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1. Not really sure about the offset, it currently gives some weird drum snaps sometimes, you should have that rechecked.
2. I'd rather you put OD8 on this. Seems more fitting to the challenge the speed and spacing of the map induces.
3. 00:06:955 (2) - This should be less curved to emphasize the flow
4. 00:06:505 (1,1) - this is pretty horrible spacing wise. You're in the jump movement of the 1/4 sliders and then are suddenly forced to stop. whyyyy? bring some motion into this like the music suggests
5. 00:08:905 (1,2) - okay see. The usage of such so called extended sldier is controversial anyway, some like the idea to emphasize that a sound in the music lasts longer than just 1/2, but since it doesn't really end on a note in the music it's often called overmapping. Personally I don't use them often, if not never, but I can accept other's using them. But if you decide to do it like here it makes me sick when you don't do it constantly. A map has to have some kind of structure to be predictable and that means that if several sounds are basically the same in the music, the idea which is used to visualize them in the map should also stay the same.
   I'm referring to 00:11:305 - , 00:12:355 - being mapped completely different. You should stick to your extended sliders here to make the map more consistent, so it actually makes sense with the music.
6. 00:08:755 (3,1) - make this a proper blanket please or shape it differently so people realize a blanket wasn't the intention.
7. 00:12:355 (5) - this slider hurts me especially. Idk how much about mapping theory you know so let me just explain this. A slider has a start and an end, obviously. These look the same but don't feel the same when playing. The sliderhead (or start) requires an active click by the player. Thus it has an additional impact the slidertail (or end) does not have, since the tail does not require any input from the player. Only because of this it can be disregarded like that and the extended slider which you used earlier can work. But that also means that it's important that in order to follow a rhythm properly you need to have the sliderhead, the stronger part of the slider, on the stronger beat in the music. In this case tho, the slider starts on a rather weak sound and ends on a strong sound starting a new phrase of the melody. it would be more fitting to use a circle for the linked time and start a slider, as I said earlier already, on 00:12:505 -.
8. 00:13:255 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - your rhythm is pretty messed up here. Well actually it's the song which is messed up but bleh it your job to follow the song so do that. I recommend to work with sldiers because of their leniency to make up for the weird snapping
   
   yes the first sliderend is snapped to 1/12

   
9. 00:13:855 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,1) - this is nonsense. While I do understand your jumps, you should make the spacing consistent and make the circles correlate with each other somehow. You can be like Skystar and add typical antijumps like that (3 and 5 are stacked):
   
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   You could also make a simpler patterns using sliders (1 and 3 are stacked, 2 and 5 are stacked):
   
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   These are very spontaneous ideas and you can change them in whatever way you want, but you shoukd make sure your objects work with each other somehow and do not feel random and out of place
10. 00:15:130 (1) - instead of this spinner it would feel better to have the suspense rising by using a cool stream, you can make it start with low spacing and make it go higher constantly to fit the songs 1/4
11. 00:18:655 (1,2,3) - Just explain to me why, this isn't necessarily bad but I wonder why you did it this way
12. 00:20:155 (3) - sliders like this are pretty flowbreaking. You can see it yourself, follow the movement of the cursor when it transitions into this sldier. the movement will break, going up right instead of straight up/slightly left which the previous circle lead you into. kinda hard to explain, I'll elaborate when you have issues understanding.
13. 00:20:830 (6) - this circle is overmapped, I don't see a reason to add it here either
14. 00:23:605 (2) - this is the same as 00:12:355 (5). In fact, you should keep in mind that mostly, usually, in many cases, not every time but very often, sliders should not start on red ticks and end on white ones, because white ticks which signalize the main beat of a song are usually stronger than red ones.
    Exceptions are strong lyrics on red ticks like those you have in the intro for this song.
15. 00:25:255 (1,1,1,1) - I understand your idea, but pleeeeaase, don't do this. Considering your previous triplet this is waaayy too misleading and will make players break a lot. How about a pattern which looks more like that (I deleted the NCs so you can see the order properly):
    
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16. 00:29:755 (3) - reduce the curve from this slider, it looks messy
17. 00:30:430 (6) - overmapped again
18. 00:31:555 (4) - same as 00:23:605 (2). In this case your slider is actually correct according to ticks, but the dominant vocals on 00:31:705 - demand a sldierhead there, so replace this one with a circle.
19. 00:33:055 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2) - similar to 00:13:855 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,1)
20. 00:34:755 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - This is hard to sightread since there were no 1/3 before. I suggest you start this with a reversed 1/3 sldier and then use circles, like that:
    
