This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 5 июня 2013 г. at 20:13:26

Artist: SISTAR
Title: Shady Girl
Tags: so cool
BPM: 125
Filesize: 3974kb
Play Time: 03:10
Difficulties Available:

1. Hard (4,91 stars, 441 notes)
2. Normal (2,93 stars, 250 notes)

Download: SISTAR - Shady Girl
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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Small mod
Useless to mod map

Несколько советов
http://osu.ppy.sh/images/beatspacing.jpg
Ditance snap, да.

СЛАЙДЕРЫ USE THEM

Тайминг (БПМ/Оффсет я бы проверил.)

Изи? скорость слайдеров 1.00 или 1.10

Цвета переделай под цвет бг, ДА НУЖЕН БГ http://puu.sh/cXJp

http://puu.sh/cXJw если ты спрашивал, то эта штука отвечает за скорость слайдеров

kiai тайм не помешает

Все. Делай. Пиши в ПМ. Проверю снова.

Спасибо большое)))
Получил кудос??

просто когда делаю слайдеры
они криво делаются

а как КиайТайм сделать чтобы там все сияло

Так. Существует кнопочка Edit. Не стоит засорять тему с картой.

По одному, два сообщения подряд ХВАТИТ

И так. Вот теперь вижу, что хочешь научиться. Сам таким же был да и ушел недалеко

viewtopic.php?f=60&t=13795
^пишем сюда

random guy wrote:

ССЫЛКА НА КАРТУ (НЕ НА ТЕМУ С КАРТОЙ)

Check timing please

Когда дадут тайминг, примени.

Потом неплохо бы перемапать под новый тайминг. (Но если лень, то timing ==> resnap all notes)

Теперь то, что МОЖНО СДЕЛАТЬ УЖЕ СЕЙЧАС
Нотки ВСЕ переставить c включенным Distance Snap

kiai должен иметь конец
ставится так же (пояснял в ПМ) , только галочка не должна стоять


HITSOUNDS
http://puu.sh/d338
Выделяешь ноту, выбираешь звук удара. Они полезны, но ставь их разумно.
Ну и все пока. Можешь писать в ПМ, если что.


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Edit
Таки поправил тайминг (он кривой, да, но ближе к истине)
Дальше..Хм..Слишком пусто. Посмотри easy на Ranked картах.
БГ (background)(он же задний фон) должен быть 800х600 или 1024х768 (после изменения размера, сделать full submit)
Все так же нет хитсаундов (Но тут я не помошник. Ибо сам мучаюсь с ними. Да и вообще мапать не умею :< )
В киаи не должно быть пауз. (Ну и да, пустовато. Посмотри другие карты)
Слайдеров бы побольше.
Цвета бы подбирать те, которые подходят под бг

P.S. Мику на картинке. <3

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Edit 2
Так...
Пояснил как должен выглядить изи.
Поиски НОРМАЛЬНОГО тайминга никто не отменял
Если кто-то из Мapping Assistnance Team посмотрит мой мод, то наверно подумает, что я не умею модить (И будет прав)
Ну что еще..Ах да, пока что очень неплохо для первого раза.Не забрасывай, пожалуйста. Закончи карту. Обидно будет, если ты забросишь. Будет трудно, но не сдавайся! /o/

Edit 3: исправил орфографические ошибки
Edit 4: исправил Edit 3

PS: чертов caps lock

Re Download

-Bakari-, я слежу за тобой.

Что? D: Я же правильно написал D:
http://puu.sh/dfxH
Поправил ВСЕ, что мог. Кинь файлы из архива в папку. Соглашаясь на замены.
удачи. По вопросам в пм.



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EDIT
Так. Значится. Мышка должна постоянно двигаться. А не делать два-три-пять кликов и стоять по 10-15 секунд.
Ставь ноты как показывал. На белые тики старайся ставить) (Слайдеры желательно начинать и заканчивать на белых тиках)
Не забрасывай, все получится!

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EDIT 2
Добавил образец харда. Не самый удачный, но все же.

аааа вот как спасибо)))

поменял бэкграунд скоро закину

I need:
BPM and Offset
Help me please!

BPM 125 Offset 498

Не давай мне кудосу за этот пост. Все-равно отберут
Просто напоминаю, что Алекс719 заслужил кудос.

Так же даю полезных ссылок
viewtopic.php?f=56&t=60228
viewtopic.php?f=56&t=37194
viewtopic.php?f=56&t=17043

Удачи и рабочего гугло-переводчика

Ну ладно уж.
Бг размером 1024*768
Я его в IRC кидал.
Ладно. Надеюсь не отберут кудоску, хотя надо бы.

