Fenya wrote:

Hi
Good song

Easy:
00:20:375 (2) - 2nd slidertick this crooked http://puu.sh/j2Rh ? Done
02:25:137 (2) - 2nd slidertick 1 grid up Done
02:26:566 (4) - ^ Done
03:00:853 (1,2,3,4) - And if you let more curved?... Move (2) to http://puu.sh/j2V9 Move (3) to http://puu.sh/j2Vl Move (4) to http://puu.sh/j2VA It must be something like http://puu.sh/j2VN (opinion personal) Done
03:22:280 (1) - Move 2nd slidertick to x:376 y:308 Done
03:23:232 (2) - Move 2nd slidertick to x:280 y:152 Done

Normal:
I think you should change the name of "Normal" to "Normal+"
01:33:709 (5) - 2nd slidertick 1 grid up and end slidertick 1 grid up Done

Hard:
00:23:391 (2) - move to http://puu.sh/j37S Done
02:21:169 (1) - and if you start at 02:21:328 ? It starts in all diffs that time, no

Well, I'm not good at this, I did everything I could >_<
I hope you serve something~
Sorry for my bad English, good luck

SkyDevil wrote:

Wow this is really good for your first time!

Anyway it was kinda difficult to find some mistakes but Here's my mod
Easy
01:12:756 Hm, can you maybe make the slider horizontal instead of a little bit oblique? I think you mean vertikal, but no, I disaggree with that

Normal
When i was looking through this map i thought, wow this is kinda hard for a normal player x.x so why not make it Normal+?

00:21:328 to 00:22:280 I think this is too hard to read for a normal player, make something else out of it? At first it was only one slider with more repeats, then I was told to divide it into two sliders --> Disaggree
01:16:566 to 01:19:899 ^ Disaggree
02:56:923 to 03:00:852 I think your depending too much on the vocals, maybe you can make the sliders and circles depend on the guitars or something No, almost my whole map depends on vocals --> Disaggree

Hard
00:17:360 Remove circle and give then the next circle the new combo The first cirlce is for the "I'm not gonna..."
00:28:947 Distance between these 4 circles is too big x.x Changed to normal DS
02:56:883 to 03:04:185 Just like at normal you depended too much on the vocals >w< Same as above

hope this helps

Agkaemon wrote:

I think I heard a random "Shit!" in there, maybe lyrics warning. :p

Suggestions, observations.

Overall, your difficulties are harder than what their names represent, Easy feels like a normal, normal like a hard... even when the star ratings are correct.

Stack these http://puu.sh/jqJW instead Anyhow this wasn't supposed to be here? Anyway I don't like stacking, so disaggree

PM me if there's anything you don't understand so I can upload pics.

[Easy]
00:40:376 (4) - Improve on this slider, use 2 points instead of one and leave it a bit more round. In my opinion it looks more weird then (I tried it), finally I left it as it is
00:42:757 (2) - you can improve this slider. Make the points a bit more like a V so it's more of a curve than it's an L. Changed
00:50:375 - Fill up to 00:51:328 (1), or remap to have a bit more of these breaks. Places two notes
01:14:662 (3,4,5,6,1) - line these up to the Y axis. Incompatible with distance snap from previous note --> Left it
01:40:852 (3) - Sexy slider man. Thanks :3
01:54:662 (1,2,3) - Try to make these over so 1's end doesn't overlap with 3's beginning, a bit inconsistent with the great job you've done with the rest of the map. Rotated by 90° and fixed Distance to next note
02:21:169 (1) - Snap start to 02:21:328 Disaggree, she begins singing at 02:21:169 -
03:27:994 (1) - Check out the blanket on this one. Changed

[Normal]
00:27:042 (1) - and 00:32:756 (1), you're creating a draining section/empty section, either is unfun. You can either map it or put a break. Mapped it
02:21:169 (1) - Snap start to 02:21:328 Same as [Easy]
03:06:883 (2) - shorten to closest white tick, insert beat at next white tick.Disaggree
03:08:312 (4) - nudge forward. clap hitsound. Don't understand what you mean with it --> skipped

