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Natsume Chiaki - Hikarakuyo

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Xinchii
1,240 posts
Joined January 2011
Xinchii
Hihi~ from pm req ~

不好意思拖了有點久 :?

[Oyaku's Insane]
  1. 00:03:525(2,3) - 用Slider把這二個連起來 ? 像00:02:006(2) - 和 00:05:044(2) - 因為節奏相似 , 感覺會比較整齊些
  2. 00:11:120(2) - 建議Ctrl + C複製00:10:740(1) - 這個Slider , 再旋轉180度尾端重疊00:09:981(1,1) -的位置
    SPOILER
    會型成一個比較圓滑的flow , 接續下一個Note也會比較順暢
  3. 00:15:202 - 不跟歌詞做3連打嗎:O?
  4. 00:27:354 - ^
  5. 00:28:873 - ^ , 這邊的歌聲比較強烈 , 所以比前2個更推薦使用3連打
  6. 00:58:209(2,3,4,5) - 比較建議讓(3)跟(2),(4)跟(5)對調
    SPOILER
    因為00:57:829(1) - 這個Slider是向右側彎的 , 這一系列的跳的起頭設在順著Slider的方向 , flow會好一些 , 讀起來和移動會比較無壓力
    (但是修改這條的話 , 後面的連打開頭的位置還會需要些調整
    不過還是推薦修改就是了)
[Insane]
  1. 00:12:829(1) - 設個NC幫助讀圖?
  2. 00:13:399(1) - ^
  3. 00:27:449(3,4) - Slider可以包好一些
    SPOILER
  4. 00:31:911 - 也不跟歌詞做3連打嗎:O?
  5. 01:01:627 - 建議複製01:00:867(3) - 這個Slider再翻轉180度設在這個位置 , 會對稱得比較整齊
  6. 01:10:551(1) - 設個NC幫助讀圖?
  7. 01:11:120(1) - ^
  8. 01:16:057(1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 這段的跳在(2)-(3)這段是比較大的 , 讓後面的跳感覺會有點縮起來的感覺 , 通常漸層性的加大或縮小跳的間距會比較有理
    嗯.....
    類似這樣:
    SPOILER

    做個參考
[Hard]
  1. 00:06:943(2,3,4,5,1) - 這段五角型好像可以調得標準些
    SPOILER

一些建議供參考 , 希望能夠幫上你 :)

Good luck ~ !
O k a y u_old
29 posts
Joined March 2013
O k a y u_old
Sharlo
[Okayu's Insane]
为什么我觉得SV好像有点快 - ;w;...
- On less than 15s ;w;?
00:24:032 (2) - 我认为这个跳有点莫名, 因为音乐上并没有什么强调,建议DS小一点 - fix
00:35:044 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - 我觉得摆得不怎么好看... - fix 怎麼擺才算好看啊;w;...
00:38:082 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 这么长连的话还是建议摆个比较平滑的曲线... - No 說真的我不會擺平滑的曲線...
01:03:430 这里的重拍很强, 被slider盖住似乎不怎么好, 滑条还是从这里开始吧:D 然后前面换成3连 - fix
01:05:044 (4,5,6,7,8) - 这种形状的stream是随意摆的吗... - 嗯...
01:15:297 (1,2,1) - 我觉得这个图存在很多这样的问题. 比如前面是1/4空拍, 后面是1/2空拍, 可你却用了看起来差不多的DS, 这不利于读图. 如果你前面想跳, 那后面也这么跳比较好. - fix
01:34:854 (4) - 这里开始可以再加点节奏. - No

Mei
[Okayu's Insane]

* 00:10:361 (1) - miss a clap there - fix

* 00:15:202 since you missed vocal there, i suppoese you to move 00:15:108 (2) - on to the head of slider and add a note on this timepoint. meanwhile this also help you to keep same with 00:16:627 (4,5,6) - there - fix

* 00:17:861 (3) - no reason for this long slder, change it to 1/2 slider - why not...

* 00:21:373 (5) - i personally like to add finsih there(head of slider) - fix

* 00:22:892 (3) - ^ - fix

* 00:23:652 (2) - ^ - fix

* 00:24:411 (2) - ^ - fix

* 00:28:968 (1,2) - maybe try this rythum and it can help you to set hitsounds properly - No

* 00:29:728 (1,2) - same ^ - No

* 00:32:766 (3) - finish onto head - fix

* 00:34:285 (1) - finish - fix

* 00:50:234 (1) - finish onto head - fix

* 00:53:272 (5) - nc - fix

* 00:56:310 (1) - finish onto head - fix

* 00:58:968 (1) - no reason for finish there, remove it - fix

* 01:03:430 (5,1) - just remove this two clap - ..?

* 01:05:424 (8) - finish - fix

* 01:11:785 (3) - remove clap - fix

* 01:14:538 (6,7) - change rythum to this - No

* 01:15:297 (1,2) - ^ - No

* 01:17:861 (5,5) - remove clap those you used will make people feel the slider apperas kind earlier than it should be - fix

* 01:20:614 (6,7,1,2) - - No

* 01:31:247 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - no reason for big jump there - fix a little

leon1341414
[Oyaku's Insane]
[list]00:03:525(2,3) - 用Slider把這二個連起來 ? 像00:02:006(2) - 和 00:05:044(2) - 因為節奏相似 , 感覺會比較整齊些 - fix
00:11:120(2) - 建議Ctrl + C複製00:10:740(1) - 這個Slider , 再旋轉180度尾端重疊00:09:981(1,1) -的位置 - fix
SPOILER
會型成一個比較圓滑的flow , 接續下一個Note也會比較順暢
00:15:202 - 不跟歌詞做3連打嗎:O? - fix
00:27:354 - ^ - fix
00:28:873 - ^ , 這邊的歌聲比較強烈 , 所以比前2個更推薦使用3連打 - fix
00:58:209(2,3,4,5) - 比較建議讓(3)跟(2),(4)跟(5)對調 - fix
SPOILER
因為00:57:829(1) - 這個Slider是向右側彎的 , 這一系列的跳的起頭設在順著Slider的方向 , flow會好一些 , 讀起來和移動會比較無壓力
(但是修改這條的話 , 後面的連打開頭的位置還會需要些調整
不過還是推薦修改就是了)

感謝MOD :D

rinsukir
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rinsukir
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rinsukir
Sharlo:
SPOILER

Sharlo wrote:

yooooo 我来啦>3<

[General]
所有难度的Tags要统一

[Hard]
00:13:778 (1) - 没有加速的必要 fix
00:54:981 (2,3) - 唔...个人不喜欢Hard放2连, 只是个人.. fix
01:13:019 (5) - 如果前面那个slider要加速那这个也一起加速吧(我认为在这里加速用x1.25就够了没必要x1.5) 取消了全部加速

[Insane]
我觉得整个图对DS的把握都不太好... 我zz实在是不会作图orz
AImod
00:05:234 (3) - 一样的节奏上一个note是跳这一跳不跳, 感觉不好读, 不如 no
collapsed text
00:12:829 (3) - DS太近 加了nc 应该好读一点
00:10:740 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - 我觉得这么摆似乎太鬼畜...这歌应该不至于这么鬼畜... fix
00:35:044 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 既然是两个不同人做的Insane难度那在stream上区分一下排列比较好 fix, 我不会摆stream所以才抄的a
不好意思, 出于各种原因我拒绝做SB, 对不起 ;w; 唉
最后祝早日rank>w<

leon1341414:
SPOILER

leon1341414 wrote:

Hihi~ from pm req ~

不好意思拖了有點久 :?

[Insane]
  1. 00:12:829(1) - 設個NC幫助讀圖? fix
  2. 00:13:399(1) - ^ fix
  3. 00:27:449(3,4) - Slider可以包好一些 fix
    collapsed text
  4. 00:31:911 - 也不跟歌詞做3連打嗎:O? 懒改((
  5. 01:01:627 - 建議複製01:00:867(3) - 這個Slider再翻轉180度設在這個位置 , 會對稱得比較整齊 fix
  6. 01:10:551(1) - 設個NC幫助讀圖? fix
  7. 01:11:120(1) - ^ fix
  8. 01:16:057(1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 這段的跳在(2)-(3)這段是比較大的 , 讓後面的跳感覺會有點縮起來的感覺 , 通常漸層性的加大或縮小跳的間距會比較有理 fix
    嗯.....
    類似這樣:
    collapsed text

    做個參考
[Hard]
  1. 00:06:943(2,3,4,5,1) - 這段五角型好像可以調得標準些 fix
    collapsed text

一些建議供參考 , 希望能夠幫上你 :)

Good luck ~ !

thanks for mod! :)


Mei:
SPOILER

Mei wrote:

噗我居然忘了，现在才想起来骚瑞ヾ(´･ω･｀)ﾉ
as your pm request
and mod are all suggestions , if you find something you think not stand for you just ignore


[Okayu's Insane]

uccu 写英文怀疑会被无视((


[Insane]

* 00:23:177 (4,2) - 不要这个clap，你这个滑条在跟人声但2，4clap是更节奏的你这样下我有点混乱。后面也是不多说了 fix

* 00:56:975 (3) - 这个whistle也不要 fix

* 00:58:589 (1) - 这个finish不对但是后面倒是缺一个finish‘ 后面白线? 加了

* 01:05:234 (1) - nc fix

* 01:21:373 (5) - 这里也finish fix

* 01:22:892 (1) - 这里也finish，后面长滑条的finish我觉得可以删掉 fix, 好多finish lol

* 01:34:854 (1,2,3) - 这里所有的音效都删掉 fix


[hard]

* 00:09:221 (1,2) - 虽然你是更节奏来的而且ds也没问题，但我觉得·还是换下nc fix

* 00:16:627 (1,2) - 换nc fix

* 00:17:576 (4) - nc，其实这里可以做个跳或者折返 fix

* 00:18:335 (6) - 这里也是可以跳一下 fix

* 00:19:759 可以加个note hard不打算放连打

* 00:20:614 (4) - 这里的话我建议是吧后面的5删掉从这里直接一个长滑条过去 换成长滑条不好放a

* 00:30:487 (5,6) - 这里建议用滑条 fix

这么多mod低难度就不看了（懒_(:зゝ∠)_

总体来说的话，这图我感觉可以做成https://osu.ppy.sh/s/54289 ar9加小跳加中等距离ds的连打会比较爽
hard的话太严格按照ds做了，缺乏变化，我感觉是不太好，根据歌曲做出点跳啊会更好 唉 关了ds就不会作图惹

