Hi. Saw you in modreqs and liked the song, so I thought I'd mod it. Don't feel obliged, but if you find this helpful, consider making it a M4M with
one of my maps.
Ah, looks like I just finished my mod right after you updated, so some of this might not apply.
[Insane]
00:18:383 (2,3,4,5,6,7,1) – More of a personal thing, but try adding a rotation to this because purely horizontal patterns look a bit mechanical
http://puu.sh/ohs2o/ad3a9ee067.jpg00:21:913 (2,3,4,5,6,7,1) - ^
00:42:427 (1) – until 00:54:780 (1) – This section loses a few background instruments, so it feels a bit calmer to me than the surrounding sections. To reflect this, try lowering the base level of spacing and laying off the jumps here. So scale this 00:43:089 (2,3,4,5,6) - down by ~.9 and don't make this jump so big 00:45:295 (4,5) – . I'll let you consider the rest of the section
00:56:545 (1,2,3) – This looks like it can be cleaned up a bit. There's a potential blanket here on (1) and don't overlap (1,3). So try something like
http://puu.sh/ohszR/71f891b788.jpg or
http://puu.sh/ohssy/380028b855.jpg01:00:074 (1,2) – Between the spacing and the flow, (2) doesn't feel natural to play. Try making (1) and (2) les curved, try making the flow smoother (like:
http://puu.sh/ohsOK/b650485289.jpg), or try reducing the spacing between these.
01:08:677 (6,1,2) – I like this
01:14:192 (1) – This note is quite strong (compare to 01:13:310 (5) - , I think (1) is stronger), but the jump into it is relatively low compared to a lot of other jumps you have. Try to find a way to increase the spacing.
01:41:986 (4) – If you can, try moving this away from the corner since it can be a little awkward to move your cursor way up there. Try moving 01:40:663 (1,2,3,4) – so that (1) is at ~272, 332
01:44:192 (1,2,3) – It is easy to see that you were running out of room on this pattern due to the angles of this curve. Try moving 01:43:089 (2,3,4,5,6,7,1) – to the right more like:
http://puu.sh/ohtaq/416805b24a.jpg . If you do be careful about how auto-stack works to maintain 1.20x DS. After you move to the right, you can rotate 01:44:192 (1) – and move 01:44:854 (2) – to get a more circular curve.
[Hard]
00:14:192 (1,2) – More of a personal thing, but I don't like the flow generated by this blanket. The anti-flow that the (2) slider makes you do is a big change in direction, and I don't feel anything in the song that this would represent. Consider a smoother flow:
http://puu.sh/ohtrR/26f2a8591f.jpgjumps overdone, especially in the calmer section
00:15:736 (5,1) – This jump and the ones similar to it (00:17:280 (5,1) - , 00:19:266 (5,1) - , etc) feels a little too big. Consider reducing this jump to 1.8x DS.
00:25:442 (2,3,4,5) – This could form a nicer trapezoid:
http://puu.sh/ohtDy/6706a7cb2e.jpg00:31:398 (5,2) – Might look nicer if there were more room between these.
00:32:501 (2,3,4,5) – These could form a nicer trapezoid.
00:37:574 (2,3) – I disagree with this jump. (3) is a weaker note in the song than (2), so if (3) gets this high level of spacing, so should (2). That doesn't seem right, so make this the same spacing as (1,2). The 00:37:574 (2,3,4) – triangle is not worth it.
00:39:560 (2,3,4,5) – trapezoid
00:45:736 (5,1) – Again, these jumps feel a bit too big, especially since this is a calmer section of the song since you lose a few background instruments here. Try making the DS here be only 1.6x spacing (assuming you did the above spacing change too.)
00:44:854 (2,1) – overlap is not ideal
01:10:663 (1,2) – If you rotate this a little, you can make 01:11:986 (3) – be equidistant to (1) and (2). Since (3) makes a 9 degree angle with the y-axis, rotate (1,2) by 9 degrees and position back onto (1)'s head,
01:12:648 (1,2,3,4) – If you don't want to make a trapezoidal flow, I'm fine with that. But right now, it looks a little too unstructured, and a trapezoid looks better:
http://puu.sh/ohu8Z/fc22a2f7d7.jpg. Figure out a way to make the angles between (1,2,3,4) work nicer, or just use the easy shape.
01:14:192 (1,2,3) – a smoother flow like this would be nicer after the jump, and it has the potential to remove the 01:13:310 (4,3) - overlap:
http://puu.sh/ohuhR/3be442436d.jpg01:17:722 (1) – It felt a little odd that these strong melody notes weren't expressed, but I guess it makes since you want the pacing to be calmer after 01:16:839 (4,5) -
[Normal]
00:23:898 (6,7,1) – Visually, I like this better:
http://puu.sh/ohuUN/c27565ffc1.jpg . Since (1)'s head and (1)'s end are parallel to (6,7), the pattern forms a trapezoid, which looks nicer to me.
00:38:016 (7,1) – Try to get this to blanket?
00:47:722 (5,1) – Overlap is not ideal
00:54:780 (5) – If you curve this slightly more, you get a better blanket
01:03:824 (2) – This slider feels like it's ignoring a bit too much of the melody. Try this rhythm:
http://puu.sh/ohuzz/5bd80b09cc.jpg. If you expect the player to be able to hit four ½ notes in a row, I think they can handle this rhythm too.
01:17:942 (2) - ^ similar
01:09:119 (4) – I really wish the song were different and had this note in the melody at 01:09:339 – since this ½ rhythm is unintuitive, but it is what it is.
01:14:192 (1,2,4,5) – Why not make these two overlaps the same and stack (5) on (1)?http://puu.sh/ohuIc/f9a788c497.jpg
[Easy]
00:40:663 (3,4) – the DS here is 1.05x. Might be nicer to get it to 1.00x
00:38:898 (1,2,3,4) – trapezoid might look nicer, I won't mention others
00:51:251 (3,1) – I dislike how the curvature of these two sliders are so different. It'd work nicer if they flowed differently like
http://puu.sh/ohvnZ/91116046a2.jpg (was a quick edit, didn't want to move it). If you're going in the same direction though, idk, it just looks odd to me. You can maybe add a directional change too like:
http://puu.sh/ohvrL/24457208ef.jpg . See if there is a way to relate these two sliders somehow.
01:19:927 (3,2) - ^ similar. I think it'd look better if these were copy paste of each other
01:05:369 (2,3) – These are a little too close. It'd look nicer if you could make some room between them.
01:24:780 (1,3) – A little picky, but these could be blanketed.
01:30:516 (4) – Make the slider end have a Normal-clap here
01:37:574 (4) - ^
01:38:898 (1,2) – Making these have the same curvature sets up a more circular pattern which looks nicer to me.
http://puu.sh/ohvXg/3214e2e216.jpgIn general, I think your patterns could use smoother flow and and more structure (not to say that there aren't good instances of it), but that's just a preference.
Good luck!