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    That way it would be easier to grasp for players
21. 00:45:355 (4) - this looks very cramped, reduce the curve?
22. 00:48:805 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - the correct way of mapping this would be to add a 1/6 slider after each triplet to fit the drums, you can disregard it thou if you feel like it would be too complicated, also
23. 00:49:480 - you should add a circle here :p
    The whole thing starting on 00:48:805 would look like that then:
    
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24. 00:53:155 (7) - the slider not fitting issue again
25. 00:56:005 (2) - ^
26. 00:57:505 (2) - ^
27. 00:58:555 (3) - ^
28. 01:02:905 (1) - this long sldier should start on the downbeat, the big white tick 1/2 afetr this, try it and listen, it fits the vocals better
29. 01:24:055 (3,4,1) - yeah I know, intended, but this antijump is a little mean I'd say, consider changing this for the sake of readabilty.
    
    That's the main points about the mapping itself. Let me take a quick look at the NCs as well since they seemed really inconsistent at parts.
30. 00:02:755 (1) - I'd remove this New Combo, the object still is a part of the first "scream" and feels like it belongs to the first 2 sliders. Instead, you should add a NC at 00:03:205 (5) - since the new phrase is starting here.
31. 00:03:655 (1) - after that you should get rid of this NC as well
32. 00:07:255 (1) - this NC makes no sense to me, delete?
33. 00:08:455 (1) - ^
34. 00:09:655 (1) - ^
35. 00:11:305 (6) - here you should add an NC to stay consistent with your previous patterns, e.g. 00:07:705 (1) - and 00:08:905 (1) -
36. 00:12:505 - if you followed my advice earlier and have a sldier here now, it needs a NC as well.
37. 00:12:805 (1) - if the above thing is applied, delete this NC
38. 00:13:855 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,1) - up to you but I don't feel like these NCs are necessary at all, except for the first one of course.
39. 00:25:255 (1,1,1,1,1) - I sure hope you changed this, if you did, there's no need to have spacing changing implying NCs here, remove them
40. 00:32:755 (1) - Are you just being nice here, giving the player a HP boost midstream? beware, if he misses this note it will be even worse for him, so this is kinda a double-edged sword. I'd just recommend to delete it.
41. 00:33:055 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2) - same thing as 00:13:855 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,1)
42. 00:41:905 (1) - remove NC?
43. 00:56:905 (8) - add NC and delete at 00:57:355 (1), makes more sense that way
44. 00:58:855 (1) - was this intended? If yes, why?, if no, delete it?
45. 01:06:655 (1,2,1,2,1,2,3,4,1) - I would like you to reduce the amount of NCs here a little, they don't make reading the pattern easier
46. 01:09:505 (1) - this and every sldier like this in that section should not have a NC imo, it's just too much with it
47. 01:20:755 (1) - delete NC?
48. 01:21:955 (1,2) - put NC on 2 instead of 1 right here
49. 01:23:755 (1) - why this NC? delete

Zarerion wrote:

All right then, I'll focus on Insane mainly and wiill not go into detail as in pointing out every issue. I also won't waste time being nice or whitewashing anything, so don't get offended, I'm here to help.

First of all, your background is ugly. Basically it makes me want to delete the map before even playing it. You can search on wallbase.cc, other wallpaper website or even google pictures to find something which actually looks like a wallpaper fitting for a Background.
For example, you could use this as BG, it's already resized and ready to use. (There might be better ones but this won't make people run away at least. Also you could play around with fitting Combo Colours for this.)

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thanks for your kindness, but I want to keep the current one since it matches with the anime ;w;

[Insane]