很用心的图｡･ω･ノ☆加油顺便求mucry你没mu我

thanks for mod and star! :) mei快点mu我啦

@Okayu: updated, and thx for the star :3
Kamio Misuzu
580 posts
Joined November 2012
Kamio Misuzu
[Okayu's Insane]

00:19:854 (6,7) - 建议按着细分的节奏来，滑条6在00:20:044 - 结束，00:20:139 - 这里接note7
00:21:753 (1) - 理由同上。note移到 00:21:658 - 感觉好一些
00:23:272 (4) - ^ 。移到00:23:177 -
00:34:664 (3) - ^ 。移到00:34:570 -
00:40:171 (2,1) - 这个地方不太好，碎滑条个人感觉最好跟一下flow，00:40:171 (2) - 和00:39:791 (2) - 这两个短滑条可以考虑各自 ctrl+g 一下
00:47:956 (3) - 移到00:47:861 -
00:50:139 - 可以考虑加个note
00:50:994 (3) - 移到00:50:899 - 或者嫌单一变成短滑条也可以
01:01:816 (7) - 音开始的时间是01:01:911 -
01:03:810 (7) - 去掉，这个音比较刺耳
01:08:082 (9) - 移到01:07:987 -
01:29:633 - 加note
01:32:386 (1) - 移到01:32:291 -

[Insane]

00:31:911 - 加个note
00:32:671 - ^
00:34:570 (3,4) - 建议合并成一个长滑条，毕竟这里有个长音
01:09:791 - 和01:09:886 - 加note，转盘一结束加这个短滑条不太好接，加个三连比较舒服，顺便还有音
01:30:392 - 加note

[Hard]

00:15:108 (2) - 改成短滑条吧
00:14:728 - 和00:16:247 - 这两个音是一样的，要么都加note，要么都去掉
00:23:177 (2) - 改成短滑条00:23:082 - 开始 00:23:177 - 结束（很多类似的节奏都可以这么改，单纯的一个note不好点而且节奏会漏拍）
00:26:880 - 和00:28:399 - 同步
00:28:968 (1) - 这个滑条下面压的音和00:29:728 (3,4) - 这两个滑条转接的时候的音是一样的，还是尽量保持同步，不然感觉会很突兀。可以考虑00:30:013 (4) - 这个滑条起始点放到00:30:108 - 在00:30:297 - 处结束
00:54:981 (2) - 去掉
00:57:070 (4) - 起始点拉到00:56:975 -

[Normal]

没发现问题

[Easy]

没发现问题

[General]

主要问题感觉还是Hard难度的节奏问题，前后经常不统一，同样类型的音，时而紧时而缓，感觉有点不太顺手。insane的跳打起来稍微有点无力，可能是跳的距离和本身的滑条速度不太适合吧，感觉滑条速度快一点会更好（当然我只是说说= =，大概也是我个人的错觉啦。。

顺便求个mu =w=
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir

kanon_sayuri wrote:

[Insane]

00:31:911 - 加个note 不知道往哪放
00:32:671 - ^ ^
00:34:570 (3,4) - 建议合并成一个长滑条，毕竟这里有个长音 4那里有个重音哦..
01:09:791 - 和01:09:886 - 加note，转盘一结束加这个短滑条不太好接，加个三连比较舒服，顺便还有音 不是很想加((
01:30:392 - 加note 不知道往哪放

[Hard]

00:15:108 (2) - 改成短滑条吧 不是很想放太多1/4
00:14:728 - 和00:16:247 - 这两个音是一样的，要么都加note，要么都去掉 fix
00:23:177 (2) - 改成短滑条00:23:082 - 开始 00:23:177 - 结束（很多类似的节奏都可以这么改，单纯的一个note不好点而且节奏会漏拍） fix
00:26:880 - 和00:28:399 - 同步 fix
00:28:968 (1) - 这个滑条下面压的音和00:29:728 (3,4) - 这两个滑条转接的时候的音是一样的，还是尽量保持同步，不然感觉会很突兀。可以考虑00:30:013 (4) - 这个滑条起始点放到00:30:108 - 在00:30:297 - 处结束 no
00:54:981 (2) - 去掉 fix
00:57:070 (4) - 起始点拉到00:56:975 - 要是改就不知道该往哪放惹orz

[Normal]

没发现问题

[Easy]

没发现问题

[General]

主要问题感觉还是Hard难度的节奏问题，前后经常不统一，同样类型的音，时而紧时而缓，感觉有点不太顺手。唉
insane的跳打起来稍微有点无力，可能是跳的距离和本身的滑条速度不太适合吧，感觉滑条速度快一点会更好（当然我只是说说= =，大概也是我个人的错觉啦。。不喜欢高sv(( 柑橘低sv大ds(?)也不错

顺便求个mu =w=已mu
thanks for mod and star~ :)
ZZHBOY
1,649 posts
Joined April 2012
ZZHBOY
都38cp了啊....感觉跟我第一张图有点像...
[General]
Normal ar4 Hard ar6的话spread好一点 因为I是ar8
[Easy]
easy我不会看所以随便扯两句
00:50:234 (1) - 没blanket好，调整一下
00:53:272 - whistle可以去掉 两个声音一起违和
01:08:462 (1,1) - 可以考虑blanket
01:11:500 (1,2) - ^
01:35:804 (1) - 考虑尾消音 其他难度也是
好多扭来扭去的滑条啊可能会被其他modder喷但我觉得还可以o.o
[Normal]
00:06:183 (1) - 弧度小一点 没blanket好
00:10:740 (1) - ^
你自己拿缩圈对一下其他的blanket适当改一下
00:35:044 (1) - 真的不好看 拉开点吧
01:32:766 (1) - ^
00:54:791 (3,4) - 不好看flow也不好建议note顺着滑条的方向
01:28:209 (4,5) - overlap 移开
[Hard]00:13:399 (3) - 弧度小一点
01:05:424 (2) - ^后面不提了
01:12:829 (2) - 放后面蓝线或者蓝线加note 不然跟的太奇怪
00:16:627 (2) - 另外前面这个也是
01:24:981 (2) - ^
[Insane]
00:24:411 - 多余绿线
00:25:171 (1,1,1,1) - 四分之一的短滑条个人认为变ds完全没必要
01:29:538 (1) - 像这种连打中nv的可以考虑适当变一下ds
感觉有想法然而总感觉打起来不太舒服但我不会moorz
对于这个难度建议单独找几个有经验的mapper交流一下还有很大的提升空间
[Okayu's Insane]
01:35:804 - 多余绿线
00:08:652 (2) - 没stack好
00:59:728 (1,2,3) - 一直跟vocal这里又不跟了违和 建议改一下
建议kiai部分加变速毕竟到了ex难度
整体不错

说实话我觉得rank难 特别是I还需要改 然后就是可以考虑让图更清爽一点（？
那就这样 加油._.
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir

ZZHBOY wrote:

都38cp了啊....感觉跟我第一张图有点像... 哭哭哦
[General]
Normal ar4 Hard ar6的话spread好一点 因为I是ar8 normal改了 hard不是很想改成ar6..
[Easy]
easy我不会看所以随便扯两句
00:50:234 (1) - 没blanket好，调整一下 fix
00:53:272 - whistle可以去掉 两个声音一起违和 fix
01:08:462 (1,1) - 可以考虑blanket 懒包 就调了下位置
01:11:500 (1,2) - ^ fix?
01:35:804 (1) - 考虑尾消音 其他难度也是 fix
好多扭来扭去的滑条啊可能会被其他modder喷但我觉得还可以o.o 唉 扭来扭去的滑条早就被喷很多次惹 zzh泥真好(
[Normal]
00:06:183 (1) - 弧度小一点 没blanket好 fix
00:10:740 (1) - ^ 柑橘不是很严重 懒改( 顺便我包的时候都有对过啊qaq
你自己拿缩圈对一下其他的blanket适当改一下
00:35:044 (1) - 真的不好看 拉开点吧 重新拉成别的形状惹
01:32:766 (1) - ^ ^
00:54:791 (3,4) - 不好看flow也不好建议note顺着滑条的方向 改了滑条的方向
01:28:209 (4,5) - overlap 移开 fix
[Hard]
00:13:399 (3) - 弧度小一点 fix
01:05:424 (2) - ^后面不提了 fix
01:12:829 (2) - 放后面蓝线或者蓝线加note 不然跟的太奇怪 换成了短滑条
00:16:627 (2) - 另外前面这个也是 ^
01:24:981 (2) - ^ ^
[Insane]
00:24:411 - 多余绿线 fix
00:25:171 (1,1,1,1) - 四分之一的短滑条个人认为变ds完全没必要 懒改
01:29:538 (1) - 像这种连打中nv的可以考虑适当变一下ds fix 你看看你又说钱语
感觉有想法然而总感觉打起来不太舒服但我不会moorz
对于这个难度建议单独找几个有经验的mapper交流一下还有很大的提升空间 找谁好呢QAQ
[Okayu's Insane]
ocao okayu你去哪了啊orz 不管了先改两个小问题
01:35:804 - 多余绿线 fix
00:08:652 (2) - 没stack好 fix

说实话我觉得rank难 特别是I还需要改 然后就是可以考虑让图更清爽一点（？
那就这样 加油._.
thanks for mod and star~ :)
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wantuole
528 posts
Joined December 2010
wantuole
rinsukir神麻婆
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir

wantuole wrote:

rinsukir神麻婆
老前辈神麻婆
thanks for mod in qq群(( :)
记录
Mikagura Seisa 19:06:57
不愧是老前辈
满月饼兔wantuole 19:08:17
easy挂了
Mikagura Seisa 19:08:26

满月饼兔wantuole 19:08:48
easy最好顺着一个方向做
转折角度 除了三角结构 别超过90度
满月饼兔wantuole 19:09:06
01:08:462 (1,1) - blanket错误
Mikagura Seisa 19:09:07
好
Mikagura Seisa 19:09:34
啥?
满月饼兔wantuole 19:09:57