Please mod my map

Redownload

hi~ from #modreqs

Shady Girl
・00:22:738 (6) Lapel
This

・00:54:738~ 00:57:138 end
This

Thank you

Mod Request >_<

-Normal-
01:47:537(5)add clap only start of slider.
01:51:857(1)add finish only goal of slider.
01:59:537(10) slider is too long. shorter Rhythm of 1/4.
02:13:937(5)add finish only goal of slider.
02:30:257(4)~(5) need shorter spacing distance.
02:47:058(6)add finish only start of slider,and whistle only goal of slider.
03:02:897(1)finish "KIAI TIME"
this beatmap is too difficult as Normal, example,spacing distance.
You can serch problems.you only click "ctrl"+"shift"+"A".

General
отключи отсчет http://puu.sh/h1xP
поставь Lead in 2.5 секунды http://puu.sh/h1xV
удали из тегов Korean и добавь k-pop, хотя можешь не добавлять ну это по желанию
3 цвет сливается предыдущим, добавь другой цвет

Normal
02:50:657 - промапай брейк, в киае не должно быть брейков
00:05:297 (4) - спейсинг
01:49:937 (2) - ^
02:00:977 (2,3,4) - ^
02:20:657 (5,6,7) - ^
02:48:737 (1,2,3,4) - ^
02:55:217 (1,2,3) - ^
00:11:537 (5,6,7) - слишком сложно, спейсинг очень большой
01:28:337 (6,1) - ^
01:55:217 (8) - слишком много реверсов

не надо слишком гнуть палку в нормале, стоит воздержаться от джампов и стримов

Hard
не слишком ли большая скорость слайдеров?думаю 2.0 хватит
00:11:058 (1) - во первых он кривой, во вторых конец слайдера не должен лежать под началом
00:45:138 (1) - форма не очень
01:01:458 (9) - если делаешь разный спейсинг, то хотя бы сделай тут нк, либо мапай по спейсингу
01:21:618 (8) - ^
01:31:218 (8) - ^
01:36:738 (12) - ^
01:47:058 (4) - ^
01:50:178 (4) - ^
02:04:098 (2) - ^
02:25:938 (6) - ^
02:36:018 (6) - ^
02:44:898 (3) - ^
01:08:418 (3,4,5) - что за больной треугольник, спейсинг у всех нот разный
01:57:858 (1) - что за странный разрыв
02:38:418 (3,4,5,6) - нечитаемо
нк как-то рандомно расставлены
нк(новое комбо) лучше расставлять с больших белых тиков

как-то так

Привет, обещала

[Normal]

Пользуйся дистанс снапом пожалуйста, это же нормал!
00:07:217 (9) - выровняй де :о
00:11:057 (4,5) - один гирд вниз и вправо
00:11:537 (5,6,7) - ты забыл про дистанс, это же нормал, нельзя нарушать
00:13:937 (1) - ^
00:16:337 (3,4,5,6,7) - хэй, ну сделай же ровно, если хочешь симметрию
00:22:097 (5) - кривойкривойкривой
00:24:497 (3) - ^
00:36:977 (2,3,4) - лучше сделать их не в стороны слайдера, а в обратную
00:37:937 (5) - ну снова же кривой( больше не буду писать о кривых слайдах, посмотри и исправь сам все которые увидишь
01:01:937 (2,3,4) - сделай так, чтобы не задевало первый круг и пятый, я конечно вижу идейку твою, но выглядит как-то сумбурно
01:19:217 (6) - сделай, чтобы предыдущий был в середине (не знаю как объяснить ><)
01:28:337 (6,1) - ОvO нельзя так!
02:57:377 (6,7,8,9) - сделать ритм таким

[Hard]

Слайды ;__;
Дистанс снап всё же нужен и тут
Разберись с новыми комбо! наставлены рандомно!
Старайся упорядочить скопление множества цирклов, не делать просто нагромождение, а систематично расставлять
00:05:538 (6,1) - лучше разместить так
00:14:898 (1) - поднять выше бы его
00:17:778 (2) - заходит на хпбар
00:22:578 (6) - ааа, кошмарный слайд! изменить форму! Не делай угол 90
00:54:738 (1) - как то он не в тему
01:01:458 (9) - во первый с комбо разберись, во вторых всё же расстояние должно быть побольше
01:24:018 (5) - короче
01:55:218 (х) - добавь
01:55:458 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4) - ааааа, что за нагромождение, где комбо, где хоть намёк на паттерн, ррр
02:02:898 (4,1) - расстояние..

