1. Illumination (5.74 stars, 1256 notes)

Bacwux wrote:

1:25:490, 2:10:667, 2:12:079, 2:13:490, 2:33:255, 2:55:843, 3:35:373, 3:41:020 -
Unneeded Kai time, nothing super important happening other than a rising up. the song gets hype there so the kiai is nice

02:37:137 (1), 02:37:314 (2) - No need for a reverse slider right here, no sounds in between the two hits. there is

00:03:961 (2), 00:06:784 (2), 00:09:608 (2),00:12:432 (2), 00:18:079 (2), 00:20:902 (2), 04:37:843 (2), 04:40:667 (2), 04:43:490 (2), 04:49:137 (2)
You could let these go on for one more tick and it would work, as that sound goes on for four ticks instead of just three. prefer if its just shortened to the loud ones

00:15:432 (4) - Here would be excellent to have a passive reverse slider since the sound goes on for four ticks. changed to 1 reverse

04:46:490 (4) - You could have the triple with a 2 tick slider here, and go into a long slider from 4:46:667 to the red tick afterwards. this hits the sounds i want hit

Of course, I am not an experienced mapper and I could be just wasting your time, but these could be helpful if you used them! <3

Kami-senpai wrote:

M4M from my queueue

Sorry for lateness, school rekt me

Illumination

00:25:843 (1,2) - Blanket better fixed i think
00:47:196 (1) - I think this belongs in the same combo as 00:46:843 (4) - , so I would NC off and place somewhere closer to 4 nah NC here is for when the synth changes note and also to differentiate slider and hit cricle
01:32:549 (2) - I would make this NC since the bass drum and down beat didnt do exactly your way but changed up the NC a little everywhere so as to make a bit more sense to the melody
02:09:961 (1,2,3) - Seem just a tad too far away to be predictable, especially since the flow doesn't point to the stack at all. Could be better if 1 was lowered below 2 and 3 well it would be odd for there to be a double so i think its fine in that way plus havent seen a single person misread so far but to make it a bit easier to read i ctrl+g the 2nd slider so its closer and better follows flow
02:10:579 (4,1) - Somehow i dont think this emphasizes the clap as much as it should. I would recommend putting a kickslider, but that would sort of mess up the stream so idk i think its fine, the 1st snare is a different combo colour than the second plus the 2nd one changes direction from the 1st
02:24:784 (1) - whistle hitsound on sliderslide, remove thx for the catch
02:45:961 (1,2) - Feel like it might play better if you switched these in timeline nah because the jump would be a wide angle at slightly large spacing instead of a slightly wide angle at smaller spacing that you can snap. its better this way

its really late so i cant find anything too big, but ill try again when im more awake to see if theres anything i missed. Really great map as of right now, emphasis goes where it should, plays well, is also very fun. Since it wasn't too helpful, I'll shoot some stars at it.

gl

SLM wrote:

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[Illuminati]

* 00:15:520 - better just circle to make it clickable imo? diff rhythm
http://puu.sh/tWkaj/32000f0d34.jpg

* 04:46:314 (2,3,4) - ^

* 00:38:549 (3) - looks a bit too exaggerated, maybe change it a bit? sur
http://puu.sh/tWkgZ/25fa124f37.jpg

* 01:07:843 (1,2,3,4) - (especially cuz it's after the spinner) this looks like a stream at the first time, probably because the music intensity increases from here 00:45:961 - .
maybe you could stack 01:07:843 (1,2) - and 01:08:196 (3,4) - then space them a bit.
sth like this http://puu.sh/tWkvL/79e88be108.jpg close enough to tell its not a stream by ar circles

* 01:12:608 (1,2) - maybe make this into a slider cuz this sudden singletap is kinda unexpected. difference between these and next pattern gives contrast in pitch of melody

* 01:12:961 (3,4) - ^

* (if you're not applying the mod above) 01:18:255 (1,2,3,4) - this looks like 1/2s cuz of this 01:12:608 (1,2,3,4) - visually similar 1/2s. close enough to tell its not 1/2 by ar circles

* 01:34:667 (3) - ctrl+g? for opposite going flow like 01:37:137 (2,3) - would play odd

