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Leorda
4,416 posts
Joined June 2009
Topic Starter
Leorda

Kodora wrote:

On Lunatic: 02:18:235 (2) - you have normal-sampleset on sliderbody which sounds weird since all other parts have soft one. No kudosu please // fixed

Imo it is fine even without jumps, but i think you have too much 1/2 (especially at the beginning), which makes map feels kinda monotonous. Also consider reduse copypaste in map to make it more interesting. // added few notes to make triplets.... well, I just don't know where I should add more notes.... I think this diff had enough jump, btw

Storyboard is very well done.

Good luck!

10crystalmask01 wrote:

Hey, mod from queue 8-)
[General]
01:31:235 - 01:56:835 Consider adding Kai time here. This is the 1st chorus of the music, only it's without the vocals.
[Lunatic]
00:27:235 - Consider starting to map here. // nah, it's an intro
00:44:835 (1,3) - Consider remodeling these sliders- add a bit more curve to them, so that 00:44:835 (1) - 's head and 00:45:635 (3) - 's tail does not form an ugly overlap. // fixed

00:50:435 (3,2) - Just move a bit more apart, so that the spacing looks consistent with the rest of your objects. // fixed
01:18:435 (1) - Consider adding normal finish on the head. // no
01:28:035 (1) - Move middle anchor point to 208:296 so it improves the blanket. // fixed
01:42:035 (4) - Move to 280:32 so it completes the blanket around 01:40:835 (1) - 's head. // fixed
01:47:235 (1) - Move tail point to 296:24 // fixed
02:10:835 (7,1,2) - Weird blanket here lol. Transform 02:11:235 (1) - into a curved slider for a blanket, or don't bother trying to create one here. // nah, I think it's fine
02:32:835 (1) - Remove NC (since it doesn't hit the large white tick yet)? // no, I'd add NC to prevent of long combo
02:51:235 (1,2) - Fix blanket. // no
02:52:835 (1) - Move to 290:96 so it should be perfectly stacked under 02:51:835 (3) - 's tail. // fixed
02:52:835 (1,2) - Also fix blanket here. // no
02:54:435 (1,2) - ^ // no
03:01:035 - 03:13:635 Omg the objects after this timing pint all comes from 01:31:435 - 01:44:035 lol. Nothing's wrong with that, but all the modsI gave you for objects within this timeline will also be applied for All the objects within 03:01:035 - 03:13:635 // lol
03:18:035 (3,1) - Not going to try to make a blanket here? // no
03:20:035 (1,2) - ^ // no
03:22:835 (3,1) - Fix blanket. // no
03:25:435 (2,3) - Not going to try to make a blanket here? // no

A few flawed blankets, but the diffs pretty nice.
[Hard]
00:27:235 - Consider starting to map here. // nah, it's an intro
00:45:435 (2,1) - Fix blanket. // nah, I think it's fine
01:18:435 (1) - Change finish to Normal finish. // no
02:36:835 (1) - Why not create another curve in the slider (after the red anchor point) so that it blankets 02:37:435 (2) - ? It's really weird how it blankets 02:36:435 (4) - 's tail, but not the hit circle as well. // nah
Or you can just stack it like 02:39:235 (3) - .

[Normal]
00:52:435 (5,1) - DS is slightly off for these objects. // fixed
01:23:235 (2,1) - Fix blanket here. // fixed
01:32:035 (2,1) - ^ with 01:32:035 (2) - 's tail. // no
01:47:235 (1,2,3) - Try shifting these objects so that 01:48:435 (2) - is placed on the center of the vertical axis. // no, I like that pattern
02:16:035 (1,2) - Fix blanket here. // fixed
02:30:435 (5) - NC // fixed
03:23:235 (3) - ^ // fixed

Nice Storyboard :lol: Good luck!
thanks~
Kodora
Kodora
Just a little example of what i mean by adding more rhythm variety: http://puu.sh/7jOn6.osu

In general, try to make rhythm more complex and use more variety in hitsounds, only claps at every 2 and 4 tick feels boring.

By the way, using normal-sampleset as clap might badly affect taiko mode since it will be d like all other notes instead of k - try to use this hitclap instead.

Good luck!
Leorda
4,416 posts
Joined June 2009
Topic Starter
Leorda

Kodora wrote:

Just a little example of what i mean by adding more rhythm variety: http://puu.sh/7jOn6.osu

In general, try to make rhythm more complex and use more variety in hitsounds, only claps at every 2 and 4 tick feels boring.

By the way, using normal-sampleset as clap might badly affect taiko mode since it will be d like all other notes instead of k - try to use this hitclap instead.

Good luck!
oh.... thx for your advice~
P o M u T a
2,284 posts
Joined December 2010
P o M u T a
hi


[General]
  1. try add 'Katharsis' tag. so, this is 'Yuuhei Katharsis'.
  2. try add tag '人恋し神様 ～ Romantic Fall' because this original song. (原曲)
  3. try add tag '東方歴絵巻' this album name.
  4. this mp3 151kps. try convert 192kps. more good.
  5. this BG size 1023x767 wat, try change 1024x768.
    SPOILER
  6. You use Normal hitsound. but, i think more goood custom hitsound use better. try find. http://puu.sh/7r8b0.wav
[Normal]
  1. I really don't like Normal OD5. i hope 4. also, this is least diff. beginner play.
  2. 01:20:035 (2,1,2,12) - this part not used hitsound. really deserted. try some add hitsound. i suggest all slider add whistle slider head. because follow piano and strong whitle line.
  3. 02:25:635 (1) - try more fit sound.
    SPOILER
  4. 02:46:435 (3) - add NC. your pettern.
  5. 03:14:035 (1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,1,2,) - try add whistle slider head and reverse and end and circle. i doN't understand why not use hitsound. more sound fit.
[Hard]
  1. This hard diff... nothing jump. you are style? but, one or double, try add, more fun playing.
  2. 00:43:235 (4) - move (x:333 y:305) more beautiful seems.
  3. 00:59:235 (1,2,3) - triple spacing is seems dirty. (3) move (x:152 y:102) please try. unity Distance and more seems good. http://puu.sh/7r8o6.jpg if change, don't forget move 01:00:835 (1) - . because stacking.
  4. 01:18:435 (1) - same as Normal
  5. 03:13:635 - same as normal diff.
[Lunatic]
  1. 00:43:235 (1,2) - try perfect stack slider end both. seems bad.
  2. 00:59:635 (2) - move (x:448 y:328) or around, because i don't like this overlaps.
  3. 01:18:435 - this diiff.. this part hitsound fine.
  4. 01:30:435 (1) - add whistle slider head. follow piano.
  5. 03:13:635 - same as normal.
  6. 03:26:035 (3) - move (x:336 y:296). because fun jump and remove overlaps. try it. if accept, don't forget make beautiful blanket.
good luck Leo
Rare
1,118 posts
Joined August 2010
Rare
[Lunatic]
00:47:635 (4,5,6) - i thought this triplets not fit music imo. 00:47:735 (5) - remove this~
01:42:435 (1) - i want to blanket to (2).
01:56:035 (5) - NC?
02:58:435 (9) - ^
03:12:035 (1) - same as 01:42:435 (1) -
03:13:535 (5,1) - these are intentional pattern? you should this spacing ><

sry poor mod :(
Lecana
253 posts
Joined March 2012
Lecana
Hi thanks m4m~ :3
[Normal]
01:32:835 (1,2,3,4) - I think this rhythm.
SPOILER
03:02:435 (1,2,3,4) - ^

[Hard]
00:43:235 (1) - I want start position X:333 Y:305
01:44:435 (2,3,4) - I think this rhythm.
SPOILER

[Lunatic]
00:59:235 (1) - I want start position X:360 Y:192
01:42:435 (1,2) - please separate each other.
02:37:837 (4) - please snap
03:06:835 (4) - I want X:157 Y:176
03:08:835 (1) - I want X:217 Y:149
03:12:035 (1,2) - please separate each other.

