Natsume Chiaki - Hikarakuyo · forum

O k a y u_old

Joined March 2013

O k a y u_old 2013-12-29T06:31:59+00:00

00:19:854 (6,7) - 建议按着细分的节奏来，滑条6在00:20:044 - 结束，00:20:139 - 这里接note7 - fixed
00:21:753 (1) - 理由同上。note移到 00:21:658 - 感觉好一些 - no 我覺得不改比較順;w;
00:23:272 (4) - ^ 。移到00:23:177 - - no ^
00:34:664 (3) - ^ 。移到00:34:570 - - no ^
00:40:171 (2,1) - 这个地方不太好，碎滑条个人感觉最好跟一下flow，00:40:171 (2) - 和00:39:791 (2) - 这两个短滑条可以考虑各自 ctrl+g 一下 - no
00:47:956 (3) - 移到00:47:861 - - fixed
00:50:139 - 可以考虑加个note - no
00:50:994 (3) - 移到00:50:899 - 或者嫌单一变成短滑条也可以 - no
01:01:816 (7) - 音开始的时间是01:01:911 - - fixed
01:03:810 (7) - 去掉，这个音比较刺耳 - no
01:08:082 (9) - 移到01:07:987 - - fixed
01:29:633 - 加note - fixed
01:32:386 (1) - 移到01:32:291 - - no

ZZHBOY

00:59:728 (1,2,3) - 一直跟vocal这里又不跟了违和建议改一下 - fixed
建议kiai部分加变速毕竟到了ex难度 - no ;w;個人不喜歡變速...

wantuole

一个小建议
00:09:601 (2) - 2的结尾落在00:08:462 (1,4) - 中点 blanket with 00:08:462 (1) - fixed
这样00:09:981 (1,2,1,2) - 这个对跳会舒服的多對跳;w;?
懒质量还行就不摸了回避一些排列上无意义的遮盖就好部分4个note+锐角跳要斟酌比较毁flow OK會注意orz

Thanks for mods

rinsukir

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TitleUnicode:飛花落葉 (Short Ver.)
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256,192,95804,12,4,98842,0:0:0:0:

抱歉吶之前要模擬考所以消失了一陣子;w;

Momochikun

1,926 posts

Joined October 2012

Momochikun 2013-12-31T05:44:20+00:00

Hey there ~ anyways.. really sorry for late

Here comes mod as requested on IMT

Pls keep in mind that i started this mod a few days ago.. my apologize if some issue
was doubled

[General]

It would be nice if you can add silent sliderslide, since some sound on the
slowpart of this music seems too noisy for me.
Consider adding "Okayu" into your tags, since it make people easier
to search for the GD's name. I doubt if someone want to typing o_k_a_y_u into the
search bar, they will probably typing it okayu instead.
Ai Bat said there're Incosistent in Kiai times on your diffs. It's
probably fine if GD'ers have different Kiai times. But according to the ranking
criteria, All diffs that you owned on the mapset should have consistent kiai times.
Take a look at this :
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[Insane]

00:02:006 (3,4) - This 3/4 rhytm spacing quite uncommon and it
may cause a confuse to some players if you use it right om the first part of the song.
For this stuff, i'd really recommend you to use circle instead at 00:02:006 - and use
a 3/4 repeat slider or 3/4 slider + 1/2 slider from 00:02:196 - . I also got some
ideas of pattern that you can use, see if you like it
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00:03:905 (2,3) - I'd suggest you to not skipping the instrument
here, this can be arranged better to follow the pitch at 00:04:000 - . Try to changing
00:03:905 (2) - into a note then start a 1/2 slider from 00:04:000 - should be a nicer
way to emphasizing it.
00:04:285 (4) - Quite ugly shape for my taste, you can bend this slider's middle
point slightly a bit down to create better transition to the next note. Since this form
seems too curve that didn't make a steady flow
00:11:500 (3) - This slider seems odd for me, the jump pattern suddenly comes to
awkward because the transition from (2) to (4) was broken of this weird's slider shape.
Shouldn't it be arranged on the opposite way ? Try bend the slider downwards that
pointing to the next slider like this to create neater pattern :
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00:12:449 (2,1) - Any reason for this anti-jump ? this can be weird to play since
the spacing between them isn't the same with 00:13:019 (2,1) - which clearly have same
pitch between them. Try to Ctrl + G 00:12:829 (1,2) - so the stop wouldn't be odd to
play. The pattern would be more comfortable imo
00:15:677 (5) - Another harsh pattern here, this slider's end was shaped downward
when the next note was on the upside of them. This kind of pattern would ruins the flow
and quite uncomfortable to play. I'd suggest you to bend this slider like (4) but on
the mirrored way to create steadier transition. Like this
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00:19:664 (1,3) - Eh.. isn't the NC should be switched here ? the (3) were stanza
and this pattern wasn't triplet. Any other reason behind this ?
00:19:854 (3) - Sounds boring for a clear 1/1 slider in a fun complex song like
this, how about replace this with a 1/2 slider with a triplet on the end to create it
more challanging ? with this rhytm you can also emphasize the vocal at 00:20:044 - and
00:20:139 - which might make more sense
00:22:892 (3) - The guitar pitch seems started here, It would really fit if you can
add finish on the head of this slider. This can accompany the increase of the rhytm
imo. Try to add and listen it
00:25:076 - Seems there're a vocal here, you can try to add circle here that stacked
with 00:25:171 (1) - 's sliders start to give more impact to the next slider stream
jump. As it's look boring if a stream jump doesn't started with a triplet or duplet.
Try it, the pattern would be more fun to play imo
00:29:253 (4,5) - I'm not a fan on this kind of bear anti jump on Insane diff to be
honest. This spacing near the same with the 1/3 rhytm before when this was spaced 1/2.
It would be nice if you can do a proper anti jump or use a correct DS instead of this
pattern, the smooth movement would be ruin here and i don't think that's comfortable to
play
00:35:424 (1,1) - The drum 1/4 rhytm on the music were still continued here, you can
add a whistle too to emphasize it. Since there'nt just clap that can be heared on the
music atm
00:50:899 - There're high beat vocal here, so Consider adding circle here to keep
consistency with the vocal emphasize that you had done until now. Also you can make
slider note slider pattern like you used before, see what's my suggestion about pattern
:

SPOILER
00:51:563 (8) - Hm.. why there's a clap here ? i can't hear any double drum attached
on the music. Is this unecessary clap placed as for intentional reason ? if you just
missclicked it then pls remove it
00:51:753 (9,1) - It would be more tidy if you can blanket them.. since current
pattern seems a bit messy for me due to the awkward jump from (8)
00:52:987 (4,5,6) - Nah.. you missed a clap on them didn't you ? the music were
providing such a clearly similiar sound with the drum that you emphasized with clap
before. Consider adding it instead
01:01:627 (3) - This would follow the vocal better if you shorten this into 3/4 and
add note at 01:02:006 - . Since this part wasn't exactly same at 01:00:867 (3) - when
the vocal was only landed on the high beat. So make it on the same rhytm either
symmetry would be a bit weird imo since the music was different
01:02:956 (3) - Just some natural thing here, but you can put this a bit far from
the next object since the next beat is high vocal, it sounds weird to play if you give
a jump at (2) but you didn't do that here
01:11:880 (3) - Again.. this kind of shape would suddenly ruins the flow because it
didn't good any transition that connected from the slight shape slider before and (4).
I'd really recommend you to bend the slider symmetry with (1) here to create neater
pattern. Current seems really odd to play.
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01:17:386 (1,3) - Same as 00:19:664 (1,3) -
01:23:652 (1) - Hm.. the first shape on this slider seems too edgy at the left side

that make bad form of this slider. Try arranging this slider a bit by moving the 2nd

anchor 1 - 2 grid to right, this can make it looks even prettier, look what i've do :3
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[Hard]

00:01:627 (1,2,3) - Same as insane before, you should know that
this rhytm will be so hard to read especially for novice players. But if you want to
keep it, it's clearly fine though i won't mention this anymore :3
00:05:519 (2,3) - Pls consider again why do you want to stack this, 3/4 spacing with
the note stacked seems a bit hard to read imo
00:07:038 - You should add circle here to keep consistency with the rhytm that you
use, since you always emphasizing the instrument on blue tick, it would ruin the
pattern if you skip this.
00:10:740 (1) - Try CTRL G this slider, the transition would be a lot better imo.
Since i can see that the slider's shape was well designed for CTRL G, the current
pattern has weird flow to follow during gameplay.
00:19:664 (1,2,1,3) - I didn't understand with your NC pattern here, why did you use
NC every one beat before downbeat ? is this intentional for a reset behind the downbeat
? this will keep confusing me since you can give more impact to the instrument if you
give the NC instead on the downbeat. i advise you to fix the combos intro into the
downbeat.
00:25:551 (9,1) - The way yo arranged this pattern seems ugly for my taste. It'd
would be better if you can blanket it instead or using a normal DS.
01:02:196 - Try adding a circle here ? it would keep the smooth play and keeping the
steady flow that you have during gameplay
01:04:095 (6) - Changing this into 2 circle instead of kick would give smoother
transition and following the music better instead. Because the blue tick on the repeat
slider was landed on nothing that maybe can be weird to follow during gameplay.
01:08:462 (6) - Consider not to stack with (4). It would be difficult for players to
read a stack between kickslider imo. I suggest you to moving somewhere else, create
triangle with (4) and (5) by moving it to similiar place with 196 220 would work nice
imo
01:26:690 (3,4) - This rhytm can be arranged better to following the vocal, i
suggest you to moving (4) 1/4 beat early and shorten it into 3/4 slider. then you can
add note at 01:27:449 - to keep following the drum. Then it would look like this :
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[Normal]

00:01:627 (1,1) - It would be neater if you can copy one of them and make
these sliders on the same shape with horizontal flip.
00:05:804 (2,1) - Intentional things.. but it would be a lot neater if you can
blanketing this instead.. current seems bear pattern to follow imo
00:08:842 (2) - This pattern can be a lot improved imo, if you change this into a
note and then start a 1/1 slider to follow that hold instrument from 00:09:221 - would
look more sense. Since using repeat point for downbeat seems a bit weird to play imo
00:16:437 - This part looks empty with the drum skipped, you can add circle here to
keep the steady flow and smooth transition between them
00:37:323 (2) - A stack on end would be greatly frustating and hard to read
especially on normal diff. This note has been appeared when you still following the

path on slider (1). I suggest you to use normal spacing instead
01:22:892 (4,1) - A 1/1 slider would be better instead to replace these note, since
you can keep emphasizing the vocal that make consistency with the previous 1/1 slider
that you used
01:26:690 (1,2,3) - This whole part plays awkwardly especially the end of slider's
(2) that you used to start a vocal hold that must be better to be the start of slider,
try replacing this with 2 1/1 slider instead to follow the vocal properly.

[Easy]

00:06:183 (4) - The slider's body is out of screen, and yeah

it's unrankable. you could move the middle point a bit up to avoid this.
00:13:778 (1,3) - I would not recommend you to using this kind of slider on easier diff, since the red point may affect the slider's ball movement a bit that can cause newbies to confused. Better use a normal shaped slider instead
01:08:462 (1,1) - This flowing really weird during gameplay.. how about changing the 2nd (1) to a simple straight slider instead to create smoother transition to follow ?
01:11:120 (2,1) - I'd be better if you unstack them, sometimes stack with different combo colour could be unreadable for newbies.

