1. 00:19:031 (5,6,7,8,9) -I felt sense of incongruity for those relations, distance of 5 and 6,6 and 7,7 and 8, 8 and 9.
   Because it is half-done, i suggest that you make the same distance.

1. 01:11:468 (1,2,3) - Because distance is near though a timing is long, it is hard to swat it.
   
   I suggest that make it in this way.

   ↓First, i moved a position of 01:10:711 (5)
   ↓Next,i moved it to put a position of 01:11:846 (2) on 01:10:711 (5) .Finally i alined 01:12:224 (3) .

1. 00:16:006 (5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1) - fix the flow

1. 01:21:552 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - -I felt sense of incongruity for those relations, distance of 1 and 2,2 and ......3 and 4, 4 and 5.lol
   Because it is half-done, i suggest that you make the same distance.

EnixYuki wrote:

[Hard]

1. 00:19:031 (5,6,7,8,9) -I felt sense of incongruity for those relations, distance of 5 and 6,6 and 7,7 and 8, 8 and 9.
   Because it is half-done, i suggest that you make the same distance. 1 way to increase distance. Maybe this I learn from Gloria Guard ><

1. 01:11:468 (1,2,3) - Because distance is near though a timing is long, it is hard to swat it. I understand your way but it is also quite hard to jump. SOrry Unchange
   
   I suggest that make it in this way.

   ↓First, i moved a position of 01:10:711 (5)
   ↓Next,i moved it to put a position of 01:11:846 (2) on 01:10:711 (5) .Finally i alined 01:12:224 (3) .

[Insane]

1. 00:16:006 (5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,1) - fix the flow

Nothing, I think they are fine

1. 01:21:552 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - -I felt sense of incongruity for those relations, distance of 1 and 2,2 and ......3 and 4, 4 and 5.lol
   Because it is half-done, i suggest that you make the same distance.

Increase distance as I said.

sorry i can't found many place you should fix

i love this map <3

i shoot kudosu star!

1. First of all, there's only one thing that really bugs me. In "compose" tab and during testplay/gameplay there's a white line in the right edge of screen. This line is flashing and it's really annoying sometimes. 01:09:577 - here's the screenshot. But it happens a lot, test your map and you'll see it.
2. Try to make fade effect for SB/FG/9 a bit longer. It disappears too fast an dit doesn't look really nice. I thing it's better if you start fading on 99451 (01:39:451)
   
   It looks really good. Hope to see more of your works soon.

1. Are you sure that epilepsy warning is needed here? I'd disable it because there's no any strobing effects!

1. 00:00:880 (1,3) - nazi - this overlap is not visible during gameplay, but it flows a bit strange. What if we'll try to make blanket slider with (2). It's still the same symmetrical and well-spaced pattern, but it flows much better!
2. Start all spinners in this diff 1/2 later. So, beginners will have some time to prepare for spinners and it'll fit with music better! Try it!
3. 01:36:174 (2,1) - I don't really like gap between these two beats. It's different from your regular rhythm, so it may confuse beginners. So, I've changeed rhythm here for you, here's the screenshot.
   Note: what exactly is changed? 01:37:182 - (2) ends here + 01:37:686 - 1/2 slider + 01:38:443 - 1/2 slider with repeat
   
   Good job!

1. Set OD/HP to 4 to get better balanced diff spread. It will fit with your patterns much better. Try it in action, and I promise - you'll like it!
2. 00:27:602 (5,1) - nazi - blanket here could be a little bit better. It's not a big deal, but I think you should do it!
   Note: feel free to poke me if you want code for any of my suggestions! I'll be happy to provide you with this codes
3. 00:54:577 (3) - Instead of this sldier, we can make something that will represent music much better. try 1/2 slider with repeat. It'll help you to emphasize clap sound and vocals!
4. 01:05:922 (2,3) - these sliders are cute, but that overlap confuses me a bit. You don't use such patterns often, so it looks a little bit strange. What if we'll try to make a blanket slider? example!
5. 01:37:686 (1,2,3) - some of loud beats are ignored, and some quite ones are mapped. It sounds kinda weird to me, so I strongly recommend you to use Ctrl+G for 01:37:686 (1,2)
   Note: don't forget to fix spacing and hitsounds if you agree!
   
   Rhythm in the end confused me but overall diff is fine.

1. 00:19:535 - How about making this tick a little bit louder. It'll fit better with vocals. Anyway, try it before saying "no"!
   Note: 00:25:837 - same. Well, it happens some more times. I think you can fix such patterns yourself, if you agree.
2. 00:19:031 (5) - 00:31:132 (4) - have you missed New Combos here? It sounds like you should place NCs here to emphasize vocals/music changes and to make comboing more consistent!
3. 01:02:392 (3,4) - blankets are a bit messy and DS is strange. It's too low for jump and too big for regular spacing. If you want, make spacing more consistent. So, it'll look like this
4. 01:38:695 - consider mapping this beat to get more consistent and enjoyable rhythm. It sounds kinda empty without it.

1. Try to use consistent spacing for all 1/4 patterns. It'll help us to read/understand your patterns better + it looks much neater.
2. 00:04:535 (7) - this circle feels more like overmap. I'd recommend you to remove it, but it's up to you.
   
   Nothing else. Nice diff. Well, just one more thing..think about using AR9, it'd fit better with your pattern.

1. Why do you have 2 .osb files? You only need one! Go to File > Open Song Folder and remove the usused .osb file. I would keep a back-up in case you removed the wrong one.
2. Optional, but you could add "Cuffs" in your tags since the game was published and developed by them.
3. About the storyboard, I didn't witness any repetitive strobes or flashes. Therefore, it is not necessary to display epilepsy warning. I would disable it as it is not needed!
   
