xierbaliti wrote:

-lks-
01:34:281 - 在这+个circle叠在01:34:504 (1)上怎么样? ok

Download: Yaxuan Xiao - Biao Bai (Breeze) [LKs].osu

xierbaliti wrote:

-General-
既然没有丫大哥的diff了那么把他从tag里移除吧. done

-Normal-
为了符合新规定ODHP-1? k
00:34:059 (9) - nazi spacing lol Isn't it right?

nice diff :3

-Hard-
02:04:726 - break 应该从这开始吧? 从你前面那个break的设置来看应该是需要 k

谢谢mod

All looks good now. So bubbled.

nice map anyway, good luck.

Looked interesting so I dropped by.

[General]
- I'm pretty sure you could reduce the SB Load. The SB Load Guide has some advice about this as you can see in Tip One, where you can disable the background image, and have the other ones be called into the storyboard. You could also benefit from Tip Two, some of your lyrics seem to have a bit more transparency than needed.
- Letterboxing doesn't do much to the BG other than cutting off a bit of her leg. I'd advise just removing it.
- You could possibly cut the mp3. It's a good unmapped 25~ seconds that take up filespace.

[Normal]
02:29:615 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - This combo could be getting a bit long for [Normal].
02:42:504 (3,1) - Spacing is very awkward here.

[LKs]
01:22:059 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - Too many new combos here, perhaps do a (1,2,1,2,1,2,1) sort of thing?
02:04:726 - Long break, if you're not going to map through part of it then drag break to here.

[AngelHoney]
01:04:281 - Drag break to here!
02:11:837 - ^

I got a bit tired, but hopefully this should cover most of the stuff I wanted to point out.

SapphireGhost wrote:

Looked interesting so I dropped by.

[General]
- I'm pretty sure you could reduce the SB Load. The SB Load Guide has some advice about this as you can see in Tip One, where you can disable the background image, and have the other ones be called into the storyboard. You could also benefit from Tip Two, some of your lyrics seem to have a bit more transparency than needed. Background just be hidden by few second, and I think it takes much more time to remake lyric elements other than keep it for now, just for saving few kb space :/ Sounds stupid
- Letterboxing doesn't do much to the BG other than cutting off a bit of her leg. I'd advise just removing it. I prefer to letterbox effect, it looked like a real "break" time
- You could possibly cut the mp3. It's a good unmapped 25~ seconds that take up filespace. If one like this song, he can just save this mp3 but not search a full ver. one

[Normal]
02:29:615 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - This combo could be getting a bit long for [Normal]. I feel it's fine
02:42:504 (3,1) - Spacing is very awkward here. keep it for now, if someone else mentioned this, I'll think about changing them

I got a bit tired, but hopefully this should cover most of the stuff I wanted to point out.

thanks for your check, changed nothing so no kds, sorry

http://puu.sh/5o8J o.o/

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Can't seem to download hard. Perhaps full submit again? Also is title being used in SB? Can't seem to find it.

Normal:
00:06:504 (1) - This is pretty inaudible. Perhaps raise the volume to 40%?
00:13:615 (3,1) - Err..perhaps space this properly? You spaced this as 1/1 but it's a 2/1 note so the spacing could be confusing on normal
00:32:281 (5) - NC here for consistency.
00:34:059 (9,10) - These notes are also hard to here. Perhaps 40% volume too?
00:39:393 (5) - NC here for consistency.
00:42:059 (1) - Remove NC
00:53:615 (5) - NC here for consistency
00:55:393 (9) - Perhaps you should unstack this note? Since it doesn't follow the same 1/2 stacks you did previously at 00:53:615 (5,6,7).
01:01:615 (4) - Since you were following the vocals, why don't you move this to 01:01:393 and extend to 01:02:504?
01:34:504 (4,5) - Raise the volume to 40%?
01:39:837 (5) - NC here for consistency.
01:40:726 (1) - Remove NC for consistency.
01:42:504 (1) - Remove NC for consistency.
01:54:059 (5) - NC for consistency
01:54:948 (1) - Remove NC for consistency
01:56:726 (1) - Remove NC for consistency.
02:27:837 (1,2,3) - Raise volume to 40% since it's pretty hard to hear the sound?
02:33:170 (7) - NC for consistency.
02:35:837 (1) - Well...this kinda sucks. The slider ends where NC would be nice. Perhaps remove one reverse and start a slider at 02:36:726? If you do, NC at 02:36:726.
02:43:837 (1) - Perhaps you should space this one? I understand you're stacking 1/1s so it should be easy to follow, but since you spaced this one a bit, beginners could misread it.
02:47:393 (5) - NC for consistency.
02:48:282 (1) - Remove NC for consistency.
02:50:059 (1) - Remove NC for consistency.