Well, mainly i just tell you the major issues on Hard Normal and Easy, yep i didn't say anything minor except in Insane. i think you can clearly understand what did i mean to create nice rhytm and flow by looking at my mod on Insane. I'd hope you can do better work on your next maps, but it's not too bad for the beginning map.
Good Luck on the way ~

rinsukir

385 posts

Joined March 2012

Topic Starter

rinsukir 2013-12-31T12:22:20+00:00

Momochikun

Momochikun wrote:

Hey there ~ anyways.. really sorry for late
Here comes mod as requested on IMT
Pls keep in mind that i started this mod a few days ago.. my apologize if some issue
was doubled Never mind :3

[General]
It would be nice if you can add silent sliderslide, since some sound on the
slowpart of this music seems too noisy for me. fix
Consider adding "Okayu" into your tags, since it make people easier
to search for the GD's name. I doubt if someone want to typing o_k_a_y_u into the
search bar, they will probably typing it okayu instead. fix
Ai Bat said there're Incosistent in Kiai times on your diffs. It's
probably fine if GD'ers have different Kiai times. But according to the ranking
criteria, All diffs that you owned on the mapset should have consistent kiai times.
Take a look at this : fix
SPOILER

[Insane]
00:02:006 (3,4) - This 3/4 rhytm spacing quite uncommon and it
may cause a confuse to some players if you use it right om the first part of the song.
For this stuff, i'd really recommend you to use circle instead at 00:02:006 - and use
a 3/4 repeat slider or 3/4 slider + 1/2 slider from 00:02:196 - . I also got some
ideas of pattern that you can use, see if you like it no, ~~this is my style~~
SPOILER
00:03:905 (2,3) - I'd suggest you to not skipping the instrument
here, this can be arranged better to follow the pitch at 00:04:000 - . Try to changing
00:03:905 (2) - into a note then start a 1/2 slider from 00:04:000 - should be a nicer
way to emphasizing it. fix in another way
00:04:285 (4) - Quite ugly shape for my taste, you can bend this slider's middle
point slightly a bit down to create better transition to the next note. Since this form
seems too curve that didn't make a steady flow fix?
00:11:500 (3) - This slider seems odd for me, the jump pattern suddenly comes to
awkward because the transition from (2) to (4) was broken of this weird's slider shape.
Shouldn't it be arranged on the opposite way ? Try bend the slider downwards that
pointing to the next slider like this to create neater pattern : changed (3) and (4) 's shape but no change jump
SPOILER
00:12:449 (2,1) - Any reason for this anti-jump ? this can be weird to play since
the spacing between them isn't the same with 00:13:019 (2,1) - which clearly have same
pitch between them. Try to Ctrl + G 00:12:829 (1,2) - so the stop wouldn't be odd to
play. The pattern would be more comfortable imo fix
00:15:677 (5) - Another harsh pattern here, this slider's end was shaped downward
when the next note was on the upside of them. This kind of pattern would ruins the flow
and quite uncomfortable to play. I'd suggest you to bend this slider like (4) but on
the mirrored way to create steadier transition. Like this fix
SPOILER
00:19:664 (1,3) - Eh.. isn't the NC should be switched here ? the (3) were stanza
and this pattern wasn't triplet. Any other reason behind this ? fix, you do not have to update my map to the last version..
00:19:854 (3) - Sounds boring for a clear 1/1 slider in a fun complex song like
this, how about replace this with a 1/2 slider with a triplet on the end to create it
more challanging ? with this rhytm you can also emphasize the vocal at 00:20:044 - and
00:20:139 - which might make more sense fix
00:22:892 (3) - The guitar pitch seems started here, It would really fit if you can
add finish on the head of this slider. This can accompany the increase of the rhytm
imo. Try to add and listen it fix
00:25:076 - Seems there're a vocal here, you can try to add circle here that stacked
with 00:25:171 (1) - 's sliders start to give more impact to the next slider stream
jump. As it's look boring if a stream jump doesn't started with a triplet or duplet.
Try it, the pattern would be more fun to play imo no
00:29:253 (4,5) - I'm not a fan on this kind of bear anti jump on Insane diff to be
honest. This spacing near the same with the 1/3 rhytm before when this was spaced 1/2.
It would be nice if you can do a proper anti jump or use a correct DS instead of this
pattern, the smooth movement would be ruin here and i don't think that's comfortable to
play fix
00:35:424 (1,1) - The drum 1/4 rhytm on the music were still continued here, you can
add a whistle too to emphasize it. Since there'nt just clap that can be heared on the
music atm fix
00:50:899 - There're high beat vocal here, so Consider adding circle here to keep
consistency with the vocal emphasize that you had done until now. Also you can make
slider note slider pattern like you used before, see what's my suggestion about pattern
: fix in another way

SPOILER
00:51:563 (8) - Hm.. why there's a clap here ? i can't hear any double drum attached
on the music. Is this unecessary clap placed as for intentional reason ? if you just
missclicked it then pls remove it 24clap..
00:51:753 (9,1) - It would be more tidy if you can blanket them.. since current
pattern seems a bit messy for me due to the awkward jump from (8) fix?
00:52:987 (4,5,6) - Nah.. you missed a clap on them didn't you ? the music were
providing such a clearly similiar sound with the drum that you emphasized with clap
before. Consider adding it instead no(
01:01:627 (3) - This would follow the vocal better if you shorten this into 3/4 and
add note at 01:02:006 - . Since this part wasn't exactly same at 01:00:867 (3) - when
the vocal was only landed on the high beat. So make it on the same rhytm either
symmetry would be a bit weird imo since the music was different ~~this is my style~~
01:02:956 (3) - Just some natural thing here, but you can put this a bit far from
the next object since the next beat is high vocal, it sounds weird to play if you give
a jump at (2) but you didn't do that here fix
01:11:880 (3) - Again.. this kind of shape would suddenly ruins the flow because it
didn't good any transition that connected from the slight shape slider before and (4).
I'd really recommend you to bend the slider symmetry with (1) here to create neater
pattern. Current seems really odd to play. fix
SPOILER
01:17:386 (1,3) - Same as 00:19:664 (1,3) - no
01:23:652 (1) - Hm.. the first shape on this slider seems too edgy at the left side

that make bad form of this slider. Try arranging this slider a bit by moving the 2nd

anchor 1 - 2 grid to right, this can make it looks even prettier, look what i've do :3 fix
SPOILER