   Maps that use repetitive strobes, pulsing images, or flashing colors in the storyboard must use the epilepsy warning. There is one built-into the editor, which will display a visual warning at the beginning of the map and also mark the map's online thumbnail with a warning icon. Also, it helps to make a note of the flashing/strobes/etc. in the map's thread. This warning is absolutely needed so that players with epilepsy can avoid any danger.

1. 00:15:501 (3) - The rhythm feels empty with the hit circle alone. I recommend to turn this hit circle into a 1/1 slider (ending at 00:16:006) to complete the rhythm/musical section.
2. 00:22:560 (2,3) - For better readability, I would recommend to rearrange the notes like this as it has better polarity:
   
3. 01:18:527 (3,1) - Optional, but I think it would be better if you remove the spinner and map this part, since it's still part of the kiai section. How about rearranging the patterns like this? If suggested, add a new combo on slider 5 and remove the combo on the next note.
   
4. 01:36:174 (2,1) - Comparing to the music rhythm, I would recommend to rearrange the rhythm like this:
   

1. I would increase the Overall difficulty to 4 or 5 for a more competitive gameplay.
2. 00:36:174 (4) - I believe you forgot to add the soft-whistle here as you added one on your Easy difficulty.
3. 00:53:821 (2,3,4) - Personally, I would rearrange this rhythm like this as it fits better with the music.
   
4. 01:18:022 (2) - Optional, but you could improve the curve of this slider shape. Here is an example:
   
   Image and Code

   
   

   200,168,78022,2,0,B|112:136|112:204|24:168,2,180,8|0|4,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

5. 01:31:636 (1,2) - This combo is too short lol. For an alternative, I would remove the combo at 01:34:157 and add a new combo at 01:35:669.

1. 00:47:644 (3,4) - The slider pattern could be improved. Her is an example:
   
   Image and Code

   
   

   348,156,47644,2,0,P|324:96|336:44,1,120,2|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
   404,72,48274,2,0,P|336:40|256:56,1,160,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

2. 01:13:737 (2,3) - Eh, I do not understand this rhythm. What part of the music are you following? A better way to fix this is to simply replace the first slider with 2 hit circles. Seems like you are trying to follow the vocal lines, so I would recommend to rearrange the notes similar to this.
3. 01:22:812 (7) - This slider is offbeat due to the slider reverse and it's techincally unrankable. A good way to fix this is to replace this with a 1/2 reverse slider instead. It goes well with the vocal lines as well, so I would recommend it.

1. 00:16:006 (5,6) - Nothing major, but this spacing between these notes is inconsistent (0.9x spacing). Change the spacing to 0.5x.
2. 00:49:157 (9) - I would remove this note, since there are no instrument playing here.
3. 01:37:434 (7) - Consider adding a note here to finish the rhythm. The rhythm feels incomplete without it.

osu! needs more Duca! Good luck with your map!

HelloSCV wrote:

from my queue

Easy

00:30:627 (3) - missed clap fixed

Normal

00:39:199 - SC:2 finish is needed for consistence (and you added finish here on other diffs) ah yes
01:16:510 (6) - whistle on start fixed
01:22:056 (1) - finish? yes at end

Hard

00:15:501 (3,4,5) - no claps are purpsed? nope
00:32:644 (5) - ^ ^
00:34:409 (4,1) - this slider arrow is hidden even default skin is changed :/ I don't think so
01:04:409 (3,4) - need claps (if you fix 00:15:501 (3,4,5) - this) nope
01:30:880 (1) - delete NC and 01:31:888 (3) - add NC here 1 anti-jump. I keep sorry

Insane

00:07:686 (1) - this NC isn't need imo fixed
00:19:409 (2) - i think moving this note to 00:19:535 (2) - here is better? (or at least make 3/4 slider) I make as vocal
00:35:417 (6) - NC and 00:35:669 (1) - delete NC fixed
00:49:031 (8) - maybe need clap fixed
01:03:401 (8,9) - reverse rhythm? nope
01:04:661 (10,11) - is this rhythm intentional? but i think this rhythm fits better http://puu.sh/3HTkQ.jpg I don't think so
01:10:459 (1) - delete NC (for consistnece) ok
01:19:031 (4,1) - stack perfectly? -nazi yes

nice SBs lol Good luck~

SPOILER

180,288,80039,2,0,P|220:328|280:332,1,120,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
384,268,81048,2,0,P|399:213|374:159,1,120,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
264,108,82056,6,0,P|208:120|173:169,1,120,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
168,229,82812,1,0,0:0:0:0:
180,288,83064,1,8,0:0:0:0:

236,184,24577,1,8,0:0:0:0:
324,260,24829,2,0,P|336:216|324:168,1,80,0|4,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

SPOILER

Satellite wrote:

Nothing to Say.really good diff


AR+1 ? this is a calm song. I think +4 for normal is fine
01:20:039 (3,4,1,2,3) - You like this? more beautiful. fixed. Thank for code ^^

SPOILER

180,288,80039,2,0,P|220:328|280:332,1,120,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
384,268,81048,2,0,P|399:213|374:159,1,120,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
264,108,82056,6,0,P|208:120|173:169,1,120,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:
168,229,82812,1,0,0:0:0:0:
180,288,83064,1,8,0:0:0:0:

01:37:686 (1,2,3) - More better rhythm,follow with lyrics,like this. fixed



00:04:913 (1) - Move x264 y188 try this. fixed
00:06:174 (5) - 00:06:426 - here add whistle fixed
00:24:577 (7,8) - try this. my suggestion. Nice