* 01:46:843 (1) - 01:47:196 (1) - maybe ctrl+g to indicate that it's a kickslider more visually effective? ?? prefer that it points toward next note as to imply movement

* 01:48:432 (5) - 01:49:137 (5) - 01:49:843 (5) - maybe NC? nah, nc every 4 is excessive

* 01:58:137 (1) - this feels like it lacks movement, so how about stacking it at 01:58:667 (3) - 's head instead? too large jump for here

* 02:07:755 (6) - kinda hard to hit this in proper time, maybe you could move 02:07:490 (5) - like this. increases emphasis on the suddenness of the extra snare hit
http://puu.sh/tWlbQ/69f3bb1fdb.jpg

* 02:10:226 (2) - 02:10:579 (4) - ^ same as above, better to move 02:10:226 (2,3) - this closer to 02:09:961 (1) - imo.
http://puu.sh/tWlgD/e0e4d0f4e1.jpg

* 02:14:020 (2) - 02:14:726 (4) - NC for better readability? i think unnecessary

* 04:29:549 (2,4) - ^

* 02:56:549 (9) - NC, 02:56:196 (5) - 02:56:902 (13) - 02:57:608 (5) - possibly NC? did 1st

* 03:20:549 (1) - remove NC k

* 03:24:784 (1,2) - 03:27:608 (1,2) - kinda weird to have this spaced less than others, it feels like it's spaced randomly although the pitch is low. less spacing because the sound just stops on that note

* 03:41:373 (5) - 03:41:726 (9) - 03:42:784 (5) - 03:43:137 (9) - NC? unnecessary

* 04:09:784 (4) - or 04:10:049 (5) - NC fixed nc differently than what you said

* 04:12:608 (4) - or 04:12:873 (5) - ^

* 04:11:373 (6) - 04:14:196 (6) - ^


That's all from me, Nice map.
Good luck!

1. Silencing sliderslide and slidertick at the same time is not rankable.
2. 00:05:020 (1,2,3,4) - Consider changing the shape so (2,3,4) have different distance and grouping from (1) to match the rhythms. Something like 04:36:079 (1,2,3,4)
3. 00:23:373 (1) - Shape could be cleaner. Right side could be closer to a circular shape.
4. 00:29:020 (2) - This can also be cleaner.
5. 00:34:314 (1) - Consider reversing the direction of this slider for flow.
6. 00:35:902 (4) - Hitsound at the end seems much too loud for the song. I think you should lower the hitsound volume here.
7. 00:46:843 (4,1) - Might be more appropriate to change this part to http://puu.sh/u0kgf/cc24948069.jpg because it makes more sense with the background 1/2 beat notes you're showing with the small spaced circle groups.
8. 00:52:490 (4,1,2,3,1) - I think you should choose to either follow vocal or instrument here, and not try doing both. It will make more sense to the player that way.
9. 01:00:079 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2) - Combos here don't make sense. It should be four beat groups.
10. 01:24:079 (1,2) - 1/2 beat slider fit the song better here imo.
11. 02:01:137 (3) - Maybe replace this with circles since there's denser rhythm here in the song.
12. 02:07:490 (5,6,1) - That distance is suddenly a bit extreme considering you didn't do this anywhere else.
13. 02:38:902 - Maybe you could try some different slider shapes or patterns here to make contrast from the previous section.
14. 03:43:490 (1) - I think you should use same rhythm as 03:42:079 (1,2)
15. 03:45:255 (5,1) - I recommend stack for reading here. Otherwise, player might click (1) early.
16. 04:06:784 (1,2) - Might be better to flip horizontally for the left-right-left-right with the previous two sliders.
17. 04:57:343 (1) - Are you serious?