I think awesome SB!!
very beautiful!!
Fight~ o.o)/
and,thanks mod my map!
Leorda
4,416 posts
Joined June 2009
Topic Starter
Leorda

P o M u T a wrote:

hi


[General]
  1. try add 'Katharsis' tag. so, this is 'Yuuhei Katharsis'. // Yuuhei Katharis didn't evolve the album
  2. try add tag '人恋し神様 ～ Romantic Fall' because this original song. (原曲) // fixed
  3. try add tag '東方歴絵巻' this album name. // fixed
  4. this mp3 151kps. try convert 192kps. more good. // I think it's fine....
  5. this BG size 1023x767 wat, try change 1024x768.// I'll fixed
    SPOILER
  6. You use Normal hitsound. but, i think more goood custom hitsound use better. try find. // no http://puu.sh/7r8b0.wav
[Normal]
  1. I really don't like Normal OD5. i hope 4. also, this is least diff. beginner play. // fixed
  2. 01:20:035 (2,1,2,12) - this part not used hitsound. really deserted. try some add hitsound. i suggest all slider add whistle slider head. because follow piano and strong whitle line. // fixed
  3. 02:25:635 (1) - try more fit sound. // nah, I like the current sound, btw
    SPOILER
  4. 02:46:435 (3) - add NC. your pettern. // fixed
  5. 03:14:035 (1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,1,2,) - try add whistle slider head and reverse and end and circle. i doN't understand why not use hitsound. more sound fit. // fixed
[Hard]
  1. This hard diff... nothing jump. you are style? but, one or double, try add, more fun playing. // yeah, I don't like add jump in Hard diff because I don't want to become Hard+
  2. 00:43:235 (4) - move (x:333 y:305) more beautiful seems. // fixed
  3. 00:59:235 (1,2,3) - triple spacing is seems dirty. (3) move (x:152 y:102) please try. unity Distance and more seems good. // no, I like the current onehttp://puu.sh/7r8o6.jpg if change, don't forget move 01:00:835 (1) - . because stacking.
  4. 01:18:435 (1) - same as Normal // fixed
  5. 03:13:635 - same as normal diff. // fixed
[Lunatic]
  1. 00:43:235 (1,2) - try perfect stack slider end both. seems bad. // fixed
  2. 00:59:635 (2) - move (x:448 y:328) or around, because i don't like this overlaps. // fixed
  3. 01:18:435 - this diiff.. this part hitsound fine.
  4. 01:30:435 (1) - add whistle slider head. follow piano. // fixed
  5. 03:13:635 - same as normal.
  6. 03:26:035 (3) - move (x:336 y:296). because fun jump and remove overlaps. try it. if accept, don't forget make beautiful blanket. // no
good luck Leo

Rare wrote:

[Lunatic]
00:47:635 (4,5,6) - i thought this triplets not fit music imo. 00:47:735 (5) - remove this~ // no
01:42:435 (1) - i want to blanket to (2). // fixed
01:56:035 (5) - NC? // no, because I add NC on each 1 stanza
02:58:435 (9) - ^ // ^
03:12:035 (1) - same as 01:42:435 (1) - // fixed
03:13:535 (5,1) - these are intentional pattern? you should this spacing >< // oops, fixed

sry poor mod :(

Lecana wrote:

Hi thanks m4m~ :3
[Normal]
01:32:835 (1,2,3,4) - I think this rhythm. // fixed
SPOILER
03:02:435 (1,2,3,4) - ^ // ^

[Hard]
00:43:235 (1) - I want start position X:333 Y:305 // nope
01:44:435 (2,3,4) - I think this rhythm. // fixed
SPOILER

[Lunatic]
00:59:235 (1) - I want start position X:360 Y:192 // fixed
01:42:435 (1,2) - please separate each other. // no
02:37:837 (4) - please snap // it's already snapped
03:06:835 (4) - I want X:157 Y:176 // fixed
03:08:835 (1) - I want X:217 Y:149 // no
03:12:035 (1,2) - please separate each other. // ok

I think awesome SB!!
very beautiful!!
Fight~ o.o)/
and,thanks mod my map!
thank you all~
Xinely
5,014 posts
Joined April 2012
Xinely
Hi Leo as your request here :P




  • General
  1. apa "line.png" nya dipakai? soalnya saya cari2 di osb enggak ketemu o.o
  2. 02:09:635 - ini liriknya ketutupan BG yang buat pulse, atur layarnya biar liriknya gak ketutupan?
  3. 02:35:168 - daripada di snap 1/12, dijadiin snap 1/1 ke 02:35:235 - aja?
  4. 02:54:035 (4) - sama kayak diatas, move ke 03:00:835 - aja?


  • Normal
  1. HP-1 biar spread sama Hard nya lebih bagus? lagian HP5 buat Normal under 3 rada kegedean imo
  2. 00:41:635 (1,1) - blanketnya gak blanket disini, walau pake inconsistency spacing tp terliat messy.. coba pake approach circle aja buat bikin blanket kayak
    kayak gini+ada code nya

    316,156,41635,6,0,P|396:200|376:356,2,240,2|2|2,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
    304,272,43635,5,0,1:0:0:0:
    200,324,44035,1,2,0:0:0:0:
  3. 00:44:835 (1,2) - same as above, blanketnya bisa improve lagi disini https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1468650
  4. 00:46:435 (1) - nazi, spacingnya gak konsisten buat prev dan next
  5. 00:49:235 - imo disini perlu di map, walau cuma suara clap tapi suaranya udah besar dan terasa seperti musik yang penting. Jadi untuk mengubah ritme 00:48:435 (1) - , ada 2 suggestion disini. Pertama simple karena masih pertahanin slidernya http://puu.sh/7Qqbc.jpg. Yang Kedua, remove slider dan jadiin kayak http://puu.sh/7Qqaf.jpg (but strongly banget q suggest karena ini ikutin main music nya)
  6. 00:52:035 (3,4,5) - nazi sih, ini cuma taste ku biasanya kalo buat 1/2 Normal under 3, mendingan coba pke slider repeat aja biar easy to catch buat newbie. somehow ini rada susah sih buat newbie imo (lagian previous Leo banyak pke circle jadi lebih konsisten aja kalo pke slider imo xD)
  7. 00:56:035 (1,1) - imo ini designnya bisa di improve buat better flow ke 00:59:235 (1) - juga. rada2 dempet itu rada messy imo jadi
    SS+code

