Hi C R E A M 
A full wall of text you've been warned~
Good Luck and ~star
A full wall of text you've been warned~
SPOILER
That's all from me, the effect of the SB is nice~[General]
- nice choice of custom hitsound
- maybe add the name of the sequel of touho where patchouli first appear on the tag?
[SB]
- First of all, there's a sub folder on your Lyric SB. This made your Lyric SB won't appear as the code on the osb file is not referring to the sub folder. It's very easy to fix this, just copy all the images in the sub folder then move it to the main folder. Don't forget to full submit it~
- 01:03:441 - you're missing another "down" for the Lyric, I'm guessing you forget to fix it. To easily fix this find this line on osb file
Sprite,Foreground,Centre,"Lyric\donw.png",320,240
then change the donw to down
- Some of the lyric SBs are not cropped properly. This is some of them please fix it
- On Lyric 15, the correct word is "Friday" not "Fryday"
- Starting from 03:19:977 to 03:35:095 the SB load increase to 5 and even beyond that. This is unrankable.
I'm not an expert in SB but my guess is, it's happens because of you're scaling the BG Effect01.png waaaaaay to much thus when it's fully appear it shot the SB load to 5. Try replacing the BG Effect01 with a full black image with appropriate size (640x480) so you won't have to scale it
- While you're on it, change all of the BG Effect01.png that you used to cover the field into a full black image one
[Easy]
00:26:118 (1) - add finish?
00:53:047 (6) - hmm maybe NC this?
01:01:079 (1) - This spinner would fit more if you start it at the same place as the vocal in 01:02:024 and end it on 01:03:914
01:25:173 (5) - NC
01:30:843 (6) - ^
02:02:969 (5) - ^
02:19:977 (3) - ^
02:53:520 (1) - I suggest to unstack this. Different combo color stack may easily confuse newbie
03:39:819 (5) - NC this
This diff is quite dense for an Easy it's almost like a normal
[Patche]
Could you use the same combo color as the other diffs? Default combo color doesn't fit with Patchouli imo
00:37:457 (1) - This NC is unnecessary, I suggest to remove it
00:58:244 (1) - the 1/4 beat doesn't sound very good cause there's nothing to follow in that place. I suggest to make it into a 1/1 slider
01:00:607 (7) - remove the finish then move it to 01:00:488 ? That way it'll follow the vocal
02:01:079 (7) - same as above, I think it's better if you move it 1/4 beat back
02:40:055 (1) - could you change this into a slider or a circle? the previous notes are following the vocal so it's kinda break the flow when you suddenly put a slider repeat like this. Maybe use something like this ?
[Insane]
00:54:701 (1) - add a timing section with 40 % volume for this spinner. The spinner sound is kinda loud compare to the soft vocal
01:55:173 (1) - ^
01:37:693 (5) - this is kinda sudden, maybe include this slider into the 0.5 timing section
01:28:008 (6,7,8,9,10,11) - these jump is kinda random and they don't fit well with the song
01:28:953 (10) - NC this then remove NC from 01:29:425 (1)
02:00:607 (7) - the slow down doesn't fit
02:18:323 (1) - unnecessary NC
02:39:110 (6) - I suggest to remove this so the whole pattern on this section follow the vocal
03:09:110 (4) - add clap?
03:09:819 (1) - add clap at the repeat?
03:11:473 (1) - add clap at the end?
03:14:780 (4) - add clap?
03:16:197 (1) - add clap at the end?
03:17:142 (3) - ^
- nice choice of custom hitsound
- maybe add the name of the sequel of touho where patchouli first appear on the tag?
[SB]
- First of all, there's a sub folder on your Lyric SB. This made your Lyric SB won't appear as the code on the osb file is not referring to the sub folder. It's very easy to fix this, just copy all the images in the sub folder then move it to the main folder. Don't forget to full submit it~
- 01:03:441 - you're missing another "down" for the Lyric, I'm guessing you forget to fix it. To easily fix this find this line on osb file
Sprite,Foreground,Centre,"Lyric\donw.png",320,240
then change the donw to down
- Some of the lyric SBs are not cropped properly. This is some of them please fix it
- On Lyric 15, the correct word is "Friday" not "Fryday"
- Starting from 03:19:977 to 03:35:095 the SB load increase to 5 and even beyond that. This is unrankable.
I'm not an expert in SB but my guess is, it's happens because of you're scaling the BG Effect01.png waaaaaay to much thus when it's fully appear it shot the SB load to 5. Try replacing the BG Effect01 with a full black image with appropriate size (640x480) so you won't have to scale it
- While you're on it, change all of the BG Effect01.png that you used to cover the field into a full black image one
[Easy]
00:26:118 (1) - add finish?
00:53:047 (6) - hmm maybe NC this?
01:01:079 (1) - This spinner would fit more if you start it at the same place as the vocal in 01:02:024 and end it on 01:03:914
01:25:173 (5) - NC
01:30:843 (6) - ^
02:02:969 (5) - ^
02:19:977 (3) - ^
02:53:520 (1) - I suggest to unstack this. Different combo color stack may easily confuse newbie
03:39:819 (5) - NC this
This diff is quite dense for an Easy it's almost like a normal
[Patche]
Could you use the same combo color as the other diffs? Default combo color doesn't fit with Patchouli imo
00:37:457 (1) - This NC is unnecessary, I suggest to remove it
00:58:244 (1) - the 1/4 beat doesn't sound very good cause there's nothing to follow in that place. I suggest to make it into a 1/1 slider
01:00:607 (7) - remove the finish then move it to 01:00:488 ? That way it'll follow the vocal
02:01:079 (7) - same as above, I think it's better if you move it 1/4 beat back
02:40:055 (1) - could you change this into a slider or a circle? the previous notes are following the vocal so it's kinda break the flow when you suddenly put a slider repeat like this. Maybe use something like this ?
[Insane]
00:54:701 (1) - add a timing section with 40 % volume for this spinner. The spinner sound is kinda loud compare to the soft vocal
01:55:173 (1) - ^
01:37:693 (5) - this is kinda sudden, maybe include this slider into the 0.5 timing section
01:28:008 (6,7,8,9,10,11) - these jump is kinda random and they don't fit well with the song
01:28:953 (10) - NC this then remove NC from 01:29:425 (1)
02:00:607 (7) - the slow down doesn't fit
02:18:323 (1) - unnecessary NC
02:39:110 (6) - I suggest to remove this so the whole pattern on this section follow the vocal
03:09:110 (4) - add clap?
03:09:819 (1) - add clap at the repeat?
03:11:473 (1) - add clap at the end?
03:14:780 (4) - add clap?
03:16:197 (1) - add clap at the end?
03:17:142 (3) - ^
Good Luck and ~star