Little wrote:

[Illumination]

1. Silencing sliderslide and slidertick at the same time is not rankable. k
2. 00:05:020 (1,2,3,4) - Consider changing the shape so (2,3,4) have different distance and grouping from (1) to match the rhythms. Something like 04:36:079 (1,2,3,4) ok
3. 00:23:373 (1) - Shape could be cleaner. Right side could be closer to a circular shape. ok? i tried
4. 00:29:020 (2) - This can also be cleaner.
5. 00:34:314 (1) - Consider reversing the direction of this slider for flow. spacing would be too large
6. 00:35:902 (4) - Hitsound at the end seems much too loud for the song. I think you should lower the hitsound volume here. k
7. 00:46:843 (4,1) - Might be more appropriate to change this part to http://puu.sh/u0kgf/cc24948069.jpg because it makes more sense with the background 1/2 beat notes you're showing with the small spaced circle groups. changed the circles to sliders to reduce rhythm density and just follow lyrics
8. 00:52:490 (4,1,2,3,1) - I think you should choose to either follow vocal or instrument here, and not try doing both. It will make more sense to the player that way. yea changed it up cuz following vocals
9. 01:00:079 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2) - Combos here don't make sense. It should be four beat groups. changing chords in the synth so changing combo
10. 01:24:079 (1,2) - 1/2 beat slider fit the song better here imo. k
11. 02:01:137 (3) - Maybe replace this with circles since there's denser rhythm here in the song. yea k
12. 02:07:490 (5,6,1) - That distance is suddenly a bit extreme considering you didn't do this anywhere else. reduced a bit but i want it to be sudden because the double snare hit is pretty sudden in the song too
13. 02:38:902 - Maybe you could try some different slider shapes or patterns here to make contrast from the previous section. i dont think that's necessary?
14. 03:43:490 (1) - I think you should use same rhythm as 03:42:079 (1,2) there is no second hit on 03:43:667 - so there isnt a second 1/8 slider
15. 03:45:255 (5,1) - I recommend stack for reading here. Otherwise, player might click (1) early. alright
16. 04:06:784 (1,2) - Might be better to flip horizontally for the left-right-left-right with the previous two sliders. it's the most intense part of the song so i felt it was good to give a different feeling to the jumps with opposite corners rather than same like ive been usually doing, if it's bad ill change it back
17. 04:57:343 (1) - Are you serious? ;-; changed first spinner to pretty slider shapes, kept last spinner because technically there is sound there and it gets me over five minutes

Kujinn wrote:

M4M ~

[General]

1. With the style of mapping, I think that AR9.4 would do better. AR9.2 is just way too slow. 9.4 too high imo, went to 9.3
2. Also because of High OD and difficult streams and kicksliders. Maybe decrease HP from 6.5 to 6. k

[Illumina:tion]

1. 00:05:020 (1,2) - You should stack these like you've done before, the only change that works is 00:06:255 (4) - k
2. imo 00:53:020 (2) - should be a 1/1 slider and should be placed here 00:52:843 - nah, this part is mostly following the vocals but the background synth is so noticeable that i dont think it would do well to skip it
3. 00:57:255 - you should increase SV up by .1
4. 01:09:255 (3) - pretty weird slider, you could made the end curve the same way and place 01:10:490 (1,3) - around x135 y333 dont understand but i like how this part goes so nah?
5. 01:28:314 - i think kicksliders should have a higher sv imo yea upped to 1.5x
6. 01:30:079 (1) - should either stack on 01:29:725 (5) - or place it much further away. needs larger DS because of 1/1 gap. yea i stacked it, shouldve also done it earlier because the other one was fixed in another mod
7. 01:40:667 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - these jumps are kind of boring, they need more shape. there should be something similar to these stacks 01:41:549 (1,3) - in previous combo. sure? made the jump pattern a bit neater and decreased spacing between B5 and P1 to account for the less volume
8. 03:24:255 (2,3) - I feel like in this section, you should lower ds between circle and kickslider. Going straight into a load of doubles can be too much for most players, especially since the difficulty isn't far from 04:09:255 - section. yea lowered the ds a bit

Didn't see much problems with this map. I think its ready for rank

GL!

1. The resolution of your bg could be made to the newer maximum size. I rescaled it for you here if you want.

1. 00:01:843 (3,1) and 00:05:549 (2,3) - Compare the difference in distance between these two, the second one is noticeably smaller though they both share the same 1/1 gap. I reccomend trying to be more consistent or at least not this much of a difference.
2. 00:06:079 - I feel like a circle here would be nice, as there is definitely a piano sound there.
3. 00:10:137 (3,1) - Blanket
4. 00:15:255 (2,3,4) - The change in rhythm here underrepresents the repetiive synth noise that you have been following so far. Variation is fine just make sure your rhythms stay true, I reccomend doing something like this, so there's a click on the blue tick.
   