    272,80,56035,6,0,P|328:92|400:64,2,120,2|0|2,0:0|1:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
    168,24,57235,1,0,1:0:0:0:
    192,140,57635,6,0,B|175:201|217:229|190:330,2,180,2|0|0,0:0|0:0|1:0,0:0:0:0:
  8. 01:00:835 (1) - cuma nazi, 1 grid up biar blanketnya lebih balance
  9. 01:20:035 (2) - coba rotate -10 clockwise terus taruh di 308,56? imo flownya lebih bisa natural disini dan designnya lebih rapi
  10. 01:26:435 (2) - imo designnya bisa lebih rapi lagi disini, sama kayak 01:23:235 (2) - , coba lebih ditengahin lagi kayak https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1468670
  11. 01:42:035 (3) - inconsistency spacing 0,93x /runs , skalian flow dari slider ini bisa improve kok kalo ke next note. coba atur dikit jadi seperti https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1468675
  12. 01:43:635 (3) - yap flow buat previous ke slider ini juga bisa lebih improve/natural kok, coba aja mirip2 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1468679. Jadi flownya lebih easier d catch aja
  13. 01:51:835 (2) - suara musik d sini jadi pelan samar-samar lho, kalo menurutku lebih enak di remove. dari testplay juga terasa rada aneh dikit pas di click ><
  14. 01:54:235 (3) - 412,156 please buat hindari inconsistency spacing 1,07x nya
  15. 02:12:835 (1,2,3) - hmm agak susah lagi dan juga vocal dari 02:12:835 - sampai sini 02:13:035 - masih sama "gu" jadinya gimana kalo coba slider circle kayak http://puu.sh/7QrwX.jpg aja?
  16. 02:19:235 (1,2,3) - sama kayak atas ^
  17. 02:31:635 (2) - nazi, flownya lebih natural (dikit) kalo 1 grid left xD /runs
  18. 02:40:835 (3) - inconsistency spacing 0,94x. bikin lebih konsisten aja
  19. 02:43:235 (1) - ^ (1,07x)
  20. 02:48:035 (1) - ^
  21. 02:46:235 (2) - inconsistency spacing 1,06x sama 0,93x saat bersamaan, enakan konsisten aja imo
  22. 02:55:035 (2) - inconsistency spacing lagi, coba move ke 268,264 biar solved o.o
  23. 03:00:768 - ini greenline nya ada alasan tersendirikah sampai diletakkin di 1/12? mendingan taruh di 03:00:835 - aja imo. entar bisa2 orang bilang unsnapped gara2 ndak tau itu 1/12 xD
  24. 03:03:435 (3) - inconsistency spacing 0,94x here
  25. 03:07:635 (2,3) - ini lebih terlihat inconsistency rhythm daripada variasi rhythm imo, 03:07:835 - musik kyk gni menurutku penting buat di map dan Leo juga sering ngemap musik yang serupa seperti ini kok jadi imo coba remove pattern ini terus pake http://puu.sh/7QrTZ.jpg aja?
  26. 03:11:635 (3) - inconsistency spacing 0,93x disini
  27. 03:15:235 (2) - ini ada alasan kok whistle's body disini? kalo q denger musiknya mirip2 kyk 03:08:835 (1) - jadi imo enakan diremove buat konsisten aja


  • Hard
  1. 00:42:235 (2,1) - nazi, stack properly please /runs , tapi suer ini perlu d benerin xD
  2. 00:44:035 (2) - move kira sekitar 144,192 buat avoid overlap nya? overlapnya rada messy imo
  3. 00:51:635 (2) - nazi banget sih, rotate 5 derajat clockwise biar flownya lebih terasa natural aja di slidernya?
  4. 01:01:235 - imo suara clap nya kuat jadi perlu untuk di map disini, dan juga 01:00:835 (1) - terlalu gampang buat Hard diff imo jadi coba tweak ritmenya jadi http://puu.sh/7QtAW.jpg aja?
  5. 01:18:435 (1) - same as above, kerasa terlalu gampang, coba ritme yang sedikit susah aja http://puu.sh/7Qu6X.jpg ? (tetep ngikutin musik kok)
  6. 01:21:635 (1) - kalau setuju sama yang diatas dan berkenan mengganti http://puu.sh/7Qucy.jpg
  7. 01:35:635 (3) - ini coba di ctrl+G? jadi bisa bikin jump+natural flow sekalian. jump buat 01:36:035 (1) - buat musik nya yang keras
  8. 01:54:235 (2) - imo blanketnya terlalu curving slidernya jadi ndak terlihat kayka blanket. coba smoother ini aja jadi kyk http://puu.sh/7Quqm.jpg
  9. 02:40:835 (2) - move ke 388,240 biar avoid almost overlap nya itu? skalian biar lebih rapi imo
  10. 03:24:835 (2) - imo rhythm nya kurang pas d sini krn musik yang perlu d map (imo lagi) yang 03:25:235 - terasa lebih main music nya


  • Lunatic
  1. 00:47:735 (5) - move circle nya ke 00:47:535 - ? imo suara blue tick yang 00:47:535 - lbh keras daripada yang satunya jadi kalo dimainin lebih terasa enak gtu
  2. 01:19:635 (3) - transisi nya terlihat jelek disini, dari testplay juga keliatan jadi coba move 2nd node nya 148,120 terus tail node nya 216,120
  3. 01:53:235 (4) - rotate -10 clockwise biar slidernya lurus jadi flownya lebih natural
  4. 02:55:635 (6) - buat jadi simetris dengan move ke 120,324? jadi patternnya lebih terbentuk imo
  5. 03:01:235 (3) - remove whistle body nya? suaranya terlalu kenceng imo dan ga terlalu pas buat lagu ini
    Sisanya udah made with well sih cuma lack banget soal jump jadinya kerasa Pattern Hard yang banyak stream nya. mgkn udah jadi style Leo jadi just saying aja disini. Tapi menurutku beberapa pattern kalo pake DS malah jadi messy misal 02:09:635 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) -

Finally done
Good Luck Leo :P
Leorda
4,416 posts
Joined June 2009
Topic Starter
Leorda
fix most of your mod~

thx Xinely~
secretly asian
15 posts
Joined January 2014
secretly asian
Love this map, hope it gets ranked soon.
Good job :p
Scorpiour
2,633 posts
Joined May 2011
Scorpiour
Marked for kds award mod, count from 2000kds and you still have two more chance to ask for mod when you reach 2100 and 2200 kds.
Neta
536 posts
Joined May 2011
Neta
From my modding queue

[General]
  1. I think hitsound 100% is little big. 70~80% will be better

[Normal]
  1. 01:40:435 (3) - Make like 03:08:835 (1,2,3) - this will be better
  2. 02:19:235 (1,2,3) - DS miss? make same distance

[Hard]
  1. 00:51:635 (2) - make distance same with 00:51:435 (1,3) - will be nice. move to 308,308
  2. 03:24:835 (2) - Ctrl + G looks better i think

[Insane]
  1. 00:40:235 (2,3,4,7,8,9) - these triplets distance is little weird use same distance
  2. 00:44:335 (6) - i think this looks better
    SPOILER
  3. 01:46:035 (3) - move to 176, 128 to make distance same with 01:45:635 (1,2,3) -
  4. 02:15:635 (5,6,7) - make straight looks nice
    SPOILER
  5. 02:47:435 (4,5) - i think make 02:47:435 (4) - this to note is better. really confusing since i played

GL~
Leorda
4,416 posts
Joined June 2009
Topic Starter
Leorda
no change for Lunatic... do little change for Normal and Hard

thx and sorry for long delay
HabiHolic
5,372 posts
Joined October 2012
HabiHolic
star~
samplefish
1,198 posts
Joined November 2010
samplefish
Hi Leorda! trying for m4m.

