General:
- So, I don't know who told you, but doubling the BPM is incorrect. It is a slow song, and 96 BPM is the number you want. You mostly use 1/1 and 1/2 taps, you yourself made it out to be a 96 BPM map (well, otherwise it would be overmapped, though appropriate for higher diffs) and it could still be argued that since the song is so slow, it is a 96 BPM one, and you just mapped it at 1/4.
- background image musn't be over 1366x768, e.g. you can use
this- adding tags, like music genre (electro-rock etc.), or if you get guest diffs of the mapper, and maybe add tags for what you can see in the background, like Bonnie, Chica, Foxy etc.
- adding bookmarks in the music (refrain, chorus, etc.) should help make the map cleaner and easier to mod
- Mapping only at 1/2 or 1/4 if possible makes it a lot easier and cleanerto map, ESPECIALLY if you are using live mapping. Otherwise, you end up placing notes by 1/8th wrong, just because you are unnecessarily mapping in that.
- You have to add Kiai time. Times I suggest would be either
(00:50:036 or 01:00:036 to 01:10:036) or
(01:10:036 or 01:20:036 to 01:30:036) and
(02:10:036 to 02:19:723), just quickly letting go of Kiai time and restarting it at
(02:20:036 to 02:30:036). You could also make the last one without the interruption, but I think it looks better to restart it. In standard mode, this would mean that you'd make the fountains swoosh during Kiai (as it only does that when starting Kiai), but in mania, it is irrelevant.
- You should name the diffs appropriately, as in
(Beginner/Advanced/Hyper/Insane/Extreme), or
(Easy/Normal/Hard/Insane/Another), or
(Lv.6/Lv.10/whatever). I did some research and think that the names you chose are two of the puppets in the background (band members?). (Though on the internet, it seems that it is not called Chika, but Chica). However, there are two problems with this. First of, you only have two diffs, but there are four puppets. Secondly, and most importantly, you cannot bring puppets into a difficulty order. If it was game bosses, you could sort them by difficulty, but they're not. Hence you shouldn't use them as difficulty names, even if you make two more diffs. That is, if you care about ranking.
- I feel that especially at the slow start of the song, your timing is very off in both diffs, and that maybe you should concentrate less on the voice than the overall rhythm, if it's not possible to map properly to the voice. I will pick out badly placed notes and try showing alternatives, let's see what it turns out as.
EDIT: After all, I think it is possible to map after the voice, though not like you did it.
- Are you sure you don't want to map the very start of the song? I like it a lot and think it could be well mapped. You could even slow down the note scrolling for the slow singing part after that, then speed it back up.
Bonnie
General:- So I told you before while you were mapping, but I think you overuse sliders. While some are fine, and I accept some, others don't fit at all. Hence I will make one modding section just for sliders and willl use
red colour for doesn't fit,
orange for accepting, but doesn't really have a basis in the song,
yellow for fine and
green for sliders I like.
- This I also told you before, but I think that the sudden 1/4 doubles are out of place. They are only a few 1/4 notes in the whole diff but they come rapidly with little warning and the first ones even appear at a slow part, 01:45:661 (105661|2). I think this should be fixed by either taking out doubles completely, or putting more in throughout the diff, which is what I'll be doing during the mod.
- I will probably end up changing the start completely, so don't get confused where your notes went.
- Because I changed so much, I decided to upload my version of the song:
http://puu.sh/hv9EB/1cd1ba1c63.osu - Maybe I'll also upload a video of both versions to compare. But if I'll do that, it'll take a while to upload to Youtube.
EDIT:
http://youtubedoubler.com/fg4C It is recommended to silence one video and to synchronise them manually as best as possible. Otherwise ear cancer.
Mod:00:10:036 (10036|0) - The start sounds weird in my opinion, probably because there is a steady amount of 1/2 notes being sung, but you choose to click some and not others. I'd suggest
this start, followed by
this00:12:380 (12380|0) -
view
above
00:14:723 (14723|2,15036|0,15036|1,15661|3,15661|2) - you really need a click here beforehand, and I'd make the other two twoclicks, looking like
this00:17:536 (17536|2) - while this is fine, I'd make a double here too, like there is in the sung voice, and making the 'blind' a long slider, but getting rid of the note at 00:18:786 (18786|2) and the whistle from the note at 00:16:911 (16911|1) (because the other notes it whistled with are gone. Or you could add a Whistle to both the long and shorter slider). In the end, it will look like
this00:21:911 (21911|1) - everything's fine with placing these sliders here, don't worry, however, this slider is 1/2 longer than it should. It should end at 00:24:098
01:10:036 (70036|2) - this is fine, but I'm just wondering why you chose to make repetetive patterns, since those feel kind of awkward to play in mania
01:43:786 (103786|1,103786|2) - these sliders are also 1/2 longer and should end at 01:44:098
01:51:286 (111286|2,111286|1) -
!!! So starting from this point, you suddenly change the rhythm. While I like the rhythm you chose, it is the only time you use it and it comes out of nowhere. I'd advise making that whole section have that rhythm, instead of discarding it again that soon for the normal 1/2 tapping. I'll be doing and commenting the changes to this section below in that box.
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01:51:442 (111442|3) - You had a triple here, but I found that it feels better to play to have triples at other places, and that it made the rhythm play and flow better with just
these clicks01:52:067 (112067|3) - makes the rhythm hard to play, I changed this section like
this, which easily flows into the delayed double
01:53:473 (113473|3) - there should be doubles here too, which I made it into like
this01:55:973 (115973|3) - va, doubles like
this01:57:223 (117223|1) - va, doubles like
this01:58:161 (118161|0,118161|2,118473|3,118786|1,119098|2,119255|0,119411|3,119411|1,119723|2) - I found that this section has way more power in the music and emphasized it with double- and tripleclicks like
this (compared to
what it was before). Solely this is responsible for the rise in star rating by 0.8 btw, hue.