236,184,24577,1,8,0:0:0:0:
324,260,24829,2,0,P|336:216|324:168,1,80,0|4,0:0|0:0,0:0:0:0:

SPOILER

00:38:190 (4) - add whistle fixed
01:01:888 (2) - end point add whistle? fixed
01:37:686 (1,2,3,4) - you like this? fixed



00:09:199 (1) - remove note? Nope
00:10:207 - 00:14:745 - 00:42:224 - add whistle fixed
00:19:409 (2,3) - slider follow better? fixed

01:03:401 (8) - add Nc yea ><
01:29:619 (8) - ^ fixed


Good luck star~

SPOILER

1. 00:30:375
2. 00:39:703
3. 00:53:821
4. 00:54:829
5. 01:12:980
6. 01:13:989
7. 01:17:014
8. 01:32:140
9. 01:35:922

1. 00:04:031 (3) - 322;153
2. 00:04:157 (4) - 343;144
3. 00:04:283 (5) - 365;141
4. 00:04:409 (6) - 387;143
5. 00:04:535 (7) - 408;151

1. 00:15:501 (2) - 123;135
2. 00:15:627 (3) - 138;118
3. 00:15:753 (4) - 153;101

SPOILER

[/spolierbox]
00:27:098 (1,2) - Move 1's end on 158;338 and 2's start on the same place for perfect stack. It's bad when you see such a weird overlap when you play.
00:32:644 (4,5,6,7) - As I said before, you're following the same instrument, but you change the snap, so it's nosense. Use 0.5 DS again.
00:38:695 (4) - CTRL+G to fix really critical flow break. It fixes 2 flow breaks in a row so CTRL+G is imo best solution. If you don't understand I can eplain ingame.
00:40:711 (6,7,8,9,1) - Same stream issue which I've explained before.
00:53:695 (3) - Linear shape doesn't follow next slider well so it's bad flow. Maybe try this way.
[spoilerbox]

abalee wrote:

[General]
does the song have "(Short Ver.)" in the title? if not, suggest to delete it. fixed

[Insane]
01:03:401 (1,2,3,4) -
suggest change to this patten. you might need to add hitsound. fixed


[Hard]
00:20:039 (2,3,4) - no jump please, i thought it's 3/4 when first play. fixed

Leorda wrote:

Hi there

[General]
* There are 2 OSBs in this beatmap folder, remove the wrong one


[Normal]
00:07:434 (5) - Move to X:380 and Y:28 for better flow. Because the tail slider will lead to (5) if you move them and the path of flow wouldn't be off
00:47:266 (1) - Remove new combo for your combo pattern?


[Hard]
00:42:224 (3) - Reverse this section to create an oval flow


[Insane]
00:03:653 (2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - Since this is a calm part, I don't think the stream would be fit in here... Consider to make another pattern
01:03:401 (1) - Remove new combo for your combo pattern?


Good luck

1. Quite sure the artist "Duca" does not need to be written in Japanese unicode. Try typing "デュッカ" into Google, you will get strange results that have nothing to do with the artist. Replace "デュッカ" with "Duca".
   
2. Really really nice SB!

1. 00:05:165 (2,3) - A bit unnatural jump to the 2 here imo. Try moving the 2,3 more downwards and placing them more inside the curve given from the 00:04:661 (1). Try like this:
   
   Image

   
2. 00:06:426 (5,6) - Small spacing doesn't feel so great imo, you have less than 1.0 spacing here. You could try increasing the spacing and also making a nicer blanket. It will play better after the 4-5 jump. Also make sure to make the 00:05:291 (3,4) blanket and the 00:06:426 (5,6) the same for a consistent pattern here.
   
   Image

   
3. 00:17:896 (4,5,1,2) - Looks a bit sloppy. More spacing is nicer here, try moving the 00:19:031 (1,2) - more downwards and to the right so that the slider tail of 00:19:031 (1) is the same spacing from the spacing from the 00:17:896 (4) that the 5 is. Like this:
   
   Image

   
4. 00:33:022 (7) - Clap missing perhaps?
   
5. 00:55:333 (1,2) - Move to (324,328) is nicer for more spacing and to make the blanket nice. Don't forget to move the 00:56:342 (3,4,5,6) also.
   
   Image

   
6. 01:03:905 - When you're using a slidertick hitsound in an Insane diff to accent something important in the music, chances are your rhythm is not very good and is ignoring what's important in the song. Here I suggest that you remove the repeat from the 8 and to add a small stream after it. This way you will start following the drum transition when it's starting in the music instead of after it has started. You could also use a 1/4 slider with a repeat if you wanted. Also a NC on the 8 is great here, the combo gets a little bit long anyways. Here's what I mean:
   
   Image

   
7. 01:04:787 (10,11,1) - It would be nice to have larger spacing here. When you have a pattern that increases spacing like 01:04:409 (9,10), you should continue that idea until the next downbeat or tension release. The 01:04:409 (9,10) and the spacing increase is following the drum transition in the music, which is building up tension in anticipation for the finish (downbeat) at 01:05:417. That's why when you decrease spacing like you do at 01:04:787 (10,11,1) before the downbeat, it feels really not so great. You can follow the music better by having similar spacing to the 11 that you do between the two 1/4 sliders, and then a jump and NC to the 1.
   Take 00:50:039 (2,3,4,5,6,1) for example, see how you follow the increased spacing idea until the downbeat? That plays really nicely.
   
8. 01:23:569 (1) - Clap on the end is nice.
   
9. 01:23:064 (7) - Try replacing with a 1/4 repeating slider instead to better follow the percussion here.
   