Мои первые карты были хуже
Удачи)

Normal
- seems fine
Hard
- 00:32:658 (7) move 00:32:898
- 00:39:378 (2) move 00:39:618
- 00:39:618 (3) move 00:39:858
- 00:39:858 (4) move 00:40:098
- 00:40:098 (5) move 00:40:338
- 00:40:338 (6) move 00:40:578
- 00:48:978 (6) remove
- 01:02:658 (4) move 01:02:898
- 01:24:738 (12) move 01:24:978
- 01:48:978 (1) move 01:49:458
- 01:49:218 (2) move 01:49:698
- 01:49:458 (3) move 01:49:938
- 02:03:618 (5) remove or move 02:03:858
- 02:32:418 (2) remove

I can't read Russian language
The same maybe other modder of modding
If you don't like this modding
will not have to change :3

I wish this beatmap rank ~

под спойлером указал те места где я бы выправил спейсинг в харде

Normal:


00:00:978 (1) - this spinner doesnt belong to anything... remove it and do something else here
There are alot of spacing errors in this beatmap... if this is your first map please stick to distance snap.
Also if you are not sure select a note and in the top right corner it will tell you the distance snap from the previous note to the next one.
If it says Prev: x0.68 Next: 1:50 thats normally not a good thing to have, for a normal difficulty at least.

The combos are very random at times.. for a beginner put a new combo on every measure of the song. Thats the long white line in the timeline and then you can start improving it.

The hitsounds are not existing in this difficulty. There are just a a few random sounds here and there. Also i don't understand why you use soft sound sample since that song got a very strong beat itself.
Also this song is not so hard to put in clap sounds if you listen to the drums.

Hard:

Looking a bit better than your normal diff but still so many things to work on. Just try to smooth out your maps, at least in spacing and hitsounds and combos. Thats the really basic things.
Im not gonna point everything out now because that would probably take as long as this map needed to make.
I just suggest to look it all over yourself and improve it more.


viewtopic.php?f=6&t=439 Official Ranking Submission Criteria
If you are trying to get this map ranked read this at least.

viewtopic.php?f=56&t=37194
Making Delicious Sliders: A Guide.

What are Combos?
http://osu.ppy.sh/p/faq#c6

What is Beat Spacing?
http://osu.ppy.sh/p/faq#c8

Mapping Techniques
viewforum.php?f=61

Good Luck~

Edit: Oh also.. When you are in the editor press ctrl+shift+A. That is the AiMod. Its not needed to allways do what it says but it is still very helpfull and a guide at least.

Ha... I think... ( Just Fix it! )

First. Slider Tick Rate change 1

http://puu.sh/hTNb << it is so hard!!! ( this difficulty is insane..)
change this >> http://puu.sh/hTNl

and so hard... 00:16:818 (3,4,5,6,7) - << ;; so hard

Don't give kudosu...

[Hard]
00:03:378 (4,6) - This overlap looks bad. But I can't come up with any nice suggestions here.. ;_;
00:05:058 (7) - Maybe new combo?
00:07:218 (5) - ctrl + r would make this flow better in my opinion.
00:22:578 (6) - Move middle square three grids (lvl.3) left.
00:33:618 (2) - Move obe grid to right so it doesn't overlap (1). Then move (3) one grid right and down.
00:48:258 (4,5) - Both of these one grid to right
00:49:458 (6) - Maaaaaybe new combo here?
00:50:178 (9) - Use 0,8 spacing here as well? Looks bit funny when it's so close to (8)
00:54:738 (1) - This spinner is so mehhh! ;_; It doesn't fit in here and it's a bit boring to play. Maybe map over it?
00:59:538 (6 ->) - A bit bad overlap again. Maybe something like this? (7 and 9 are on the same spot)
01:08:178 (5,6) - Move these one grid to left so it doesn't overlap with (4)
01:20:658 (4,5,6) - One grid right
01:29:778 (4) - Move middle square two grids right and one grid down
01:30:498 (5) - One grid down and right. Then move (6) one grid to right as well.
01:40:338 (7) - New combo
01:42:738 (1) - Maybe remove new combo...
01:49:218 (2) - Two grids down so it doesn't overlap
01:51:498 - Move this kiai-time to 01:51:858 -
01:58:098 (1,2,3) - One grid left and two grids down
02:01:938 (6,7,8,1) - One grid up..~
02:04:818 (1) - Remove new combo and add it to next note.
02:11:058 (5) - New combo and remove it from the next note.
02:12:258 (2) - Two grids right and 2-3 grids down
02:40:218 - Again unsnapped kiai-time, move to 02:40:338 -
02:47:538 (1) - Again a bit lame spinner... >:
02:51:378 - En kiai-time here and star it again at 02:55:218 -
02:57:618 (1) - Spinner...
03:00:978 (1) - This one doesn't feel so bad.
03:02:898 - End kiai time here. Also, maybe lower the volume a bit.

