp farm
good luck!

[ RSI ] wrote:

m4m :3 (a lot of this is aestetics since most everything seems to fall on beats :3)

00:35:210 (3,4,5) - i think these 3 notes would be better to be sliders, kinda like this maybe http://puu.sh/pInrq/43041d137a.PNG because if you listen closly, the drums are going like they are on the streams, so i think it would fit the music more (if that makes sense), plus i kinda like sliders :#

00:42:847 (4) - mabye place so it forms a straight line with the following stream?

just an aestetic thing, maybe make 00:58:392 (4) - and equal distance between the 2 sliders :e

01:10:801 (4,1) - i generally dislike having sudden decreases in ds, like you have done here, maybe if you ctrl j 01:10:938 (1,2) - and angle it to make it look more like this http://puu.sh/pIniY/1189cc8161.PNG

02:37:392 (3,1) - i dont like this pause here, it seems awkward imo, i would rather see a 3 being a slider

03:48:982 (8,1) - isnt the ds here kinda small, if anything i think it should be larger than the previous jump section becasue 1 is the strongest sound
maybe mirror the placment of 04:14:346 (2,4) - (as in place 2 in the same spot as 4 but on the other side) and you could do the same with 3 and 1, but i think they are fine where they are

05:17:482 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - I think it would fit the music better to have these steadily increase in ds, maybe like this? http://puu.sh/pIoQf/70fbf1be48.PNG

06:02:618 (2) - I think it would be better to ignore the blanket and make the star more of.... a star i guess :/ like this maybe http://puu.sh/pIo3m/12f469998b.PNG, the 6 could be moved a little more toward the middle as well to make it a better star i guess, but i think it is also fine where it is

07:04:391 (1,2) - this maybe a minor problem, but sections like that and 07:05:482 (1,2) - that follow high intensity sections make them look more like 1/4 jumps when they are not, maybe make then a slider,stack them or nc them to make reading easier No testplayer had a problem with the end so far... Nobody will start streaming x4.0 DS 1/4s, when the song is already slowed down. Especially not with AR10.

well, that is pretty much all i can see "wrong" with it, gl with your map and I hope it gets ranked
Also, i like your streams (*w*)7
cya later o/

Kaifin wrote:

i lost the daily struggle with clinical depression today so im here for vinxis

jesus christ

1. 00:24:574 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - based on all the stream patterns so far, imo this one really sticks out as being anti climatic, especially at essentially the end of the section, when the guitar raises in pitch, i think buffing either the pattern or the spacing would make a nice ramp between the spacing thus far, and how the 00:25:938 (1,2,3,4) (the whole expanding spacing pattern) is spaced
   
2. 00:27:029 (5) - NC hehe
   
3. 00:37:665 (9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16) - i think making this wave even would be much more aesthetically pleasing, it looks so stunted as is
   
4. 00:38:210 (1,2,3,4) - if you change the angle + position on this slightly i think it will do wonders for the aestetics + playability of the pattern (screenshot: http://puu.sh/pIzXC/eb68726305.jpg&#41; also, you could separate it a bit for the other part of the stream if you really want extra emphasis, i think could be cool but you'd have to rework the pattern probably (like this, i also applied the suggestions on the stream before so it made sense, with the current angle doing this would be pretty icky, i also didn't move the rest of the stream in the screenshot please note: http://puu.sh/pIA1S/6cb7a18838.jpg&#41;
   
5. 00:51:438 (5,6,7,8) - this would be so much cooler curved imo
   
6. 00:52:256 (1) - either dont nc this, or nc this 00:51:438 (5)
   
7. 00:52:801 (1,2) - i mean you might as WELL make this a stream considering the rest of the map tbh, i understand the emphasis though so your choice, just think it'd be nice as an almost stacked level spacing stream
   
8. 00:58:938 (1,2) - i think this jump 00:58:801 (6,1) - would flow a lot less poorly if the sliders were at more vertical angles, and less 45 degrees which almost never feels good
   
9. 01:01:938 (2,3) - like this? i moved both, see how its lined up and makes a shape with 01:02:210 (1,2) http://puu.sh/pIAwv/87d9543d94.jpg
   
10. 01:03:574 (2,3) - this anti flow jump is SO awkward to play imo, i think this pattern gives so little emphasis and is just super awkward to play because of the angle, either stack or space out, i think stacking would be the best approach seeing as you want this kind of flow for that emphasis
    
11. 01:03:983 (4,5,6) - same, all the linear flow in this section just feels so awkward to play aim wise, heres a possible solution to both this point and the point before it http://puu.sh/pIAHH/ecd3b798ab.jpg 01:03:983 (4) = the same angle as 01:03:165 (7)
    
12. 01:05:483 (1,2) - cirlces with this much emphasis?
    