1. Not really sure about the offset, it currently gives some weird drum snaps sometimes, you should have that rechecked. yea, I found someone to check for me
2. I'd rather you put OD8 on this. Seems more fitting to the challenge the speed and spacing of the map induces. I really dont want to be too hard so I chose OD7
3. 00:06:955 (2) - This should be less curved to emphasize the flow done
4. 00:06:505 (1,1) - this is pretty horrible spacing wise. You're in the jump movement of the 1/4 sliders and then are suddenly forced to stop. whyyyy? bring some motion into this like the music suggests well, I changed to a long slider
5. 00:08:905 (1,2) - okay see. The usage of such so called extended sldier is controversial anyway, some like the idea to emphasize that a sound in the music lasts longer than just 1/2, but since it doesn't really end on a note in the music it's often called overmapping. Personally I don't use them often, if not never, but I can accept other's using them. But if you decide to do it like here it makes me sick when you don't do it constantly. A map has to have some kind of structure to be predictable and that means that if several sounds are basically the same in the music, the idea which is used to visualize them in the map should also stay the same.
   I'm referring to 00:11:305 - , 00:12:355 - being mapped completely different. You should stick to your extended sliders here to make the map more consistent, so it actually makes sense with the music. Thinking of your idea, I used a note instead, I hope now one is okay
6. 00:08:755 (3,1) - make this a proper blanket please or shape it differently so people realize a blanket wasn't the intention. made a blanket
7. 00:12:355 (5) - this slider hurts me especially. Idk how much about mapping theory you know so let me just explain this. A slider has a start and an end, obviously. These look the same but don't feel the same when playing. The sliderhead (or start) requires an active click by the player. Thus it has an additional impact the slidertail (or end) does not have, since the tail does not require any input from the player. Only because of this it can be disregarded like that and the extended slider which you used earlier can work. But that also means that it's important that in order to follow a rhythm properly you need to have the sliderhead, the stronger part of the slider, on the stronger beat in the music. In this case tho, the slider starts on a rather weak sound and ends on a strong sound starting a new phrase of the melody. it would be more fitting to use a circle for the linked time and start a slider, as I said earlier already, on 00:12:505 -. I added a circle
8. 00:13:255 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - your rhythm is pretty messed up here. Well actually it's the song which is messed up but bleh it your job to follow the song so do that. I recommend to work with sldiers because of their leniency to make up for the weird snapping Your idea is nice but I choose to follow the drums here
   
   yes the first sliderend is snapped to 1/12

   
9. 00:13:855 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,1) - this is nonsense. While I do understand your jumps, you should make the spacing consistent and make the circles correlate with each other somehow. You can be like Skystar and add typical antijumps like that (3 and 5 are stacked): I changed to a readable jump here
   
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   You could also make a simpler patterns using sliders (1 and 3 are stacked, 2 and 5 are stacked):
   
   SPOILER

   
   These are very spontaneous ideas and you can change them in whatever way you want, but you shoukd make sure your objects work with each other somehow and do not feel random and out of place
10. 00:15:130 (1) - instead of this spinner it would feel better to have the suspense rising by using a cool stream, you can make it start with low spacing and make it go higher constantly to fit the songs 1/4 nice, take this
11. 00:18:655 (1,2,3) - Just explain to me why, this isn't necessarily bad but I wonder why you did it this way because I think its follow the vocal and want to try something rare
12. 00:20:155 (3) - sliders like this are pretty flowbreaking. You can see it yourself, follow the movement of the cursor when it transitions into this sldier. the movement will break, going up right instead of straight up/slightly left which the previous circle lead you into. kinda hard to explain, I'll elaborate when you have issues understanding. I curved less
13. 00:20:830 (6) - this circle is overmapped, I don't see a reason to add it here either removed
14. 00:23:605 (2) - this is the same as 00:12:355 (5). In fact, you should keep in mind that mostly, usually, in many cases, not every time but very often, sliders should not start on red ticks and end on white ones, because white ticks which signalize the main beat of a song are usually stronger than red ones.
    Exceptions are strong lyrics on red ticks like those you have in the intro for this song. okay!
15. 00:25:255 (1,1,1,1) - I understand your idea, but pleeeeaase, don't do this. Considering your previous triplet this is waaayy too misleading and will make players break a lot. How about a pattern which looks more like that (I deleted the NCs so you can see the order properly): fixed with something similar
    
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16. 00:29:755 (3) - reduce the curve from this slider, it looks messy yea, fixed
17. 00:30:430 (6) - overmapped again ;w; thanks for noticing, deleted
18. 00:31:555 (4) - same as 00:23:605 (2). In this case your slider is actually correct according to ticks, but the dominant vocals on 00:31:705 - demand a sldierhead there, so replace this one with a circle. hmm, I want to follow the vocal here, so I prefer keeping this, sorry
19. 00:33:055 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2) - similar to 00:13:855 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,1) changed to other jumps
20. 00:34:755 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - This is hard to sightread since there were no 1/3 before. I suggest you start this with a reversed 1/3 sldier and then use circles, like that: okay
    