[Normal]
Why different combo colors? Pink ones were nicer in my opinion. >:
Same stuff about kiai times as in [hard]

00:06:258 (5) - New combo
00:12:018 (5) - New combo
00:12:978 (1) - Remove new combo
00:13:938 (5) - New combo and remove it from the next note.
00:17:778 (7) - Bad bad bad spacing. >:
00:18:738 (1) - Remove new combo
00:41:778 (1) - Remove new combo and make this slider end at 00:42:738. Then add a new combo note to 00:43:218.
00:56:658 (5) - New combo
01:01:458 (1) - Remove new combo and add it to next note
01:05:778 (4) - New combo
01:13:458 (4) - ^
01:16:338 (1) - Remove new combo and add it to next note
01:20:178 (6) - New combo and remove it from the next (1)
01:22:098 (4) - New combo
01:31:218 (4) - Bad spacing
01:32:658 (1) - Remove new combo and add it to next note
01:40:818 (6) - ^
01:42:738 (1) - Remove new combo
01:44:658 (7) - New combo
01:53:778 (4) - ^
02:11:058 (7) - New combo and remove it from the next note
02:20:178 (5) - Maybe new combo here and (8)
02:41:298 (1) - Remove new combo
02:48:018 (7) - New combo here and remove it from the next note..
02:50:898 - Note here and 02:51:378 - ?
02:57:138 (1) - Remove new combo and add it to next note.

Sorry it got kind of long. ;w; Good luck~

Lanttu wrote:

[Hard]
00:03:378 (4,6) - This overlap looks bad. But I can't come up with any nice suggestions here.. ;_;
00:05:058 (7) - Maybe new combo?
00:07:218 (5) - ctrl + r would make this flow better in my opinion.
00:22:578 (6) - Move middle square three grids (lvl.3) left.
00:33:618 (2) - Move obe grid to right so it doesn't overlap (1). Then move (3) one grid right and down.
00:48:258 (4,5) - Both of these one grid to right
00:49:458 (6) - Maaaaaybe new combo here?
00:50:178 (9) - Use 0,8 spacing here as well? Looks bit funny when it's so close to (8)
00:54:738 (1) - This spinner is so mehhh! ;_; It doesn't fit in here and it's a bit boring to play. Maybe map over it?
00:59:538 (6 ->) - A bit bad overlap again. Maybe something like this? (7 and 9 are on the same spot)
01:08:178 (5,6) - Move these one grid to left so it doesn't overlap with (4)
01:20:658 (4,5,6) - One grid right
01:29:778 (4) - Move middle square two grids right and one grid down
01:30:498 (5) - One grid down and right. Then move (6) one grid to right as well.
01:40:338 (7) - New combo
01:42:738 (1) - Maybe remove new combo...
01:49:218 (2) - Two grids down so it doesn't overlap
01:51:498 - Move this kiai-time to 01:51:858 -
01:58:098 (1,2,3) - One grid left and two grids down
02:01:938 (6,7,8,1) - One grid up..~
02:04:818 (1) - Remove new combo and add it to next note.
02:11:058 (5) - New combo and remove it from the next note.
02:12:258 (2) - Two grids right and 2-3 grids down
02:40:218 - Again unsnapped kiai-time, move to 02:40:338 -
02:47:538 (1) - Again a bit lame spinner... >:
02:51:378 - En kiai-time here and star it again at 02:55:218 -
02:57:618 (1) - Spinner...
03:00:978 (1) - This one doesn't feel so bad.
03:02:898 - End kiai time here. Also, maybe lower the volume a bit.

[Normal]
Why different combo colors? Pink ones were nicer in my opinion. >:
Same stuff about kiai times as in [hard]

00:06:258 (5) - New combo
00:12:018 (5) - New combo
00:12:978 (1) - Remove new combo
00:13:938 (5) - New combo and remove it from the next note.
00:17:778 (7) - Bad bad bad spacing. >:
00:18:738 (1) - Remove new combo
00:41:778 (1) - Remove new combo and make this slider end at 00:42:738. Then add a new combo note to 00:43:218.
00:56:658 (5) - New combo
01:01:458 (1) - Remove new combo and add it to next note
01:05:778 (4) - New combo
01:13:458 (4) - ^
01:16:338 (1) - Remove new combo and add it to next note
01:20:178 (6) - New combo and remove it from the next (1)
01:22:098 (4) - New combo
01:31:218 (4) - Bad spacing
01:32:658 (1) - Remove new combo and add it to next note
01:40:818 (6) - ^
01:42:738 (1) - Remove new combo
01:44:658 (7) - New combo
01:53:778 (4) - ^
02:11:058 (7) - New combo and remove it from the next note
02:20:178 (5) - Maybe new combo here and (8)
02:41:298 (1) - Remove new combo
02:48:018 (7) - New combo here and remove it from the next note..
02:50:898 - Note here and 02:51:378 - ?
02:57:138 (1) - Remove new combo and add it to next note.