Mikagura Seisa 19:10:42
blanket错误是指没包好吗..
满月饼兔wantuole 19:11:31
你末尾是直的 计算到1转折就是30~45°
easy来说 已经是弄死了
满月饼兔wantuole 19:12:07
就kiai最后半段合格
Mikagura Seisa 19:12:31
sad
Mikagura Seisa 19:12:44
转折度数怎么看啊o.o
满月饼兔wantuole 19:12:44
easy要重来 这个简单 不行补个也就20分钟
满月饼兔wantuole 19:13:02

Mikagura Seisa 19:13:31
soga 我重做一遍
满月饼兔wantuole 19:14:13
nor还行
满月饼兔wantuole 19:16:41
hard中等偏下质量 停顿和加速多处不对
满月饼兔wantuole 19:16:53
我提几下
满月饼兔wantuole 19:17:21
00:06:943 (2,3,4,5,1) - 这些移动大了
满月饼兔wantuole 19:17:43
推荐小ds .4就可以了
最好也拉一直线 或者堆叠
Mikagura Seisa 19:18:25
好
满月饼兔wantuole 19:19:00
00:29:728 (3,4) - 这种可以适当的改成三连
或者就不要压蓝线
满月饼兔wantuole 19:19:37
00:31:627 (9,1,2) - 衔接不对 初见卡手
Mikagura Seisa 19:19:59
kd不能避 待我改一改
满月饼兔wantuole 19:20:26
。。那你改完弄个qq群mod
满月饼兔wantuole 19:20:31
post混个算了
Mikagura Seisa 19:20:40
hao
满月饼兔wantuole 19:21:05
00:52:892 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 初见瞎眼
满月饼兔wantuole 19:21:28
00:54:791 (1,2) - 喜闻乐见压蓝
满月饼兔wantuole 19:22:15
00:58:873 (9,1) - 节奏压对了 在hard来说难了
Mikagura Seisa 19:23:36
00:54:791 (1,2) - 喜闻乐见压蓝
这个不知道怎么改好..跟的vocal 本来前面红线有个note
满月饼兔wantuole 19:23:40
hard建议。。。弄多点旋转对称
满月饼兔wantuole 19:23:56
你把握不好挺顿和渐进
Mikagura Seisa 19:24:04
队
满月饼兔wantuole 19:24:07
你打图乐感好可以test找
满月饼兔wantuole 19:24:16
感觉卡手的地方全改了
Mikagura Seisa(446987372) 19:24:50
好
满月饼兔wantuole 19:26:44
in可以
满月饼兔wantuole 19:26:50
中等质量
Mikagura Seisa 19:27:06
我的in不是应该被差评吗..
满月饼兔wantuole 19:27:16
比你其他难度好多了
Mikagura Seisa(446987372) 19:27:51
sosad
满月饼兔wantuole 19:27:57
rank图就是要纯 吃翔一样的简单才行
满月饼兔wantuole 19:28:11
说白了 你做的别人一pc打的爽就ok
满月饼兔wantuole 19:28:16
没人想打两遍
满月饼兔wantuole 19:29:22
给你gd的那个是谁？
满月饼兔wantuole 19:29:35
很多复杂的锐角跳
Mikagura Seisa 19:29:43
o k a y u
满月饼兔wantuole 19:30:31
这个in比你质量好 不过更危险
满月饼兔wantuole 19:30:42
只是rank还是可以 堆sp
Mikagura Seisa 19:31:16
嗯..
满月饼兔wantuole 19:31:19
就这样了 easy要re下 hard部分压蓝还有渐进要重点re掉
删qq号累死人惹
wantuole
528 posts
Joined December 2010
wantuole
[easy]
00:03:145 (2,3) - 2后半弧度和3的前半弧度保持一个形状建议3copy2形状上下对称
00:13:778 (1,3) - 开头扭下头不错 所以3也扭下
00:20:614 (2) -
00:27:449 (3,1) - 相同弧度 复制粘贴 然后ctrl h j
00:57:829 (2) - 扭曲了点 弄其他造型 比如一个w 一个n形状 或者你把s形状弄圆润点
01:08:462 (1) - ^弄圆润点
01:17:576 (1,2) - 做一个对称更好
[nor]
ok
[hard]
00:06:943 (2) - 建议删了这个note 做一个压红梗
01:05:044 (1,2,3) - 类似这些地方细节处理下 不是很圆润 具体自己弄太多 懒找
01:32:766 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2) - 不错的梗 :)
[in]
00:01:627 (1,2,3) -00:03:145 (1) - 用这个节奏才对
00:14:538 (4,5,6,1) - 不好看 不好读的堆叠 建议6 1换个角度 弄个四方形 或者和00:16:057 (6,7,8,1) - 这里一样 完全堆叠
00:19:475 (7,8,1,2) - 一直线就好 3是nc
00:31:247 (5,1,2,3,4) - 缩手缩脚的来回跳 建议不要用
00:51:373 (6,7,8,9,1) - 这串的弹性排列不错 可以多用
00:57:829 (1,2,3) - 建议用两个1/4 3次回撞的slider
01:23:652 (1) - 第一个红点前的弧度不是很圆润
[Okayu's Insane]
一个小建议
00:09:601 (2) - 2的结尾落在00:08:462 (1,4) - 中点 blanket with 00:08:462 (1)
这样00:09:981 (1,2,1,2) - 这个对跳会舒服的多
懒 质量还行就不摸了 回避一些排列上无意义的遮盖就好 部分4个note+锐角跳要斟酌 比较毁flow

no kd
YoshinoSakura
472 posts
Joined January 2011
YoshinoSakura
From my queue
突然发现你的图有5个难度，违反了rules，sad
不过神麻婆的图摸不动，所以就看看前三个难度吧。

[General]
加一个滑调静音进去不然怪难听的

[Easy]
00:12:259 (1,2) - 做成一个reverse？
00:54:032 (1) - 没blanket好
01:08:462 (1) - 就不能扭得对称点

[normal]
00:10:740 (1) - 有点不好看，特别是00:10:361 (4) 还有一个note
00:12:259 (1,2,3) - 间距一样
00:32:006 (1) - 这里怎么间距突然变成1.0了
00:44:158 (1,1) - 太近惹
00:52:892 (3,1) - 个人觉得先note再滑调好一点
01:06:943 (3) - 可以和1blanket一下

[Hard]
00:03:145 (1) - 稍微包好一点
00:04:664 (1) - ^
00:09:221 (5) - NC
00:09:601 (1) - 这个就不要惹
00:16:437 (1) - 柑橘不stack好一些
00:25:930 (1) - blanket
01:00:772 note
01:01:532 note
01:02:956 note重叠在01:03:335 (3) 上
01:23:272 (9,1) - 间距小一点，因为相同间距都是1/2,而这里是1/4

加油吧

[Insane]
基础间距有些小了，不过因为还有一个i，这个善良点问题不大。
00:04:664 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 可以拉开一点
00:14:918 (6) - 弄到左上角？
00:19:475 (7,8,1,2) - 弄成一个combo不然不好看
00:25:930 (1) - 这个就不用提速了吧

加油！
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir
wantuole:
SPOILER
ocao老前辈你这么快来看惹我还打算今晚才找你看的(

wantuole wrote:

[easy]
00:03:145 (2,3) - 2后半弧度和3的前半弧度保持一个形状建议3copy2形状上下对称 fix
00:13:778 (1,3) - 开头扭下头不错 所以3也扭下 fix
00:20:614 (2) - fix, 不过锐角转折真的没问题吗
00:27:449 (3,1) - 相同弧度 复制粘贴 然后ctrl h j fix
00:57:829 (2) - 扭曲了点 弄其他造型 比如一个w 一个n形状 或者你把s形状弄圆润点 弄成w惹
01:08:462 (1) - ^弄圆润点 弄成弧形惹
01:17:576 (1,2) - 做一个对称更好 只复制1 ctrl+j惹o.o
[nor]
ok 感动
[hard]
00:06:943 (2) - 建议删了这个note 做一个压红梗 fix
01:05:044 (1,2,3) - 类似这些地方细节处理下 不是很圆润 具体自己弄太多 懒找 修了一些自己觉得难看的 话说圆润是啥啊
01:32:766 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2) - 不错的梗 :) 感动
[in]
00:01:627 (1,2,3) -00:03:145 (1) - 用这个节奏才对 思考 你开25%听听..
00:14:538 (4,5,6,1) - 不好看 不好读的堆叠 建议6 1换个角度 弄个四方形 或者和00:16:057 (6,7,8,1) - 这里一样 完全堆叠 狂抄karenbubf改成了完全堆叠
00:19:475 (7,8,1,2) - 一直线就好 3是nc fix
00:31:247 (5,1,2,3,4) - 缩手缩脚的来回跳 建议不要用 fix
00:51:373 (6,7,8,9,1) - 这串的弹性排列不错 可以多用 感动
00:57:829 (1,2,3) - 建议用两个1/4 3次回撞的slider fix
01:23:652 (1) - 第一个红点前的弧度不是很圆润 fix

no kd 差点手滑

615:
SPOILER

615915887 wrote:

From my queue
突然发现你的图有5个难度，违反了rules，sad
不过神麻婆的图摸不动，所以就看看前三个难度吧。 okayu神麻婆

[General]
加一个滑调静音进去不然怪难听的 fix

[Easy]
00:12:259 (1,2) - 做成一个reverse？ 懒
00:54:032 (1) - 没blanket好 fix
01:08:462 (1) - 就不能扭得对称点 crycry 换成弧形惹

[normal]
00:10:740 (1) - 有点不好看，特别是00:10:361 (4) 还有一个note 不觉得难看
00:12:259 (1,2,3) - 间距一样 fix
00:32:006 (1) - 这里怎么间距突然变成1.0了 fix, 失误
00:44:158 (1,1) - 太近惹 挺好啦(不
00:52:892 (3,1) - 个人觉得先note再滑调好一点 1和3对称嘛
01:06:943 (3) - 可以和1blanket一下 有点难包 懒

