This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2010年11月15日 at 7:19:58

Artist: Gary Adkins
Title: I Can Give You Gatsby
Source: Gatsby
Tags: The Stylistics - I Can't Give You Anything But My Love
BPM: 116
Filesize: 1789kb
Play Time: 00:11
Difficulties Available:

1. Easy (0.56 stars, 7 notes)
2. Hard (4.79 stars, 35 notes)
3. Normal (3.53 stars, 71 notes)

Download: Gary Adkins - I Can Give You Gatsby
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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first beatmap
[Easy]---?%
[Normal]---?%
[Hard]---?%
I love comments~
If you find this map shity, just find me and give comments~
tell me how to improve it:D
thanks lol
remap = =

jameskong1 wrote:

hi pokie & no-7
plz mod!

^ 無link既 ;_; ..你要我mod邊張?


依照你係wmf&vikon queue裡面post既連結黎download...
但係osz裡面只係得兩個.osu file...

連同mp3一齊full submit一次

General
- 還沒設preview point
- BPM:116 Offset:180, resnap all notes
- slider tick rate高的太過份了lol
- 刪掉 .osb檔案然後full-submit
- 貌似有大量spacing問題..

Easy
00:00:172 (1) - 這個點遠啊...

Normal
- 這真的是normal嗎;_;
00:14:607 (1,2,3,4) - lol

Hard
- 用1/4 BDS
00:29:127 (1) - 這個跟前面的slider黏在一起了..

Hello.
Oh it's a short song. XD
But I know this song.

my mod

I think , you have to need more experience.
But I give you star.
fight！

banvi wrote:

Hello.
Oh it's a short song. XD
But I know this song.

my mod

SPOILER

Easy
00:14:916 (1) start 00:14:657?(white line) and finish 00:16:467?(red line)
00:20:345 (3,4) spacing(too far) So Reverse Selection please.
00:28:618 (2) reduce 1 return, please
00:31:720 (1) start 00:31:203?(white line) and finish 00:32:754?(white line)
no name this diff?_?
Change Slider Tick Rate 1 please. 4 is too many.
00:03:282 (4) move 1 up?(Gris LV2)
00:06:901 (1,2) spacing(too far) You should try change this pattern...
00:18:794 (7) new combo
00:31:720 (1) start 00:31:462?(red line)
Hard
Uh,,,you should use Grid LV3 and distance snap(but jump). Spacing is important.
00:00:180 (1) move 2 right(Grid LV2) and Reverse Selection.
You should fix spacing miss...

I think , you have to need more experience.
But I give you star.
fight！

thinks for modding! i will try my best to correct it

Hi,

[Overall]
Song might be too short.
Use Hitsounds!

[Easy]
Really, bring the Overall Difficulty down by at least 2 ticks!!
00:04:316 (5,6,7) - Dont stack them, confusing for beginners.
00:16:726 (1) - This slider is too close to the last spinner, for an easy.
00:21:637 (4,5) - These are hidden by 3 and its hitsound explosion. Maybe turn it 90° and see how it looks.

[Normal]
00:04:316 (8) - New Combo
00:06:901 (1) - Remove it or delete the "New Combo".
00:14:657 (1,2,3,4) - This is confusing. If you want to keep it like this, you have to use a Storyboard Warning.

[Hard]
I don't like to say this, but I think you should remap some parts...
Here are the most important ones:
00:08:970 (4,5,6,7,8) - This doesnt fit at all..
00:04:316 (5,6,7,8) - Spacing, Sliders are weird..
00:33:185 (1) - Remove this!!

Good Luck with your map.
And don't forget to kudosu mods, that helped you.
Star!!

粉红色字请务必照做
黑色字只是建议
start~

[General]
干掉那该死的OSB,然后重新上传
hitsound 是一定要加的,不加就rank不了哦,加好了再找BAT
另外就是注意不要重复slider太多次,这样会觉得比较无聊,试着改成多个slider或note
slider也希望能做的好看一些,排列应该有一定规律,这样会比较有美感
如果是在现有基础上,spacing是没啥大问题,其它技术性的问题好像也没
[Easy]
00:04:317 (5) - new combo
00:23:973 (6) - new combo

[Hard]
00:23:973 (10) - new combo

These are just suggestions, so you don't need to take this that seriously.

General
Uh... yeah, song is kinda short.
I suggest to use grid level 3 (tiny)

Easy
(grid = tiny grid = level 3)
00:00:180 (1) - Bezier curve would be better.
00:04:317 (1,2,3,4) - how about moving 2 grid left and 1 grid down?
00:07:938 (2) - split this return slider? It's kinda long.
00:16:731 (1) - this doesn't seems that good. try to make a better shape.
00:21:904 (5) - ^, and remove whistle in the body of the slider?
00:24:490 (2) - same as 00:07:938 (2)
00:28:628 (2) - ^