LKs:
00:11:170 (1) - Perhaps you should delete this slider and add a note at 00:11:393 (x) instead. Right now, I think the note appears way too fast after a spinner. It appears 1/2 after a spinner ._.
00:24:281 (5) - I think the .5x slow down here ruins the flow since the vocals are still going at a constant pace. Perhaps change it back to 1x and add a note at 00:24:726 (5) ?
00:34:948 (1,1,1,1) - I don't think NC spam is needed here. Perhaps remove the NC on 00:35:170 (1,1) ?
00:42:948 (5,6) - I'm not sure about this jump. It doesn't really feel that fun to me. 222ms and a full screen jump.... Perhaps move it closer?
01:12:948 (1) - Remove this NC for consistency since you are NCing every 2 stanza.
01:15:837 (1) - Remove this NC for consistency.
01:22:059 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - Hmm why did you do NC spam here? Perhaps every 2 stanza like what you've been doing is a lot better.
01:22:504 (1,1,1) - Remove NC from these.
01:24:281 (1,1) - Remove NC
01:35:615 (1,1,1) - Perhaps remove these 3 NC's also? I don't think they are needed.
01:43:393 (5,6) - Perhaps move these jumps little closer also? 222ms and full screen jump
01:57:615 (5) - Personally I think this repeating slider can be flow breaking. Perhaps remap this slider?
02:01:170 (5) - ^
02:03:393 (1) - Were you trying to make it in the middle? Well if so, move it one grid down
02:03:837 (1) - Remove NC?
02:32:948 (1) - Remove NC for consistency.
02:34:726 (1) - ^
02:34:948 (1) - NC here.
02:35:837 (1) - Remove NC
02:37:393 (1) - Remove NC
02:39:393 (1) - Remove NC
02:40:282 (6) - Perhaps a slider here would fit more? Since that is what you've been doing during the chorus. And NC here.
02:44:504 (1) - Remove NC

Angelhoney:
I advise you to use tick rate 1 or tick rate 2. Tick rate 0.5 will not be supported in osz2 and is unrankable. Perhaps tick rate 2 would be nice since it will be the same for all diffs.
00:50:948 (1) - Remove NC? I think NCing every stanza is a lot better than half a stanza.
00:52:726 (1) - Remove NC. Same reason as above.
00:54:504 (1) - Remove NC
00:56:281 (1) - Remove NC?
00:57:170 (8) - And NC here instead? At the start of chorus?
00:59:837 (1) - Remove NC
01:00:726 (5) - And NC here at start of chorus?
01:57:615 (7) - NC at the start of chorus?
02:05:615 (1) - Remove NC? NCing every stanza seems better.
02:07:393 (1) - ^
02:08:726 (1,1,1) - ^
02:36:726 (7) - NC for the start of chorus?
02:39:393 (1) - Remove NC
02:40:281 (5) - And NC here?
02:44:726 (1) - Same here. Remove NC so you NC at every stanza instead?
02:46:504 (1) - ^
02:48:281 (1) - ^
02:50:059 (1) - Remove NC
02:50:948 (5) - And NC here at the start of chorus?
02:53:615 (1) - Remove NC
02:54:504 (5) - And NC here instead at the start of chorus?