[Hard]
00:03:145 (1) - 稍微包好一点 好像没什么问题
00:04:664 (1) - ^ fix
00:09:221 (5) - NC fix
00:09:601 (1) - 这个就不要惹 fix
00:16:437 (1) - 柑橘不stack好一些 fix
00:25:930 (1) - blanket fix
01:00:772 note hard别这么难吧..
01:01:532 note hard别这么难吧..
01:02:956 note重叠在01:03:335 (3) 上 fix 不过叠在4上惹
01:23:272 (9,1) - 间距小一点，因为相同间距都是1/2,而这里是1/4 fix

加油吧

[Insane]
基础间距有些小了，不过因为还有一个i，这个善良点问题不大。
00:04:664 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 可以拉开一点 还是算惹
00:14:918 (6) - 弄到左上角？ 啥? 改成完全堆叠后忘记原来怎样的惹
00:19:475 (7,8,1,2) - 弄成一个combo不然不好看 fix
00:25:930 (1) - 这个就不用提速了吧 懒改啦

加油！

thanks for mods! :)
O k a y u_old
29 posts
Joined March 2013
O k a y u_old
kanon_sayuri
00:19:854 (6,7) - 建议按着细分的节奏来，滑条6在00:20:044 - 结束，00:20:139 - 这里接note7 - fixed
00:21:753 (1) - 理由同上。note移到 00:21:658 - 感觉好一些 - no 我覺得不改比較順;w;
00:23:272 (4) - ^ 。移到00:23:177 - - no ^
00:34:664 (3) - ^ 。移到00:34:570 - - no ^
00:40:171 (2,1) - 这个地方不太好，碎滑条个人感觉最好跟一下flow，00:40:171 (2) - 和00:39:791 (2) - 这两个短滑条可以考虑各自 ctrl+g 一下 - no
00:47:956 (3) - 移到00:47:861 - - fixed
00:50:139 - 可以考虑加个note - no
00:50:994 (3) - 移到00:50:899 - 或者嫌单一变成短滑条也可以 - no
01:01:816 (7) - 音开始的时间是01:01:911 - - fixed
01:03:810 (7) - 去掉，这个音比较刺耳 - no
01:08:082 (9) - 移到01:07:987 - - fixed
01:29:633 - 加note - fixed
01:32:386 (1) - 移到01:32:291 - - no

ZZHBOY
00:59:728 (1,2,3) - 一直跟vocal这里又不跟了违和 建议改一下 - fixed
建议kiai部分加变速毕竟到了ex难度 - no ;w;個人不喜歡變速...

wantuole
一个小建议
00:09:601 (2) - 2的结尾落在00:08:462 (1,4) - 中点 blanket with 00:08:462 (1) - fixed
这样00:09:981 (1,2,1,2) - 这个对跳会舒服的多 對跳;w;?
懒 质量还行就不摸了 回避一些排列上无意义的遮盖就好 部分4个note+锐角跳要斟酌 比较毁flow OK會注意orz

Thanks for mods :D

rinsukir
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256,192,95804,12,4,98842,0:0:0:0:
抱歉吶之前要模擬考所以消失了一陣子;w;
Momochikun
1,926 posts
Joined October 2012
Momochikun


Hey there ~ anyways.. really sorry for late :?
Here comes mod as requested on IMT :P
Pls keep in mind that i started this mod a few days ago.. my apologize if some issue
was doubled :|

[General]
  1. It would be nice if you can add silent sliderslide, since some sound on the
    slowpart of this music seems too noisy for me.
  2. Consider adding "Okayu" into your tags, since it make people easier
    to search for the GD's name. I doubt if someone want to typing o_k_a_y_u into the
    search bar, they will probably typing it okayu instead.
  3. Ai Bat said there're Incosistent in Kiai times on your diffs. It's
    probably fine if GD'ers have different Kiai times. But according to the ranking
    criteria, All diffs that you owned on the mapset should have consistent kiai times.
    Take a look at this :
    SPOILER

[Insane]
  1. 00:02:006 (3,4) - This 3/4 rhytm spacing quite uncommon and it
    may cause a confuse to some players if you use it right om the first part of the song.
    For this stuff, i'd really recommend you to use circle instead at 00:02:006 - and use
    a 3/4 repeat slider or 3/4 slider + 1/2 slider from 00:02:196 - . I also got some
    ideas of pattern that you can use, see if you like it
    SPOILER
  2. 00:03:905 (2,3) - I'd suggest you to not skipping the instrument
    here, this can be arranged better to follow the pitch at 00:04:000 - . Try to changing
    00:03:905 (2) - into a note then start a 1/2 slider from 00:04:000 - should be a nicer
    way to emphasizing it.
  3. 00:04:285 (4) - Quite ugly shape for my taste, you can bend this slider's middle
    point slightly a bit down to create better transition to the next note. Since this form
    seems too curve that didn't make a steady flow
  4. 00:11:500 (3) - This slider seems odd for me, the jump pattern suddenly comes to
    awkward because the transition from (2) to (4) was broken of this weird's slider shape.
    Shouldn't it be arranged on the opposite way ? Try bend the slider downwards that
    pointing to the next slider like this to create neater pattern :
    SPOILER
  5. 00:12:449 (2,1) - Any reason for this anti-jump ? this can be weird to play since
    the spacing between them isn't the same with 00:13:019 (2,1) - which clearly have same
    pitch between them. Try to Ctrl + G 00:12:829 (1,2) - so the stop wouldn't be odd to
    play. The pattern would be more comfortable imo
  6. 00:15:677 (5) - Another harsh pattern here, this slider's end was shaped downward
    when the next note was on the upside of them. This kind of pattern would ruins the flow
    and quite uncomfortable to play. I'd suggest you to bend this slider like (4) but on
    the mirrored way to create steadier transition. Like this
    SPOILER
  7. 00:19:664 (1,3) - Eh.. isn't the NC should be switched here ? the (3) were stanza
    and this pattern wasn't triplet. Any other reason behind this ?
  8. 00:19:854 (3) - Sounds boring for a clear 1/1 slider in a fun complex song like
    this, how about replace this with a 1/2 slider with a triplet on the end to create it
    more challanging ? with this rhytm you can also emphasize the vocal at 00:20:044 - and
    00:20:139 - which might make more sense
  9. 00:22:892 (3) - The guitar pitch seems started here, It would really fit if you can
    add finish on the head of this slider. This can accompany the increase of the rhytm
    imo. Try to add and listen it
  10. 00:25:076 - Seems there're a vocal here, you can try to add circle here that stacked
    with 00:25:171 (1) - 's sliders start to give more impact to the next slider stream
    jump. As it's look boring if a stream jump doesn't started with a triplet or duplet.
    Try it, the pattern would be more fun to play imo
  11. 00:29:253 (4,5) - I'm not a fan on this kind of bear anti jump on Insane diff to be
    honest. This spacing near the same with the 1/3 rhytm before when this was spaced 1/2.
    It would be nice if you can do a proper anti jump or use a correct DS instead of this
    pattern, the smooth movement would be ruin here and i don't think that's comfortable to
    play
  12. 00:35:424 (1,1) - The drum 1/4 rhytm on the music were still continued here, you can
    add a whistle too to emphasize it. Since there'nt just clap that can be heared on the
    music atm
  13. 00:50:899 - There're high beat vocal here, so Consider adding circle here to keep
    consistency with the vocal emphasize that you had done until now. Also you can make
    slider note slider pattern like you used before, see what's my suggestion about pattern
    :
    SPOILER
  14. 00:51:563 (8) - Hm.. why there's a clap here ? i can't hear any double drum attached
    on the music. Is this unecessary clap placed as for intentional reason ? if you just
    missclicked it then pls remove it
  15. 00:51:753 (9,1) - It would be more tidy if you can blanket them.. since current
    pattern seems a bit messy for me due to the awkward jump from (8)
  16. 00:52:987 (4,5,6) - Nah.. you missed a clap on them didn't you ? the music were
    providing such a clearly similiar sound with the drum that you emphasized with clap
    before. Consider adding it instead :D
  17. 01:01:627 (3) - This would follow the vocal better if you shorten this into 3/4 and
    add note at 01:02:006 - . Since this part wasn't exactly same at 01:00:867 (3) - when
    the vocal was only landed on the high beat. So make it on the same rhytm either
    symmetry would be a bit weird imo since the music was different
  18. 01:02:956 (3) - Just some natural thing here, but you can put this a bit far from
    the next object since the next beat is high vocal, it sounds weird to play if you give
    a jump at (2) but you didn't do that here
  19. 01:11:880 (3) - Again.. this kind of shape would suddenly ruins the flow because it
    didn't good any transition that connected from the slight shape slider before and (4).
    I'd really recommend you to bend the slider symmetry with (1) here to create neater
    pattern. Current seems really odd to play.
    SPOILER
  20. 01:17:386 (1,3) - Same as 00:19:664 (1,3) -
  21. 01:23:652 (1) - Hm.. the first shape on this slider seems too edgy at the left side

    that make bad form of this slider. Try arranging this slider a bit by moving the 2nd

    anchor 1 - 2 grid to right, this can make it looks even prettier, look what i've do :3
    SPOILER

[Hard]
  1. 00:01:627 (1,2,3) - Same as insane before, you should know that
    this rhytm will be so hard to read especially for novice players. But if you want to
    keep it, it's clearly fine though i won't mention this anymore :3
  2. 00:05:519 (2,3) - Pls consider again why do you want to stack this, 3/4 spacing with
    the note stacked seems a bit hard to read imo
  3. 00:07:038 - You should add circle here to keep consistency with the rhytm that you
    use, since you always emphasizing the instrument on blue tick, it would ruin the
    pattern if you skip this.
  4. 00:10:740 (1) - Try CTRL G this slider, the transition would be a lot better imo.
    Since i can see that the slider's shape was well designed for CTRL G, the current
    pattern has weird flow to follow during gameplay.
  5. 00:19:664 (1,2,1,3) - I didn't understand with your NC pattern here, why did you use
    NC every one beat before downbeat ? is this intentional for a reset behind the downbeat
    ? this will keep confusing me since you can give more impact to the instrument if you
    give the NC instead on the downbeat. i advise you to fix the combos intro into the
    downbeat.
  6. 00:25:551 (9,1) - The way yo arranged this pattern seems ugly for my taste. It'd
    would be better if you can blanket it instead or using a normal DS.
  7. 01:02:196 - Try adding a circle here ? it would keep the smooth play and keeping the
    steady flow that you have during gameplay
  8. 01:04:095 (6) - Changing this into 2 circle instead of kick would give smoother
    transition and following the music better instead. Because the blue tick on the repeat
    slider was landed on nothing that maybe can be weird to follow during gameplay.
  9. 01:08:462 (6) - Consider not to stack with (4). It would be difficult for players to
    read a stack between kickslider imo. I suggest you to moving somewhere else, create
    triangle with (4) and (5) by moving it to similiar place with 196 220 would work nice
    imo
  10. 01:26:690 (3,4) - This rhytm can be arranged better to following the vocal, i
    suggest you to moving (4) 1/4 beat early and shorten it into 3/4 slider. then you can
    add note at 01:27:449 - to keep following the drum. Then it would look like this :
    SPOILER