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5. 00:17:726 (1,2,1,2) - If you're going to have variation before these appear, you should probably stay consistent with this new way of representing the rhythm throughout the rest of the section. That is to say if you applied the last change, I would use that same rhythm here as well.
6. 00:42:784 (1,2) - I feel like the 2 in this combo could use an nc to indicate the change in rhythm but it's up to you I guess. The nc's in this section seem a little strange to me as well but they're functional enough so it's ok. Also if you could move 00:43:137 (2) over to like x190 y60 that'd be gr8
7. 00:45:961 - If you truly want to make this a slider only section, I guess it works. However songs like this have so much potential to do something more interesting. Things such as changing the rhythm to be all circles when the strong vocals fade out in places like 00:47:196 (1,2,3,4,5) and 00:50:196 (2,1,2,3) - would be neat,
8. 01:12:608 (1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,3) - The spacing here kinda worries me because the 1/2 spacing changes halfway through and looks similar to the 1/1 gaps earlier.. I would try to be a bit more cautious with visuals here.
9. 01:31:137 - The spacing and the rhythm of this kiai feels very underwhelming to me following that intense lead in. A very heavy chunk of this kiai is mapped to exclusively 1/2 rhythms with fairly normal spacing, where I was expecting a more standard dnb rhythm with five bursts and triples and such. I dunno, to me it just seems pretty underdone.
10. 02:25:490 (1,2,3,4) - I think this is a more accurate rhythm to use here, though I'm not positive if that sound is 1/8 or not so yeah.
11. 03:20:549 (3,4) - ctrl + g both of these?
12. 04:16:138 (5,1) - This plays pretty poorly because nobody's really expecting a short pause in the music here, should just make it another kickslider
13. 04:46:314 (2,3,4) - Same as the beginning of the map

Logic Agent wrote:

[General]

1. The resolution of your bg could be made to the newer maximum size. I rescaled it for you here if you want. thx dude didnt know it changed

[Ilumination]

1. 00:01:843 (3,1) and 00:05:549 (2,3) - Compare the difference in distance between these two, the second one is noticeably smaller though they both share the same 1/1 gap. I reccomend trying to be more consistent or at least not this much of a difference. yea reduced a bit throughout
2. 00:06:079 - I feel like a circle here would be nice, as there is definitely a piano sound there. nah dont want the rhythm to be too dense
3. 00:10:137 (3,1) - Blanket k lol
4. 00:15:255 (2,3,4) - The change in rhythm here underrepresents the repetiive synth noise that you have been following so far. Variation is fine just make sure your rhythms stay true, I reccomend doing something like this, so there's a click on the blue tick. yea changed it up a bit
   
   d

   
5. 00:17:726 (1,2,1,2) - If you're going to have variation before these appear, you should probably stay consistent with this new way of representing the rhythm throughout the rest of the section. That is to say if you applied the last change, I would use that same rhythm here as well. nah it only changed there because of the bass
6. 00:42:784 (1,2) - I feel like the 2 in this combo could use an nc to indicate the change in rhythm but it's up to you I guess. The nc's in this section seem a little strange to me as well but they're functional enough so it's ok. Also if you could move 00:43:137 (2) over to like x190 y60 that'd be gr8 no nc because not necessary but why move it, its already a perfect triangle ;c
7. 00:45:961 - If you truly want to make this a slider only section, I guess it works. However songs like this have so much potential to do something more interesting. Things such as changing the rhythm to be all circles when the strong vocals fade out in places like 00:47:196 (1,2,3,4,5) and 00:50:196 (2,1,2,3) - would be neat, omf, changed it back to how it originally was lol
8. 01:12:608 (1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2,3) - The spacing here kinda worries me because the 1/2 spacing changes halfway through and looks similar to the 1/1 gaps earlier.. I would try to be a bit more cautious with visuals here. was hoping the 1/2 before would clue it in that its 1/2
9. 01:31:137 - The spacing and the rhythm of this kiai feels very underwhelming to me following that intense lead in. A very heavy chunk of this kiai is mapped to exclusively 1/2 rhythms with fairly normal spacing, where I was expecting a more standard dnb rhythm with five bursts and triples and such. I dunno, to me it just seems pretty underdone. can't do anything about the rhythm because that's just how the song is, i cant just add 1/4s willy nilly because it just isn't there ;/ i increased the spacing quite a bit where i thought i could though
10. 02:25:490 (1,2,3,4) - I think this is a more accurate rhythm to use here, though I'm not positive if that sound is 1/8 or not so yeah. i mean, im covering most of the (vocals?) the high pitched sound and the 1/8 slider on the end for the drums.
11. 03:20:549 (3,4) - ctrl + g both of these? yea sure, i wanted it to be ctrl + g because the synth changed but it doesnt play well
12. 04:16:138 (5,1) - This plays pretty poorly because nobody's really expecting a short pause in the music here, should just make it another kickslider yyea sure
13. 04:46:314 (2,3,4) - Same as the beginning of the map k