[Normal]
01:32:035 (2,1) - could blanket these better
01:39:235 (1,3) - stack these like you did 03:08:835 (1,3) -
01:47:235 (1,3) - end these 1/2 earlier?
02:21:235 (1,1) - try something else to not have these overlap?

[Hard]
00:50:035 (3) - ctrl-g
01:43:035 (4) - feels weird to play

[Lunatic]
i feel od8 is high for ar8 150bpm, i would consider to have od7 to be less harsh on people trying for dt.

00:40:235 (2,9) - probably intentional, but i think same spacing looks better
01:18:435 (1,3) - make these have the same curve
01:36:635 (2,4) - stack better
01:39:235 (1,4) - ^
02:11:835 (2,1) - ^
03:06:235 (2,4) - ^
03:08:835 (1,4) - ^

felt like i was modding a ranked map, sorry if it wasnt helpful. :P
Mira-san
1,038 posts
Joined May 2012
Mira-san
Hello! For M4M (if my post didn't get accepted, a normal mod then).

Normal

00:44:835 (1) - Fix this blanket over (2).
00:51:235 (1,2,3,4) - Make this pattern perfect and move 00:50:835 (4) - to the center of the pattern.
00:52:835 (1) - |suggestion| Make this slider blanket (3) |suggestion|
01:23:235 (2) - Fix the shape of this slider so it would look better. Looks kinda weird imo.
01:26:435 (2) - Same goes for here. ^
02:24:835 (3) - Move to x:24 y:168
02:43:235 (1) - Move to x:87
02:52:835 (1,2,1) - imo would be better if there was a straight flow here.

Hard

00:49:235 (3) - Fix the end part pls. The end joints are kinda weird for me tho hahaha.
03:15:235 (4,5,6) - I believe this can be better.

All blankets that need fixes/improvement.
01:51:035 (2)
02:12:435 (3)
02:44:435 (4)
02:51:835 (2)
02:54:435 (1)

Lunatic

00:41:035 (7,8,9) - wot
00:55:835 (4) - Move to x:436 y:127
00:56:035 - 00:57:635: Putting triples starting on a white tick doesn't sound good as triples starting on a red tick. I suggest making it like this:

If possible, do this on 02:15:635 - 02:16:035.
On cases like the rhythm on kiai, it's ok if they start on the white tick.
02:39:435 (5,6,1) - Weird distance spacing here. Please fix.
02:53:435 (2) - Stack with 02:52:435 (5) properly.
All blankets that need fixes/improvement.
01:41:435 (3)
01:47:235 (1)
02:37:435 (3,4)
03:16:835 (1)
03:21:235 (3)
03:23:235 (1)

Good luck! :D
Liiraye
1,354 posts
Joined December 2011
Liiraye
m4m -> https://osu.ppy.sh/s/172300

Lunatic


00:40:235 (2,3,4,7,8,9) these triples have really odd spacing https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1669901 why not make them consise?

02:47:435 (4) - kinda confused me with the repeat position. Try pointing it down (or up) like this? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1669757
like you did here 02:21:835 (4) -

Highly suggestive thought - since these notes 02:49:135 (6) - 02:51:735 (3) - 02:54:935 (3) - are considered overmapped, wouldn't it be better to use them in a consistent pattern? Right now they are starting on irregular stanzas.

I honestly think they will play better if they play like the first triple: 02:49:035 (5,6) - to do that, start this triple 02:51:735 (3) - over here 02:52:235 like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1669796

as well as the last triple (02:54:935 (3) -) over here 02:55:435

00:56:435 (2,3,4) - same on this one actually, doesnt it sound better if you map it this way? https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1669833
starting triples on white ticks usually sounds weird, and throughout your map you mostly use them on reds.

02:15:635 (5,6,7) - would like to see this triple start here as well 02:15:435

I have no problems with the hitsounds. Good job :)

Hard


01:44:635 (3) - whistle
02:47:235 (3) - whistle
03:15:235 (4) - just my preference, how about removing whistle here? The tone of the synth drops on this note so I guess it would add a bit to the effect of the song :D

can't find any other inconsistencies in this diff. =w=b

Normal


00:49:635 (1) - whistle
03:07:635 (2) - whistle on sliderend
03:14:035 (1) - wouldn't it be better to start this slider here? 03:14:235 - since it has a higher tone than the white tick?


Sorry couldn't find more issues. Good luck with rank x)
Eni
1,437 posts
Joined May 2013
Eni
hello from your queue

[General]
  1. Nothing
[Storyboard]
  1. I personally start elements on the 1/1 to follow the beats but I am curious. What made you choose 1/2s as your starting point? Either way works, but why did you decide on 1/2 over 1/1?
  2. Any plans to support widescreen format?
[Normal]
  1. 02:12:835 (1,2,3) -, 02:16:035 (1) -, 02:19:235 (1,2,3) - I do not understand why you put 1/2 beats and/or triplets here. You do not do this for any other part of the map and it can be hard to follow for the novice. I strongly recommend that you change these parts to 1/1 to follow the same pattern as e.g: 02:28:835 (1,2,3,4) - and i.e: 00:49:635 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) -
  2. 02:44:835 (1,2,1,2) - I personally find this pattern confusing, going up then down, then right, then back up. Consider changing to something that flows more naturally.
  3. 03:08:835 (1,2,3) - This is the only time in the whole map that you stack circle 3 behind slider 1 in a pattern like this. Consider changing it to match e.g: 03:15:235 (2,3,4) -.
[Hard]
  1. 01:26:435 (2,3) - I personally find these straight slider repeats side-by-side to look bad. I strongly recommend that you add a curve on them like so:


    ~
  2. 02:25:235 (5,1) - Interesting pattern here
  3. 02:28:835 (1) - You must move this slider to x: 265 y:59 to properly stack with 02:27:835 (2) -.
  4. 02:39:835 (4) - You must move this circle to x:463 y:320 to properly stack with 02:39:235 (3) -.
  5. 02:45:835 (4) - You must move this circle to x:296 y:281 to properly stack with 02:45:235 (2) -.
  6. 02:52:235 (3,4) - You must move these objects to x:145 y:79 to properly stack with 02:51:235 (1) -.
  7. 03:23:235 (1,2) - Change this pattern to make it look nicer? Reflect over y-axis / x-axis for emphasis of end of song?
Good luck
Leorda
4,416 posts
Joined June 2009
Topic Starter
Leorda
fix some of your mod~ thx everyone