[Hard]
00:04:661 (2) - Ugly slider, imo. Don't change
00:05:137 (3) - Do this S slider with 4 points instead of 2. Looks fine imo, so left it
00:06:566 (7,8) - yeah uh. slider shapes. Left those, too
00:14:185 (3) - huh, if you want to make a V-like shape, add two red dots near the end and start, and insert a normal point between. I want it the way it is
00:17:360 (1,2,3,4) - these will absolutely be more fun if you put them more together, and as a line instead of a square. Personally, if I were playing your map and found that square I'd probably stop playing right there. I disaggree with you
00:26:090 (5) - the curve would be more pretty if the middle point was not on the Y axis and instead were on the left side. Changed
00:35:931 (2,3) - don't be afraid to change these sliders to double notes, beatbeat, beatbeat, beatbeat instead of slider slider slider. But I want sliders
00:37:836 (1,2) - beatbeat beatbeat Same as above
00:43:233 - Probably insert beat that is symmetrical to 00:42:757 (2) Disaggree
01:15:614 (5) - Do this curve with 2 points instead of 1. Disaggree
01:19:423 (6) - ^ ^
01:22:122 (5,6,7) - beatbeat, beatbeat, beatbeat. I want sliders
01:23:709 (8) - put this one on the Y axis, on top Disaggree
01:24:661 (2,3) - pretty up these sliders Left them as they are
01:33:074 (3,4) - beatbeat, beatbeat > slider, slider *sigh* Same as above
01:47:042 (1,2,3) - I have an idea for this one, take them out from having the same start point space them out as a circle, put them on the center of the screen, then every iteration of (1,2,3) rotate them 30 to 90 degrees in your criteria. Disaggree
02:21:169 (1) - Snap start to 02:21:328 Same as in [Easy] and [Normal]
02:26:407 (3,4) - beatbeat beatbeat. *long sigh*
02:28:312 (1,2) - beatbeat beatbeat ^
02:30:375 (6) - 2 point slider instead of 1, a bit more curve and less L Changed it
02:51:169 (1,2) - beatbeat. Disaggree
03:28:471 (4,5) - - fix these sliders as well. I want them that way

so like, mostly these fixes would make it fun/pretty for me to play it, funny enough, it has stuff that constantly annoys me in ranked maps. heck you can even ignore most of the stuff I suggested if you felt like your map is just perfect as is.

3er123 wrote:

Easy
00:32:280 (3) - 1 grid right Fixed
00:40:376 (4) - looks ugly here
02:58:948 (3) - ugly here
03:16:566 (3) - very askew Fixed

Normal
00:15:614 (1,3) - veeeeeeeeeery ugly
00:17:518 (4,6) - ^
00:42:757 (4) - ugly here
00:47:518 (2,3) - ugly ugly uglyyyyyy
01:17:518 (3,4,5,6,7) - what...the?
01:21:328 (3) - ugly Made it rounder
01:23:233 (6) - ^ ^
02:01:328 (5) - looks askew
02:30:852 (3) - correct that What should I correct there?
03:30:375 (2,3) - ugly

Hard
Ugly,askew sliders
remake that

To all the rest: I prefer constructive criticism, not just saying "(This is) ugly". And by the way, I don't see why some are ugly

Ylinestra44 wrote:

Um... thanks

3er123 wrote:

Easy
00:32:280 (3) - 1 grid right Fixed
00:40:376 (4) - looks ugly here
02:58:948 (3) - ugly here
03:16:566 (3) - very askew Fixed

Normal
00:15:614 (1,3) - veeeeeeeeeery ugly
00:17:518 (4,6) - ^
00:42:757 (4) - ugly here
00:47:518 (2,3) - ugly ugly uglyyyyyy
01:17:518 (3,4,5,6,7) - what...the?
01:21:328 (3) - ugly Made it rounder
01:23:233 (6) - ^ ^
02:01:328 (5) - looks askew
02:30:852 (3) - correct that What should I correct there?
03:30:375 (2,3) - ugly

Hard
Ugly,askew sliders
remake that

To all the rest: I prefer constructive criticism, not just saying "(This is) ugly". And by the way, I don't see why some are ugly

3er123 wrote:

Askew so askew
00:07:042 (8) - you think this looks good?

yongtw123 wrote:

[Easyl]
Not bad at all!

[Normal]
A real minor thing: try to space objects evenly out. For exmaple, 00:09:899 (4,5,6), (6) is somehow sticking with (4). Although the spacing is absolutely correct, if I were you I would try to leave some space between (4) and (6). If you get what I mean, you may choose to fix all these type of occurrences in the diff.