Normal
00:00:180 (1) - long and curved slider would be better...
00:04:835 (2) - remove whistle?
00:07:421 (1) - how about make this somewhat symmetrical?
00:12:593 (3,1) - isn't it too long jump for normal?
00:14:662 (1,3) - how about remove clap?
00:17:248 (3) - clap in the start of the slider?
00:18:283 (6) - ^, and make the end or the slider allign to 00:17:766 (4,5)?
00:20:352 (2) - clap?
00:21:386 (4) - ^
00:23:455 (2) - ^
00:23:973 (4) - clap in the end of the slider?
00:24:748 (5) - remove finish, and split this long return slider

Hard
00:00:180 (1) - reduce one return, and put a circle in 00:02:248.
00:02:766 (2) - maybe just horizontal slider would be better...?
00:03:800 (1) - clap?
00:06:386 (6) - arrange this slider somewhat better than this.
00:04:317 (3) - clap in the end of the slider?
00:08:455 (3) - change this slier to linear curve. (press a.)
00:14:662 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16) - ...anyway, how about normal-normal-normal-normal-whistle-whistle-whistle-whistle-normal-normal-whistle-whistle-normal-whistle-normal-whistle?
00:18:283 (4) - add clap?
00:20:352 (3) - ^
00:23:455 (8) - ^
00:23:714 (9) - remove finish.
00:24:490 (2) - add clap?
00:24:748 (3) - reduce returns, and put something other.
00:27:593 (2) - clap?
00:31:731 (3) - ^

...Well, you should find some way to improve this map.
Anyway, stared.

[General]
Funny hitsound lol

[Normal]
00:23:197 (1,2,3,4) - Not distance snaped

[Hard]
00:23:197 (6,7,8) - Not a straight line
00:32:248 (5,6) - Two notes at the same time wtf?

just star first

As per your request:

Heh, you weren't kidding about the short length.

[Easy]
00:16:731 (1) - move this closer to the center if you want it so soon after the spinner.
00:19:317 (4) - New combo
00:21:904 (7) - Maybe try to reposition this so it's not overlapped as much or at all. It just looks kind of bad with it slightly misaligned like that.

[Normal]
There's a lot of ugly overlap here - especially looks bad with the huge hit circles and lowish OD. I'd suggest you reposition stuff so it doesn't look so bad, but it's more for the looks rather than playability.
00:23:455 (2,3) - Grid level 2 spacing wonkyness here.
00:27:852 (8) - New combo
00:28:111 (1) - Remove new combo
00:28:886 (1) - Remove new combo

[Hard]
00:06:386 (6,1) - This spacing intentional? I didn't like it so much. :/
00:32:248 (6,5) - Um, simultaneous notes here. Delete the 6.

There you go.

It's toooooo short that hard to let go ._.
anyway I'll look after this later...

LOL 30 sec song. capitalize title to I Can Give You Gatsby?

Consider map a full version? This is really short lol. Other than that I find no problem.

Pink words:You have to fix these,they are mistakes.
Black words:Just suggestions.

[General]
背景圖其一:分辨率很奇怪?重新裁到1024x768 800x600 640x480三種尺寸之一
背景圖其二:Easy和Hard用一張圖,Normal用另一張?lol,這樣不是不可以只是比較怪……最好三個難度用一張,或者用三張.

只有Easy啟用了自定義note顏色?統一一下吧

Kiai time為何在中間斷開?連起來吧

Clap音效不合適,建議不要用

你需要下更多的whistle,聽起來才不單調

[Easy]
把無用的綠線刪除
00:35:216 (3) - 被擋住了,移下位置

[Normal]
00:45:302 (1) - remove new combo.
00:56:940 (1,2) - 這兩個為何那麽近?你需要調整spacing,這樣很難讀

[Hard]
00:06:768 (9) - 位置太高了,會被HP條擋住,請往下移動
00:32:888 (4,1) - 這個跳有些突然

應該說比起以前已經有了很大進步,+Star~ 繼續加油!

[General]
1) BG很糢糊，而且有起粒跡象，有冇d解像度高d ge圖? (而且最好係800 x 600 or 1024 x 768 )
2) 把file裏 .osb 刪除，然後full submission
3) lack of hitsound~? (呢首歌應該幾適合 每2白線放一soft-hitwhistle, e.g. in hard 放whistle在00:02:630 ,00:03:664 , 00:04:699 如此類推，總之就是放在重拍上
4) 有很多無意義的timing section，考慮改變一下音量? (另外若有加改變，請把timing section 放在note前，不要放在note上)

[Easy]
00:38:320 (4) - 個人覺得它被遮住了，不好看
01:06:380 kiai time 應該與hitobject一起終止，所以把這個timing section移到 01:08:319 ?
01:19:181 奇怪的靜音

[Normal]
整個diff來說，每個hitobject的間距很大, 而且normal上不建議有jump
00:10:647 (3) - 多了一個reverse, 建議刪減一個reverse，然後在00:11:423 加一個new combo的note
00:16:596 (1,2,3) - spacing..
00:33:147 (1,2) - 被遮住，不好看
01:00:949 kiai 終止，移至01:00:561 ?
01:04:052 kiai 終止，移至01:03:923 ?
01:04:440 (1,1) - 對於normal來說，slider太近spinner, 或使spinner在 01:05:733 結束?
01:06:251 (1,1,1,1) - 對於normal來說，這種jump太可怕了吧?