[Hard]
00:01:627 (1,2,3) - Same as insane before, you should know that
this rhytm will be so hard to read especially for novice players. But if you want to
keep it, it's clearly fine though i won't mention this anymore :3 no, ~~this is my style~~
00:05:519 (2,3) - Pls consider again why do you want to stack this, 3/4 spacing with
the note stacked seems a bit hard to read imo no, ~~this is my style~~
00:07:038 - You should add circle here to keep consistency with the rhytm that you
use, since you always emphasizing the instrument on blue tick, it would ruin the
pattern if you skip this. no
00:10:740 (1) - Try CTRL G this slider, the transition would be a lot better imo.
Since i can see that the slider's shape was well designed for CTRL G, the current
pattern has weird flow to follow during gameplay. fix
00:19:664 (1,2,1,3) - I didn't understand with your NC pattern here, why did you use
NC every one beat before downbeat ? is this intentional for a reset behind the downbeat
? this will keep confusing me since you can give more impact to the instrument if you
give the NC instead on the downbeat. i advise you to fix the combos intro into the
downbeat. i follow lyrics
00:25:551 (9,1) - The way yo arranged this pattern seems ugly for my taste. It'd
would be better if you can blanket it instead or using a normal DS. no
01:02:196 - Try adding a circle here ? it would keep the smooth play and keeping the
steady flow that you have during gameplay fix
01:04:095 (6) - Changing this into 2 circle instead of kick would give smoother
transition and following the music better instead. Because the blue tick on the repeat
slider was landed on nothing that maybe can be weird to follow during gameplay. no
01:08:462 (6) - Consider not to stack with (4). It would be difficult for players to
read a stack between kickslider imo. I suggest you to moving somewhere else, create
triangle with (4) and (5) by moving it to similiar place with 196 220 would work nice
imo fix in another way
01:26:690 (3,4) - This rhytm can be arranged better to following the vocal, i
suggest you to moving (4) 1/4 beat early and shorten it into 3/4 slider. then you can
add note at 01:27:449 - to keep following the drum. Then it would look like this : no
SPOILER

[Normal]
00:01:627 (1,1) - It would be neater if you can copy one of them and make
these sliders on the same shape with horizontal flip. fix
00:05:804 (2,1) - Intentional things.. but it would be a lot neater if you can
blanketing this instead.. current seems bear pattern to follow imo no
00:08:842 (2) - This pattern can be a lot improved imo, if you change this into a
note and then start a 1/1 slider to follow that hold instrument from 00:09:221 - would
look more sense. Since using repeat point for downbeat seems a bit weird to play imo fix
00:16:437 - This part looks empty with the drum skipped, you can add circle here to
keep the steady flow and smooth transition between them fix
00:37:323 (2) - A stack on end would be greatly frustating and hard to read
especially on normal diff. This note has been appeared when you still following the

path on slider (1). I suggest you to use normal spacing instead fix
01:22:892 (4,1) - A 1/1 slider would be better instead to replace these note, since
you can keep emphasizing the vocal that make consistency with the previous 1/1 slider
that you used no
01:26:690 (1,2,3) - This whole part plays awkwardly especially the end of slider's
(2) that you used to start a vocal hold that must be better to be the start of slider,
try replacing this with 2 1/1 slider instead to follow the vocal properly. fix in another way

[Easy]
00:06:183 (4) - The slider's body is out of screen, and yeah

it's unrankable. you could move the middle point a bit up to avoid this. fix
00:13:778 (1,3) - I would not recommend you to using this kind of slider on easier diff, since the red point may affect the slider's ball movement a bit that can cause newbies to confused. Better use a normal shaped slider instead no
01:08:462 (1,1) - This flowing really weird during gameplay.. how about changing the 2nd (1) to a simple straight slider instead to create smoother transition to follow ? fix
01:11:120 (2,1) - I'd be better if you unstack them, sometimes stack with different combo colour could be unreadable for newbies. fix

Well, mainly i just tell you the major issues on Hard Normal and Easy, yep i didn't say anything minor except in Insane. i think you can clearly understand what did i mean to create nice rhytm and flow by looking at my mod on Insane. I'd hope you can do better work on your next maps, but it's not too bad for the beginning map.
Good Luck on the way ~

thanks for mod~

Okayu

O k a y u wrote:
抱歉吶之前要模擬考所以消失了一陣子;w;

updated :3
你們都要模擬考
順便: 00:20:234 - 建議加一個note
00:47:956 - ^
還有老前輩的意思是改了那個滑條后後面的對跳會感覺舒服得多不是要你改那個跳啦;w;
顺便thanks for star ><

Last edited by rinsukir 2014-01-12T08:54:26+00:00, edited 1 time in total.

Kioshinxs_old

Kioshinxs_old 2014-01-03T01:39:35+00:00

I can make a 2 diff in taiko? thanxs

rinsukir

385 posts

Joined March 2012

Topic Starter

rinsukir 2014-01-10T11:12:24+00:00

Kioshinxs wrote:
I can make a 2 diff in taiko? thanxs

sure, if your map has good quality :3
EDIT: if you can't finish 2 diff before Jan 14th, i think i can't add your diff in mapset, only add in creator's word QVQ

S o a p

359 posts

Joined March 2012

S o a p 2014-01-12T07:05:09+00:00

[General]
clap我觉得不合曲。还有我看了一下你音量几乎都100%，是因为clap声太小了？干脆换掉

[Okayu's Insane]
00:07:702 (1,2,1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,3,4) - 这边可以插绿线使声音从小变大
00:50:234 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - 你选中这一块看看【http://puu.sh/6i5PJ.jpg】，全都纠缠在一起，建议改得分散一点
01:07:323 (6) - 这里我搞不懂为啥间距会变大，要跳也应该是01:07:608 (7) - 这里开始吧

[Insane]
00:07:702 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4) - 插绿线声音从小变大
00:20:614 (5) - 重音，这里跳比后面那个6跳好

[Hard]
nothing to say

[Normal]
00:29:728 (2) - x:108 y:232
00:44:158 (1) - 这里00:46:627 - 或者00:46:437 -结束
01:08:462 (1) - 在上一个红线结束，或者去掉转盘改成滑条

[Easy]
nothing to say

然后美丽

rinsukir

385 posts

Joined March 2012

Topic Starter

rinsukir 2014-01-12T08:49:06+00:00

S o a p wrote:
[General]
clap我觉得不合曲。还有我看了一下你音量几乎都100%，是因为clap声太小了？干脆换掉
clap之前也找过除了这个没有合适的qwq 其实我整体音效声音都太小( 求送个合适的clap阿

[Okayu's Insane]
00:07:702 (1,2,1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,3,4) - 这边可以插绿线使声音从小变大 fix

[Insane]
00:07:702 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4) - 插绿线声音从小变大 fix
00:20:614 (5) - 重音，这里跳比后面那个6跳好 fix

[Hard]
nothing to say

[Normal]
00:29:728 (2) - x:108 y:232 fix
00:44:158 (1) - 这里00:46:627 - 或者00:46:437 -结束选择惹后者
01:08:462 (1) - 在上一个红线结束，或者去掉转盘改成滑条改成滑条惹

[Easy]
nothing to say

然后美丽

thanks for mod!