   Image

   
10. 01:29:619 (1) - Try extending the slider by 1/4 here, seems to follow the music quite well.
    
11. 01:30:880 (1,2,3) - My large complaint here is that this super important beat at 01:31:636 falls on the end of the slider and is not stressed. What that does is make your map feel distanct from the music because we aren't moving and clicking along with important aspects of the song. Look at the setup that you have in the hard diff. That is the kind of thing that you want here. Try this sort of rhythm:
    
    Image

    
    A triplet at 01:31:132 fits the music perfectly and then a jump into the slider 1.
    I have similar complaints with sliders like 01:07:182 (1) although that one is not as bad. On the end of that slider, the vocals start a new idea, so it makes the entire section feel awkward to play imo. You could try arranging as you see fit.
    
12. 01:31:384 (3,4,5,6) - You have such small spacing here even though these are some of the most accented beats in the song. A jump to the slider 01:32:392 (6) is fantastic because of the loud finish hit on its head.
    
13. 01:14:997 (6,7,1) - Since the vocals really increase in intensity here, you could try increasing spacing, which might play better especially after the jump pattern at 01:13:485 (1,2,3,4) when the vocals were more relaxed.
    
14. 01:19:535 (1,2,3) - Since the vocals are holding here, try instead following the background music by shortening the 1 by 1/4 and adding a circle, then delete 2 and more the 3 1/2 earlier like this:
    
    Image

    
    You could have a nice blanketing jump to the 3 perhaps.
15. 01:38:947 (4,5) - Unstack them? It fits better with the 01:37:686 (1,2,3) pattern and plays nicer imo. Try it see if you agree.
    
    Image

    

1. 00:03:148 (3,4) - This is alright here, just note that it's not really following anything in the music since the vocals are completely different here than they were at 00:01:132 (2,3). It would be better if you had a slider at 00:02:896 with a repeat on the blue tick, just like at 00:06:930 (6).
   
2. 00:15:501 (3,4,5) - Missing claps here I suppose.
   
3. 00:22:560 (4) - Clap on head.
   
4. 00:23:064 (5,1) - Switch NC makes more sense to me to follow vocals.
   
5. 00:24:577 (2) - Since we were following vocals with the 00:23:064 (5,6,1) I'd rather you not have this large jump here. It's a bit surprising. Instead I'd like if you would follow vocals with a rhythm like so:
   
   Image

   
   
6. 00:27:854 (6) - The repeat is not following anything in the song and is missing the vocal hit at 00:28:358. I'd like it if you would extend the slider by 1/2. That or shorten it by 1/2 if you don't want to miss out on the clap.
   
7. 00:32:644 (5) - Clap on the head and on the end is nice to follow the music here.
   
8. 01:04:409 (3) - Clap on first repeat.
   
9. 01:33:653 (1,2,3) - Try increasing spacing to make the rhythm more obvious and to avoid the overlap with the 01:32:896 (6).
   
   Image

   
10. 01:39:199 (4) - Missing clap on head I suppose.

1. 00:00:880 (1,2) - I think it's a confusing way to start the map. I'd prefer that you combine these into one slider.
   
   Image

   
2. 00:06:426 (4,5) - The 5 being on the blue tick is a bit weird and it's difficult for the player to even notice the difference in spacing from previous notes. I highly suggest changing the rhythm before this so that you could have a repeating slider here. The idea is this:
   
   Image

   
   Circle at 00:06:426 and then slider starting at 00:06:930. Also move the spinner to the right 1/4 tick.
3. 00:16:006 - I'd like you to remove the slider tick hitsound from this spot. After the finish at 00:15:753 this clap is really noisy. It's just too much noise and may confuse the player. Also the clap at 00:16:006 is much softer than the one at 00:15:501 so it's fine not to have it hitsounded here imo.
   
4. 00:27:602 (5) - I think you can make a more intuitive rhythm if you shorten this slider to end at 00:28:611 instead and have the clap on the end. Then have a 1/1 slider at 00:29:115 to follow the vocals. The reason why I say this is because the clap at 00:28:611 is really loud and it's an important beat in the section. It's better to have it on a hit like the slider end instead of in the middle of the slider. Like this:
   
   Image

   
   This is why the ranking guidelines discourage the use of slidertick hitsounds. They encourage mappers to make unintuitive rhythms because they can add the hitsounds in the middle of sliders and it confuses the player.
   
5. Some times in the kiai you use a soft whistle instead of a finish, like at 01:21:048 (4,1) for example, at places where you normally use finishs (in other diffs. It's not a problem, just listing it here.

1. 00:06:930 (4,1) - I highly suggest that you even out the spacing here. New players will enjoy more movement, and there's plenty of space here to make it 1.0 spacing.
   
2. 00:20:543 (4,1,2,3) - Try changing the rhythm here to follow the vocals more closely. Try removing the repeat from the 4 and then moving the 1,2,3 to the left 1/2. Then add a repeat to the 3. Like so:
   
   Image

   
   That or you could extend the 3 by one beat like this:
   
3. 01:37:686 (1) - Remove NC? Unnecessary imo.

UnitedWeSin wrote:

THE TIME HAS COME!

I'm going to be strict with your mapping because I see a lot of great potential and I want to help you improve it.