[Normal]
  1. 00:01:627 (1,1) - It would be neater if you can copy one of them and make
    these sliders on the same shape with horizontal flip.
  2. 00:05:804 (2,1) - Intentional things.. but it would be a lot neater if you can
    blanketing this instead.. current seems bear pattern to follow imo
  3. 00:08:842 (2) - This pattern can be a lot improved imo, if you change this into a
    note and then start a 1/1 slider to follow that hold instrument from 00:09:221 - would
    look more sense. Since using repeat point for downbeat seems a bit weird to play imo
  4. 00:16:437 - This part looks empty with the drum skipped, you can add circle here to
    keep the steady flow and smooth transition between them
  5. 00:37:323 (2) - A stack on end would be greatly frustating and hard to read
    especially on normal diff. This note has been appeared when you still following the

    path on slider (1). I suggest you to use normal spacing instead
  6. 01:22:892 (4,1) - A 1/1 slider would be better instead to replace these note, since
    you can keep emphasizing the vocal that make consistency with the previous 1/1 slider
    that you used
  7. 01:26:690 (1,2,3) - This whole part plays awkwardly especially the end of slider's
    (2) that you used to start a vocal hold that must be better to be the start of slider,
    try replacing this with 2 1/1 slider instead to follow the vocal properly.

[Easy]
  1. 00:06:183 (4) - The slider's body is out of screen, and yeah

    it's unrankable. you could move the middle point a bit up to avoid this.
  2. 00:13:778 (1,3) - I would not recommend you to using this kind of slider on easier diff, since the red point may affect the slider's ball movement a bit that can cause newbies to confused. Better use a normal shaped slider instead
  3. 01:08:462 (1,1) - This flowing really weird during gameplay.. how about changing the 2nd (1) to a simple straight slider instead to create smoother transition to follow ?
  4. 01:11:120 (2,1) - I'd be better if you unstack them, sometimes stack with different combo colour could be unreadable for newbies.

Well, mainly i just tell you the major issues on Hard Normal and Easy, yep i didn't say anything minor except in Insane. i think you can clearly understand what did i mean to create nice rhytm and flow by looking at my mod on Insane. I'd hope you can do better work on your next maps, but it's not too bad for the beginning map.
Good Luck on the way ~
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir
Momochikun

Momochikun wrote:



Hey there ~ anyways.. really sorry for late :?
Here comes mod as requested on IMT :P
Pls keep in mind that i started this mod a few days ago.. my apologize if some issue
was doubled :| :arrow: Never mind :3

[General]
  1. It would be nice if you can add silent sliderslide, since some sound on the
    slowpart of this music seems too noisy for me. :arrow: fix
  2. Consider adding "Okayu" into your tags, since it make people easier
    to search for the GD's name. I doubt if someone want to typing o_k_a_y_u into the
    search bar, they will probably typing it okayu instead.     :arrow: fix
  3. Ai Bat said there're Incosistent in Kiai times on your diffs. It's
    probably fine if GD'ers have different Kiai times. But according to the ranking
    criteria, All diffs that you owned on the mapset should have consistent kiai times.
    Take a look at this :     :arrow: fix
    SPOILER

[Insane]
  1. 00:02:006 (3,4) - This 3/4 rhytm spacing quite uncommon and it
    may cause a confuse to some players if you use it right om the first part of the song.
    For this stuff, i'd really recommend you to use circle instead at 00:02:006 - and use
    a 3/4 repeat slider or 3/4 slider + 1/2 slider from 00:02:196 - . I also got some
    ideas of pattern that you can use, see if you like it     :arrow: no, this is my style
    SPOILER
  2. 00:03:905 (2,3) - I'd suggest you to not skipping the instrument
    here, this can be arranged better to follow the pitch at 00:04:000 - . Try to changing
    00:03:905 (2) - into a note then start a 1/2 slider from 00:04:000 - should be a nicer
    way to emphasizing it.     :arrow: fix in another way
  3. 00:04:285 (4) - Quite ugly shape for my taste, you can bend this slider's middle
    point slightly a bit down to create better transition to the next note. Since this form
    seems too curve that didn't make a steady flow :arrow: fix?
  4. 00:11:500 (3) - This slider seems odd for me, the jump pattern suddenly comes to
    awkward because the transition from (2) to (4) was broken of this weird's slider shape.
    Shouldn't it be arranged on the opposite way ? Try bend the slider downwards that
    pointing to the next slider like this to create neater pattern : :arrow: changed (3) and (4) 's shape but no change jump
    SPOILER
  5. 00:12:449 (2,1) - Any reason for this anti-jump ? this can be weird to play since
    the spacing between them isn't the same with 00:13:019 (2,1) - which clearly have same
    pitch between them. Try to Ctrl + G 00:12:829 (1,2) - so the stop wouldn't be odd to
    play. The pattern would be more comfortable imo :arrow: fix
  6. 00:15:677 (5) - Another harsh pattern here, this slider's end was shaped downward
    when the next note was on the upside of them. This kind of pattern would ruins the flow
    and quite uncomfortable to play. I'd suggest you to bend this slider like (4) but on
    the mirrored way to create steadier transition. Like this :arrow: fix
    SPOILER
  7. 00:19:664 (1,3) - Eh.. isn't the NC should be switched here ? the (3) were stanza
    and this pattern wasn't triplet. Any other reason behind this ? :arrow: fix, you do not have to update my map to the last version..
  8. 00:19:854 (3) - Sounds boring for a clear 1/1 slider in a fun complex song like
    this, how about replace this with a 1/2 slider with a triplet on the end to create it
    more challanging ? with this rhytm you can also emphasize the vocal at 00:20:044 - and
    00:20:139 - which might make more sense :arrow: fix
  9. 00:22:892 (3) - The guitar pitch seems started here, It would really fit if you can
    add finish on the head of this slider. This can accompany the increase of the rhytm
    imo. Try to add and listen it :arrow: fix
  10. 00:25:076 - Seems there're a vocal here, you can try to add circle here that stacked
    with 00:25:171 (1) - 's sliders start to give more impact to the next slider stream
    jump. As it's look boring if a stream jump doesn't started with a triplet or duplet.
    Try it, the pattern would be more fun to play imo :arrow: no
  11. 00:29:253 (4,5) - I'm not a fan on this kind of bear anti jump on Insane diff to be
    honest. This spacing near the same with the 1/3 rhytm before when this was spaced 1/2.
    It would be nice if you can do a proper anti jump or use a correct DS instead of this
    pattern, the smooth movement would be ruin here and i don't think that's comfortable to
    play :arrow: fix
  12. 00:35:424 (1,1) - The drum 1/4 rhytm on the music were still continued here, you can
    add a whistle too to emphasize it. Since there'nt just clap that can be heared on the
    music atm :arrow: fix
  13. 00:50:899 - There're high beat vocal here, so Consider adding circle here to keep
    consistency with the vocal emphasize that you had done until now. Also you can make
    slider note slider pattern like you used before, see what's my suggestion about pattern
    : :arrow: fix in another way
    SPOILER
  14. 00:51:563 (8) - Hm.. why there's a clap here ? i can't hear any double drum attached
    on the music. Is this unecessary clap placed as for intentional reason ? if you just
    missclicked it then pls remove it :arrow: 24clap..
  15. 00:51:753 (9,1) - It would be more tidy if you can blanket them.. since current
    pattern seems a bit messy for me due to the awkward jump from (8) :arrow: fix?
  16. 00:52:987 (4,5,6) - Nah.. you missed a clap on them didn't you ? the music were
    providing such a clearly similiar sound with the drum that you emphasized with clap
    before. Consider adding it instead :D :arrow: no(
  17. 01:01:627 (3) - This would follow the vocal better if you shorten this into 3/4 and
    add note at 01:02:006 - . Since this part wasn't exactly same at 01:00:867 (3) - when
    the vocal was only landed on the high beat. So make it on the same rhytm either
    symmetry would be a bit weird imo since the music was different :arrow: this is my style
  18. 01:02:956 (3) - Just some natural thing here, but you can put this a bit far from
    the next object since the next beat is high vocal, it sounds weird to play if you give
    a jump at (2) but you didn't do that here :arrow: fix
  19. 01:11:880 (3) - Again.. this kind of shape would suddenly ruins the flow because it
    didn't good any transition that connected from the slight shape slider before and (4).
    I'd really recommend you to bend the slider symmetry with (1) here to create neater
    pattern. Current seems really odd to play. :arrow: fix
    SPOILER
  20. 01:17:386 (1,3) - Same as 00:19:664 (1,3) - :arrow: no
  21. 01:23:652 (1) - Hm.. the first shape on this slider seems too edgy at the left side

    that make bad form of this slider. Try arranging this slider a bit by moving the 2nd

    anchor 1 - 2 grid to right, this can make it looks even prettier, look what i've do :3 :arrow: fix
    SPOILER