01:54:661 (1) - finish at start? Done
02:21:169 (1) - remove finish? Done
02:27:995 (x) - add a note? Disaggree
02:32:757 (1) - finish at start? Done
02:56:883 (1,2) - it's clear that you are following the vocal, but it plays out awkward. IMO stick with the beat. Left it the way it is
02:58:788 (1,2) - ^ ^
03:05:376 (1,2,3,4) - ^ ^

[Hard]
00:43:233 (x) - add a note? Disaggree
00:44:185 (3) - i discourage this kind of crumpled slider because player can easily misjudge this for a shorter one. Changed its shape
00:58:788 (3,4,5,6) - (3,4) is x1.0 spacing, (4,5) is not. Fix? No, I want it this way ( (1,2) is a "?", (3,4,5,6) are two "!" )
01:00:375 (x) - add a note? Disaggree
01:10:693 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - this is a hard one 0.0 The diff is also [Hard]
01:12:122 (9) - new combo Done
01:40:693 (5) - ^ Disaggree
02:21:169 (1) - remove finish? Done
02:56:883 (1,2) - same problem with [Normal]. Again i'd stick to the beat. Your call though. Same as [Normal]

======================

Very nicely done for a first-timer!
I should leave a star. Thanks :3

Good luck!

CDFA wrote:

The waiter just took my table, he gave it jessica simps

SHIT

Hurd:
Personally, circle size +1. Idunno, in relation to the background, which is a close-up shot, the circles seem small. Idunno though, both are fine. Changed
00:18:947 (7) - Add whistle on beginning of slider? Done
02:00:375 (3) - Not moe! ? Left it the way it is
02:53:709 (3) - Kinda boring pattern :< Same

Nurmul:
01:04:661 (4) - Add clap on beginning of slider~. Done

Uusy:
01:57:995 (1) - Add clap at beginning of slider Done

STAR FOR YOU.

HellDawn wrote:

Easy

00:36:090- 1 grid left Done
00:39:423- 1 grid down Done
00:43:709- ^ Done
00:51:804- finish ? Done
02:21:090- start spinner Disaggree

Normal

00:22:756- clap? Done
00:47:995- 1 grid down Done
01:22:756- move to 236 - 140 better. Done, and fixed spacing afterwards
01:52:756- 2 grid up Done
02:00:375- 1 grid up Done
02:27:042- finish ? Disaggree
02:28:947- move to 376 - 220 Done, and fixed spacing

Nice diff

Hard

00:16:566- 3 grid right Done
00:57:518- <3 :3
01:09:899- 1 grid up Done
01:10:693- combos bit too clapclapclap. Tone down the clapping a bit? Removed some claps
01:15:614- 1 grid up Done

1. The offset needs +10ms

1. 01:37:519 (1) - Making a well-shaped slider shouldn't make the pattern less readable, I mean at the moment :
   1. Its beginning is under 01:36:091 (3)'s end. Which is less readable because of the hitburst and isn't really aesthetic (which isn't what you're are trying to do here, right ? ).
   2. Its end hides 01:40:375 (3) which causes the same thing as above.
   
   I suggest you to rearrange your pattern like this :
   
   SPOILER

   [img]osu.ppy.sh/ss/273234[/img]
   
2. 03:06:090 (1) - The reverse arrow of this slider is hidden by by the hitburst of the previous spinner. Reverses must be visible otherwise they would surprise the player who may combobreak. Thus you have to redo this slider and make its reverse visible !

1. 00:47:995 (3) - The first reverse arrow is hidden by 00:46:566 (5)'s hitburst. For the same reason as in easy, this needs to be visible
2. 02:21:169 (1,1) - I don't really like how this pattern sounds. I prefer it like this :
   
   SPOILER

   
3. 03:03:709 - I know you are only following the vocals here, however this feels really awkward not to have anything for more than 2 seconds (which is a lot!). That breaks the flow of the map. :/
   Consider adding some notes please.

1. 01:30:862 (7) - This isn't a good idea to put it at the center of 01:29:909 (1,2,3,4,5,6) because it is hidden by all the hitburst that surround it which hide it completely. Moreover the combo color of this pattern is orange which is the same as the 300-hitburst color in the default skin (which is used by most of the regular player). That make it even less readable. So please don't pu it at the center. >w<
2. 01:31:814 (2) - Its reverse arrow is hidden by the previous circles' hitbursts. As I already said in easy it has to be visible.
3. 01:37:528 (3) - She got a nice mustache here.
4. 02:21:179 (1,1) - Same as in normal.
5. 02:48:005 (1) - The reverse arrow is hidden here too. You know what you have to do
6. 03:18:481 (1) - ^

Kurai wrote:

General :

1. The offset needs +10ms

Done

Easy :

1. 01:37:519 (1) - Making a well-shaped slider shouldn't make the pattern less readable, I mean at the moment :
   1. Its beginning is under 01:36:091 (3)'s end. Which is less readable because of the hitburst and isn't really aesthetic (which isn't what you're are trying to do here, right ? ).
   2. Its end hides 01:40:375 (3) which causes the same thing as above.
   
