00:06:427 - Add note for cymbal.
00:06:589 - Add note, there's a hat sound, like at other red lines.
00:09:021 (9021|1,9508|6) - Follow bass better, vocal is last thing that you should pay attention to.
00:11:454 - Leave 1 note.
00:11:616 - 2 notes.
00:11:778 - 1 note.
00:11:940 - 2 notes.
00:15:670 - 1 note.
00:16:805 (16805|0,17292|6,17778|0) - Better use 1/2 length LNs.
00:21:913 - Add note.
00:24:265 (24265|0) - What's this LN for?
00:24:427 (24427|6) - End at 00:25:237 -
Re-arrange your LNs considering my common tips, you'd really better do it on your own before modding.
00:32:210 - Don't leave so intense sound without any note.
00:32:859 - Add note for hat.
00:38:210 - Missed note.
00:39:508 (39508|3,39832|1,40156|4,40643|1) - Delete.
00:41:454 - 00:43:400 - 1/3 stream
00:46:237 - Add note.
00:48:832 - Add note.
00:51:832 (51832|1,52319|5,52805|1,53292|5) - You use 2 notes at the same lines in NM diff, it's strange.
01:07:075 - 01:07:400 - 1/4 stream.
01:28:156 - Try this:
http://puu.sh/jNox8/87929b018f.png. It's unusual to add more notes just for rising pitch, but this pattern fits here, i think.
There are a lot of mistakes in amount of notes at lines. Listen it again at 25% or 50% speed and check each note, using common rules. I suggest you to follow drums, cymbal and hat. Use 2 notes for cymbal, but don't use 4-noted chords in HD. If you get 4-noted chords following your chosen instruments, then just delete one note. Sometimes even 3-noted chords need to be reduced (if they rise the common difficulty too much). LN start may be considered as note, so 3 notes + LN start (2 notes + 2 LN start) are not recommended also.