02:00:661 (120661|0,120661|2) - there should be doubles here, which I made
like this02:01:911 (121911|3,121911|1) - va, same kind,
like this02:05:036 (125036|2) - I changed this part to have more doubles as in the music, ended up
like this, then
that02:12:380 (132380|2,132380|1) - I put a doubleclick in between, making it a triple, because it's great to play and the music is more powerful there, looking like
this02:13:630 (133630|1,133630|0) - va, like
this02:15:036 (135036|2,135036|3,135036|1) - since the music is more powerful, I chose to make it a tripleclick like
this02:22:380 (142380|2,142380|3) - va, doubleclick in between,
like this02:23:630 (143630|3,143630|2) - va, plus some following rearrangement of notes, ending up looking
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02:34:098 (154098|3) - you forgot a slider here, like in the fashion before and after it, so instead of the click a 2/1 slider
02:42:223 (162223|0) - I think you're missing a click here, the pause really doesn't sound right, if it was me, I'd put the clicks in
this order thenSliders:00:10:036 (10036|1) -
I like the two sliders based on the starting sound00:10:036 (10036|3) -
fine, though in the way I'd map the start, it wouldn't be as long, and end together with the other two sliders.00:16:286 (16286|0) -
fine, doesn't fit the music really, but plays okay00:20:661 (20661|2) - 00:21:911 (21911|1) -
I like this part00:25:036 (25036|0,25036|3) -
can't say I'm too happy about those sliders, since they don't have a basis in the music and there are good alternatives that you could do (e.g. like this, focussing on the three background noises going deeper), but I'd accept them00:30:036 (30036|2,30036|0,30036|1) -
totally okay with those00:40:036 (40036|1,40661|2,41286|3,41911|0,42536|1,43161|2,43786|3,44411|1,45036|0,45036|2,45661|3,45661|1,46286|0,46286|2,46911|1,46911|3) -
okay, I hate those, honestly they have nothing to do there, the music is normally going on like before with no long notes, but suddenly there are no clicks anymore but just sliders. If you had at least stopped after three sliders or put notes in between in a way that fit, then maybe it wouldn't be as bad. Also, the doublesliders at the end doesn't fit either, as the music is not stronger than before when you only used singlesliders. And then that change from 2/1 slider to 1.5/1 sliders and then 1/1 slider with a pause between, ugh. It might sound really harsh, but this part is just bad and should definitely be corrected, it has nothing to do with the music it's based on and isn't fun to play either. What I made out of it is based on pronouncing doubles without being too hard to play, like this, then
this, then
that and then
that00:50:036 (50036|0,50036|3) -
thinking about wheather it would be better to make it three sliders again, like before, however, then the doubleclick before might feel awkward. I don't think it would be a big problem though00:56:911 (56911|0,56911|2) -
don't have to be there, but fine01:02:536 (62536|3,62536|1,63161|0,63161|2,63786|2,63786|1) -
I would like there to be something of more power than some sliders, it seems wasted, but it would be acceptable. Though at least you could make it three slider each, like this01:08:161 (68161|2,68161|0) -
I'd rather there be clicks here, really, there is no base for long notes here and it feels awkward to play. For example, making it like this01:30:036 (90036|1,90036|2) - fine, but the following sliders aren't, it really doesn't work well with the sung 'pre-sent.' However, when I put notes based on the voice, I found out that this part is timed too late, the offset just sounds horribly wrong, and when putting 1/4 notes, it's really obvious. So for now, I won't change anything of this part because it's too hard. After I'm done modding, I'll check music timing and maybe fiddle with this part a bit.
01:40:036 (100036|3,100036|0,100661|2,100661|1,101286|3,101286|0,101911|2,101911|1) -
while weird, I like the overlapping sliders01:47:380 (107380|2) -
good01:48:786 (108786|3,108786|0) -
works01:50:036 (110036|3,110348|2,110661|1,110973|0) -
not sure about those, but fine, they would probably feel more integrated if there were more of those02:07:536 (127536|1,127536|2,127848|3,128161|2,128161|0,128473|3,128786|2,128786|1,129411|2,129411|0) -
they are not really based on anything, but it plays nice in context02:16:286 (136286|0,136286|2,136911|3,136911|1,137536|2,137848|0,138161|1,138473|3,138786|2,139098|1,139411|0) -
After the first two doublesliders, I don't like the other ones, I think they should be clicks instead. The first two (four) are fine though.02:20:036 (140036|3,140036|1,140661|0,140661|2) -
fine, especially if you make the other ones before them clicks, then it fits well. But I'd make them threesliders, not doublesliders, to emphasize more. The whole sections ended up looking like this for me02:25:036 (145036|2,145036|0,145348|3,145661|2,145973|3,146286|2,146286|0,146598|3,146911|1,146911|2,147223|3,147536|2) -
plays really well02:31:598 (151598|1) -
totally fine, as well as the other sliders in that fashion in the end part02:40:348 (160348|3) -
a cute slider02:42:536 (162536|3,163473|2) -
Not really sure about those sliders at the end. It's not like the really fit or have a basis in the music, but I think they are fine to acceptable.02:44:411 (164411|2) -
va02:45:661 (165661|0,166911|3) -
va02:48:161 (168161|0,168161|3,168473|2,168786|3,169098|0,169098|1) -
I think these fit