1. Shin Ai (4.6 stars, 986 notes)

Shin Ai -深愛-: me | StoryBoard: me

1. 各种意义上我都不觉得你这是expert，歌曲介绍里的标还是用I吧
   
2. 诶，我不是很懂，纯白不让做cb颜色，你这个虽然不是纯白，不过240*3真的没问题吗
   
3. 第一个object离开头太近，建议设置AudioLeadIn为（2000-577=）1423
   
4. 00:35:520 (4) - 可以删掉 更有趣
   
5. 00:56:997 (2,3) - 节奏上可以ctrl+g
   
6. 01:51:031 (1,2) - 换滑条
   
7. 01:54:610 (4) - 加次折返
   
8. 01:59:554 (2,3) - 节奏上可以ctrl+g
   
9. 02:57:508 - 应该让这里可以被点击
   
10. 02:58:361 (2,1) - 换滑条
    
11. 最后那段真长……

JQKing wrote:

03:03:815 (2,3,1) - 这里两个空拍有点别扭 填一个试试看

03:14:724 (3,4) - 改成滑条

04:42:850 (1,2,3) - 这里不好看

最后那段太长了可以在提前一点减小音量。讲道理这图并没有特别需要修改的地方。

水摸完毕。

6th wrote:

Hey ! M4M

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[Shin Ai]
00:13:531 (3) - I'd have removed it or at least repeated previous slider. Same applies to 01:35:008 -
01:09:440 (3,4,5,1) - This is honestly strange to follow imo
01:19:327 (4) - how about moving it to (178;277) ok
02:49:667 (1) - Make it curved as you did before ?
02:53:758 (4) - It should have higher spacing here imo
02:53:844 (1) - make it start at 02:53:844 - ? either worked :3

Sorry if I didn't really help. Your map is already very nice

appleeaterx wrote:

M4M as your request!

Shin Ai

* 00:44:042 - Could use a clap here.
* 01:29:213 (1,2,3,4,5) - An example of stuff that I wasn't a big fan of in this difficulty. For a non-chorus section, I found stuff like these quite overdone. Yes, there are claps, yes there are sounds (in most of these) that could suggest jumps - but definitely not this big in my point of view.. stuff like this isn't used in the KIAI either. nah I was intend to do a EX diff, but you are right, it is a bit overdone. nerfed
* 02:08:247 (4,5) - Not sure why this one is so big as well... no instrument that it could actually go with either?
* 02:16:940 (1,2) - Hmm.. nothing really against stacks, but I personally wouldn't use it here. A piano note and the clap can be found on (2), so a stack kinda takes away the possible emphasis it could get when spaced out. (it also makes 02:17:963 (4,5) - seem overdone) I think it is ok, but I adjust it a bit so 02:17:963 (4,5) - won't look like overdone.
* 02:51:031 (1,2,3,4,5) - Same as before, tho it's less intense here.
* 03:16:599 (5,1) - I always find that antijumps like these play really strange... if you were to place small breaks here and there - much larger spacing, or (manual) stacks work so much better, and you even used them before at 02:58:872 (1,1) - 03:14:213 (1,2) - - which makes this even more confusing ._.
* 03:18:645 (2) - CTRL+G? It would get rid of that antiflow at (2,3).. tho that -might- have been intentional.. yeah tried to create some difference
* 03:20:349 (1,2,3,4) - Ah, again here. Not many sounds - yet rather large jumps with quite a bit of singletap... would really refrain doing that when the song doesn't really call for it. Especially on slower songs like these... this one is not overdone imo
* 03:25:633 (2,3,4,5,6) - A bit similar to the suggestion adressed above. Also something to note, (5,6) is noticeably larger compared to (2,3) - while (2,3) are the only ones of this pattern that actually have a relatively strong sound that the jumps could go with. It might not seem that much, but remember that the longer the player single-taps the jumps will automatically become harder as well - making (5,6) harder than it might seem in the editor. Might apply to other patterns as well. not overdone imo, but I adjest spacing for make more sense to (2,3)
* 03:37:395 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Not even KIAI, but probably the hardest pattern of this map. Spacing would really be reduced here in my point of view. This part isn't particularily strong here as well, it just happens to have actual 1/4 sounds... which aren't that strong at all o_o well here is technically a kiai section ending with the climax (in my point of view), but just I like to cancel the kiai for readability and for the fountain on the following kiai section. Actually I made this part in kiai just in case you perfer that way lol.
* 05:16:941 (1) - I really like that not only the spacing, but also the rhythm noticeably gets easier every green line w. /w\

Some parts feel a bit overdone with the 1/2 singletap spam, while the song doesn't offer much that these patterns could go with. But overall, well done!

Feel free to call me back once you have enough mods (could use at least 3 or more), good luck for now :3/

Hakurei Yoru wrote:

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如何给白学家摸图？

[书上说和往死里打就行了]
01:27:338 (1,2) -
02:49:156 (1,2) - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4803185
04:08:417 (2,1) - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4803167 大概这两种调整方法，这样从美观度和可玩性上都提升了。原来的放法只遮了一点实在是要死人 不了我不喜欢叠着
04:11:145 - 这里这个音我觉得有必要突出 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/4803177
呃……后面这里大概都可以考虑一下？虽然看下来好像又问题不大了

03:25:633 (2,3,4,5,6) - 整体上移调整一下？ 3这个位置看起来打起来都不太好
03:34:497 (4) - 稍微往右调整，flow在这里收缓一点会好很多
03:35:349 (3,4) - stack？这样音的体现比较明显，现在的摆法比较莫名 差不多了

挺好挺好

性药真切的说道

Kyubey wrote:

I've checked the official site of this game, it's named "WHITE ALBUM2 -closing chapter-" everywhere, so change your source to that.

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Add "ホワイトアルバム2" to the tags, it's the title of the game in katakana.
01:30:577 (1,4) - these sliders feel way too fast for this calm part, try to reduce their speed to... 0.8× feels good
02:52:395 (1) - same
05:12:849 - how about decreasing the SV here step by step as you did with volume? will feel better with this fading out

And that's all, nothing special to point out. Call me back.