(can't reply because my netbook can't stand this lag)
Milan-
1,473 posts
Joined August 2011
Milan-
Hi!, here's my newbie mod for m4m if you think it was useful >.<

[General]
  1. Your timelines are not snapped1/6 ok xd
[Normal]
  1. 00:40:835 (2,3,1) - align this correctly http://puu.sh/9U5PF/3dbb5ce872.jpg
  2. 00:41:635 (1,1) - improve blanket
  3. 00:44:835 (1) - do it like this >http://puu.sh/9U6d0/ca65de76be.jpg looks cleaner
  4. 00:46:435 (1) - i'd rotate it and stack these 00:46:035 (3,2) -
  5. 00:50:035 (2) - a bit up and-
  6. 00:50:435 (3) - move it to y336 'cause of 00:49:635 (1) -
  7. 00:50:835 (4,1,2,3,4) - this just doesnt look clean/fine. Make it nicier/neatier.
  8. 00:59:235 (1,2,1) - improve blankets
  9. 01:23:235 (2,1) - blanket?
  10. 01:26:435 (2) - x164 y132? for something like this >http://puu.sh/9U6GT/d82251f113.jpg may need to be rotated
  11. 01:43:035 (2) - look nicier at x456 y112 imo
  12. 01:46:835 (3) - I'd move it like you did here 01:45:635 (1,2) - up to you
  13. 01:47:235 (1,3) - they are not symmetrical >http://puu.sh/9U6Z5/cd6dbe5fb2.jpg
  14. 01:50:435 (1,2,3) - align them correctly
  15. 02:11:035 (4,1) - look better a bit up imo, like y256
  16. 02:10:435 (3,1) - overlap them correctly. You could also overlap the entire slider. Something like this >http://puu.sh/9U7mV/e3c3092adb.jpg
  17. 02:13:635 (4,1) - blanket?
  18. 02:16:035 (1,1) - you could blank it
  19. 02:17:635 (1,2) - doesn't seem to flow correctly imo
  20. 02:19:235 (1,2,3) - this kind of pattern is ok for normal?
  21. 02:21:635 (2,3,1) - try to not touch 02:21:235 (1) - ?
  22. 02:25:635 (1,1) - same Y?
  23. 02:28:835 (1,1) - you can improve this blanket
  24. 02:35:635 (1,2) - doesnt flow very well, move (1) a bit up i guess
  25. 02:43:235 (1,1) - use same Y here
  26. 02:47:235 (2,1) - same X here
  27. 02:48:035 (1,2,3,4) - copy paste one of those, they are not symmetrical
  28. 02:52:835 (1) - the right point should be y60
  29. 02:52:835 (1,2,1) - align this? >http://puu.sh/9U88k/fe91877782.jpg
  30. 03:01:635 (2,1) - blanket? >http://puu.sh/9U8kV/c751852191.jpg
  31. 03:13:235 (3,2) - if you can overlap these could be nice
  32. 03:16:835 (1) - why didnt you did it like 03:18:435 (2) - ?
  33. 03:16:835 (1,2) - doesnt flow well for me, anyways could be better if you move 03:18:435 (2) - at x251 y221 >http://puu.sh/9U8Ex/84a43823c3.jpg
  34. 03:18:435 (2,2) - why not overlap?
[Hard]
  1. 00:40:035 (1,2) - Improve blanket
  2. 00:42:835 (3,1) - ^^
  3. 00:44:035 (2) - would be nice to move it to 00:42:235 (2) - head
  4. 00:47:235 (2,3) - blanket
  5. 01:32:435 (3) - same Y on head and tail?
  6. 01:33:635 (3,1) - same X ?
  7. 01:35:635 (3) - i dont know why you moved it up, if it was for the blanked, Improve it
  8. 01:37:635 (1) - move it to x285 'cause of 01:37:235 (5) -
  9. 01:39:235 (1,3) - their tails should be at the same Y
  10. 01:40:835 (1) - y268, they are way too close
  11. 01:43:035 (4) - i dont know if it'd be good flow , but try this >http://puu.sh/9U2HF/e0ab89c632.jpg And improve this blanket 01:42:835 (3,5) -
  12. 01:46:035 (2) - 1grid down maybe?
  13. 01:47:635 (2) - use DS 1x, they are a bit too close
  14. 01:54:835 (3) - ^^
  15. 01:50:835 (1,2,3) - - blanket
  16. 01:55:835 (2,3) - ^^
  17. 02:12:435 (3,1) - doesnt flow very well imo
  18. 02:16:035 (1,2) - blanket
  19. 02:16:435 (2) - should end at y112 or move 02:17:035 (3,4) - to y114
  20. 02:17:235 (4,1) - tail with head, same Y
  21. 02:18:235 (2) - move to y335 to cover 02:17:635 (1) - tail
  22. 02:20:435 (5,1) - improve blanket >http://puu.sh/9U3kY/63de2b8aa3.jpg better?
  23. 02:21:635 (2) - ^^
  24. 02:21:635 (2,3,1) - they are not exactly align if you wanted that
  25. 02:24:635 (4,5) - ^^
  26. 02:28:835 (1,3) - use same slider here 'cause they are not. >http://puu.sh/9U3As/ee4cf8c033.jpg
  27. 02:30:235 (5,1) - doesn't flow well imo
  28. 02:30:435 (1,2) - blanket
  29. 02:36:835 (1) - first part a bit more curved for better blanket? like >http://puu.sh/9U3PT/b8dbc6d298.jpg
  30. 02:37:635 (3) - use DS 1x, they are a bit too close
  31. 02:38:435 (1,2,3) - not exactly align
  32. 02:41:635 (1) - too close
  33. 02:43:835 (3,4) - improve this blanket >http://puu.sh/9U4dn/9c40b7709f.jpg
  34. I don't play hard very often, but is it ok for the difficulty? 02:45:235 (2,3,4,5) - 02:48:435 (3,4,5,6) -
  35. 02:46:035 (5,1) - improve blanket?
  36. 02:47:235 (3) - first part more curved?
  37. 02:48:035 (1) - try to move slider before, so it overlaps with 02:46:435 (1) - tail
  38. 02:49:635 (1,2,3) - this can be improved
  39. 02:50:235 (3,4,5,1) - do it like this >http://puu.sh/9U4Il/f509c0b671.jpg
  40. 02:51:235 (1,3,4) - not exactly stacked
  41. 02:52:835 (1,2,3,4) - align this 'cause it looks bad https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1777192
  42. 03:02:035 (3,1) - do it correctly
  43. 03:03:235 (3,4,1) - triangle? >http://puu.sh/9U52f/9b720cb9e3.jpg (or same x on (3) and (1))
  44. 03:04:635 (2) - cover 03:04:035 (1) - head?
  45. 03:08:835 (1,3) - tails should be at the same Y
  46. 03:10:435 (1) - use DS 1x, they are a bit too close
  47. 03:12:435 (3,4,1) - align them?
  48. 03:13:635 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - didnt find any kind of shape if you meant one xD
  49. 03:21:235 (3) - move it to y57 'cause of 03:20:035 (1) -
  50. 03:22:235 (2) - since it's 1.07 prev, should be the same for next object i guess
  51. 03:22:835 (3) - try to make this at y192 and then use ctrl+j on 03:24:835 (2) - (something like this >https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1777222)
[Lunatic]
  1. did you really use small grid?
  2. 00:42:235 (3,4) - Improve blanket created > http://puu.sh/9TOFx/de081e13da.jpg
  3. 00:43:235 (1,2) - these dont end at the same point. They should.
  4. 00:44:035 (3) - start it at x337
  5. 00:44:035 (3,4,5,6,7) - kind of bad flow, don't you think? Try making a circle with the slider instead. Like this (just more perfect) >http://puu.sh/9TOZx/c977d38661.jpg