@okayu 你期末还没考完妈QwQ

Oracle

571 posts

Joined April 2012

Oracle 2014-01-14T00:30:32+00:00

Hi~
M4M From my queue
我不想把自己想法覆盖上去,都是suggestion,觉得不想用的可以全部ignore。但是红色字体是很严重的问题,建议改。

General
Song name"Hihana Ochiba (Short Ver.)"
不能出现short ver.这种括号备注。除非你找到了写有short ver.的曲源(专辑列表etc.)

grumd wrote:
If the official song title doesn't have "(Short Ver.)" in it, then you should not add it. Find a source that says that you need to use "Short Ver." or remove it.

音效,除了那个打拍子的鼓声以外其他custom音效我都没感觉出来。还以为没下...这曲用点soft whistle感觉很不错啊,现在的音效真的听不出。

Easy
00:16:816 (1,2) - 这两个在一起实在是不好看.. 复制个对称的如何..
00:33:525 (2,3) - Flow不好. 2把鼠标引向左边,然而3却在正下方,而且还是从右边滑入的。建议逆时针旋转一下3,并且把2尾巴稍微往下转一点。
00:37:323 (4) - empty
00:54:032 (1,2) - 做个blanket吧
01:22:892 (4) - 不太好看..
好多扭曲的slider,虽然不是unrankable,但是美观上。。建议还是拉规则点,00:13:778 (1) - 这种就不要出现了

Normal
00:03:145 (3) - NC,后面同样的节奏都NC了
00:10:361 (5,1) - Blanket
00:12:259 (1,2,3) - 对Normal来说太难读了间隔3/2。Distance上根本看不出。建议弄成slider
00:27:829 (4,5) - Flow难受,把5的reverse arrow往下转点
00:32:006 (1,2,3,4) - Normal下变spacing? 感觉没必要。变的值太小了,看起来像是放错spacing.
00:35:044 (1) - 这个弧度做圆一点
00:44:158 (1) - 在这里停00:46:816 - ,现在的地方4分音奏到一半，有点突兀。
01:11:500 (1,3) - 头弄好看点
01:23:652 (1,1) - ^而且为啥这里有NC了上面没有，请统一

Hard
SV有点低
00:07:038 - 前面这个音都有下节奏,这里却空拍了,而且突然跟了另一个音..
00:19:664 (1) - 放在00:18:715 (2) - 这个滑条的尾部不好么
00:33:145 (4,5) - spacing不对, 1.4突然变成1.3了
00:34:285 (2) - Ctrl+J再放回去. flows better
00:38:082 - 不在beat snap上的绿线,没记错的话是不允许的. 最少提前1/16
00:48:715 (5,6) - 没叠好 6移到280,263
00:59:918 (5,6) - spacing
有不少spacing不整齐的,不一一挑了
01:09:981 (1,2) - 弄到两个slider的头尾,4个圆都在同一直线上
01:16:816 (2,3,4,5) - flow 换成从2开始逆时针
01:21:373 (5,6,7) - 这个好,点赞
间距混乱._.

Insane
00:06:848 - 00:07:038 - 这两个拍都是有音的,要塞成stream.不然off
00:03:905 (2,3,4) - 我建议你统一间距啊,突然1.6,有点莫名
00:08:462 (4,5,6,7,1,2,3) - flow不好,两个选择。一个是00:08:842 (6,7) - Ctrl+G,另一个是00:09:221 (1,2,3) - Ctrl+J再放下来,并且稍微顺时针转一下。
00:09:981 (4,5,6,7,1) - 一样的问题,67对调
00:12:829 (1,2) - Ctrl+G
00:28:873 (2) - 往上移一点
后面大部分都是同类问题。基本上就是要多注意美观和flow。
另外,01:22:892 (1,1,1,1) - 多尴尬,你为何不用4个combo color呢?

Okayu's Insane
改成Okayu's Extra吧,两个Insane的难度差太多。
这是最难的diff,但是OD是7,相对简单的Insane却是8。对调如何。还有这Insane的跳密度,可以考虑上AR9了。
这个难度相对来说是整个mapset里最美观整齐的。但是
整张图的思路就是每句歌词的后半段放跳。Insane难度，有跳当然爽。但是这里很多的跳都是没踩到音乐的点的,打起来没有实感,也没有hitsound的支持。爽不起来。而且大跳小跳好像完全看心情..感觉为放跳而放跳。
因为整张图好像都差不多..没啥可以说的
btw,
00:40:171 (2,1) - 这个spacing太..完全破坏slider跳的节奏

多注意flow,I难度后半部分如果还要提这类建议可以in-game找.. 歌很带感,~~感觉像同时在听railgun+future gazer~~.加油
Star~Good luck!

SPOILER

~~_(:з」∠)_再也不写这么长的了,时间美丽~~

rinsukir

385 posts

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Topic Starter

rinsukir 2014-01-14T01:53:35+00:00

Oracle wrote:
Hi~
M4M From my queue
我不想把自己想法覆盖上去,都是suggestion,觉得不想用的可以全部ignore。但是红色字体是很严重的问题,建议改。

General
Song name"Hihana Ochiba (Short Ver.)"
不能出现short ver.这种括号备注。除非你找到了写有short ver.的曲源(专辑列表etc.) 感动终于有人提出来惹 fix

grumd wrote:
If the official song title doesn't have "(Short Ver.)" in it, then you should not add it. Find a source that says that you need to use "Short Ver." or remove it.