13. 01:12:847 (5,6,1) - mayb something like this? the current pattern is very anti climatic, unlike the patterns that proceed it, and flows so oddly http://puu.sh/pIAOp/b60e8d3e16.jpg
    
14. 01:15:301 (8) - NC hehe
    
15. 01:16:665 (5) - NC me
    
16. 01:18:029 (9) - NC me (all for consistency)
    
17. 01:19:120 (6) - aaaand NC me too (then you have nc's every two bars or when the kicks that you nc'd at the start come into play)
    
18. 01:26:756 (4,5,6) - not gonna pretend like i can play this either way, but i think a steeper angle makes this way less awkward to hit http://puu.sh/pIAYl/8471d8befd.jpg
    
19. 01:31:256 (5,6) - wouldnt this be way cooler and more emphasized since theres a DUDE SCREAMIN with kicks?? the kicks into slow slider would be SIK
    
20. 01:33:438 (5) - flow placement http://puu.sh/pIB5F/113e634faa.jpg
    
21. 01:33:438 (5,6,1) - i'll try not to bring up linear flow because you're using it stylistically throughout the map, but i think 6 to 1 here would just play better with more emphasis and a non linear flow
    
22. 01:36:029 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5) - this whole part is super cool nice job
    
23. 01:38:483 (2,3,4) - K YOU DONT DO ANYMORE LINEAR FLOW AFTER THIS IN THIS PART SO Y a a a a a a a aaa if theres a reason keep it but i just think it flows so poorly and i can't think of a justification for using it when it lacks so much emphasis
    
24. 01:46:938 (17,5) - you could NC both of these, or you could not, your choice, i just thought i'd bring it up because i like how it looks with NCs but thats up 2 you!
    
25. 02:22:938 (1,2) - super super odd, maybe something like this? the flow you currently have there is no bueno IM O http://puu.sh/pIBpO/71c75c72bd.jpg
    
26. 02:54:574 (1) - put the clap on this one too imo so the player doesn't think they MISSED like i did
    
27. 02:58:938 (1) - same
    
28. 04:09:846 (1,2,3,4) - i understand the triangle pattern, but i think that this would be a lot cooler and cleaner if it was arched upwards (i did this in two seconds so the stream is super uneven and bad but hopefully you see what i mean, this emphasis would be really cool I M O) http://puu.sh/pIBH9/0b6a012ade.jpg
    
29. 04:18:300 (13,14,15,16,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - this is cool
    
30. 04:49:118 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16) - like, there's nothing wrong with the stream itself, and i'm sure it plays perfectly fine, but i just want to know why theres an increase in spacing at all, as i don't hear any increase of intensity in the music, just bringing it up because i'm not personally sure
    
31. 05:12:027 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - is that the coolest stream in the whole map?!??!?
    
32. 05:12:027 (3) - nc dis one though hehe
    
33. 05:13:937 (2,3) - maybe something like this? sorry for linear flow hate it just is so awkward in these instances i don't understand it 05:13:664 (1,3,2) - you could make this a box that could be neat not pictured in screenshot http://puu.sh/pIC3V/0a16090255.jpg
    
34. 06:07:118 (2,3) - i feel the same about this as i do the other time it happened earlier
    
35. 06:43:118 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - wa - ga -me irl
    
36. 06:58:300 (6,1,6,1) - i think making these jumps sharper angles would make this segment a lot more intuitive to play, its a bit awkward aim flow wise atm imo but your choice for changing because its a pretty easy (relative) section

it is very clear a lot of effort went into this map, and its pretty cool so good luck with ranking! hopefully my mod was helpful somewhat even though it wasnt ur boy vinxis chan

1. 00:58:120 (3,4,5) - Linear flow like this is kinda lame. You can try stacking 4 with 00:58:938 (1) - for some angle variance so ppl can snap better.
2. 01:02:074 (3,1) - No jump here? You emphasized 01:00:983 (2,1) - and 01:01:529 (3,1) - pretty well, try doing it here too for consistency?.
3. 01:28:938 (1,2,1,2,1,2) - The NC rhythm here just doesn't sound good to me... I get what you're doing with the rhythm change, but try NC'ing like this instead so the downbeat begins with a new NC again.
   