   I suggest you to rearrange your pattern like this :
   
   SPOILER

   [img]osu.ppy.sh/ss/273234[/img]
   
   Changed it
2. 03:06:090 (1) - The reverse arrow of this slider is hidden by by the hitburst of the previous spinner. Reverses must be visible otherwise they would surprise the player who may combobreak. Thus you have to redo this slider and make its reverse visible ! Flipped it horizontally and put it at the same place, so now the reverse arrow is out of the hitburst

Normal :

1. 00:47:995 (3) - The first reverse arrow is hidden by 00:46:566 (5)'s hitburst. For the same reason as in easy, this needs to be visible Changed some patterns, now it's visible
2. 02:21:169 (1,1) - I don't really like how this pattern sounds. I prefer it like this :
   
   SPOILER

   
   Fixed
3. 03:03:709 - I know you are only following the vocals here, however this feels really awkward not to have anything for more than 2 seconds (which is a lot!). That breaks the flow of the map. :/
   Consider adding some notes please. Placed a 1/1 slider with reverse arrow in front of it

Hard :

1. 01:30:862 (7) - This isn't a good idea to put it at the center of 01:29:909 (1,2,3,4,5,6) because it is hidden by all the hitburst that surround it which hide it completely. Moreover the combo color of this pattern is orange which is the same as the 300-hitburst color in the default skin (which is used by most of the regular player). That make it even less readable. So please don't pu it at the center. >w< Changed the pattern
2. 01:31:814 (2) - Its reverse arrow is hidden by the previous circles' hitbursts. As I already said in easy it has to be visible. Fixed
3. 01:37:528 (3) - She got a nice mustache here. Lol xD
4. 02:21:179 (1,1) - Same as in normal. Changed
5. 02:48:005 (1) - The reverse arrow is hidden here too. You know what you have to do Changed it's position a bit downwards, now it's clearly visible
6. 03:18:481 (1) - ^ I changed the pattern, but I'm not sure whether it's visible enough now =/

This map is great ! You did a good job :3

IceBeam wrote:

hi Hi *wave*

[Easy]
02:21:179 (1) - why would you try to snap this spinner with her lyrics? just start it from the next downbeat (02:21:338) Okay, fixed
03:31:814 (1) - you might want to silence slider end You mean spinner? Done

also,that's not required,but better avoid to map outro part in your next maps,especially when the music is fading out
finishing it at 03:26:099 could be better,but nvm,that's just a friendly suggestion for the future In my ears it would have sounded strange finishing at 03:26:099. But I'll keep it in mind in future.

[Normal]
02:21:179 (1) - well again Again fixed
02:28:005 - it felt uncomfortable to play because of this gap,add a note here please Done
03:07:052 (4,1) - uh,why would you snap these notes with 1/6? there's nothing to take with the music honestly,even rhytm sounds okay,but I think you should fix it. If you don't want to make a 1/1 rhytm,then use something like this:

SPOILER

Used your suggestion and fixed that part (I hope it looks okay :S)

[Hard]
00:24:671 (6) - not a big deal but I wish it was placed somewhere between 00:24:195 (5) and 00:25:147 (1) Changed it's position, but I'm not sure, because it's on the sliderpath now
01:14:512 (1,2) - that's pretty big jump mostly because I didn't expected it here..so it doesn't really fit well with the rest of the map Flipped (2) horizontally, so the jump is smaller, and fixed the distance of the following notes
02:21:179 (1) - um,you got it Um yeah
02:35:941 (5,6,7,8,9) - spacing is a bit incorrect here,02:37:052 (9) should be a bit farther,fix it please Not been sure about what "a bit farther" means, but I changed it. If it's still incorrect, tell me
03:03:084 (4) - I'd change this to a circle and started a slider from 03:03:243 Changed
03:05:385 (1,2,3) - again 1/6 snapping :s how about to making some rhytm instead?

SPOILER

Changed as you suggested (hope this looks okay, too)
03:32:608 (2,3) - move them a little farther,otherwise looks like a 1/3 spacing between them and 03:31:814 (1) Same as above with "a bit farther", but I changed it

well,that's it
a damn good map for a newbie,especially for 1/3 song

call me back after fixes