Sorry it got kind of long. ;w; Good luck~

*_* Your mod so cool,you be very helpful to me.Thank you

hi~ 3er123

thank you for the request ~

here my mod ~

[General]

1. Song folder - remove osb.file. because ↓Those that contain unnecessary
   
   SPOILER

   
2. Song Setup - Storyboarding - Enable countdown - remove check ( Normal diff only )
3. Song Setup - Colours - combo color - It is not unified in normal/hard diff. Please unify it

[Normal]

1. 00:00:978 (1) - dose not match music. remove it. or 00:00:498~00:04:338 - During this time, please put note and ( Please unify Audio Lead-in in normal/hard )
2. 00:04:338 - add note is better
3. 00:17:778 (7) - add NC
4. 00:18:738 (8) - overlapped with 00:17:778 (7). more beautiful not overlap,
5. 00:20:178 (1) - spacing too far. (1.08x) okz use DS0.8x.
6. 00:22:098 (5) - add NC
7. 00:33:138 (5) - ^
8. 00:41:778 (5) - add finish to end of the slider
9. 00:50:418 (1) - spacing too far. (1.26x)
10. 00:50:418 (1) - add finish to start of the slider
11. 01:03:378 (5) - add NC and 01:04:818 (1) - remove NC
12. 01:04:818 (1) - remove finish
13. 01:05:778 (1) - add finish to start of the slider
14. 01:09:618 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - why use DS1.0x ? beginner is confused by a sudden change.
15. 01:19:218 (5) - add NC and 01:20:178 (1) - remove NC
16. 01:26:898 (5) - add NC ?
17. 01:32:658 (5) - add NC and 01:33:138 (1) - remove NC. and spacing too far (1.35x)
18. 01:35:058 (4) - add NC
19. 01:50:697 - KIAI Time start - move to 01:51:858
20. 01:52:338 (1) - spacing too far (1.08x)
21. 01:55:218 (5) - add finish to repeat of the slider
22. 01:56:658 (6) - add NC and 01:57:618 (1) - remove NC
23. 02:03:378 (1) - spacing too far
24. 02:22:098 (4) - add slider end 02:22:578 ( and add finish to end of the slider )
25. 02:22:494 - KIAI Time end - move to 02:22:578
26. 02:39:858 - add note here.
27. 02:40:338 - KIAI Time start - move to 02:39:858
28. 02:44:658 (1) - spacing too far. and overlapped with 02:43:218 (6)
29. 02:48:498 (2) - spacing too far
30. 02:49:458 (5) - add NC
31. 02:55:218 - KIAI Time end - move to 02:51:378
32. 03:05:778 (1) - remove NC and 03:06:738 (2) - add NC
    
    use better at regular intervals the DS ><!

[Hard]

1. 00:02:418 (1) - add clap ?
2. 00:04:338 (6) - Suggestion of the rhythm: http://puu.sh/iyjk
3. 00:05:058 (2) - remove finish
4. 00:17:538 (1) - remove NC and 00:17:778 (2) - add NC
5. 00:36:498 (1) - remove NC
6. 00:38:898 (4) - add NC and 00:39:858 (1) - remove NC
7. 00:50:178 (4) - Suggestion of the rhythm: http://puu.sh/iymm ( because kiai is put in a slider. is not good IMO )
8. 00:54:738 (7) - add NC ( you must put NC )
9. 01:00:978 (10) - spacing too close. This anti-jump is strange to me
10. 01:05:778 (1) - add finish to start of the slider
11. 01:51:378 (3) - add finish to end of the slider
12. 02:07:218 (4) - add finish
13. 02:22:578 - add note
14. 02:22:494 - KIAI Time end - move to 02:22:578
15. 02:39:858 - add note
16. 02:40:338 - KIAI Time start - move to 02:39:858
17. 02:48:498 (4) - spacing too close. Rhythm is different, but DS is the same 02:47:778 (2,3,4) . This is confused
18. 02:50:898 - add note is better. because Kiai Time end is 02:51:378
19. 02:51:138 - ^
20. 02:51:378 - ^
    
    02:55:218~03:02:898 - Please put it in normal diff if you want to put KiaiTime here.