[General]

1. Quite sure the artist "Duca" does not need to be written in Japanese unicode. Try typing "デュッカ" into Google, you will get strange results that have nothing to do with the artist. Replace "デュッカ" with "Duca". ok
   
2. Really really nice SB!

[Insane]

1. 00:05:165 (2,3) - A bit unnatural jump to the 2 here imo. Try moving the 2,3 more downwards and placing them more inside the curve given from the 00:04:661 (1). Try like this: fixed
   
   Image

   
2. 00:06:426 (5,6) - Small spacing doesn't feel so great imo, you have less than 1.0 spacing here. You could try increasing the spacing and also making a nicer blanket. It will play better after the 4-5 jump. Also make sure to make the 00:05:291 (3,4) blanket and the 00:06:426 (5,6) the same for a consistent pattern here. fixed
   
   Image

   
3. 00:17:896 (4,5,1,2) - Looks a bit sloppy. More spacing is nicer here, try moving the 00:19:031 (1,2) - more downwards and to the right so that the slider tail of 00:19:031 (1) is the same spacing from the spacing from the 00:17:896 (4) that the 5 is. Like this: ok
   
   Image

   
4. 00:33:022 (7) - Clap missing perhaps? added ><
   
5. 00:55:333 (1,2) - Move to (324,328) is nicer for more spacing and to make the blanket nice. Don't forget to move the 00:56:342 (3,4,5,6) also. ok
   
   Image

   
6. 01:03:905 - When you're using a slidertick hitsound in an Insane diff to accent something important in the music, chances are your rhythm is not very good and is ignoring what's important in the song. Here I suggest that you remove the repeat from the 8 and to add a small stream after it. This way you will start following the drum transition when it's starting in the music instead of after it has started. You could also use a 1/4 slider with a repeat if you wanted. Also a NC on the 8 is great here, the combo gets a little bit long anyways. Here's what I mean: fixed but I put trouble note afterward overlaps with (8)
   
   Image

   
7. 01:04:787 (10,11,1) - It would be nice to have larger spacing here. When you have a pattern that increases spacing like 01:04:409 (9,10), you should continue that idea until the next downbeat or tension release. The 01:04:409 (9,10) and the spacing increase is following the drum transition in the music, which is building up tension in anticipation for the finish (downbeat) at 01:05:417. That's why when you decrease spacing like you do at 01:04:787 (10,11,1) before the downbeat, it feels really not so great. You can follow the music better by having similar spacing to the 11 that you do between the two 1/4 sliders, and then a jump and NC to the 1.
   Take 00:50:039 (2,3,4,5,6,1) for example, see how you follow the increased spacing idea until the downbeat? That plays really nicely. I really can't understand this or my english is poor ><. I will ask you after
   
8. 01:23:569 (1) - Clap on the end is nice. ok
   
9. 01:23:064 (7) - Try replacing with a 1/4 repeating slider instead to better follow the percussion here. ok
   
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10. 01:29:619 (1) - Try extending the slider by 1/4 here, seems to follow the music quite well. ok
    
11. 01:30:880 (1,2,3) - My large complaint here is that this super important beat at 01:31:636 falls on the end of the slider and is not stressed. What that does is make your map feel distanct from the music because we aren't moving and clicking along with important aspects of the song. Look at the setup that you have in the hard diff. That is the kind of thing that you want here. Try this sort of rhythm: fixed
    
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    A triplet at 01:31:132 fits the music perfectly and then a jump into the slider 1.
    I have similar complaints with sliders like 01:07:182 (1) although that one is not as bad. On the end of that slider, the vocals start a new idea, so it makes the entire section feel awkward to play imo. You could try arranging as you see fit. I think it is fine? ><
    
12. 01:31:384 (3,4,5,6) - You have such small spacing here even though these are some of the most accented beats in the song. A jump to the slider 01:32:392 (6) is fantastic because of the loud finish hit on its head. link false @@
    
13. 01:14:997 (6,7,1) - Since the vocals really increase in intensity here, you could try increasing spacing, which might play better especially after the jump pattern at 01:13:485 (1,2,3,4) when the vocals were more relaxed. fixed I put (7) overlap with (5)
    
14. 01:19:535 (1,2,3) - Since the vocals are holding here, try instead following the background music by shortening the 1 by 1/4 and adding a circle, then delete 2 and more the 3 1/2 earlier like this: ok
    
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    You could have a nice blanketing jump to the 3 perhaps.
15. 01:38:947 (4,5) - Unstack them? It fits better with the 01:37:686 (1,2,3) pattern and plays nicer imo. Try it see if you agree.fix as image
    
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I'd like you to work more on this. Take these points here into consideration and work more on matching your spacing and rhythm to the music. Lots of times in this map you use smaller spacing for more intense portions of the song and it makes the map feel less that amazing.

[Hard]

1. 00:03:148 (3,4) - This is alright here, just note that it's not really following anything in the music since the vocals are completely different here than they were at 00:01:132 (2,3). It would be better if you had a slider at 00:02:896 with a repeat on the blue tick, just like at 00:06:930 (6). alright
   
2. 00:15:501 (3,4,5) - Missing claps here I suppose. ok
   
3. 00:22:560 (4) - Clap on head.
   
4. 00:23:064 (5,1) - Switch NC makes more sense to me to follow vocals. ok
   
5. 00:24:577 (2) - Since we were following vocals with the 00:23:064 (5,6,1) I'd rather you not have this large jump here. It's a bit surprising. Instead I'd like if you would follow vocals with a rhythm like so: fixed
   
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6. 00:27:854 (6) - The repeat is not following anything in the song and is missing the vocal hit at 00:28:358. I'd like it if you would extend the slider by 1/2. That or shorten it by 1/2 if you don't want to miss out on the clap. oh i didn't see it @@
   
7. 00:32:644 (5) - Clap on the head and on the end is nice to follow the music here. ok
   
8. 01:04:409 (3) - Clap on first repeat. ok
   
9. 01:33:653 (1,2,3) - Try increasing spacing to make the rhythm more obvious and to avoid the overlap with the 01:32:896 (6). fixed but lower distance
   
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10. 01:39:199 (4) - Missing clap on head I suppose. ok

Pretty nice diff.