._. NC mod? orz

Raging Bull wrote:

Can't seem to download hard. Perhaps full submit again? Also is title being used in SB? Can't seem to find it.
I redownload it once and I can see hard, then. maybe there's something wrong when you download

Normal:
00:06:504 (1) - This is pretty inaudible. Perhaps raise the volume to 40%? I make this on purpose, and there is no drum sound in background music, so I use low volume and I like it
00:13:615 (3,1) - Err..perhaps space this properly? You spaced this as 1/1 but it's a 2/1 note so the spacing could be confusing on normal It's more close and 2 beats space, so it should be more easy to hit IMO, oh well, changed it anyway
00:32:281 (5) - NC here for consistency. nah, I use new combo with vocal
00:34:059 (9,10) - These notes are also hard to here. Perhaps 40% volume too? same reason as 00:06:504 (1)
00:39:393 (5) - NC here for consistency. nah
00:42:059 (1) - Remove NC why? because it's only 1 combo? but new lyric starts here :/
00:53:615 (5) - NC here for consistency nah, and I can't see what's the difference if I NC here
00:55:393 (9) - Perhaps you should unstack this note? Since it doesn't follow the same 1/2 stacks you did previously at 00:53:615 (5,6,7). You're right, but is this really that hard to read?
01:01:615 (4) - Since you were following the vocals, why don't you move this to 01:01:393 and extend to 01:02:504? I want follow clap here
01:34:504 (4,5) - Raise the volume to 40%? nah
01:39:837 (5) - NC here for consistency.
01:40:726 (1) - Remove NC for consistency.
01:42:504 (1) - Remove NC for consistency.
01:54:059 (5) - NC for consistency
01:54:948 (1) - Remove NC for consistency
01:56:726 (1) - Remove NC for consistency.
02:27:837 (1,2,3) - Raise volume to 40% since it's pretty hard to hear the sound?
02:33:170 (7) - NC for consistency.
02:35:837 (1) - Well...this kinda sucks. The slider ends where NC would be nice. Perhaps remove one reverse and start a slider at 02:36:726? If you do, NC at 02:36:726. I think it's fine
02:43:837 (1) - Perhaps you should space this one? I understand you're stacking 1/1s so it should be easy to follow, but since you spaced this one a bit, beginners could misread it. OK, then
02:47:393 (5) - NC for consistency.
02:48:282 (1) - Remove NC for consistency.
02:50:059 (1) - Remove NC for consistency. Sorry, I won't accept NC mod since I use NC follow vocal
._. NC mod? orz

Will upload after LKs and AHO check their own diff.
thanks for your mod

I asked Sakura to download and she couldn't get hard diff. Perhaps I'll ask few more opinion?

Raging Bull wrote:

I asked Sakura to download and she couldn't get hard diff. Perhaps I'll ask few more opinion?

OK, then. I'll full-submit later, thanks.

0.5 tick rate is also unrankable now, just sayin'. (re: angelhoney)

And you don't even use any sliders longer than 1/1, why would you make it 0.5 anyway whhhhhyyyyy

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之前军训期间上网无力 看来似乎不用看那个mod了?

Raging Bull wrote:

LKs:
00:11:170 (1) - Perhaps you should delete this slider and add a note at 00:11:393 (x) instead. Right now, I think the note appears way too fast after a spinner. It appears 1/2 after a spinner ._. hehe, no
00:24:281 (5) - I think the .5x slow down here ruins the flow since the vocals are still going at a constant pace. Perhaps change it back to 1x and add a note at 00:24:726 (5) ? i don't think a .5x slow down ruins a flow
00:34:948 (1,1,1,1) - I don't think NC spam is needed here. Perhaps remove the NC on 00:35:170 (1,1) ? ok
00:42:948 (5,6) - I'm not sure about this jump. It doesn't really feel that fun to me. 222ms and a full screen jump.... Perhaps move it closer? if you can't even enjoy this, i should sadly tell you a fact: you will miss a mass of maps, what a pity
01:12:948 (1) - Remove this NC for consistency since you are NCing every 2 stanza. it plays well
01:15:837 (1) - Remove this NC for consistency.
01:22:059 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - Hmm why did you do NC spam here? Perhaps every 2 stanza like what you've been doing is a lot better. hehe
01:22:504 (1,1,1) - Remove NC from these.
01:24:281 (1,1) - Remove NC
01:35:615 (1,1,1) - Perhaps remove these 3 NC's also? I don't think they are needed. ok
01:43:393 (5,6) - Perhaps move these jumps little closer also? 222ms and full screen jump
01:57:615 (5) - Personally I think this repeating slider can be flow breaking. Perhaps remap this slider? what do you mean!?
02:01:170 (5) - ^
02:03:393 (1) - Were you trying to make it in the middle? Well if so, move it one grid down no im not trying to do that
02:03:837 (1) - Remove NC?
02:32:948 (1) - Remove NC for consistency.
02:34:726 (1) - ^
02:34:948 (1) - NC here.
02:35:837 (1) - Remove NC
02:37:393 (1) - Remove NC
02:39:393 (1) - Remove NC
02:40:282 (6) - Perhaps a slider here would fit more? Since that is what you've been doing during the chorus. And NC here.
02:44:504 (1) - Remove NC