[Hard]
  1. 00:01:627 (1,2,3) - Same as insane before, you should know that
    this rhytm will be so hard to read especially for novice players. But if you want to
    keep it, it's clearly fine though i won't mention this anymore :3     :arrow: no, this is my style
  2. 00:05:519 (2,3) - Pls consider again why do you want to stack this, 3/4 spacing with
    the note stacked seems a bit hard to read imo :arrow: no, this is my style
  3. 00:07:038 - You should add circle here to keep consistency with the rhytm that you
    use, since you always emphasizing the instrument on blue tick, it would ruin the
    pattern if you skip this. :arrow: no
  4. 00:10:740 (1) - Try CTRL G this slider, the transition would be a lot better imo.
    Since i can see that the slider's shape was well designed for CTRL G, the current
    pattern has weird flow to follow during gameplay. :arrow: fix
  5. 00:19:664 (1,2,1,3) - I didn't understand with your NC pattern here, why did you use
    NC every one beat before downbeat ? is this intentional for a reset behind the downbeat
    ? this will keep confusing me since you can give more impact to the instrument if you
    give the NC instead on the downbeat. i advise you to fix the combos intro into the
    downbeat. :arrow: i follow lyrics
  6. 00:25:551 (9,1) - The way yo arranged this pattern seems ugly for my taste. It'd
    would be better if you can blanket it instead or using a normal DS. :arrow: no
  7. 01:02:196 - Try adding a circle here ? it would keep the smooth play and keeping the
    steady flow that you have during gameplay :arrow: fix
  8. 01:04:095 (6) - Changing this into 2 circle instead of kick would give smoother
    transition and following the music better instead. Because the blue tick on the repeat
    slider was landed on nothing that maybe can be weird to follow during gameplay. :arrow: no
  9. 01:08:462 (6) - Consider not to stack with (4). It would be difficult for players to
    read a stack between kickslider imo. I suggest you to moving somewhere else, create
    triangle with (4) and (5) by moving it to similiar place with 196 220 would work nice
    imo :arrow: fix in another way
  10. 01:26:690 (3,4) - This rhytm can be arranged better to following the vocal, i
    suggest you to moving (4) 1/4 beat early and shorten it into 3/4 slider. then you can
    add note at 01:27:449 - to keep following the drum. Then it would look like this : :arrow: no
    SPOILER

[Normal]
  1. 00:01:627 (1,1) - It would be neater if you can copy one of them and make
    these sliders on the same shape with horizontal flip. :arrow: fix
  2. 00:05:804 (2,1) - Intentional things.. but it would be a lot neater if you can
    blanketing this instead.. current seems bear pattern to follow imo :arrow: no
  3. 00:08:842 (2) - This pattern can be a lot improved imo, if you change this into a
    note and then start a 1/1 slider to follow that hold instrument from 00:09:221 - would
    look more sense. Since using repeat point for downbeat seems a bit weird to play imo :arrow: fix
  4. 00:16:437 - This part looks empty with the drum skipped, you can add circle here to
    keep the steady flow and smooth transition between them :arrow: fix
  5. 00:37:323 (2) - A stack on end would be greatly frustating and hard to read
    especially on normal diff. This note has been appeared when you still following the

    path on slider (1). I suggest you to use normal spacing instead :arrow: fix
  6. 01:22:892 (4,1) - A 1/1 slider would be better instead to replace these note, since
    you can keep emphasizing the vocal that make consistency with the previous 1/1 slider
    that you used :arrow: no
  7. 01:26:690 (1,2,3) - This whole part plays awkwardly especially the end of slider's
    (2) that you used to start a vocal hold that must be better to be the start of slider,
    try replacing this with 2 1/1 slider instead to follow the vocal properly. :arrow: fix in another way

[Easy]
  1. 00:06:183 (4) - The slider's body is out of screen, and yeah

    it's unrankable. you could move the middle point a bit up to avoid this.     :arrow: fix
  2. 00:13:778 (1,3) - I would not recommend you to using this kind of slider on easier diff, since the red point may affect the slider's ball movement a bit that can cause newbies to confused. Better use a normal shaped slider instead :arrow: no
  3. 01:08:462 (1,1) - This flowing really weird during gameplay.. how about changing the 2nd (1) to a simple straight slider instead to create smoother transition to follow ? :arrow: fix
  4. 01:11:120 (2,1) - I'd be better if you unstack them, sometimes stack with different combo colour could be unreadable for newbies. :arrow: fix

Well, mainly i just tell you the major issues on Hard Normal and Easy, yep i didn't say anything minor except in Insane. i think you can clearly understand what did i mean to create nice rhytm and flow by looking at my mod on Insane. I'd hope you can do better work on your next maps, but it's not too bad for the beginning map.
Good Luck on the way ~
thanks for mod~ :)

Okayu

O k a y u wrote:

抱歉吶之前要模擬考所以消失了一陣子;w;
updated :3
你們都要模擬考
順便: 00:20:234 - 建議加一個note
00:47:956 - ^
還有老前輩的意思是改了那個滑條后後面的對跳會感覺舒服得多 不是要你改那個跳啦;w;
顺便thanks for star ><
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Kioshinxs_old
Kioshinxs_old
I can make a 2 diff in taiko? thanxs
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir

Kioshinxs wrote:

I can make a 2 diff in taiko? thanxs
sure, if your map has good quality :3
EDIT: if you can't finish 2 diff before Jan 14th, i think i can't add your diff in mapset, only add in creator's word QVQ
S o a p
359 posts
Joined March 2012
S o a p
[General]
clap我觉得不合曲。还有我看了一下你音量几乎都100%，是因为clap声太小了？干脆换掉

[Okayu's Insane]
00:07:702 (1,2,1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,3,4) - 这边可以插绿线使声音从小变大
00:50:234 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - 你选中这一块看看【http://puu.sh/6i5PJ.jpg】，全都纠缠在一起，建议改得分散一点
01:07:323 (6) - 这里我搞不懂为啥间距会变大，要跳也应该是01:07:608 (7) - 这里开始吧

[Insane]
00:07:702 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4) - 插绿线声音从小变大
00:20:614 (5) - 重音，这里跳比后面那个6跳好

[Hard]
nothing to say

[Normal]
00:29:728 (2) - x:108 y:232
00:44:158 (1) - 这里00:46:627 - 或者00:46:437 -结束
01:08:462 (1) - 在上一个红线结束，或者去掉转盘改成滑条

[Easy]
nothing to say

然后美丽 :)
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir

S o a p wrote:

[General]
clap我觉得不合曲。还有我看了一下你音量几乎都100%，是因为clap声太小了？干脆换掉
clap之前也找过 除了这个没有合适的qwq 其实我整体音效声音都太小( 求送个合适的clap阿

[Okayu's Insane]
00:07:702 (1,2,1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,3,4) - 这边可以插绿线使声音从小变大 fix

[Insane]
00:07:702 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4) - 插绿线声音从小变大 fix
00:20:614 (5) - 重音，这里跳比后面那个6跳好 fix

[Hard]
nothing to say

[Normal]
00:29:728 (2) - x:108 y:232 fix
00:44:158 (1) - 这里00:46:627 - 或者00:46:437 -结束 选择惹后者
01:08:462 (1) - 在上一个红线结束，或者去掉转盘改成滑条 改成滑条惹

[Easy]
nothing to say

然后美丽 :)
thanks for mod! :)

@okayu 你期末还没考完妈QwQ
Oracle
571 posts
Joined April 2012
Oracle
Hi~
M4M From my queue
我不想把自己想法覆盖上去,都是suggestion,觉得不想用的可以全部ignore。但是红色字体是很严重的问题,建议改。

General
Song name"Hihana Ochiba (Short Ver.)"
不能出现short ver.这种括号备注。除非你找到了写有short ver.的曲源(专辑列表etc.)

grumd wrote:

If the official song title doesn't have "(Short Ver.)" in it, then you should not add it. Find a source that says that you need to use "Short Ver." or remove it.


音效,除了那个打拍子的鼓声以外其他custom音效我都没感觉出来。还以为没下...这曲用点soft whistle感觉很不错啊,现在的音效真的听不出。

Easy
00:16:816 (1,2) - 这两个在一起实在是不好看.. 复制个对称的如何..
00:33:525 (2,3) - Flow不好. 2把鼠标引向左边,然而3却在正下方,而且还是从右边滑入的。建议逆时针旋转一下3,并且把2尾巴稍微往下转一点。
00:37:323 (4) - empty
00:54:032 (1,2) - 做个blanket吧
01:22:892 (4) - 不太好看..
好多扭曲的slider,虽然不是unrankable,但是美观上。。建议还是拉规则点,00:13:778 (1) - 这种就不要出现了



Normal
00:03:145 (3) - NC,后面同样的节奏都NC了
00:10:361 (5,1) - Blanket
00:12:259 (1,2,3) - 对Normal来说太难读了 间隔3/2。Distance上根本看不出。建议弄成slider
00:27:829 (4,5) - Flow难受,把5的reverse arrow往下转点
00:32:006 (1,2,3,4) - Normal下变spacing? 感觉没必要。变的值太小了,看起来像是放错spacing.
00:35:044 (1) - 这个弧度做圆一点
00:44:158 (1) - 在这里停00:46:816 - ,现在的地方4分音奏到一半，有点突兀。
01:11:500 (1,3) - 头弄好看点
01:23:652 (1,1) - ^而且为啥这里有NC了 上面没有，请统一

Hard
SV有点低
00:07:038 - 前面这个音都有下节奏,这里却空拍了,而且突然跟了另一个音..
00:19:664 (1) - 放在00:18:715 (2) - 这个滑条的尾部不好么
00:33:145 (4,5) - spacing不对, 1.4突然变成1.3了
00:34:285 (2) - Ctrl+J再放回去. flows better
00:38:082 - 不在beat snap上的绿线,没记错的话是不允许的. 最少提前1/16
00:48:715 (5,6) - 没叠好 6移到280,263
00:59:918 (5,6) - spacing
有不少spacing不整齐的,不一一挑了
01:09:981 (1,2) - 弄到两个slider的头尾,4个圆都在同一直线上
01:16:816 (2,3,4,5) - flow 换成从2开始逆时针
01:21:373 (5,6,7) - 这个好,点赞
间距混乱._.

Insane
00:06:848 - 00:07:038 - 这两个拍都是有音的,要塞成stream.不然off
00:03:905 (2,3,4) - 我建议你统一间距啊,突然1.6,有点莫名
00:08:462 (4,5,6,7,1,2,3) - flow不好,两个选择。一个是00:08:842 (6,7) - Ctrl+G,另一个是00:09:221 (1,2,3) - Ctrl+J再放下来,并且稍微顺时针转一下。
00:09:981 (4,5,6,7,1) - 一样的问题,67对调
00:12:829 (1,2) - Ctrl+G
00:28:873 (2) - 往上移一点
后面大部分都是同类问题。基本上就是要多注意美观和flow。
另外,01:22:892 (1,1,1,1) - 多尴尬,你为何不用4个combo color呢?