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4. 01:42:165 (3) - Ctrl+G for more emphasis onto the guitar? The flow is pretty cool here and you get a nice symmetrical pattern here too
5. 01:49:120 (1) - I just cant help but comment on sliders like this being off. If you care about visuals then try and get the red nodes to overlap the slider ticks to create a perfectly even zigzag slider.
   
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6. 02:31:665 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,3,4) - The stacking of 02:32:483 (1,2,3,4,1) - kinda mess up the pattern you were originally going for. Try moving 02:31:665 (1,1,1) - left/up ~16 pixels so they'll realign with the stream?
   
   This, basically

   
7. 02:44:756 (1,1,1,2) - It bugs me that the negative space between them doesn't line up.
8. 02:50:574 (1,2) - Swap NC's.
9. 04:09:777 (8,2) - This seems quite hard to read for me xP. I remember ppl had trouble with this when i did something really similar on Road of Resistance and i eventually ended up changing it.
10. 04:11:618 (11,12,13,14,15,16,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Same, but this even more so.
11. 04:18:572 (1,2,3,4,1) - Okay this is just really unreasonable... the stacks just make it really hard to tell when you actually have to start going back down.
12. 04:38:073 (15,16,1,2,3) - Can you angle it less? I'm okay with this movement because its a good place to break into a new stream pattern, but less overlap if you can.
13. 05:48:300 (5,1) - This is quite hard to read too xP Can you overlap less so the stream is more visible?
14. 06:34:209 (1,2) - Same as earlier about NC's.
15. 06:43:118 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This is so out of place and unnecessary imo xP.
16. 07:04:391 (1,2) - I would make these 1/2 sliders instead so a there's better transition into 1/2 rhythm

1. 128 kbps is a little low on the audio. It's rankable, but perhaps you can try to find a better mp3. It's up to you.
2. Disable countdown.
3. Widescreen Support can be disabled since there is no storyboard.
4. What does "1kapproval" mean in the tags? I googled it and didn't find anything, and it looks like a typo.

1. 00:03:165 (7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Damn, the flow from the kickslider into the stream is really really tricky into this, not to mention it's massive spacing. I feel it should be reduced and the stream should be curved upwards. I understand why you're doing this; it does follow the song. However, I find it to be a little extreme.
2. 00:12:165 (3) - The hitsounds on this note should be on 00:12:029 (1) instead. I think this is unintended. The same goes for 00:13:256 (3) because I'm not really sure what you're emphasizing here with all 3 hitsounds on that circle. Actually, this happens all over, and I really don't get why.
3. 00:24:847 (5,6,7,8) - I feel this would be more aesthetically pleasing if it were curved more upward. It would also help for emphasis on the guitar.
4. 00:35:620 (6,1) - This spacing can be larger for better emphasis on the start of the crazy metal drum kick stuff.
5. 01:31:256 (5,6,1) - This rhythm confuses me. I'm not quite seeing a connection to the song itself and I always seem to mess it up when I play.
6. 01:33:847 (1,2) - These sliders' shape serve no purpose aside from making the reverse arrow awkward. Try this shape instead: http://i.imgur.com/oBLlCGD.png
7. 01:40:392 (1,2,1,2) - I feel like this set of jumps should be lower spacing than the 01:40:938 (1,2,1,2) jumps, unless you're following the intensity of the vocals. In my opinion though, I feel like it's better to emphasize the drums here, but that's just an opinion and you're free to do either.
8. 01:53:483 (10,1,2) - This flow feels rather strange because it's a linear pattern in a map with dominantly sharp angles. Consider moving 01:53:756 (1) on the other side of 01:53:483 (10)
9. 01:57:710 (2,1) - 1.10x spacing feels kinda small for how intense this is.
10. 02:54:029 (2) - I think this is on screen but just double check.
11. 03:50:891 (1,2) - Buffer the repeat, please.
12. 04:13:118 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1,2,3,4,5) - This pattern can be cleaned up a ton. Currently its really ugly to the eye, and the shape of that stream doesn't look too well next to the other streams in this map. It feels like a really out of place pattern overall.
13. 04:21:846 (1) - The lump at the end of this slider can be made more round and neat.
14. 04:50:209 (1,2,1,2) - This can be neater. At the moment it looks really cluttered and messy.
15. 04:58:527 (5) - This can be moved here since the spacing is rather small currently: http://i.imgur.com/2IxTpQU.jpg
16. 05:27:232 (8,1) - Fix the spacing between these two notes. There's no reason for it to decrease.
17. 05:44:209 (9) - This goes over the HP bar. Consider fixing it.
18. 06:43:027 (6,1) - The spacing here is considerably larger than the rest of the jumpstreams. I recommend reducing it to stay in line with the others since there's nothing in the song that suggests an increase to great.
19. 06:46:209 (3,1) - Similar to above. The movement between these two objects feels like an unpleasant jerk.
20. 06:47:482 (1,2,3) - The rest of the 1/3 section flows nice, but you have very harsh anti-flow here and I'm not sure why. Maybe make it flow better like the rest of the 1/3 sliders.
21. 07:38:345 (1) - The new combo is nice, but since the SV change is so steep, you should make the shape of this slider unique from the one before it. It's impossible to tell that the SV decreases such an amount unless you know it's there already, and at least a definitive slider shape would hint the SV change to the player.