  6. Otherwise, 00:44:435 (7,1) - (7) should blanket > http://puu.sh/9TP7d/a54bf50783.jpg
  7. 00:44:835 (1,3) - do them symmetrical. Also try to not touch (1) head with (3) tail, making them more curved should be fine.
  8. 00:46:435 (1,2) - improve blanket
  9. 00:47:235 (3,6) - ^same
  10. 00:47:635 (5) - I see 1x DS almost all over the map, here's 1.14x. Try using 1x too.
  11. 00:48:635 (2) - this should start a bit down, but you're overlapping >.<. So, try rotating this 00:48:035 (1) - like 45°
  12. 00:49:435 (4,1) - Improve blanket
  13. 00:49:435 (4) - Should be like x312 y124 to align better
  14. 00:50:435 (3) - start it at x256 maybe, so it'd be at the same x as 00:51:635 (2) -
  15. From here 00:51:635 (2) - move a bit down so it doesnt touch 00:50:435 (3) - at all. Also, use ctrl+j on that, seems better >http://puu.sh/9TQ3Q/aaf57ba179.jpg
  16. 00:51:935 (3) - why DS 0.88x?
  17. 00:52:835 (1,2,3) - Here you could either align 00:52:835 (1,2) - or use the same Y on 00:52:835 (1,3) - or rotate 00:53:235 (3) - and other shape for 00:53:635 (4) - .So, it has better flow?
  18. 00:53:635 (4,1) - (4)tail should be at the same X that 00:54:435 (1) -
  19. 00:55:035 (2,4) - overlap them correctly
  20. 00:56:035 (1,2,3,4) - try this instead? >http://puu.sh/9TQGM/66003b292a.jpg with 00:56:035 (1,3) - same Y
  21. 00:57:435 (5,1) - try making the slider more curved 'cause of it >http://puu.sh/9TQMx/1fe2ef6e3c.jpg
  22. 00:58:435 (3,4) - Improve blanket
  23. 00:58:235 (2,1) - they dont overlap correctly
  24. 00:59:235 (1,3) - blanket >http://puu.sh/9TR0R/1679c15ca5.jpg
  25. 01:01:835 (3) - move it a bit left, x444
  26. 01:18:435 (1,2) - stack tail with head.
  27. 01:20:835 (2,1) - imrprove blanket
  28. 01:21:635 (1,2) - dont you want to make them like you did here 01:18:435 (1,2) - ?
  29. 01:22:235 (2,1) - make (1) a bit more curved 'cause of it>http://puu.sh/9TRGT/2d4c7b2540.jpg .Also, would improve blanket with 01:24:035 (2) - (or overlap 01:24:035 (2) - with 01:22:835 (3) - )
  30. 01:24:035 (2) - make it symmetrical? i mean tail and head at the same X. So it connects better with 01:24:835 (1) -
  31. 01:26:035 (3,2) - same Y?
  32. 01:27:235 (2,1) - this blanket can be improved
  33. 01:28:635 (2,3) - same^
  34. 01:28:035 (1,3) - make (3) a bit more curved
  35. 01:29:635 (1) - start it at 01:28:035 (1) - tail
  36. 01:33:435 (2,3) - blanket?
  37. 01:35:035 (2) - a bit up ? >http://puu.sh/9TSr0/22200f04a8.jpg
  38. 01:35:235 (3,4,1) - align this? >http://puu.sh/9TUu5/ee4089bded.jpg
  39. 01:36:635 (2,4) - overlap correctly
  40. 01:37:035 (3,4,5) - also, you can rotate for like -5° and move 01:37:635 (1) - to keep the flow, looks better imo
  41. 01:38:235 (2,3) - improve blanket
  42. 01:39:235 (1,4) - ovelap correctly
  43. 01:40:835 (1,3,4) - - imrprove blanket > http://puu.sh/9TUQK/426ae7dba4.jpg
  44. 01:42:435 (1) - a bit up left for better blanket
  45. 01:43:035 (3) - this should end at x320
  46. 01:44:635 (4,5) - blankets >http://puu.sh/9TV74/1f36340435.jpg
  47. 01:45:635 (1,2,3,4) - It is not very symmtrical. Try to find the appriate place for (4) (x242 y74 maybe) >http://puu.sh/9TVF2/2e160ec0a1.jpg
  48. 01:46:235 (4,5) - blankets?
  49. 01:46:235 (4,2) - i dont know if you meant to be the same, but they aren't.
  50. 01:47:235 (1) - seems a bit less curved that It should be
  51. 01:47:835 (2,3) - improve blanket
  52. 01:50:835 (2) - make it symmetrical, same Y on tail and head?
  53. 01:56:635 (11,12,1) - you did this little curve on purpose?
  54. 02:09:635 (1,5,6,10) - align those?
  55. 02:11:835 (2,1) - ovelap correctly
  56. 02:12:435 (3) - improve blanket
  57. 02:15:635 (5,6,7) - a bit up?
  58. 02:16:035 (1) - up up, almost touching prev object
  59. 02:16:835 (3) - make the first part more curved 'cause of 02:16:635 (2) -
  60. 02:18:835 (3,1) - this doesnt look nice
  61. 02:18:835 (3) - maybe cover his tail behind 02:18:235 (2) - slide
  62. 02:20:835 (1) - should be at x280 imo
  63. 02:21:435 (2,4) - same Y?
  64. 02:22:835 (3,5) - improve this
  65. 02:23:235 (5) - second part is not straight (don't forget to align with this 02:23:835 (6) - after)
  66. 02:23:835 (6,1) - improve blanket
  67. 02:26:435 (3,4) - ^^
  68. 02:24:035 (1,2) - same X ?
  69. 02:27:235 (1,4) - dont touch each other
  70. 02:30:435 (1) - same Y on tail and head for better blanket
  71. 02:31:635 (4) - blanket
  72. 02:37:435 (3) - rotate it a bit like +8°
  73. 02:39:435 (5,6) - improve blanket
  74. 02:42:435 (3,4,1,3,5) - align this
  75. 02:42:835 (4,2,4,1) - same^^?
  76. 02:45:435 (3,4,5) - triangle? 02:46:235 (5) - move it to x160 y116 or so
  77. Anyways, 02:46:235 (5,1) - doesnt flow very well imo
  78. 02:46:435 (1,2) - blanket
  79. 02:48:235 (2,3,4) - align?
  80. 02:51:235 (1,2) - blanket
  81. 02:52:435 (5,1) - ^^
  82. 02:52:435 (5,2) - copy paste one of these
  83. 02:57:635 (1) - start at y160
  84. 03:04:835 (3) - move it to y154 'cause of 03:04:035 (1) -
  85. 03:04:835 (3,4,1) - align this >https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1777016
  86. 03:06:235 (2,4) - doesnt overlap correctly
  87. 03:07:035 (5,1) - they dont conect very well imo, try rotating 03:06:635 (3,4,5) - maybe
  88. 03:07:235 (1,2,3) - improve blankets?
  89. 03:08:835 (1,4) - overlap correctly
  90. 03:10:435 (1,3,4) - improve blankets
  91. 03:12:635 (3) - should end at y104 or move 03:13:135 (1,2,3,4,5) - to y102
  92. 03:13:535 (5,1) - move it to x316
  93. 03:14:235 (2) - maybe move it a bit down so 03:14:835 (3) - dont touch 03:13:635 (1) - ?
  94. 03:15:235 (1,2) - improve blanket
  95. 03:16:435 (3) - a bit differente like this >http://puu.sh/9U0cY/3fdf831762.jpg
  96. 03:18:035 (3) - this shape doesnt fit with the following slider?
  97. 03:21:635 (1,2,3,1) - align (1)? >https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1777058
  98. 03:22:835 (3,1) - blanket
  99. 03:24:435 (3,1) - move it a up left so, (1) is blanket of 03:23:835 (2) - Something like this >http://puu.sh/9U0wC/4b717722b5.jpg
That's all I got, Good luck <3