[Normal]

1. 00:00:880 (1,2) - I think it's a confusing way to start the map. I'd prefer that you combine these into one slider. ok
   
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2. 00:06:426 (4,5) - The 5 being on the blue tick is a bit weird and it's difficult for the player to even notice the difference in spacing from previous notes. I highly suggest changing the rhythm before this so that you could have a repeating slider here. The idea is this: fixed
   
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   Circle at 00:06:426 and then slider starting at 00:06:930. Also move the spinner to the right 1/4 tick.
3. 00:16:006 - I'd like you to remove the slider tick hitsound from this spot. After the finish at 00:15:753 this clap is really noisy. It's just too much noise and may confuse the player. Also the clap at 00:16:006 is much softer than the one at 00:15:501 so it's fine not to have it hitsounded here imo. ok ok
   
4. 00:27:602 (5) - I think you can make a more intuitive rhythm if you shorten this slider to end at 00:28:611 instead and have the clap on the end. Then have a 1/1 slider at 00:29:115 to follow the vocals. The reason why I say this is because the clap at 00:28:611 is really loud and it's an important beat in the section. It's better to have it on a hit like the slider end instead of in the middle of the slider. Like this:
   
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   This is why the ranking guidelines discourage the use of slidertick hitsounds. They encourage mappers to make unintuitive rhythms because they can add the hitsounds in the middle of sliders and it confuses the player.
   
5. Some times in the kiai you use a soft whistle instead of a finish, like at 01:21:048 (4,1) for example, at places where you normally use finishs (in other diffs. It's not a problem, just listing it here. fixed

Great diff.

[Easy]

1. 00:06:930 (4,1) - I highly suggest that you even out the spacing here. New players will enjoy more movement, and there's plenty of space here to make it 1.0 spacing. ok fixed
   
2. 00:20:543 (4,1,2,3) - Try changing the rhythm here to follow the vocals more closely. Try removing the repeat from the 4 and then moving the 1,2,3 to the left 1/2. Then add a repeat to the 3. Like so: ok
   
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   That or you could extend the 3 by one beat like this:
   
3. 01:37:686 (1) - Remove NC? Unnecessary imo fixed.

Nice.

Ok well that's all for now. I have similar complaints that Winber1 had. I'd like you to work some more on it before calling me back.
I'm gonna star the map now because it's got lots of great potential.^^

1. 00:05:922 (4) - Move to (348,236). Make same blanket as 00:06:426 (5,6) for better pattern.
   
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2. 00:09:199 (1) - Seems nice to move this to 00:09:325 and stack on 00:09:451 (2). Follows drums and gives time after spinner.
   
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3. 00:13:358 - Consider add note here. You can make triplet on head of 00:13:485 (6). Follows music and makes nice jump here which fits.
   
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4. 00:19:409 (2,3) - More spacing plays better IMO because there is gap in rhythm. Try moving 00:20:291 (3,4,5,6) to the right.
   
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5. 00:24:073 (2,3,4) - You stop follow vocal here and the linear flow plays not so great IMO. Try to continue follow vocals:
   
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   Sample placement. The drop to 3 fits vocals well IMO.
6. 00:34:913 (5) - Try move to 00:35:165 to follow vocal better. If you delete 00:35:417 (1) and add circle at 00:34:913 you can follow vocal better and make better flow from 00:34:157 (3,4,5). Here is example:
   
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   4-5 jump fits with vocals well.
7. 00:48:527 (5) - Try stack on head of 00:47:518 (2) and make jump. It fits better after 00:47:896 (3,4) jump.
   
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8. 00:56:342 (3,4,5,6) -

   -iCo- wrote:

   00:56:342 (3,4,5,6) - make these jumps neater. They look scattered

   That's a good suggestion, these jumps are a bit scattered. Try to fix them up, maybe have 00:56:846 (5) in blanket with 00:55:333 (1). Here's a sample placement you could try:
   
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9. 01:03:401 (1) - Because you stack them, you should extend this by 1/4. That way it ends on the white tick and we play triplet. It is easier to read.
   
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   Or you could shorten it to red tick and use 1/4 slider with repeat:
   
   If you do, stack 2 - 3 is better to read.
10. 01:07:182 (1,2) - Switch NC seems better to make 01:06:174 (3,4,1) all same combo and because vocals change on this jump 01:07:686 (2).
    
11. 01:17:266 (6,1) - Make blanket? It will be more nice flow and more pretty placement.
    
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12. 01:31:636 (5,6,7,8) - You can make a more interesting placement here. Try to have 1.5 spacing to the 5 then a jump to the 7 for the loud crash. I'll give you example placement that you might like:
    
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UnitedWeSin wrote:

I'm sorry Oyatsu. Sometimes I forget about language barrier, so I'll try again.

No KD.

