after a couple of testplays, some stuffs are bothering me so ill point those out... (just my suggestions and opinions tho :3)
- 00:53:956 (53956|0,54127|0,54342|0,54470|0,54642|0,54856|0,54985|0,55156|0) - these are not too friendly imo, how about mirror the patterns from 00:53:270 to 00:54:470 ? it will also sort out the hand balance here 00:53:099 (53099|3) - this note will broke the balance between 00:53:270 (53270|2,53313|3) in my experience because of last hit-to-first 1/8 flow (kinda like that xD)
- from 00:56:013 to 00:57:899 - mirror too, same reason from my mod above ^ to keep the hands balance and flowy
- 00:58:756 (58756|3,58799|2,58842|0,58885|1,58927|3,58927|2,58970|0,59013|1,59056|2,59099|0,59099|3) - mirror too, kinda same also on what i pointed above regarding these 00:58:456 (58456|3,58585|3,58756|3,58799|2) then to chop the flow you can ctrl + g this 00:58:756 (58756|0,58799|1)
- 00:59:270 (59270|3) - move to 3 also for these one 00:58:970 (58970|3,59099|3) then for 00:59:442 (59442|2,59485|3) ctrl + g to keep it flowy
- 00:59:956 (59956|0) - move to 2 same reason also to be able for these notes to keep up 00:59:785 (59785|0,60127|0)
- 01:00:556 (60556|3,60556|0) - i suggest you to move this to [23], that jacks makes it more hard to execute, it strain the hands more considering there are 1/8 notes before this...
- and also if you accept above... 01:00:642 (60642|1) - move this to 3 maybe, there's already too much pressure on the left side of the burst because of these 01:00:299 (60299|0,60299|1)
- maybe it is okay to remove 01:01:027 (61027|0,61070|1,61113|2,61156|3) this? and making 01:00:985 (60985|3,60985|2) these triple for the loud snare crash sound? i think it will be a good emphasis to the next pattern if there were a rest... just like this
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5766150- i think this note 01:23:099 (83099|2) are not needed, it doesnt make any rememblance to make it double since the sound is too soft and also it feels weird to play having same density as 01:22:927
- if you follow double for every kick sounds... in this part 01:25:327 - should technically look like this...
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5766337 similar on what you did hear 01:28:242
- 01:30:813 (90813|0,90813|3) - remove 1 note? it doesnt have kick sounds like i mention above ^
- pattern suggestion: ummm.. how about starting from 01:23:270 to 01:34:242 .... for a different pace, placing a rest after every 2 snare sounds like this 01:24:299
- so... mind make these parts empty?
- 01:25:756 (85756|1) -
- 01:27:127 - (add the remaining empty after this),
- 01:28:499 (88499|2) - (and also for the reason of making this easier to play when making empty 01:28:327 (88327|0,88327|2,88413|1,88413|3,88413|0) )
- 01:29:870 (89870|2) -
- 01:31:242 (91242|1) -
- 01:32:613 (92613|1) -
- 01:33:985 (93985|1) - (same like before about 01:33:813 (93813|3,93813|1,93899|3,93899|2,93899|0) - )
it really plays good imo :3 but still your choice
- 01:26:870 - make this pattern more simple? so it will be easier to execute? something similar to
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5766490- 01:34:585 - i personally dont know about this jacks... consider repattern those?
maybe it is just me...- 01:44:870 - how about put some emphasis for this one? to feel more the climax for the next pattern like
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5766510- 01:56:356 (116356|1) - and 01:59:099 (119099|3) - maybe it is okay to remove these, it is fine being single because it doesnt have sounds like kick snare and also melody like 01:56:699 then add note here 01:56:185 for cymbals
- 02:02:870 (122870|3) - move to 3? more balance this way
- 02:22:242 - i feel a inconsistency here... i think you missed a 2/1 LN here?
- 02:23:442 (143442|3,143527|3) - i dont hear any sounds that can make this resemblance to jack... maybe change this?
- 02:28:499 (148499|3) - i think it is for the background synth but i think it is fine to remove this for comfortable flow
- 02:29:013 (149013|3,149056|2,149099|3) - this is not too friendly imo, how about
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/5766655 ?
- 02:29:442 (149442|0) - maybe it is fine to remove this if you're making the background synth double or maybe this 02:29:356 (149356|0) ? it is nice to play if it is flowy
- 02:30:642 - same ^ (if you accept you can check for the others, kinda lazy xD)
- 03:12:985 (192985|2) - move to 4 to avoid 03:12:470 (192470|2,192642|2,192813|2,192985|2,193156|2)
- 03:07:499 (187499|0) - move to 2
- 03:08:185 (188185|3) - move to 3
- 03:34:927 (214927|0) - move to 2?
- 03:45:213 - in this part maybe change the pattern something like 3,[14][23][14][23][124] because the pattern here kinda break the hand balance 03:44:956 (224956|3,225042|3,225470|3,225556|3)
- 04:07:070 (247070|0,247156|3,247242|0) - mirror then 04:07:327 (247327|2) move to 1? i think it is more better
- 04:35:270 - i think you missed a note here
- 04:48:299 - i hear a synth here, add also same kind of sound with 04:48:470 (288470|1)
- 04:51:042 - add note same as above
- 04:53:613 - add note too
- 04:56:870 - 04:58:242 - 04:59:613 - etc... add note same sound with 04:58:927 also you did add here 04:55:499
- 04:19:156 - these killed me xD