Ps:my english sucks
RandF
1,245 posts
Joined March 2013
RandF
M4M request :D

[General]
  1. if singer is vocaloid, artist should include composer "Autobahn". (ring suzune is very rare vocaloid~)
    :arrow: t/202584
  2. combocolor 1 and 2 are too similar to distinguish
[SB]
  1. title.png: 秋ノ風
  2. 01:30:435~01:31:235- SBload is more than 5.0x. that's unkind for low spec PC...
  3. 14.png: deep blue color is hard to see...
  4. 02:35:235~ "嗚呼" is not visible. layer's order is correct?
[Normal]
  1. 01:51:835 (2) - delete
  2. 02:12:835 (1,2,3) - i prefer to combine into 1 slider for easiest diff
  3. 02:19:235 (1,2,3) - ^
  4. 02:22:235 (3) - delete
  5. 02:35:635 (1) - a little difficult. I suggetst to move near the center
  6. 03:07:635- normal hitsound?
  7. 03:18:435 (2,1) - make symmetric
  8. 02:36:835 (1,2,1) - a little hard for easiest diff?
  9. 02:46:235 (2,1,2,1) - ^
  10. 02:52:835 (1,2,1) - ^
[Hard]
  1. 01:34:235 (4) - I prefer to delete
  2. 03:03:835 (4) - ^
[Lunatic]
  1. 01:23:235 (1,2) - blanket correctly
  2. 01:36:635 (2,4) - stack correctly
  3. 01:39:235 (1,4) - ^
  4. 02:27:235 (1,4) - avoid overlap
  5. 03:08:835 (1,4) - stack correctly
nice SB and fine mapping! ~☆
~Good Luck~
LucyS
301 posts
Joined January 2014
LucyS
Hello m4m

[Hard]
00:47:235 (2) - Move the last node to x164 y276, for better the blanket
00:49:235 (3) - Align correctly with 00:48:635 (2) Move third node to x340 y88.
00:54:435 (1) - Space here is a little awkward, try this http://puu.sh/ai5Xz/a5f115988d.jpg
01:40:835 (1) - same ^ move a little down
01:26:435 (2,3) - i suggest this here http://puu.sh/ai61C/664a18bba8.jpg
Fix the blanket: Move 01:56:435 (3) - to x360 y132
02:11:035 (7) - Delete this note? i think better
02:16:035 (1) - Move the middle node to y340.
02:40:835 (2,1) - So close...
03:10:435 (1) - Move one grid up
03:21:235 (3) - Fix the spacing

[Normal]
02:13:635 (4,1) - Fix this blanket
03:15:235 - My suggest: http://puu.sh/ai6SH/6dbaceb515.jpg
03:18:435 (2,1) - For more symmetry here, copy 03:18:435 (2) - and flip horizontally in place of 03:20:035 (1) .

[Lunatic]
01:19:035 (2,3) - Overlap awkward, disable the grid snap and move the middle node to x157 y116 and the last node to x216 y121
01:23:235 (1) - ^ move last node to x272 y144
01:29:235 (3) - ^ move middle node to x218 y287, last node to x185 y305
01:41:135 (2) - For you fix the blanket: move the middle node to x169 y132 and the last node to x227 y37.
03:26:035 (3) - Unstack this? looks awkward for me.

That's all, Good Luck!
Jaltzu
771 posts
Joined April 2013
Jaltzu
NORMAL
01:26:435 (2) - 'Center' this with 01:24:835 (1) so they look more symmetrical.
01:34:435 (1,2,1) - Fix this "double blanke". Slider 2 is a bit off.
01:52:035 (3,1) - Tweak this blanket too.

HARD
01:35:035 (2) - Make this overlap 01:34:435 (1) tail fully.
02:22:235 (3) - Too far from slider 2.
02:29:435 (2) - ↑↑Same, but only tiny error.
02:30:035 (4) - ↑↑
02:51:235 (1,4) - Tiny adjustment for stacking.
03:04:635 (2) - Same as the first comment on this diff.

LUNATIC
00:40:435 (4,5) - These circles don't flow really smoothly. Maybe move 00:40:435 (4,5) - a bit?
00:55:035 (2,4) - Stack correctly
01:36:635 (2,4) - ↑↑
02:11:835 (2,1) - ↑↑
02:41:635 (1) - You could move this so it overlaps 02:40:835 (2) - slider's head completely.
02:49:135 (6) - This circle is a bit confusing; slider 4 overlaps it partly => harder to read.
02:51:235 (1,2,3,4) - Maybe arrange these so that 02:51:835 (4) overlaps the head of 02:51:235 (1) ?
03:20:035 (1,2) - Make slider 1's tail and slider 2 a better blanket.

I'm mostly just nitpicking...

M4M
If this helps, consider it as m4m for my map.
If not, just ignore.
Modding just 1 or 2 diff is more than enough. Priority for the hardest one.

PS. I already made NM request in your queue, but it didn't fit to current slots. In case you wonder about that...
Thanks
xxdeathx
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xxdeathx
hi, m4m from your queue.