[Insane]

1. 00:05:922 (4) - Move to (348,236). Make same blanket as 00:06:426 (5,6) for better pattern. fixed
   
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2. 00:09:199 (1) - Seems nice to move this to 00:09:325 and stack on 00:09:451 (2). Follows drums and gives time after spinner. ok
   
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3. 00:13:358 - Consider add note here. You can make triplet on head of 00:13:485 (6). Follows music and makes nice jump here which fits. ok
   
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4. 00:19:409 (2,3) - More spacing plays better IMO because there is gap in rhythm. Try moving 00:20:291 (3,4,5,6) to the right. fixed
   
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5. 00:24:073 (2,3,4) - You stop follow vocal here and the linear flow plays not so great IMO. Try to continue follow vocals: ok
   
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   Sample placement. The drop to 3 fits vocals well IMO.
6. 00:34:913 (5) - Try move to 00:35:165 to follow vocal better. If you delete 00:35:417 (1) and add circle at 00:34:913 you can follow vocal better and make better flow from 00:34:157 (3,4,5). Here is example: ok
   
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   4-5 jump fits with vocals well.
7. 00:48:527 (5) - Try stack on head of 00:47:518 (2) and make jump. It fits better after 00:47:896 (3,4) jump. ok
   
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8. 00:56:342 (3,4,5,6) -

   -iCo- wrote:

   00:56:342 (3,4,5,6) - make these jumps neater. They look scattered

   That's a good suggestion, these jumps are a bit scattered. Try to fix them up, maybe have 00:56:846 (5) in blanket with 00:55:333 (1). Here's a sample placement you could try:ok, also i will give kudosu for ico afterward
   
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9. 01:03:401 (1) - Because you stack them, you should extend this by 1/4. That way it ends on the white tick and we play triplet. It is easier to read. fixed
   
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   Or you could shorten it to red tick and use 1/4 slider with repeat:
   
   If you do, stack 2 - 3 is better to read.
10. 01:07:182 (1,2) - Switch NC seems better to make 01:06:174 (3,4,1) all same combo and because vocals change on this jump 01:07:686 (2). ok
    
11. 01:17:266 (6,1) - Make blanket? It will be more nice flow and more pretty placement. ok
    
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12. 01:31:636 (5,6,7,8) - You can make a more interesting placement here. Try to have 1.5 spacing to the 5 then a jump to the 7 for the loud crash. I'll give you example placement that you might like: ok
    
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I have a lot of issues with the Insane diff.

I feel that sections like 00:17:014 to 00:31:132 are great and have clever placements. You use nice jumps and good flow.

But sections like (just examples):
00:33:148 to 00:41:342
01:05:417 to 01:13:485
01:27:350 to end
These sections are really not so great and need more work on placements/flow. You stop your good flow/jumps. I gave some examples on ways to fix that.

I'm sorry Oyatsu, I don't think I'm the right one to bubble right now. I think you should find a few more mods and work more on the Insane.

Insane

That's all ~ I don't guess this will become good modding. anyway, GL almost there !

scanter wrote:

before bubble check :3 no kds plz.

Insane

1. 00:06:930 (6) - Add NC? ok
2. 00:20:039 - Rhythm is a little strange. How about this rhythm? this will become following more better about guitar & vocal sound. I don't like here full ><
   
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3. 00:21:426 - Add 1 circle here? you can hear drum sound. i will consider after
4. 00:30:627 (7) - Change this to 1/2 reverse slider one? because of vocals. V pattern can creat 2 rhythm instead of repeat =w=
5. 00:35:669 (2) - this note should be put to jump IMO. sound was suddenly turned up. how about move to like x:294, y:372? i don't understand x y
6. 00:53:695 (3) - To ignore strong clap sound on 00:53:821 this point is not good idea. I recommend this rhythm. fixed
   
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7. 00:57:350 (1) - Move to x:193, y:163. not perfect stacked. use shift + mouse. ok
8. 00:58:358 (1) - Why NC here? before you did put NC consistently, so put NC 00:59:367 here is right way ok
9. 01:04:913 - Change whistle to clap fixed
10. 01:07:182 (6,1,2) - I dunno what you followed sound. how about this tempo? ok
    
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11. 01:08:695 (4) - Move to x:225, y:118. not perfect stacked. ok
12. 01:13:989 (3,5) - NC? players might confuse this, but low-bpm. fix or not as you wish nope sorry ><
13. 01:18:527 (4) - Move to x:360, y:271. ok
14. 01:28:485 (5,6) - I think, this rhythm much better for play IMO. fixed my own
    
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15. 01:31:636 (5) - NC. your pattern. it is not NC spam. ok

That's all ~ I don't guess this will become good modding. anyway, GL almost there !

Gero wrote:

don't give up! GO GO GO!