Pretty nice map, just think the first kiai could be a bit more interesting rhythmically. Nice overall though!

TequilaWolf wrote:

mod

Illumination-

I had to play with +7ms to get a nice hit error yea timing was a bit off, moved it over by 10

00:00:785 (1,2) - 00:02:196 (1,2) - consider 1/1 sliders for these instead of just circles also these 00:05:020 (1,2) - and 00:07:843 (1,2) - 00:43:137 (2,3) - i dont want the rhythm to be that barren because then it wouldnt contrast as much with other less dense sections
02:06:432 (2) - consider ctrl+g nah
02:07:755 (6) - consider removing this and this 02:10:226 (2) - nah, there is a snare hit there and it wouldnt reflect well to just leave such a noticeable sound with no hit
02:10:579 (4) - I feel like this is a little hard to hit, maybe something like this nah there is definitely a snare hit there and i dont see why its hard to hit compared to the other parts.
http://puu.sh/ubg90/cc998874fc.jpg I just feel the stream really starts only on 02:10:667 (1) -
02:21:079 (2,3) - isn't the slider just supposed to be until the red tick and the circle on the white tick instead, seems good for me no, the (vocal?) high pitched sound is on those ticks
02:36:961 (2) - maybe ctrl+g didnt ctrl+g but reduced spacing a bit
02:47:990 (3,6) - these feel like they don't belong (also in other parts of the song) but yeah straight up 1/2 sliders might be dull it does belong, dont you hear the (twinkle?) sound from the synth
03:23:549 (2) - maybe just stack it on 1 nah it matches what i did earlier so ill keep it that way
04:27:255 (1) - consider just shorten into 1/2 slider and add a circle on 04:27:520 no theres a held sound there and no direct hit on that blue tick
04:36:079 (1,2,3,4) - also think ending might be better with some sliders like the opening mentioned above then it wouldnt be dense enough like before in comparison ;/

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Shyotamaze wrote:

Hi, late M4M from my queue :^)

Illumination

1. 01:12:089 (3) - Why doesn't it have the same shape as 01:11:383 (1,2) - ? They are mapped to the same sound so it's a bit weird to suddenly break the consistency imo, same for 01:17:736 (3) - higher pitched + it would be boring to only use 1 slider shape for all 3 sounds
2. 01:52:147 (1,1,2) - The spacing here is really confusing to read and awkward imo, currently the spacing makes the player think that 01:52:677 (2) - is actually on the blue tick here 01:52:589 instead of the white tick, so increase the spacing between 01:52:500 (1,2) - or reduce the spacing between 01:52:147 (1,1) - , same for 04:07:677 (1,1,2) - increased
3. 01:53:736 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - Here it clearly sounds like you're following the vocals so it doesn't make sense to put 01:55:147 (2) - on the white tick instead of here 01:54:971 just for the sake of not missing the big white tick imo, same for some similar patterns it makes no sense when both patterns get the point of holding across the vocals while this one doesnt miss the white ticks
4. 02:10:589 (4) - It would be better if it was stacked on 02:10:677 (1) - since you did it here 02:10:236 (2,3) - and because the strongest sound is here 02:10:677 (1) - so it's a nice way to emphasize it true going to do that, even though it made the pattern harder and people kept telling me to make it easier
5. 02:11:559 (11,12,1) - The spacing doesn't seem to be consistent here and the way how 02:11:736 (1) - is placed gives an awkward flow so moving it somewhere like that https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7399463 would be a cool solution odd, shouldve been the same as the others, fixed and flow isnt bad? (yes, you'll have to fix the blanket with 02:12:089 (1) - )