Good luck ~

hi)

Hard

00:04:098(5,6) - может эти ноты стоит поставить по спейсингу после слайдеры? так не красиво смотрится( http://puu.sh/iAKo вот как то примерно так
00:07:218(5) - сделай его более симметричным и округлым так не красиво
00:11:058 - сделай это комбо так http://puu.sh/iAL3
00:13:698 - добавь ноту
00:36:258(4,5,6) - http://puu.sh/iALB
00:36:978(6) - лучше слайдер сделать такой формы

248,272,36978,2,0,B|272:120|408:184|408:184,2,200.000000596046

01:13:938(1,2,3) - поставь слайдеры так, чтобы они не выходили из одной точки и на большой белый тик добавь ноту.
01:48:018 - поставь ноты так лучше звучат http://puu.sh/iAMQ
02:00:018 - добавить ноту
02:09:138 - ^
02:12:978 - ^
02:15:378 - спинер лучше закончить на 02:18:738 а дальше поставить ноты
02:47:778 - добавить ноту

Во всей мапе лучше сделать слайдеры симметричными и более ровными. Округлой правильной формы. Так будет смотрется намного красивее, и приятнее будет играть.


Normal

00:17:778(1,2) - выгни первый слайдер вверх а второй поставь по спейсингу http://puu.sh/iAOl
00:24:498(2) - сделай его короче и тройным, по белым тикам
01:11:058(2) - сделай его одинарным и длиннее на 2 белых деления а после него ноту, тоже на белое деление
01:36:978 - ^
02:00:018 - добавь ноту
02:18:258 - ^
02:58:578 - ^
03:01:938 - ^
03:04:338(2) - подвинь на предыдущий белый тик
03:10:098(5) - лучше сделать двойным

и тоже замечание по поводу слайдеров некрасиво очень( сделай их более округлыми и симметричными

всё удачи с мапой)) :3

[Normal]
Слайдер на 00:17:778 сократил бы до 00:18:258
Чуть кривовато выглядит слайдер 00:22:098
Не хватает битка 00:25:938
Слайдер 00:30:258 опусти чуть пониже - задевает health-bar.
Слайдер 02:43:218 сделай не прямым,а каким-нибудь кругловатым.ну в общем измени.
Break c 02:51:378 - 02:55:218 не помешал бы.
02:57:138 хромает спейсинг.поставь поближе к битку (5)
03:10:098 сократи до 03:10:578. поставь Slider velocity 0,75х

[Hard]
не хватает битка 00:08:178
слайдер 00:21:618 продли до 00:22:338
01:05:058 спейсинг!
01:38:418 слайдер кривоват. скругли его поаккуратней.
02:05:298 аналогично в предыд.сложности. опусти пониже слайдер.
02:44:898 добавь слайдер и биток.а то там пусто.


Ну всё.
Удачи в дальнейшем ~

red is unrankable issue. bule is need to discuss. Black is just suggest.

that's all~good luck

Some suggestions~

Hard
00:08:178 (6) - Anti jump. at least put New combo?
00:19:698 (3) - Finish
00:34:098 (4) - finish at the end
00:50:178 (4) - ^
02:39:858 (1) - finish
02:55:218 (1) - finish at the beginning

Normal
00:30:258 (4) - Make this 1/1 with one repeat slider instead, and place a finish at the end 00:41:778 (5,6) - kinda big jump isn't it?
00:50:418 (1) - finish at the beginning
01:05:778 (1) - ^
02:39:858 (1) - finish
03:10:098 (5) - finish at the end


That's all for now~

Thanks for modding my beatmap. Hope my suggestion are helpful

[Hard]
0:05:778 delete new combo
0:07:938 add a note
0:08:178 clap?
0:12:978(1,2,3,4,5) shape can be better
0:21:618 cut to 2 sliders
0:23:778 add a note
0:35:298 add a note
0:54:498 add a note
1:31:218(1,2,3,4) shape can be better
fill up 1:36:738 to 1:37:698 in1/2 beat
add note 1:49:938 to 1:51:138 like [url=this]http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/254161[/url] and jump

316,48,109938,5,0
416,100,110178,1,0
272,148,110418,1,0
420,120,110658,1,0
280,168,110898,1,0
416,152,111138,1,0

1:52:098 add a note
2:57:858 cut to 2 sliders

[Hard]

Судя по первым нескольким сирклам, ты используешь 0.9х спейсинг.
Если не используешь – то должен. В любом случае нужно взять какой-то стандарт и ему следовать, не должно быть скачков спейсинга (пусть и незначительных).
00:02:898 (3) - 2 сетки влево-вниз (grid level 4)
00:03:378 (4,5) - Я, кажется, не видел других джампов. Да и лишнее это в харде, убери лучше.
00:08:178 (6) - не стакнуто с концом слайдера (0.01x)
00:12:978 (2,3,4,5,6) - ....
00:21:138 (4) - ниже на клетку
00:21:618 (5) - лучше заменить на парочку слайдеров, такой с репитами плохо смотрится
00:32:418 (6,7,8) - почему (8) дальше всех остальных?
01:00:978 (10) - стакнуть с (7) лучше бы
01:01:458 (1,2,3) - почему (1,2) так далеко?
01:03:138 (4) - лучше бы стакнуть с (2)...
01:12:498 (8) - далеко от предыдущего
01:32:898 (1) - я бы с (4) стакнул
01:34:578 (3,4) - 1.2х от предыдущих у обоих слайдеров, много же
01:58:098 (1) - далеко от пред.
02:21:138 (1) - далекоо