I ignored almost all NC suggestions you gave me i should say sorry
and thank you so much
Download: Yaxuan Xiao - Biao Bai (Breeze) [LKs].osu

LKs wrote:

Raging Bull wrote:

LKs:
00:42:948 (5,6) - I'm not sure about this jump. It doesn't really feel that fun to me. 222ms and a full screen jump.... Perhaps move it closer? if you can't even enjoy this, i should sadly tell you a fact: you will miss a mass of maps, what a pity

I could play that jump, but that jump just makes no sense. But it's your choice to keep it.

Removed AHO's diff. as his willing
And map uploaded

Breeze wrote:

Removed AHO's diff. as his willing
And map uploaded

have a recheck just now, time to rebubble this!

good luck.

[General]

You're missing the file "reversearrow.png" into the folder. Please make sure to add it and do a full submission.

Disable the Letterbox during breaks on every difficulty, since you have a storyboard.

[Normal]

Remove AngelHoney from the tags, since you also removed his difficulty.

There are some really long combos on this difficulty, and it's totally not good for the easiest difficulty to have them so long.

00:33:615 (8,9,10) - Fix the spacing between these notes in a better way.

[Hard]

Remove AngelHoney from the tags, since you also removed his difficulty.

The offset on this difficulty is different from the others. Please change it to 282 and resnap all notes, green lines, etc.

01:04:281 (x) - Make this break start here like you did on Normal difficulty.
02:04:726 (x) - ^

[LKs]

Remove AngelHoney from the tags, since you also removed his difficulty.

00:35:615 (1) - Remove new combo.
00:35:837 (2) - New combo.
01:22:059 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - This new combo spam is pointless.
01:30:948 (1) - Also, this single combo looks weird compared to the rest of the map.
01:36:059 (1) - Remove new combo.
01:36:281 (2) - New combo.
01:57:615 (5) - Too many repeats on this slider, it's really boring imo.
01:59:837 (1) - Same as 01:30:948.
02:01:170 (5) - Same as 01:57:615.
02:03:393 (1) - Once again, same as 01:30:948.
02:04:726 (x) - Make this break start here like you did on Normal difficulty.
02:36:726 (1) - Why again a single combo? Looks so weird, really.
02:38:504 (1) - ^
02:57:393 (1,2) - Center them a bit more for a perfect ending? Better imo.

osuplayer111 wrote:

[General]

You're missing the file "reversearrow.png" into the folder. Please make sure to add it and do a full submission. okay

Disable the Letterbox during breaks on every difficulty, since you have a storyboard. okay, then

[Normal]

Remove AngelHoney from the tags, since you also removed his difficulty. Removed

There are some really long combos on this difficulty, and it's totally not good for the easiest difficulty to have them so long. changed some

00:33:615 (8,9,10) - Fix the spacing between these notes in a better way. okay

[Hard]

Remove AngelHoney from the tags, since you also removed his difficulty. done

The offset on this difficulty is different from the others. Please change it to 282 and resnap all notes, green lines, etc. done

01:04:281 (x) - Make this break start here like you did on Normal difficulty. done
02:04:726 (x) - ^ done

Thanks Andrea, wait for Lks's reply then

osuplayer111 wrote:

[b][LKs]
00:35:615 (1) - Remove new combo.
00:35:837 (2) - New combo.
01:22:059 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - This new combo spam is pointless.
01:30:948 (1) - Also, this single combo looks weird compared to the rest of the map.
01:36:059 (1) - Remove new combo.
01:36:281 (2) - New combo.
01:57:615 (5) - Too many repeats on this slider, it's really boring imo.
01:59:837 (1) - Same as 01:30:948.
02:01:170 (5) - Same as 01:57:615.
02:03:393 (1) - Once again, same as 01:30:948.
02:04:726 (x) - Make this break start here like you did on Normal difficulty.
02:36:726 (1) - Why again a single combo? Looks so weird, really.
02:38:504 (1) - ^
02:57:393 (1,2) - Center them a bit more for a perfect ending? Better imo.

all fixed except 01:57:615 (5)&02:01:170 (5)
thanks

Download: Yaxuan Xiao - Biao Bai (Breeze) [LKs].osu

Uploded

Really sorry for the delay, seems like I forgot to recheck this >_< Everything seems good now, though.

Re-Bubbled~

[General]
Combo colors not the same in Hard compared to Normal.
Think you could get the SB to start with the white BG instead of flashing the image underneath first, then going to white?

[Normal]
The new combos feel a little inconsistent. You have some that are two measures long and some that are only one measure long. Makes the phrases feel a little off.
01:01:615 (4) - This slider shape is kinda weird. Better to do a copy/paste of the 3 and h-flip it
01:04:281 - Extend break to here
01:35:393 (5) - Even though it's a Normal, I don't recommend stacking under slider ends for the easiest of the set.
02:10:059 (1) - Remove new combo
02:53:615 (1) - Maybe extend the end of the spinner to 02:58:059 - ? Where it ends now feels like there's going to be more afterward instead of a more conclusive beat.

[Hard]
The really short combos for the sake of the patterns feels forced. You could do a lot of these while keeping a consistent combo change.
01:34:504 (1) - Not aligned very well
02:36:282 (2) - Stacking makes this positioned weird.
02:39:837 (2) - ^
02:53:615 (1) - Same comment from Normal

[LKs]
00:08:059 (1) - This feels better starting at 00:07:393 - with the bass
00:11:615 (2) - This note is covered by the osu! message after the spinner pretty badly.
02:58:059 - Add a note for the reasoning from the normal/hard?

Garven wrote:

[General]
Combo colors not the same in Hard compared to Normal. fixed
Think you could get the SB to start with the white BG instead of flashing the image underneath first, then going to white? ;w; But I like the effect it flashing with the music, anywany I turned on epilepsy warning

[Normal]
The new combos feel a little inconsistent. You have some that are two measures long and some that are only one measure long. Makes the phrases feel a little off. Emm, I feel it's fine, just because some combo is a bit long lol
01:01:615 (4) - This slider shape is kinda weird. Better to do a copy/paste of the 3 and h-flip it k
01:04:281 - Extend break to here k
01:35:393 (5) - Even though it's a Normal, I don't recommend stacking under slider ends for the easiest of the set. changed
02:10:059 (1) - Remove new combo k
02:53:615 (1) - Maybe extend the end of the spinner to 02:58:059 - ? Where it ends now feels like there's going to be more afterward instead of a more conclusive beat. nice idea, changed

[Hard]
The really short combos for the sake of the patterns feels forced. You could do a lot of these while keeping a consistent combo change. Changed short combo, make them at least a bar for each combo
01:34:504 (1) - Not aligned very well fixed
02:36:282 (2) - Stacking makes this positioned weird. changed
02:39:837 (2) - ^ ^
02:53:615 (1) - Same comment from Normal fixed

Thanks for your mod
Wait for Lks' response

Download: Yaxuan Xiao - Biao Bai (Breeze) [LKs].osu

fixed all

Rebub~

Self poped to fix a hidden reverse arrow and a invisible slidertick when slow donw
Thanks to Louis Cyphe's irc mod

IRC modded.

Too lazy to retype it.



Rebubbled!

ranked!

grats~

Uh, no ranked post ztrot?

Ranked <3

Yoooo 微風 恭喜啊！！！

grats!!

Gratz Breeze

Congrats!

哇 ～恭喜微风君

萧亚轩的声音满特别的蛤蛤=A=

wow, just found it's ranked after I come back from libary
Thanks ztrot and everyone else! :3