Rapthorn wrote:

Why'd you map it with grid snap on? You know it makes streams inconsistently spaced, because you did the same with your dragonforce map and i believe people mentioned it there

Smoothie World wrote:

[General]

1. 128 kbps is a little low on the audio. It's rankable, but perhaps you can try to find a better mp3. It's up to you.
2. Disable countdown.
3. Widescreen Support can be disabled since there is no storyboard.
4. What does "1kapproval" mean in the tags? I googled it and didn't find anything, and it looks like a typo.

[Blue]

1. 00:03:165 (7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Damn, the flow from the kickslider into the stream is really really tricky into this, not to mention it's massive spacing. I feel it should be reduced and the stream should be curved upwards. I understand why you're doing this; it does follow the song. However, I find it to be a little extreme.
2. 00:12:165 (3) - The hitsounds on this note should be on 00:12:029 (1) instead. I think this is unintended. The same goes for 00:13:256 (3) because I'm not really sure what you're emphasizing here with all 3 hitsounds on that circle. Actually, this happens all over, and I really don't get why.
3. 00:24:847 (5,6,7,8) - I feel this would be more aesthetically pleasing if it were curved more upward. It would also help for emphasis on the guitar.
4. 00:35:620 (6,1) - This spacing can be larger for better emphasis on the start of the crazy metal drum kick stuff.
5. 01:31:256 (5,6,1) - This rhythm confuses me. I'm not quite seeing a connection to the song itself and I always seem to mess it up when I play.
6. 01:33:847 (1,2) - These sliders' shape serve no purpose aside from making the reverse arrow awkward. Try this shape instead: http://i.imgur.com/oBLlCGD.png
7. 01:40:392 (1,2,1,2) - I feel like this set of jumps should be lower spacing than the 01:40:938 (1,2,1,2) jumps, unless you're following the intensity of the vocals. In my opinion though, I feel like it's better to emphasize the drums here, but that's just an opinion and you're free to do either.
8. 01:53:483 (10,1,2) - This flow feels rather strange because it's a linear pattern in a map with dominantly sharp angles. Consider moving 01:53:756 (1) on the other side of 01:53:483 (10)
9. 01:57:710 (2,1) - 1.10x spacing feels kinda small for how intense this is.
10. 02:54:029 (2) - I think this is on screen but just double check.
11. 03:50:891 (1,2) - Buffer the repeat, please.
12. 04:13:118 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1,2,3,4,5) - This pattern can be cleaned up a ton. Currently its really ugly to the eye, and the shape of that stream doesn't look too well next to the other streams in this map. It feels like a really out of place pattern overall.
13. 04:21:846 (1) - The lump at the end of this slider can be made more round and neat.
14. 04:50:209 (1,2,1,2) - This can be neater. At the moment it looks really cluttered and messy.
15. 04:58:527 (5) - This can be moved here since the spacing is rather small currently: http://i.imgur.com/2IxTpQU.jpg
16. 05:27:232 (8,1) - Fix the spacing between these two notes. There's no reason for it to decrease.
17. 05:44:209 (9) - This goes over the HP bar. Consider fixing it.
18. 06:43:027 (6,1) - The spacing here is considerably larger than the rest of the jumpstreams. I recommend reducing it to stay in line with the others since there's nothing in the song that suggests an increase to great.
19. 06:46:209 (3,1) - Similar to above. The movement between these two objects feels like an unpleasant jerk.
20. 06:47:482 (1,2,3) - The rest of the 1/3 section flows nice, but you have very harsh anti-flow here and I'm not sure why. Maybe make it flow better like the rest of the 1/3 sliders.
21. 07:38:345 (1) - The new combo is nice, but since the SV change is so steep, you should make the shape of this slider unique from the one before it. It's impossible to tell that the SV decreases such an amount unless you know it's there already, and at least a definitive slider shape would hint the SV change to the player.

Sorry for the delay.