Really nice map, I believe it can be your first ranked map pretty easily now (sorry for shitmod, not much to say imo)
Good luck!

MujouSekai wrote:

Illumination

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  01:12:618 (1,2,3,4) - for these four notes, i think its better for it to just equal spacing just like 00:49:853 (1,2,3,4) - as there is a more intense section afterwords, and the music does not really promote the awkward position. its not awkward? reduced spacing a bit but the separation is necessary to match the music
  01:13:324 (1,2,1,2,3) - this five notes is a bit too overmapped for this early section. Why not follow the next part u did? 01:15:442 (1,2,1,2,3) - because the music doesnt support that undermapping? the 2 parts have different rhythms and it fits
  01:15:442 (1,2,1,2,3,2) - I would redirect the tail to the note 01:19:853 (1) - nah, the sounds the same so it points the same way as before
  01:25:853 (5,9,5,9) - would put NCs on these cause the music has strong beats on these notes. not important enough to nc, would just be nc spam imo
  01:32:206 (1,2,3,4) - this part the melody does not suggest the current pattern. I would suggest changing it to match it. uhh... but it does? your rhythm doesn work
  01:35:030 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,1,2,3) - spamming jumps here does not really work, and same as the previous, recommend changing it. its not spamming jumps tho, each of these are an individual jump and spacing depends on intensity
  01:38:206 (3,4) - again. ?
  01:40:677 (1,2) - ^ ?
  01:46:324 (1,2,3) - ^ ?
  Same for other parts. The song rhythm is not just simply 1/4s, but a more complex pattern, I think for this part its better to obey the song pattern. i honestly dont hear what your hearing sooooooooooooooooooooooooooo..........
  01:48:442 (5,5,5) - also would suggest NC. n
  01:50:559 (3) - NC? o
  02:01:147 (3) - blanket, just move it slightly to right for the slider. k
  02:30:442 (1,2,3,4) - why reduced spacing, recommend matching the previous squares as music is the same. spacing matches first square, 2nd square is larger because it matched the crescendo in the music
  02:33:618 (5,5,5) - NC, same reason as above. no
  02:36:442 (3,4) - ctrl - H? no need
  02:50:206 (1,1) - spacing, as its a 1/8. its 1/4... and its fine because of slider leniency, helps emphasize the hold and sequential "jump" back into the regular music
  03:07:147 (1) - nice star thx
  03:24:794 (1,2) - match the spacing of the short sliders. idk why this is a problem multiple people pointed out... its smaller because the sounds temporarily pause
  03:27:618 (1,2) - ^
  03:32:559 why reduced spacing, sv is same? because intensity is lower?????????
  03:35:736 (5,3,5,5,3) - optional NC again. pro tip, you only need to explain yourself once, dont need to point it out everytime unless there's a different case, gets a bit annoying.
  03:39:618 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - for this part i think its note note kickslider, instead of kickslider note note. different way of emphasizing, i have the kicksliders on the (vocal?) buzz sound because its a bit longer than the usual (+thx for inderectly reminding me those need a whistle)
  03:41:383 (5,9,5,9) - optional NC
  03:55:147 again why reduced spacing? look above
  04:46:324 (2,3,4) - four notes only, just use 04:43:500 (2) - following a different rhythm..

General
I don't think the middle two kiais are necessary. As kiais are used to indicate the climax or chorus of a song, those are just build ups. The same goes to the kiai before the first chorus. theyre parts where you hype up, kiais fit that, theyre not just for the climax

Really well done map! Good luck. Also like the song, from my two fav artists!