Just some things I noticed:
- 00:20:262 (8,9,10,1,2,3) - The combination of the triplet, back-and-forth stacked notes and low AR makes this really really tricky to read
- 01:44:562 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - The rhythm variations and NCs are placed every two white ticks here, imo it would fit better to have them at the points where the drums, cymbals and vocals are the strongest: 01:45:012 - 01:45:462 - 01:46:212 - and 01:46:662 - . This is just a minor thing though, the current way is intuitive enough.
- 02:03:762 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Same as above.
- 03:14:562 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,1) - Yeah, like this I think it's much more fitting to the song.