音效,除了那个打拍子的鼓声以外其他custom音效我都没感觉出来。还以为没下...这曲用点soft whistle感觉很不错啊,现在的音效真的听不出。唉这个音效也被人说了好多次我都是为了跟原曲阿.. fix in another way ~~突然发现默认音效打击感真是感人~~

Easy
00:16:816 (1,2) - 这两个在一起实在是不好看.. 复制个对称的如何.. fix
00:33:525 (2,3) - Flow不好. 2把鼠标引向左边,然而3却在正下方,而且还是从右边滑入的。建议逆时针旋转一下3,并且把2尾巴稍微往下转一点。fix
00:37:323 (4) - empty 啥?
00:54:032 (1,2) - 做个blanket吧咦做惹阿
01:22:892 (4) - 不太好看.. ~~this is my zz style~~
好多扭曲的slider,虽然不是unrankable,但是美观上。。建议还是拉规则点,00:13:778 (1) - 这种就不要出现了 en就是要把滑条拉成各种造型嘛(喂至于那个扭头的silder开头扭一下也不错嘛ww

Normal
00:03:145 (3) - NC,后面同样的节奏都NC了唉我的失误
00:10:361 (5,1) - Blanket 好像包好惹..
00:12:259 (1,2,3) - 对Normal来说太难读了间隔3/2。Distance上根本看不出。建议弄成slider 改成一个滑条一个单点
00:27:829 (4,5) - Flow难受,把5的reverse arrow往下转点fix
00:32:006 (1,2,3,4) - Normal下变spacing? 感觉没必要。变的值太小了,看起来像是放错spacing. 你书的对我放错惹
00:35:044 (1) - 这个弧度做圆一点你说哪个弧阿qwq
00:44:158 (1) - 在这里停00:46:816 - ,现在的地方4分音奏到一半，有点突兀。fix ~~离后面的note这么近没问题妈~~
01:11:500 (1,3) - 头弄好看点唉我不会扭
01:23:652 (1,1) - ^而且为啥这里有NC了上面没有，请统一唉我的失误

Hard
SV有点低我zz按某教程帖标配来的
00:07:038 - 前面这个音都有下节奏,这里却空拍了,而且突然跟了另一个音.. 压红梗
00:19:664 (1) - 放在00:18:715 (2) - 这个滑条的尾部不好么好好好
00:33:145 (4,5) - spacing不对, 1.4突然变成1.3了 fix
00:34:285 (2) - Ctrl+J再放回去. flows better fix
00:38:082 - 不在beat snap上的绿线,没记错的话是不允许的. 最少提前1/16 fix
00:48:715 (5,6) - 没叠好 6移到280,263 fix
00:59:918 (5,6) - spacing 我已经放弃全程ds惹..
有不少spacing不整齐的,不一一挑了
01:09:981 (1,2) - 弄到两个slider的头尾,4个圆都在同一直线上啥?
01:16:816 (2,3,4,5) - flow 换成从2开始逆时针小的不会
01:21:373 (5,6,7) - 这个好,点赞 thx :3
间距混乱._. 我已经放弃全程ds惹.-.

Insane
00:06:848 - 00:07:038 - 这两个拍都是有音的,要塞成stream.不然off 我跟的不是音乐a
00:03:905 (2,3,4) - 我建议你统一间距啊,突然1.6,有点莫名这个跳是不是大了点
00:08:462 (4,5,6,7,1,2,3) - flow不好,两个选择。一个是00:08:842 (6,7) - Ctrl+G,另一个是00:09:221 (1,2,3) - Ctrl+J再放下来,并且稍微顺时针转一下。三角打死不改后者有blanket懒转
00:09:981 (4,5,6,7,1) - 一样的问题,67对调 ^
00:12:829 (1,2) - Ctrl+G 感动终于有人支持我原来的摆法
00:28:873 (2) - 往上移一点 no
后面大部分都是同类问题。基本上就是要多注意美观和flow。
另外,01:22:892 (1,1,1,1) - 多尴尬,你为何不用4个combo color呢? fix, 我色盲不会选颜色(

Okayu's Insane
改成Okayu's Extra吧,两个Insane的难度差太多。fix
这是最难的diff,但是OD是7,相对简单的Insane却是8。对调如何。还有这Insane的跳密度,可以考虑上AR9了。唉有个人叫我改的ar8
这个难度相对来说是整个mapset里最美观整齐的。但是
整张图的思路就是每句歌词的后半段放跳。Insane难度，有跳当然爽。但是这里很多的跳都是没踩到音乐的点的,打起来没有实感,也没有hitsound的支持。爽不起来。而且大跳小跳好像完全看心情..感觉为放跳而放跳。我下音效很死板的阿待我去改改音效
因为整张图好像都差不多..没啥可以说的
btw,
00:40:171 (2,1) - 这个spacing太..完全破坏slider跳的节奏唉我先帮改一下好了把后面两组短滑条1和2都在时间轴上调换了位置

多注意flow,I难度后半部分如果还要提这类建议可以in-game找.. 歌很带感,~~感觉像同时在听railgun+future gazer~~.加油 (唉我等了这么久终于有人说像railgun惹)
Star~Good luck!
SPOILER
~~_(:з」∠)_再也不写这么长的了,时间美丽~~

thanks for mod, star and mutual~

~~等你上线我ingame找你阿~~

@okayu: 呜呜你不要美丽啊还有摸等你改啊qwq 顺便你回来之后要redownload一下..

Last edited by rinsukir 2014-01-16T04:43:58+00:00, edited 2 times in total.

Pandiar

391 posts

Joined February 2012

Pandiar 2014-01-14T16:16:14+00:00

Hi~ from my Q XD
sorry to late

[General]
uncheck widescreensup

[Normal]
00:23:652 (4) - may better flow

SPOILER

00:32:766 (2) - ^
01:14:538 (1) - NC?
01:31:247 (3) - same as 00:23:652 (4)

[Hard]
00:44:158 ~ 00:46:437 - where is spinner?

[Insane]
00:07:038 - add note?
00:08:652 (5) - more jump? about x336 y240
00:44:158~00:46:816 - spinner time?