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    That way it would be easier to grasp for players
21. 00:45:355 (4) - this looks very cramped, reduce the curve? sure
22. 00:48:805 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - the correct way of mapping this would be to add a 1/6 slider after each triplet to fit the drums, you can disregard it thou if you feel like it would be too complicated, also well, seems too hard to read, I try to keep it
23. 00:49:480 - you should add a circle here :p added!
    The whole thing starting on 00:48:805 would look like that then:
    
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24. 00:53:155 (7) - the slider not fitting issue again
25. 00:56:005 (2) - ^
26. 00:57:505 (2) - ^
27. 00:58:555 (3) - ^ all fixed to them
28. 01:02:905 (1) - this long sldier should start on the downbeat, the big white tick 1/2 afetr this, try it and listen, it fits the vocals better I try to start on the big white tick now, to keep the 1/2 beat
29. 01:24:055 (3,4,1) - yeah I know, intended, but this antijump is a little mean I'd say, consider changing this for the sake of readabilty.I think the now one is okay ;w; with the NC here and it appear late so it wont affect so much
    
    That's the main points about the mapping itself. Let me take a quick look at the NCs as well since they seemed really inconsistent at parts.
30. 00:02:755 (1) - I'd remove this New Combo, the object still is a part of the first "scream" and feels like it belongs to the first 2 sliders. Instead, you should add a NC at 00:03:205 (5) - since the new phrase is starting here.
31. 00:03:655 (1) - after that you should get rid of this NC as well done for these 2
32. 00:07:255 (1) - this NC makes no sense to me, delete? I NCed here because of readability in jumps so keep these 3
33. 00:08:455 (1) - ^
34. 00:09:655 (1) - ^
35. 00:11:305 (6) - here you should add an NC to stay consistent with your previous patterns, e.g. 00:07:705 (1) - and 00:08:905 (1) - fixed
36. 00:12:505 - if you followed my advice earlier and have a sldier here now, it needs a NC as well. kk
37. 00:12:805 (1) - if the above thing is applied, delete this NC
38. 00:13:855 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,1) - up to you but I don't feel like these NCs are necessary at all, except for the first one of course. I keep these or it will be toooo hard to read
39. 00:25:255 (1,1,1,1,1) - I sure hope you changed this, if you did, there's no need to have spacing changing implying NCs here, remove them yea removed
40. 00:32:755 (1) - Are you just being nice here, giving the player a HP boost midstream? beware, if he misses this note it will be even worse for him, so this is kinda a double-edged sword. I'd just recommend to delete it. okay
41. 00:33:055 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2) - same thing as 00:13:855 (1,2,1,2,3,1,2,1) same as them
42. 00:41:905 (1) - remove NC? I prefer remove NC in 00:41:155 (1) -
43. 00:56:905 (8) - add NC and delete at 00:57:355 (1), makes more sense that way ya
44. 00:58:855 (1) - was this intended? If yes, why?, if no, delete it? deleted
45. 01:06:655 (1,2,1,2,1,2,3,4,1) - I would like you to reduce the amount of NCs here a little, they don't make reading the pattern easier removed NC in 01:07:255
46. 01:09:505 (1) - this and every sldier like this in that section should not have a NC imo, it's just too much with it applied to them
47. 01:20:755 (1) - delete NC? nah, I want to keep this for noticing 1/4 sliders
48. 01:21:955 (1,2) - put NC on 2 instead of 1 right here okay
49. 01:23:755 (1) - why this NC? delete removed

Okay, I can't be arsed to check the hitsounds, I've got school tomorrow. Sorry.

Zarerion wrote:

Oh hey, a proper answer, that's almost as rare as the mods themselves. Thanks for taking your time and considering my opinion :3

Good luck with the set, then o/

captin1 wrote:

hi timing request

try offset 1850 (-5)? seemed a little more solid to me.

good luck!

Baltis Baltus wrote:

to be honest this map would be excellent with a skin or something special when you get some combo hahaha, hope this map gets approved soon ><

Cristian wrote:

Why you ask for more mods when this map is ready for rank, is just the tittle error what it need to fix...
:u

TKSalt wrote:

devs, please don't forget about this mapset...

TKS wrote:

unhappy623 ;_;

Zare wrote:

@Potential Ranking BAT:
Keep in mind that this map will have to wait until September 2nd to be ranked, because another mapset of the same song has just been ranked.

*QUALIFIED

mintong89 wrote:

Don't worry, Taiko diff are still fun to play :3

However just one thing at Muzukashii:
01:08:450 - I think you should add a note at here to fit with vocal and drum.

TKS wrote:

too much BAT on here.

Asagi wrote:

I miss Wanwan </3