[Hard]
00:06:768 (9,1) - 有點太近接邊界了?
00:15:302 (4,5,6,7,8) - 使人混淆的spacing
00:26:940 (4) - 隱藏在中間，個人覺得不太好看。
00:54:871 (7) - 太近邊界?
01:00:949 kiai終止，移至01:00:819 ?
01:04:052 kiai 終止，移至01:03:923 ?

lol
I can give you gatsby

Easy
Don't use many 1/2 combo in easy diff X_X
00:16:078(7,8)-(7)跟(8)重疊了 Hard for newbie > <
00:47:630(1,1)-Spinner too short.Delete 00:49:699 circle(1) and extend the spinner to 00:49:699 ?
00:56:940(1)-Delete this spinner than extend 00:55:130 to 01:00:044?

Normal
Don't use many 1/2 combo in normal diff too X_X
00:41:164(5)-1 grid left and I think the finish is noisy Q_Q
01:04:181(7)-change grid level to 3 and 1 grid down

Hard
00:49:699(1)-use finish?

Starミ★

EDIT:善用slider.Easy & Normal很多1/2combo可轉用slider

I can give you a star~

Irc modded~

general

kill .osb file

BG图名称改成BG或者I Can Give You Gatsby

sliderclap whistle finish 有什么用

Easy

[00:27:975] 注意一下间距 5 1 2 差的比较大
[01:17;630] 567下降一格

Normal

[00:43:492] 降低音量或者去finish

几点建议
1 grid变大必然导致保持间距的难度变大 所以请在设计位置时更加认真 否则效果适得其反
2 建议在背景音乐变化的时候变化音量 渐大或者减小
3 slider缩成一团不如伸展开来

Hard

[00:08:319] 再圆一点
[00:12:457] BPM变化的时候绿线提前
[00:12:457] 实在不好看
[00:14:785] 2~8 间距不同+相互遮挡
[00:50:733] 两个1/2 slider变成note+1/1 slider 会更好

说实话这张BG我看起来想笑。我不知道你文件夹里还有没有OSB文件了 反正我这里有,删了这该死的OSB文件然后full submit 记得每次上传前都看一下。。

[Easy]
感觉WH下太多了，你可以试着到太鼓模式听听看...

00:10:906 (4) - 感觉这里用这个slider不尴不尬的...如果还是要用的话New combo
00:14:526 (7) - New Combo
00:16:078 (8) - 我觉得对于新手来说...这位置放的有点难
00:55:130 (1,1) - 是不是太刺激了（对新手

[Normal]
NOTE密集的地方有点..OA+1?

00:08:319 (3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - 觉得这里连点下去有点...那啥
00:33:147 (1,2,3,4) - OD本身这么慢，还排这么挤...
00:37:802 (4) - 被2挡住了,不太好看
00:41:164 (5) - ^,slider尾巴上的finish去掉
01:16:854 (9) - 被挡住，不太好看

[Hard]
K,OA改掉了之后果然好打多了...
觉得slider可以多改成弯的...感觉直的不适合这种缓慢的歌，可以考虑多用用BPM*0.5
00:02:889 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 前面这一串slider感觉让节奏变得很急凑...
00:14:785 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 说实话不太懂这么排是为了什么...虽然能打
00:24:613 (3) - 不好看
00:37:544 (4,5,6,7) - 没叠好？
01:11:423 (4,5,6) - ^
01:17:630 (1,2) - 觉得这里用slider+NOTE还不如直接用个长slider更符合歌....

以上MOD纯属个人意见，你不想改可以无视

Nice song...
star

star

No technical problem with the map, but if you want improvements.... hrmm... I suggest you remap some part to make it match to the background music more. Choose to follow either the "violin" or drum. Personally, I prefer some parts violin some parts drum. I always want to emphasize a certain instument on a certain part.

Only on Hard difficulty, I am sleepy xD

00:08:320 (3) - make it more round please xD

I made a sample rhythm for you as a reference, (the notes are simply just randomly arranged in terms of pattern, so, don't mind them), because as for now, your hard difficulty doesn't have a good rhythm in my humble opinion, so, you need to make sure what kind of rhythm that you want the player to feel. In my sample difficulty, you can see that I want to emphasize the violin in some part, example, here, 00:20:733 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) , some part I want the player to feel the vocal, which is here, 00:19:699 (1,2) , and some time I want to emphasize the drum, which is here 00:32:112 (3,4,5,6,7) .

Make sure you know what message or rhythm in this case that you want to get across. xD

Good Luck, and you can ask me to relook again if you decide to remap.

P.S. : Not free for guess difficulty, so, don't ask me xD I still owe Pokie one. xD

By the way, this is a hard song to map, that's why probably it's not exciting to begin with (at least for me). xD

Star~

and of course, remove the .osb and full resubmit if you want

Download: Gary Adkins - I Can Give You Gatsby (jameskong1) [Sample rhythm].osu

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呢首歌..
star~~

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