[Okayu's Extra]

looks fine

but NC is too random in Insane and Extra
maybe it is pointed out when BAT checked so take care
i think NC is fit in the white line or turn of the melody
but nice map ! shot star

good luck!

rinsukir

385 posts

Joined March 2012

Topic Starter

rinsukir 2014-01-15T00:49:29+00:00

Pandiar wrote:
Hi~ from my Q XD
sorry to late

[General]
uncheck widescreensup fix

[Normal]
00:23:652 (4) - may better flow fix
SPOILER
00:32:766 (2) - ^ fix
01:14:538 (1) - NC? fix
01:31:247 (3) - same as 00:23:652 (4) fix

[Hard]
00:44:158 ~ 00:46:437 - where is spinner? fix in another way

[Insane]
00:07:038 - add note? no
00:08:652 (5) - more jump? about x336 y240 no
00:44:158~00:46:816 - spinner time? fix

but NC is too random in Insane and Extra
maybe it is pointed out when BAT checked so take care
i think NC is fit in the white line or turn of the melody
but nice map ! shot star

good luck!

thanks for mod and star~

Nymph

osu! Alumni

3,243 posts

Joined December 2010

Nymph 2014-01-15T08:26:10+00:00

基本上可以了说一些可以提高的地方:
排列上的话有不少细节可以提高比方说一部分flow 还有一部分摆法可以更美观一些顺便有一些梗略重复基本是一眼就能看出来这个东西在来回用了好几次虽然不是什么问题但是有很多方法可以让类似的梗用起来不会给人一模一样的感觉

hitsound其实我个人不是特别喜欢这种爆发感不够的finish 因为不是很容易听出来...不过也不是啥问题

因为没有啥个别的问题所以我就讲了点概念如果能启发你一下的话你可以试着改改如果你觉得不需要修改了的时候就告诉我一下

rinsukir

385 posts

Joined March 2012

Topic Starter

rinsukir 2014-01-15T10:16:41+00:00

Nymph wrote:
基本上可以了说一些可以提高的地方:
排列上的话有不少细节可以提高比方说一部分flow 还有一部分摆法可以更美观一些顺便有一些梗略重复基本是一眼就能看出来这个东西在来回用了好几次虽然不是什么问题但是有很多方法可以让类似的梗用起来不会给人一模一样的感觉

hitsound其实我个人不是特别喜欢这种爆发感不够的finish 因为不是很容易听出来...不过也不是啥问题

因为没有啥个别的问题所以我就讲了点概念如果能启发你一下的话你可以试着改改如果你觉得不需要修改了的时候就告诉我一下

重复梗什么的你书的是哪个难度QwQ
总之太感谢惹!!!1! 妮妮窝爱妮<3

sammy711

207 posts

Joined November 2012

sammy711 2014-01-17T06:47:26+00:00

看来我来晚了>.>
都要泡了我就不摸了...
欠了你一个mod

Nymph

osu! Alumni

3,243 posts

Joined December 2010

Nymph 2014-01-17T06:51:25+00:00

作为第一个图算及格吧做下一张图的时候可以注意一下排版的美观还有细节的处理等等

rinsukir

385 posts

Joined March 2012

Topic Starter

rinsukir 2014-01-17T07:25:12+00:00

妮妮 thank you very much ><

sammy711 wrote:
看来我来晚了>.>
都要泡了我就不摸了...
欠了你一个mod

猴下次开新坑找你摸图

Zero__wind

osu! Alumni

3,314 posts

Joined August 2012

Zero__wind 2014-01-17T10:07:00+00:00

看到文明先锋又泡了华语新人图

Insane当然还是有很多提升空间的
不过ENH都做得不错鼓励一下

rinsukir

385 posts

Joined March 2012

Topic Starter

rinsukir 2014-01-17T10:24:18+00:00

Zero__wind wrote:
看到文明先锋又泡了华语新人图

Insane当然还是有很多提升空间的
不过ENH都做得不错鼓励一下

哇感谢鼓励我会继续努力的>w<
文明先锋www

O k a y u_old

29 posts

Joined March 2013

O k a y u_old 2014-01-18T08:43:04+00:00

S o a p

00:50:234 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - 你选中这一块看看【http://puu.sh/6i5PJ.jpg】，全都纠缠在一起，建议改得分散一点 fix
01:07:323 (6) - 这里我搞不懂为啥间距会变大，要跳也应该是01:07:608 (7) - 这里开始吧 fix

rinsukir

osu file format v12

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256,192,95804,12,4,98842,0:0:0:0:

sorry最近模擬考完就是段考...快考高中了qwq
沒有寒假orz

rinsukir

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rinsukir 2014-01-18T09:18:05+00:00

O k a y u wrote:
sorry最近模擬考完就是段考...快考高中了qwq
沒有寒假orz

好可怕..我也快考高中惹还是有寒假o.o
已经泡惹上传会戳泡所以不能更新了抱歉/w\

Narcissu

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Narcissu 2014-01-21T03:11:13+00:00

我想说我好像在很久前看过这个图然后点了fav……（捂脸

据说给泡图射星是zz……喵~~

rinsukir

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rinsukir 2014-01-21T03:48:04+00:00

zengdaen wrote:
我想说我好像在很久前看过这个图然后点了fav……（捂脸

据说给泡图射星是zz……喵~~

zz就zz吧感谢射星><
我zz还以为有bat来check了

O k a y u_old

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Joined March 2013

O k a y u_old 2014-01-25T05:42:24+00:00

rinsukir wrote:
好可怕..我也快考高中惹还是有寒假o.o
已经泡惹上传会戳泡所以不能更新了抱歉/w\

恩沒關係:3
有寒假真好Orz...

Low

2,006 posts

Joined July 2011

Low 2014-02-14T22:04:24+00:00

from PM request

[General]
the title romanisation is totally wrong... should be "Hikarakuyo" 0.0
hikarakuyo translates to "flying flowers falling leaves" so add that to tags
the combo colors on the easy diff are slightly different, fix that please
the kiai times are also slightly different... fix that too
soft-hitwhistle2.wav and soft-hitwhistle3.wav are both not needed, they are the default whistle sound. delete them from the folder
i could move the title text to the end of this spinner 00:38:082 (1) for you, looks nice

[Easy]
00:04:664 (3) - NC, music changes a little here and this combo is too long
00:08:462 (2) - why is there a random clap on the start of this slider? you don't put a clap anywhere else in this section, so use a whistle to be consistent
00:33:525 (2) - add whistles to this slider
00:35:044 (3) - should be an NC here
01:16:057 (3) - curve this slider like this, looks a lot better to me together with the next slider

SPOILER

[Normal]
00:07:702 (1) - remove the clap on this slider for same reason as easy diff
00:28:968 (1) - curve this slider like this, looks better together with the next slider

SPOILER

00:54:032 (2) - this red node slider seems out of place. make it a smooth curve
01:07:702 (4) - should be a whistle at the start of this slider

[Hard]
00:20:234 (3) - curve it up like this?