[Normal]
  1. HP drain -1 please, too high for normal
  2. 00:57:635 (1) - i really don't like this slider repeating on the red tick here. it's ignoring both the vocals and the beat on the white ticks, which you should really map on.
  3. 01:33:835 (3,4) - double 1/2 circles that aren't stacked are surprisingly hard to read compared to stacked ones that they're used in insanes. i recommend stacking these.
  4. 02:12:835 (1,2,3) - same as ^ but triples
  5. 02:13:635 (4,1) - starting point of (4) is closer to (1) than ending point for blanket
  6. 02:25:635 (1,1) - same thing i said earlier about mapping white ticks here, highly recommended
  7. 02:48:035 (1,2,3,4) - small things here: (1) and (4) aren't on the same y coordinate and (2) and (3) aren't the same x units away from their respective sliders
  8. 03:05:635 (2,1) - blanket is a bit far in the middle
  9. 03:07:635 (2,3) - if you move these next to each other, you'll see that they aren't exactly parallel
  10. 03:16:835 (1,2) - should blanket these
[Hard]
  1. HP drain -1? it's a little high
  2. 00:50:635 (4,5) - 00:52:835 (1,2,3) - stacked blankets kind of look weird when you're playing because of the way the game shifts stacked objects a little
  3. 01:35:035 (2) - move down a little to completely cover end of 01:34:435 (1) ?
  4. 01:42:835 (3,5) - can blanket
  5. 02:25:635 (1,3,1) - should make all of these the same shape
  6. 02:51:235 (1,2) - blanket can be improved
  7. 03:04:635 (2) - move up a little to completely cover end of 03:04:035 (1)
  8. 03:06:035 (3) - how about move this to the same x coordinate as 03:05:635 (1) so it's symmetrical with respect to an axis extending from the slider?
  9. 03:12:435 (3,5) - blanket
[Lunatic]
  1. OD8 is a little high for 4 star map
  2. 00:46:435 (1,2,3) - blanketing is a little off
  3. 00:49:435 (4,1) - ^
  4. 01:03:235 (9) -do you want toNC here because it's a lot of notes to stay consistent with 02:32:835 (1) -
  5. 01:23:235 (1,2) - improve blanket
  6. 01:31:635 (3,4) - middle of slider is too far for blanket
  7. 01:56:035 (5) - to keep up with the placement of the previous circles you can move (5) to (200, 152) but you'll have to change the stream that comes after or it'll go off the grid
  8. 02:16:035 (1) - the flow is a lot better if you move this to (288, 208) and maybe adjust the position of 02:16:635 (2,3)
  9. 02:18:835 (3,1) - overlap is kind of ugly, if you fully stack like 02:26:835 (4,1) or separate them it'll look better
  10. 02:23:835 (6,1) - nazi blanket, repeat arrow end is too far
  11. 02:30:235 (6,1) - i check blankets by using the approach circle of the object being blanketed like this http://puu.sh/aks9j/85831cb536.png
  12. 02:37:435 (3) - can blanket 02:36:835 (1)
  13. 02:49:635 (1,2) - improve this blanket
  14. 03:10:235 (5,1,2) - more nazi blanketing
it was hard to find issues with things like flow so i could only point out small aesthetic stuff like blankets >.<
Leorda
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Leorda
thx guys for your modpost

some mods from you guys are fixed~
Scorpiour
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Scorpiour
Hi there~~modding ticket~~

red - must be fixed
blue - highly recommend to consider
black - only suggestions

[General]
  1. -8ms to offset (27227), and don't forget your SB offset
  2. Add ZUN to tags
[Lunatic]
  1. 00:40:235 (2,3,4) - actually , this kinda triplet could be stack or make it like this:
    SPOILER
    also 00:41:035 (7,8,9) - , higher spacing may make here more neat
  2. 02:09:835 (2,3,4) - 02:10:635 (7,8,9) - ^
[Hard]
  1. 00:50:035 (3) - ctrl+g for better flow?
[Normal]
  1. 01:33:835 (3,4) - in think a 1/2 slider here is better
  2. 02:43:035 (2) - could be removed
  3. 02:46:235 (2) - ^
  4. 03:03:435 (3,4) - also suggest a slider here
That's all, call me back to recheck when you're ready~
Leorda
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Leorda
no change for Lunatic because it's fine

others are fixed
Scorpiour
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Scorpiour
[General]
  1. Inconsistent Uninherited Timing Point and Unsnapped Kiai
Leorda
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Leorda

Scorpiour wrote:

[General]
  1. Inconsistent Uninherited Timing Point and Unsnapped Kiai
done~
Scorpiour
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bubbled~~!!
Leorda
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Scorpiour wrote:

bubbled~~!!
arigato~
Beren
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Beren
ganbatte :D
jonathanlfj
Elite Mapper
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jonathanlfj
Happy Birthday!

[General]
i dont seen line.png used anywhere in the sb, maybe remove it?

[Normal]
Since this is the lowest difficulty for the set, try AR4 instead to make it easier to follow for newbies
00:57:627 (1) - whistle end? also normal sample on 00:58:827 (2)
01:28:027 (1) - this spinner has a note following too soon after it, i suggest you shorten it to 01:29:627 and add a note at 01:31:227 instead
01:47:227 (1,2,3) - would be cool symmetry if you could center this
02:25:627 (1,2,1,2) - same as 00:57:627 (1,2)
02:32:027 (1) - same as 01:28:027 (1)
02:48:027 (1,2,3,4) - try forming it like this:
SPOILER
02:57:627 (1) - same as 01:28:027 (1)
03:07:627 (2) - whistle end?

[Hard]
01:33:427 (2,3,4,1) - try forming a triangle pattern here, would look better
01:44:627 (3) - i would shorten this to 01:45:027 and add a note at 01:45:227, matches the music better
02:45:227 (2,3,4,5) - for some reason i found this back and forth pattern a but difficult to read (since the manual stack overlaps the slider body), you can try placing 02:45:827 (4) on 02:46:427 (1)
02:52:227 (3,4) - because of stack leniency this pattern doesn't look good under 02:51:227 (1), i would move it to x:172 y:160
03:15:227 (4) - do a NC here to make the 3/4 to 1/2 transition easier to read

[Insane]
For a song at this bpm i recommend using OD7 or 7.5, currently the long streams are accuracy killer since low bpm streams are harder to keep consistency
01:30:427 (1,2,3,4) - because of the way the music builds up here, i would give these more spacing, preferably not overlapping to also make them easier to follow:
SPOILER
02:40:027 (1) - whistle start?
02:47:427 (4,5) - this could throw off players since it plays very differently from 02:21:827 (4,5) which covers a similar rhythm. Having the two use the same rhythm would be much better
02:56:027 (1) - whistle start
02:58:427 (9) - forgot NC
03:13:527 (5,1) - was this offset intentional? plays a bit weird...

Thats about all, let me know afterwards
EDIT: oh snap i didnt see Scorpiour's bubble, i guess i can just rank it afterwards
Leorda
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all fixed

thx jonathanlfj
jonathanlfj
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HAPPY BIRTHDAY
Leorda
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arigato!! >.<
Lust
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Welcome back Leorda!
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HAPPY BIRTHDAY!
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riffy
Happy (late) birthday! ♥
Leorda
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thx Lust, Satellite and Bakari~

and yes, I'm back :D
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