[Normal]

00:08:658 (1) - близко к пред.
00:42:738 (6) - не стакнуто с концом слайдер
00:46:578 (1) - я бы стакнул с (4)
01:32:658 (1) - далеко от пред. очень
01:41:778 (2) - близко к пред.
02:00:498 (1) - далеко очень от пред.
02:03:378 (1) - близко ;_;
02:53:298 - добавь брейк тайм

Mod request via In-Game PM ~

Sorry for the delay (:

[General]

-> Move the second kiai time to 02:39:858 (refer to my writing about downbeat below)

-> Uh... I really recommend you to open both .osu file in Notepad. You'll see such inconsistencies there:

1. Lead-in time isn't consistent - for this cheerful song, I recommend to set 1500 for both
2. Countdown in enabled on Normal, but not on Hard - I suggest to turn off both
3. Inconsistency in combo color - just copy-paste one to another, though

Also, remove "Korean" from tags because when this map is ranked, a BAT will set this song's language to Korean (therefore, the "Korean" tag here won't be needed anymore)

-> One more, your hitsounding is pretty much random and patternless. I won't mod hitsound much here, just throwing out some general tips:

1. Look at the timeline on the editor. The long white line there is called downbeat, a beginning of a new stanza. Look for it and try to be consistent with your claps starting there.
2. For finish sounds, it works best to accompany a cymbal sound from the song, or on a new part of the song. Whistles are pretty much there to sweeten the map, but be careful - random placement of whistle could make the hitsounds abrupt.
3. "Consistency", I mean here is every 1/2, 1/1, 2/1, or anything that makes good rhythm

Uh, idk... if you wanna learn more about hitsounding, I think yeahyeahyeahhh's or Muya's maps are good examples. (you could try to learn from tieff's advanced hitsounding also, but I don't recommend it for a first-time learner)

[Normal]

-> Hmm, AR -1? AR5 is just too cruel for the easiest difficulty in the set imo

1. 00:00:498 (1) - Why no finish here on spinner's end? Feels quite empty leaving it unhitsounded
2. 00:14:418 (2) - (optional) Encircle (3) to get better flow here?
3. 00:18:738 (2) - Spacing inconsistency. I recommend something like this here:
   
   SPOILER

   
4. 00:22:098 (1) - Do you really need to curve it like this? Just curve it with a single waypoint, it will flow more naturally~
5. 00:25:938 (x) - There should be a note here to continue the vocals (stack above (3) is okay)
6. 00:28:338 (3,1) - Don't make a jump here on Normal diff. Possible arrangement:
   
   SPOILER

   
7. 00:39:858 (2) - This got partially covered by 00:37:938 (5)'s comboburst in play mode (plays fine though)
8. 00:41:778 (5) - Don't put finish 1/2 before the downbeat here, it's really unfitting
9. 00:44:658 (3,4,5,6) - These four looks like they're randomly placed imo. Put them in an arc instead?
   
   SPOILER

   
10. 00:50:418 (1) - This is actually "new part of the song" I mentioned above - finish on slider's start here?
11. 00:59:298 (2) - (optional) Move this few grids down to get a better angle
12. 01:02:898 (4,5) - Spacing inconsistency (for this one, just move (5) leftward and alter its shape a bit, though)
13. 01:19:218 (1) - Move your endpoint three grids down (pause your editor on 01:18:488 to make it clearer)
14. 01:25:938 (2,3,4) - Spacing inconsistency again here. Why (3)'s spacing suddenly got accelerated?
15. 01:32:658 (1) - Again, don't make a jump here on [Normal]. Stack to your previous (3) instead?
16. 01:35:298 (2,3,4,1) - Both the spacing from (2,3) and (4,1) are inconsistent. Arrange like this?
    
    SPOILER

    
17. 01:39:378 (6,1) - (optional) Uhh... I don't think a cross-slider would work well for a Normal diff here, I'd rather curve (6) to the right here
18. 01:50:418 (1) - Remove new combo. You won't need a NC this fast after the previous one
19. 01:58:578 (4) - (optional) Maybe move this ~5 grids left so (3,4,5) will form an arc?
20. 02:00:018 (6,1) - Once more, don't put a jump on Normal diff. The best arrangement here imo is to form a tilted square:
    
    SPOILER

    
21. 02:01:938 (5,1) - Spacing inconsistency. (for this case, just curve (5) more to the left)
22. 02:07:218 (5) - I highly recommend to add a new combo here and add a circle on 02:07:698 (1/1 after) also to get back with the vocals
23. 02:39:858 (1) - Pretty much same as 00:50:418 (1). Finish here?
24. 02:43:218 (8) - (optional) To make this part cuter, shape this slider like below?
    
