[General]
In normal, you have artist unicode 日笠 陽孁E which is ......... you know
I'm not sure if you have special meaning. But I think using consistent combo colors would be better.
[E]
00:05:807 (1,2,3,1) - I'm sorry but can you eliminate the sliderslide sound? Really sounds ridiculous for me. And also some of the following sliders have loud sliderslide sound which I think is not suitable for this song at all.
00:30:512 (4) - try something like
http://puu.sh/2V0fb.jpg00:37:571 (1) - Try something like
http://puu.sh/2V0gQ.jpg btw 00:34:042 (3) is a good shape but looks strange when following with 00:32:277 (2)
00:50:983 (3) - Try something like
http://puu.sh/2V0td.jpgThe hitsound btw, is really too loud and noisy for this song.
I suggest you remap the hitsound. Using the soft one.
[N]
01:06:336 (5) - rotate about 14 degree clockwise
[H]
There are too many things that I think you need to change....
00:10:748 (2) - try x=264 y=144 or x=328 y=324
00:11:454 (3) - ugly shape, if you can not make a beautiful shape. why not use a spinner
00:14:630 (2) - try x=172 y=320
00:16:042 (4,5,6) - enlarge spacing
00:17:101 (1,2,3) - ugly when these three combined together
00:28:571 (8) - why not
http://puu.sh/2V1NS.jpg00:34:042 (1,2,3) - same with before.
Not going to point out more. I think when you map you should consider the map as a whole(including the directions, the shapes, more importantly, the flow). Not putting sliders and circles together and make it a map.
t/86329 < I think this is a good tutorial for you to read.
I rearrange a little bit for you
here. It is just an example and I didn't take the arrangement very seriously. But I think its flow is better than yours.
[I]
00:50:895 (x) - hmm I dk but maybe add a note?
01:03:512 (2,3) - I think these two exchange their positions would be better