Okayu's Insane
改成Okayu's Extra吧,两个Insane的难度差太多。
这是最难的diff,但是OD是7,相对简单的Insane却是8。对调如何。还有这Insane的跳密度,可以考虑上AR9了。
这个难度相对来说是整个mapset里最美观整齐的。但是
整张图的思路就是每句歌词的后半段放跳。Insane难度，有跳当然爽。但是这里很多的跳都是没踩到音乐的点的,打起来没有实感,也没有hitsound的支持。爽不起来。而且大跳小跳好像完全看心情..感觉为放跳而放跳。
因为整张图好像都差不多..没啥可以说的
btw,
00:40:171 (2,1) - 这个spacing太..完全破坏slider跳的节奏


多注意flow,I难度后半部分如果还要提这类建议可以in-game找.. 歌很带感,感觉像同时在听railgun+future gazer.加油
Star~Good luck!
SPOILER
_(:з」∠)_再也不写这么长的了,时间美丽
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir

Oracle wrote:

Hi~
M4M From my queue
我不想把自己想法覆盖上去,都是suggestion,觉得不想用的可以全部ignore。但是红色字体是很严重的问题,建议改。

General
Song name"Hihana Ochiba (Short Ver.)"
不能出现short ver.这种括号备注。除非你找到了写有short ver.的曲源(专辑列表etc.) 感动 终于有人提出来惹 fix

grumd wrote:

If the official song title doesn't have "(Short Ver.)" in it, then you should not add it. Find a source that says that you need to use "Short Ver." or remove it.


音效,除了那个打拍子的鼓声以外其他custom音效我都没感觉出来。还以为没下...这曲用点soft whistle感觉很不错啊,现在的音效真的听不出。 :arrow: 唉 这个音效也被人说了好多次 我都是为了跟原曲阿.. fix in another way 突然发现默认音效打击感真是感人

Easy
00:16:816 (1,2) - 这两个在一起实在是不好看.. 复制个对称的如何.. fix
00:33:525 (2,3) - Flow不好. 2把鼠标引向左边,然而3却在正下方,而且还是从右边滑入的。建议逆时针旋转一下3,并且把2尾巴稍微往下转一点。fix
00:37:323 (4) - empty 啥?
00:54:032 (1,2) - 做个blanket吧 咦 做惹阿
01:22:892 (4) - 不太好看.. this is my zz style
好多扭曲的slider,虽然不是unrankable,但是美观上。。建议还是拉规则点,00:13:778 (1) - 这种就不要出现了 en就是要把滑条拉成各种造型嘛(喂 至于那个扭头的silder开头扭一下也不错嘛ww



Normal
00:03:145 (3) - NC,后面同样的节奏都NC了唉 我的失误
00:10:361 (5,1) - Blanket 好像包好惹..
00:12:259 (1,2,3) - 对Normal来说太难读了 间隔3/2。Distance上根本看不出。建议弄成slider 改成一个滑条一个单点
00:27:829 (4,5) - Flow难受,把5的reverse arrow往下转点fix
00:32:006 (1,2,3,4) - Normal下变spacing? 感觉没必要。变的值太小了,看起来像是放错spacing. 你书的对 我放错惹
00:35:044 (1) - 这个弧度做圆一点 你说哪个弧阿qwq
00:44:158 (1) - 在这里停00:46:816 - ,现在的地方4分音奏到一半，有点突兀。fix 离后面的note这么近没问题妈
01:11:500 (1,3) - 头弄好看点 唉 我不会扭
01:23:652 (1,1) - ^而且为啥这里有NC了 上面没有，请统一 唉 我的失误

Hard
SV有点低 我zz按某教程帖标配来的
00:07:038 - 前面这个音都有下节奏,这里却空拍了,而且突然跟了另一个音.. 压红梗
00:19:664 (1) - 放在00:18:715 (2) - 这个滑条的尾部不好么 好好好
00:33:145 (4,5) - spacing不对, 1.4突然变成1.3了 fix
00:34:285 (2) - Ctrl+J再放回去. flows better fix
00:38:082 - 不在beat snap上的绿线,没记错的话是不允许的. 最少提前1/16 fix
00:48:715 (5,6) - 没叠好 6移到280,263 fix
00:59:918 (5,6) - spacing 我已经放弃全程ds惹..
有不少spacing不整齐的,不一一挑了
01:09:981 (1,2) - 弄到两个slider的头尾,4个圆都在同一直线上 啥?
01:16:816 (2,3,4,5) - flow 换成从2开始逆时针 小的不会
01:21:373 (5,6,7) - 这个好,点赞 thx :3
间距混乱._. 我已经放弃全程ds惹.-.

Insane
00:06:848 - 00:07:038 - 这两个拍都是有音的,要塞成stream.不然off 我跟的不是音乐a
00:03:905 (2,3,4) - 我建议你统一间距啊,突然1.6,有点莫名 这个跳是不是大了点
00:08:462 (4,5,6,7,1,2,3) - flow不好,两个选择。一个是00:08:842 (6,7) - Ctrl+G,另一个是00:09:221 (1,2,3) - Ctrl+J再放下来,并且稍微顺时针转一下。三角打死不改 后者有blanket懒转
00:09:981 (4,5,6,7,1) - 一样的问题,67对调 ^
00:12:829 (1,2) - Ctrl+G 感动 终于有人支持我原来的摆法
00:28:873 (2) - 往上移一点 no
后面大部分都是同类问题。基本上就是要多注意美观和flow。
另外,01:22:892 (1,1,1,1) - 多尴尬,你为何不用4个combo color呢? fix, 我色盲不会选颜色(

Okayu's Insane
改成Okayu's Extra吧,两个Insane的难度差太多。fix
这是最难的diff,但是OD是7,相对简单的Insane却是8。对调如何。还有这Insane的跳密度,可以考虑上AR9了。唉 有个人叫我改的ar8
这个难度相对来说是整个mapset里最美观整齐的。但是
整张图的思路就是每句歌词的后半段放跳。Insane难度，有跳当然爽。但是这里很多的跳都是没踩到音乐的点的,打起来没有实感,也没有hitsound的支持。爽不起来。而且大跳小跳好像完全看心情..感觉为放跳而放跳。我下音效很死板的阿 待我去改改音效
因为整张图好像都差不多..没啥可以说的
btw,
00:40:171 (2,1) - 这个spacing太..完全破坏slider跳的节奏 唉 我先帮改一下好了 把后面两组短滑条1和2都在时间轴上调换了位置


多注意flow,I难度后半部分如果还要提这类建议可以in-game找.. 歌很带感,感觉像同时在听railgun+future gazer.加油 (唉 我等了这么久终于有人说像railgun惹)
Star~Good luck!
SPOILER
_(:з」∠)_再也不写这么长的了,时间美丽
thanks for mod, star and mutual~ :)
等你上线我ingame找你阿

@okayu: 呜呜你不要美丽啊还有摸等你改啊qwq 顺便你回来之后要redownload一下..
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Pandiar
391 posts
Joined February 2012
Pandiar
Hi~ from my Q XD
sorry to late

[General]
uncheck widescreensup


[Normal]
00:23:652 (4) - may better flow
SPOILER
00:32:766 (2) - ^
01:14:538 (1) - NC?
01:31:247 (3) - same as 00:23:652 (4)


[Hard]
00:44:158 ~ 00:46:437 - where is spinner?


[Insane]
00:07:038 - add note?
00:08:652 (5) - more jump? about x336 y240
00:44:158~00:46:816 - spinner time?


[Okayu's Extra]

looks fine


but NC is too random in Insane and Extra
maybe it is pointed out when BAT checked so take care
i think NC is fit in the white line or turn of the melody
but nice map ! shot star :D

good luck!
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir

Pandiar wrote:

Hi~ from my Q XD
sorry to late

[General]
uncheck widescreensup fix


[Normal]
00:23:652 (4) - may better flow fix
SPOILER
00:32:766 (2) - ^ fix
01:14:538 (1) - NC? fix
01:31:247 (3) - same as 00:23:652 (4) fix


[Hard]
00:44:158 ~ 00:46:437 - where is spinner? fix in another way


[Insane]
00:07:038 - add note? no
00:08:652 (5) - more jump? about x336 y240 no
00:44:158~00:46:816 - spinner time? fix


but NC is too random in Insane and Extra
maybe it is pointed out when BAT checked so take care
i think NC is fit in the white line or turn of the melody
but nice map ! shot star :D

good luck!
thanks for mod and star~ :)
Nymph
osu! Alumni
3,243 posts
Joined December 2010
Nymph
基本上可以了 说一些可以提高的地方:
排列上的话 有不少细节可以提高 比方说一部分flow 还有一部分摆法可以更美观一些 顺便有一些梗略重复 基本是一眼就能看出来这个东西在来回用了好几次 虽然不是什么问题 但是有很多方法可以让类似的梗用起来不会给人一模一样的感觉

hitsound其实我个人不是特别喜欢这种爆发感不够的finish 因为不是很容易听出来...不过也不是啥问题

因为没有啥个别的问题 所以我就讲了点概念 如果能启发你一下的话你可以试着改改 如果你觉得不需要修改了的时候就告诉我一下
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir

Nymph wrote:

基本上可以了 说一些可以提高的地方:
排列上的话 有不少细节可以提高 比方说一部分flow 还有一部分摆法可以更美观一些 顺便有一些梗略重复 基本是一眼就能看出来这个东西在来回用了好几次 虽然不是什么问题 但是有很多方法可以让类似的梗用起来不会给人一模一样的感觉

hitsound其实我个人不是特别喜欢这种爆发感不够的finish 因为不是很容易听出来...不过也不是啥问题

因为没有啥个别的问题 所以我就讲了点概念 如果能启发你一下的话你可以试着改改 如果你觉得不需要修改了的时候就告诉我一下
重复梗什么的你书的是哪个难度QwQ
总之太感谢惹!!!1! 妮妮窝爱妮<3
sammy711
207 posts
Joined November 2012
sammy711
看来我来晚了>.>
都要泡了我就不摸了...
欠了你一个mod
Nymph
osu! Alumni
3,243 posts
Joined December 2010
Nymph
作为第一个图算及格吧 做下一张图的时候 可以注意一下排版的美观还有细节的处理等等
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir
妮妮 thank you very much ><


sammy711 wrote:

看来我来晚了>.>
都要泡了我就不摸了...
欠了你一个mod
猴 下次开新坑找你摸图
Zero__wind
osu! Alumni
3,314 posts
Joined August 2012
Zero__wind
看到文明先锋又泡了华语新人图

Insane当然还是有很多提升空间的
不过ENH都做得不错 鼓励一下
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir

Zero__wind wrote:

看到文明先锋又泡了华语新人图

Insane当然还是有很多提升空间的
不过ENH都做得不错 鼓励一下
哇 感谢鼓励 我会继续努力的>w<
文明先锋www
O k a y u_old
29 posts
Joined March 2013
O k a y u_old
S o a p
00:50:234 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - 你选中这一块看看【http://puu.sh/6i5PJ.jpg】，全都纠缠在一起，建议改得分散一点 fix
01:07:323 (6) - 这里我搞不懂为啥间距会变大，要跳也应该是01:07:608 (7) - 这里开始吧 fix

rinsukir
osu file format v12

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308,124,82987,1,0,0:0:0:0:
348,116,83082,1,0,0:0:0:0:
388,108,83177,1,0,0:0:0:0:
412,76,83272,5,8,0:0:0:0:
424,112,83367,1,0,0:0:0:0:
456,136,83462,1,0,0:0:0:0:
436,172,83557,1,0,0:0:0:0:
456,204,83652,6,0,P|400:232|376:312,1,150,6|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
300,360,84032,2,0,L|244:272,1,100,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
156,120,84411,5,2,0:0:0:0:
180,300,84601,1,0,0:0:0:0:
216,60,84791,1,2,0:0:0:0:
200,260,84981,1,0,0:0:0:0:
200,260,85076,1,0,0:0:0:0:
200,260,85171,2,0,P|244:272|336:232,1,150,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
328,140,85551,2,0,L|420:180,1,100,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
436,80,85930,5,2,0:0:0:0:
260,52,86120,1,0,0:0:0:0:
464,52,86310,1,8,0:0:0:0:
148,116,86500,1,8,0:0:0:0:
260,52,86690,6,0,P|284:104|264:156,1,100,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
200,196,86975,2,0,L|332:288,1,150,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
412,216,87449,6,0,P|436:172|484:156,1,100,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
476,72,87734,2,0,L|320:80,1,150,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
180,132,88209,5,2,0:0:0:0:
276,152,88399,1,0,0:0:0:0:
228,40,88589,1,8,0:0:0:0:
220,240,88778,1,8,0:0:0:0:
276,152,88968,5,2,0:0:0:0:
108,192,89158,1,0,0:0:0:0:
220,240,89348,1,8,0:0:0:0:
400,212,89538,1,0,0:0:0:0:
372,264,89633,1,0,0:0:0:0:
324,276,89728,6,0,P|300:220|308:176,1,100,6|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
188,44,90108,2,0,P|212:100|204:144,1,100,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
48,220,90487,6,0,L|156:260,1,100,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
400,216,90867,2,0,L|292:176,1,100,2|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
276,104,91247,5,6,0:0:0:0:
140,256,91437,1,0,0:0:0:0:
400,216,91627,5,2,0:0:0:0:
48,220,91816,1,8,0:0:0:0:
276,104,92006,5,2,0:0:0:0:
184,340,92196,1,0,0:0:0:0:
380,116,92386,5,2,0:0:0:0:
140,256,92576,1,8,0:0:0:0:
136,88,92766,5,6,0:0:0:0:
164,116,92861,1,0,0:0:0:0:
204,128,92956,1,0,0:0:0:0:
236,152,93051,1,0,0:0:0:0:
276,152,93145,5,2,0:0:0:0:
312,136,93240,1,0,0:0:0:0:
348,152,93335,1,0,0:0:0:0:
388,152,93430,1,0,0:0:0:0:
412,184,93525,5,2,0:0:0:0:
400,224,93620,1,0,0:0:0:0:
412,264,93715,1,0,0:0:0:0:
380,288,93810,1,0,0:0:0:0:
340,288,93905,5,2,0:0:0:0:
312,316,94000,1,0,0:0:0:0:
272,316,94095,2,0,B|280:272|280:272|248:268|264:224,1,100,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
256,192,95804,12,4,98842,0:0:0:0:
sorry最近模擬考完就是段考...快考高中了qwq
沒有寒假orz
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir

O k a y u wrote:

sorry最近模擬考完就是段考...快考高中了qwq
沒有寒假orz
好可怕..我也快考高中惹还是有寒假o.o
已经泡惹上传会戳泡所以不能更新了抱歉/w\
Narcissu
1,744 posts
Joined August 2012
Narcissu
我想说我好像在很久前看过这个图然后点了fav……（捂脸

据说给泡图射星是zz……喵~~
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir

zengdaen wrote:

我想说我好像在很久前看过这个图然后点了fav……（捂脸

据说给泡图射星是zz……喵~~
zz就zz吧 感谢射星><
我zz还以为有bat来check了
O k a y u_old
29 posts
Joined March 2013
O k a y u_old

rinsukir wrote:

好可怕..我也快考高中惹还是有寒假o.o
已经泡惹上传会戳泡所以不能更新了抱歉/w\
恩沒關係:3
有寒假真好Orz...
Low
2,006 posts
Joined July 2011
Low
from PM request

[General]
the title romanisation is totally wrong... should be "Hikarakuyo" 0.0
hikarakuyo translates to "flying flowers falling leaves" so add that to tags
the combo colors on the easy diff are slightly different, fix that please
the kiai times are also slightly different... fix that too
soft-hitwhistle2.wav and soft-hitwhistle3.wav are both not needed, they are the default whistle sound. delete them from the folder
i could move the title text to the end of this spinner 00:38:082 (1) for you, looks nice

[Easy]
00:04:664 (3) - NC, music changes a little here and this combo is too long
00:08:462 (2) - why is there a random clap on the start of this slider? you don't put a clap anywhere else in this section, so use a whistle to be consistent
00:33:525 (2) - add whistles to this slider
00:35:044 (3) - should be an NC here
01:16:057 (3) - curve this slider like this, looks a lot better to me together with the next slider
SPOILER

[Normal]
00:07:702 (1) - remove the clap on this slider for same reason as easy diff
00:28:968 (1) - curve this slider like this, looks better together with the next slider
SPOILER
00:54:032 (2) - this red node slider seems out of place. make it a smooth curve
01:07:702 (4) - should be a whistle at the start of this slider

[Hard]
00:20:234 (3) - curve it up like this?
SPOILER
00:24:411 (6) - NC here, this combo is too long and inconsistent
01:05:044 (1,2) - unstack (1), looks weird.
01:11:120 (1) - remove NC. it is inconsistent with 00:13:399 (3).
01:22:133 (7) - NC here again
01:29:728 (2) - curve this slider like this to blanket 01:28:968 (4), would look neat
SPOILER

[Insane]
00:58:209 (2) - missing a clap at the start of this slider
01:02:386 (1) - maybe curve this a little?
very creative diff

[Okayu's Extra]
why are the HP and OD setting lower than Insane...? please make them the same or higher..
00:13:019 (2) - clap at the start of this slider
00:52:133 (2,3) - ugly overlap
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir

Low wrote:

from PM request

[General]
the title romanisation is totally wrong... should be "Hikarakuyo" 0.0 fix
hikarakuyo translates to "flying flowers falling leaves" so add that to tags fix
the combo colors on the easy diff are slightly different, fix that please fix
the kiai times are also slightly different... fix that too fix
soft-hitwhistle2.wav and soft-hitwhistle3.wav are both not needed, they are the default whistle sound. delete them from the folder fix
i could move the title text to the end of this spinner 00:38:082 (1) for you, looks nice ok!

[Easy]
00:04:664 (3) - NC, music changes a little here and this combo is too long fix
00:08:462 (2) - why is there a random clap on the start of this slider? you don't put a clap anywhere else in this section, so use a whistle to be consistent fix
00:33:525 (2) - add whistles to this slider fix
00:35:044 (3) - should be an NC here fix
01:16:057 (3) - curve this slider like this, looks a lot better to me together with the next slider fix
SPOILER

[Normal]
00:07:702 (1) - remove the clap on this slider for same reason as easy diff fix
00:28:968 (1) - curve this slider like this, looks better together with the next slider fix
SPOILER
00:54:032 (2) - this red node slider seems out of place. make it a smooth curve fix
01:07:702 (4) - should be a whistle at the start of this slider fix

[Hard]
00:20:234 (3) - curve it up like this? fix
SPOILER
00:24:411 (6) - NC here, this combo is too long and inconsistent fix
01:05:044 (1,2) - unstack (1), looks weird. fix
01:11:120 (1) - remove NC. it is inconsistent with 00:13:399 (3). fix
01:22:133 (7) - NC here again fix
01:29:728 (2) - curve this slider like this to blanket 01:28:968 (4), would look neat fix
SPOILER

[Insane]
00:58:209 (2) - missing a clap at the start of this slider fix
01:02:386 (1) - maybe curve this a little? fix
very creative diff

[Okayu's Extra]
(Okayu can't play osu so I help her to fix this.)
why are the HP and OD setting lower than Insane...? please make them the same or higher.. fix
00:13:019 (2) - clap at the start of this slider fix in another way
00:52:133 (2,3) - ugly overlap fix
thanks for mod~ :)
Low
2,006 posts
Joined July 2011
Low
one kiai in hard is off by 1 ms, doesn't matter though really. rebubbled for now due to many changes made
rinsukir
385 posts
Joined March 2012
Topic Starter
rinsukir
thank you Low :3
Kamio Misuzu
580 posts
Joined November 2012
Kamio Misuzu
泡了这么久还不rank啊= =。。。Go
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