1. IRC Mod

2013-09-05 22:52 Gero: i will play in the bed xD
2013-09-05 22:54 Gero: nice
2013-09-05 22:54 Oyatsu: and no fail ><
2013-09-05 22:54 Gero: yeah
2013-09-05 22:54 Gero: is awesome goob job
2013-09-05 22:55 Gero: but i have say some things
2013-09-05 22:55 Oyatsu: playing in the bed
2013-09-05 22:55 Oyatsu: lazy gero ><
2013-09-05 22:55 Gero: yeah xD
2013-09-05 22:55 Gero: ahaha 
2013-09-05 22:55 Oyatsu: ok
2013-09-05 22:55 Oyatsu: let say
2013-09-05 22:55 Oyatsu: ACTION is editing [http://osu.ppy.sh/b/296160 Duca - Kokoro no Tane (Short Ver.) [Isane]]
2013-09-05 22:56 Gero: disabled widescreen support 
2013-09-05 22:56 Gero: please xD
2013-09-05 22:56 Oyatsu: why?
2013-09-05 22:56 Gero: SB is 1024X768
2013-09-05 22:56 Oyatsu: ?
2013-09-05 22:56 Gero: you use only a minimal part of the space 
2013-09-05 22:57 Oyatsu: ok
2013-09-05 22:57 Gero: you need disabled
2013-09-05 22:57 Gero: o3o
2013-09-05 22:57 Gero: all diff please
2013-09-05 22:57 Gero: 00:04:913 (1,2) -  spacing
2013-09-05 22:57 Oyatsu: done~
2013-09-05 22:58 Oyatsu: i want it variours spacing?
2013-09-05 22:58 Oyatsu: ><
2013-09-05 22:58 Gero: 00:06:426 (6) -  add whistle in the head
2013-09-05 22:58 Oyatsu: fixed
2013-09-05 22:58 Gero: but that space is very random 
2013-09-05 22:58 Gero: .w.
2013-09-05 22:59 Gero: fixed this xD
2013-09-05 22:59 Oyatsu: ok ><
2013-09-05 22:59 Oyatsu: fixed
2013-09-05 23:01 Gero: 00:19:031 (1,2) -  well this sounds wrong , try this http://puu.sh/4kdel.jpg
2013-09-05 23:02 Gero: 00:25:585 (2) -  whistle
2013-09-05 23:02 Oyatsu: fixed 2nd
2013-09-05 23:02 Oyatsu: 1st, i think fine ><
2013-09-05 23:02 Gero: nope
2013-09-05 23:02 Gero: sounds bad 
2013-09-05 23:03 Oyatsu: maybe you want follow vocal, right?
2013-09-05 23:03 Gero: 00:31:510 (6,7) -  nazi* move this circle to X: 00:32:392 (7) -  x:430 y:187 
2013-09-05 23:03 Gero: and yes
2013-09-05 23:03 Gero: is better
2013-09-05 23:03 Gero:  you do not follow nothing here
2013-09-05 23:04 Gero: imo
2013-09-05 23:04 Gero: 00:31:510 (6) -  whistle in the end 
2013-09-05 23:04 Oyatsu: instrument
2013-09-05 23:04 Oyatsu: ok
2013-09-05 23:04 Gero: I don't hear nothing there but well
2013-09-05 23:04 Gero: ...
2013-09-05 23:05 Oyatsu: =w=
2013-09-05 23:05 Oyatsu: continue, gero...
2013-09-05 23:05 Gero: 00:32:140 (7,1) -  spacing
2013-09-05 23:05 Gero: 00:34:157 (3) -  whistle
2013-09-05 23:06 Oyatsu: fixed all
2013-09-05 23:06 Gero: 00:39:199 -  imo would be much better follow the drums 
2013-09-05 23:06 Gero: but this can omit
2013-09-05 23:06 Oyatsu: so
2013-09-05 23:06 Oyatsu: add drum?
2013-09-05 23:06 Oyatsu: remove finish?
2013-09-05 23:06 Gero: nope
2013-09-05 23:07 Oyatsu: hm?
2013-09-05 23:07 Gero: i mean this http://puu.sh/4kdtG.jpg
2013-09-05 23:07 Gero: change the slider for circles
2013-09-05 23:08 Gero: to better follow the background
2013-09-05 23:08 Gero: 00:43:232 (1) -  add finish in the head
2013-09-05 23:09 Gero: 00:46:384 -  add note here 
2013-09-05 23:09 Gero: o3o
2013-09-05 23:09 Oyatsu:  whistle is good with me
2013-09-05 23:09 Gero: listen well
2013-09-05 23:09 Gero: kk
2013-09-05 23:09 Oyatsu: ?
2013-09-05 23:09 Oyatsu: add note where?
2013-09-05 23:09 Gero: 00:46:384 - 
2013-09-05 23:09 Gero: here
2013-09-05 23:10 Oyatsu: idk the way to fix rhythm ><
2013-09-05 23:11 Gero: three circles here 00:46:258 -  and finish here 00:46:510 -  add clap ofc
2013-09-05 23:11 Gero: 00:52:056 (2) -  remove the whistle at the end and add the whistle in the head sounds better
2013-09-05 23:11 Gero: imo
2013-09-05 23:11 Gero: 00:53:695 (2) -  whistle in the head o3o
2013-09-05 23:11 Oyatsu: 00:45:753 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 
2013-09-05 23:11 Oyatsu: all is notes @@
2013-09-05 23:11 Gero: nope
2013-09-05 23:12 Gero: this time
2013-09-05 23:12 Gero: 00:46:258 -  
2013-09-05 23:12 Gero: three claps are heard here
2013-09-05 23:12 Gero: xD
2013-09-05 23:12 Oyatsu: ok
2013-09-05 23:12 Oyatsu: continue
2013-09-05 23:13 Gero: 01:04:409 -  same here 
2013-09-05 23:13 Gero: 01:04:913 -  and here
2013-09-05 23:13 Oyatsu: i keep sorry ><
2013-09-05 23:13 Gero: listen well to the background o3o
2013-09-05 23:13 Gero: ok
2013-09-05 23:13 Gero: ..
2013-09-05 23:13 Oyatsu: i make as piano
2013-09-05 23:13 Gero: kk
2013-09-05 23:14 Oyatsu: continue~~~~~~~~~~
2013-09-05 23:14 Oyatsu: =w=
2013-09-05 23:14 Gero: 01:07:812 (2) -  whistle in head 
2013-09-05 23:14 Oyatsu: fix
2013-09-05 23:14 Gero: and end
2013-09-05 23:14 Oyatsu: ...ed
2013-09-05 23:14 Gero: 01:08:443 (3) -  remove this
2013-09-05 23:14 Oyatsu: ok
2013-09-05 23:14 Gero: 01:22:560 -  stream here please D:<
2013-09-05 23:15 Gero: 01:23:569 -  and you end up here
2013-09-05 23:15 Gero: 01:23:569 -  i mean add note here with finish :B
2013-09-05 23:16 Gero: this is all very clean diff