    SPOILER

    
25. 03:03:378 (2) - Starting from this slow section here, you could add more whistles to spice up this part, such as on this slider's repeat, for example

[Hard]

1. 00:00:978 (3) - I don't like how this slider's path got 00:02:418 (1) blocked. Encircle (4) instead?
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 00:02:898 (3) - Spacing inconsistency (compare with your previous (1,2)'s spacing)
3. 00:08:178 (6) - I highly recommend to add a note here, stacked below (5)'s end to fill the blank (2/1 delay before the spinner just feels empty)
4. 00:12:978 (2,3,4,5,6) - Uh... Make this five tidier?
   
   SPOILER

   
5. 00:27:378 (x) - Add new circle with new combo here, there's a distinctive bass sound from the song here
6. 00:29:298 (6) - New combo here - remove new combo on 00:30:258 if you follow above, because most likely new combos will look well if placed on downbeat
7. 00:37:458 (6,7) - Uh... This jump is very unintuitive. It's pretty much just randomly placed. Either stack (7) to (4), or make (6) repeating?
8. 00:48:258 (4) - (optional) Unstack to continue your zig-zag pattern here? Like this:
   
   SPOILER

   
9. 00:54:978 (2) - The reverse arrow is partially covered by 00:53:778 (7)'s hitburst. Make this slider encircle (1) instead?
10. 00:58:098 (2) - Put the new combo here instead (refer to what I wrote on 00:29:298 (6))
11. 01:04:338 (7,8) - Spacing error here, although I doubt it's intentional (just move (8) further from (7) in this case)
12. 01:19:938 (2,3) - Uhh, again, spacing inconsistency here. Also, I suggest to create an arc here to make it tidier:
    
    SPOILER

    
13. 01:31:938 (4,1) - Hmm, is there any particular reason these two isn't stacked? Looks much better if stacked imo
14. 01:46:098 (1) - Remove new combo - you won't need a new combo this soon after your last
15. 01:49:218 (3,4) - Minor stuff, but move both two grids up and left so (2,3,4) will form a neater straight line
16. 01:52:338 (1,2,3) - Yep, another spacing inconsistency here. Possible solution:
    
    SPOILER

    
17. 02:07:458 (x) - I highly recommend to add a circle here, to get back with the vocals
18. 02:09:618 (1,2,3) - (optional) Make an arc from these three by moving (2) left a bit?
19. 02:19:218 (1,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5) - On this sequence, new combo should only be added on 02:20:658 (4) / downbeat - else, new combo spam here would only make this part too colorful and distracting
20. 02:41:298 (4) - (optional) Move this upward, so (1,2,3,4) will form a tilted diamond?
    
    SPOILER

    
21. 02:43:938 (x) - Add note - you've followed vocals like this a lot in the mapset, so follow it here too to be consistent :3
22. 02:44:418 (2,3) - Is there any particular reason you don't map the 1.5 seconds between these two? There's many beats to be mapped here!
23. 02:56:658 (1) - Remove new combo - you won't need a new combo this soon after your last
24. 02:57:858 (3,4,5,6,7) - This pattern (especially your jump on (4,5,6)) is very unintuitive. Create something like this?
    
    SPOILER

    
25. 03:03:378 (1,2,3,4,5) - Basically, using too many whistles randomly could drain the quiet part's dramatic essence. Try to remove one on (1)'s end, for example - this way, the whistle on (2)'s start could be greatly emphasized

Pretty much it. This mapset still needs work imo, but don't give up~
The basics are pretty much solid already, just learn around about patterning and about how to polish your map (:

Good luck ^^

Hi
Some suggestions:

[General]
I can't see why you reserved the .osb file...
And remove korean from the tags. It's unnecessary.

[Normal]
00:41:778 (5,6) - Bad overlapping.
00:45:138 (4,1) - ^
00:58:989 (T) - Useless timing point.
02:00:498 (1) - Remove this note may be better.
02:06:738 (x) - Add a note?
02:51:378 (6) - Why you do not add break...?
03:00:978 (6,1) - Add something between them please, it looks weird for now.

[Hard]
01:20:898 (5,6) - Remove (5)'s finish and add it to (6).
02:19:938 (1) - Remove new combo.
02:51:378 (9) - The gap was too long, add break please.
02:56:658 (1) - Remove new combo.
02:59:058 (5) - Add new combo.
03:06:258 (1) - Starts at 03:06:738.

Not bad, still needs your hard working though.