SPOILER

00:24:411 (6) - NC here, this combo is too long and inconsistent
01:05:044 (1,2) - unstack (1), looks weird.
01:11:120 (1) - remove NC. it is inconsistent with 00:13:399 (3).
01:22:133 (7) - NC here again
01:29:728 (2) - curve this slider like this to blanket 01:28:968 (4), would look neat

SPOILER

[Insane]
00:58:209 (2) - missing a clap at the start of this slider
01:02:386 (1) - maybe curve this a little?
very creative diff

[Okayu's Extra]
why are the HP and OD setting lower than Insane...? please make them the same or higher..
00:13:019 (2) - clap at the start of this slider
00:52:133 (2,3) - ugly overlap

rinsukir

385 posts

Joined March 2012

Topic Starter

rinsukir 2014-02-15T04:28:15+00:00

Low wrote:
from PM request

[General]
the title romanisation is totally wrong... should be "Hikarakuyo" 0.0 fix
hikarakuyo translates to "flying flowers falling leaves" so add that to tags fix
the combo colors on the easy diff are slightly different, fix that please fix
the kiai times are also slightly different... fix that too fix
soft-hitwhistle2.wav and soft-hitwhistle3.wav are both not needed, they are the default whistle sound. delete them from the folder fix
i could move the title text to the end of this spinner 00:38:082 (1) for you, looks nice ok!

[Easy]
00:04:664 (3) - NC, music changes a little here and this combo is too long fix
00:08:462 (2) - why is there a random clap on the start of this slider? you don't put a clap anywhere else in this section, so use a whistle to be consistent fix
00:33:525 (2) - add whistles to this slider fix
00:35:044 (3) - should be an NC here fix
01:16:057 (3) - curve this slider like this, looks a lot better to me together with the next slider fix
SPOILER

[Normal]
00:07:702 (1) - remove the clap on this slider for same reason as easy diff fix
00:28:968 (1) - curve this slider like this, looks better together with the next slider fix
SPOILER
00:54:032 (2) - this red node slider seems out of place. make it a smooth curve fix
01:07:702 (4) - should be a whistle at the start of this slider fix

[Hard]
00:20:234 (3) - curve it up like this? fix
SPOILER
00:24:411 (6) - NC here, this combo is too long and inconsistent fix
01:05:044 (1,2) - unstack (1), looks weird. fix
01:11:120 (1) - remove NC. it is inconsistent with 00:13:399 (3). fix
01:22:133 (7) - NC here again fix
01:29:728 (2) - curve this slider like this to blanket 01:28:968 (4), would look neat fix
SPOILER

[Insane]
00:58:209 (2) - missing a clap at the start of this slider fix
01:02:386 (1) - maybe curve this a little? fix
very creative diff

[Okayu's Extra]
(Okayu can't play osu so I help her to fix this.)
why are the HP and OD setting lower than Insane...? please make them the same or higher.. fix
00:13:019 (2) - clap at the start of this slider fix in another way
00:52:133 (2,3) - ugly overlap fix

thanks for mod~

Low

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Joined July 2011

Low 2014-02-15T16:40:09+00:00

one kiai in hard is off by 1 ms, doesn't matter though really. rebubbled for now due to many changes made

rinsukir

385 posts

Joined March 2012

Topic Starter

rinsukir 2014-02-16T06:34:45+00:00

thank you Low :3

Kamio Misuzu

580 posts

Joined November 2012

Kamio Misuzu 2014-03-02T07:49:16+00:00

泡了这么久还不rank啊= =。。。Go

BeatofIke

4,166 posts

Joined September 2011

BeatofIke 2014-03-03T22:33:03+00:00

I guess fix the unsnapped timing section in Hard 01:23:651 like Low mentioned. Re-snap it to 01:23:652.
Also, your Preview Time is unsnapped for all difficulties. Re-snap it to 01:10:740 (71040).
Fix this and I'll rank!

Mei

1,053 posts

Joined March 2012

Mei 2014-03-04T16:05:58+00:00

瞎了送上门的rank，读书狗快回来改图

rinsukir

385 posts

Joined March 2012

Topic Starter

rinsukir 2014-03-08T11:58:05+00:00

Sry for late reply../cry

BeatofIke wrote:
I guess fix the unsnapped timing section in Hard 01:23:651 like Low mentioned. Re-snap it to 01:23:652.
Also, your Preview Time is unsnapped for all difficulties. Re-snap it to 01:10:740 (71040).
Fix this and I'll rank!

EDIT: all fixed thank you~

Kamio Misuzu wrote:
泡了这么久还不rank啊= =。。。Go

泡了这么久终于有人回复感动/cry

Mei wrote:
瞎了送上门的rank，读书狗快回来改图

我住校摸不到电脑/cry 明天再说wuwu

Akabato

207 posts

Joined October 2013

Akabato 2014-03-08T16:30:36+00:00

看樣子快了，好啊，快rank rank!~

BeatofIke

4,166 posts

Joined September 2011

BeatofIke 2014-03-08T23:20:08+00:00

You forget to set the Preview time for ALL difficulties. You only did it on Hard difficulty.
Set the preview time to 01:10:740 (71040) in all difficulties.

The preview time must be the same for all difficulties!

rinsukir

385 posts

Joined March 2012

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rinsukir 2014-03-09T01:24:59+00:00

BeatofIke wrote:
You forget to set the Preview time for ALL difficulties. You only did it on Hard difficulty.
Set the preview time to 01:10:740 (71040) in all difficulties.

The preview time must be the same for all difficulties!

ok, fixed~