1. Upset (3.2 stars, 762 notes)

1. Be sure to add some tags and stuff to help people find your map
2. Take off countdown, there is a woman talking in the beginning and the countdown distracts from that
3. 00:21:512 (1,2,3,1) - I would move this pattern down a bit, 1 touches the health bar
4. 02:31:681 (1,2) - Curve 1 a bit more so that it forms a perfect blanket
5. 02:55:749 (6) - Good flow but there are a lot of hitbursts that litter this slider's body, I would find another place for it if possible or think of another shape to avoid all of that overlap
6. 02:58:122 (4,5,6,7) - Because of how stacks work, the 4 appears to be touching 02:57:783 (3) - 's slider end in play. I suggest you move it over so that you can avoid the unnecessary overlap. Alternatively you can unstack them to avoid this.
7. 03:07:952 (1,2) - This overlap is a bit unsightly, maybe just make 2 a straight slider of sorts, the flow will till be top notch nonetheless
8. 03:12:698 (1,2) - (Nazi) Blanket can be improved a bit
9. 03:43:207 (2,3) - Blanket can be improved as well, use 3's approach circle to help you with this
10. 03:45:240 (1,2) - Same overlap thing as before, make 2 a straight slider if you could
11. 04:17:105 (5,1) - Lower the spacing here, the distance between the two objects causes me to slider break on 5
12. 04:43:884 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1) - This stop and go pattern here works so nicely and goes with the music very well. I love it!

Lust wrote:

This is some beautiful stuff. Song is great, map is clean, not much to complain about here!

[Upset]

1. Be sure to add some tags and stuff to help people find your map Got some suggestions?
2. Take off countdown, there is a woman talking in the beginning and the countdown distracts from that fixed
3. 00:21:512 (1,2,3,1) - I would move this pattern down a bit, 1 touches the health bar fixed
4. 02:31:681 (1,2) - Curve 1 a bit more so that it forms a perfect blanket not everything has to blanket, i never intended to blanket something here.
5. 02:55:749 (6) - Good flow but there are a lot of hitbursts that litter this slider's body, I would find another place for it if possible or think of another shape to avoid all of that overlap stacked slider with the circle before it so it should work out great now
6. 02:58:122 (4,5,6,7) - Because of how stacks work, the 4 appears to be touching 02:57:783 (3) - 's slider end in play. I suggest you move it over so that you can avoid the unnecessary overlap. Alternatively you can unstack them to avoid this. Moved the stack a bit, should have the right distance now.
7. 03:07:952 (1,2) - This overlap is a bit unsightly, maybe just make 2 a straight slider of sorts, the flow will till be top notch nonetheless Should be fine here, it's easy to follow and understand.
8. 03:12:698 (1,2) - (Nazi) Blanket can be improved a bit Should be fixed
9. 03:43:207 (2,3) - Blanket can be improved as well, use 3's approach circle to help you with this Should be fixed
10. 03:45:240 (1,2) - Same overlap thing as before, make 2 a straight slider if you could Even more simple to follow and understand than the earlier one, so this one should be especially fine
11. 04:17:105 (5,1) - Lower the spacing here, the distance between the two objects causes me to slider break on 5 noticed this happening to other people as well, thanks! should be fixed.
12. 04:43:884 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1) - This stop and go pattern here works so nicely and goes with the music very well. I love it! i love you too

Well thats about it, map is already well done to begin with, and your style is always so clean. Good luck with approval!
Did I mention how beautiful this damn song is

Xellie wrote:

Hi Hi Ayu my Love

[Upset]
00:07:952 (1) - This slightly overlaps 00:08:969 (1) - :c maybe you could flip which side the second one is on to make it not happen i c what you mean but it won't be noticed while playing
00:16:088 (1,2) - the slight overlap on this isn't super appealing overlaps are masterrace
00:17:105 (1) - this looks a little awkward cause the start has a sharp curve and the end doesn't really there's nothing wrong with sliders like this
00:27:952 (1,2) - This seems slightly awkward cause the first one slants up but the second one starts below it not kinda sure what you meant here but i fixed the slider a little bit to form a better blanket-ish thingy
00:50:664 (3) - this feels strange since the pitch of the vocals stays constant but the slider would kinda imply it didn't I agree with you here and I normally wouldn't use it in cases like this, but I'm not sure why I should fix this because it also fits the next slider extremely well
00:54:732 (4) - this slider is really fun \(>w<)/ ♥
01:02:529 (6,1) - you could put a note on the big white tick in between these (not mapping the big white tick when something's there feels weird for me) It'd give wrong focus to the very very background sounds while the entire part is focussed on the vocals, which aren't there at that point.
01:22:190 (2) - I'd like this better if it overlapped closer to the slider head >.< I'd like this better with its current consistent spacing
01:26:935 (1) - same as earlier, it just feels weird having it overlap the other slider but not be at the start/middle of the slider Moved it a bit so that it would flow more natural to next sliders sliderstart
01:55:410 (2) - I like this overlap a little more than the other's I pointed out to change <3 wow
02:15:410 (1) - overlap feels weird you are weird
02:19:139 (1,2,3) - I really love the parts you mapped like this, they feel so connected :3 i'm connected 24/7 to my wi-fi is that what you mean
02:27:952 (2) - I'd move this up like 2 or 3 times so that the slider end matches up with the bottom slider wall, it looks nicer imo Fixed!
02:34:393 (1,2,3) - these are fine as they are but you might be able to do back and forth jumps The stop flow feels extremely good here because of the background being gone
02:35:410 (1,2) - ehhhh, same thing xD (i'm not a big fan of overlaps) Nothing wrong here at all.
02:40:834 (2,3) - ^ Nothing wrong here at all.
02:49:647 (2,3) - ^ My thoughts on overlaps is you gotta either overlap a slider start or commit enough to the middle overlap to reach the far slider wall Nothing wrong here at all.
03:08:630 (2) - bump this up a couple times like the last slider like this (3) would either also fall beneath the slider or it will flow less natural with (2), so I'd rather keep it as is here.
03:11:342 (4,5,6) - :c(im gunna stop posting overlaps cause I bet you get my general opinion on them) l2map grmbl
03:24:901 (4) - bump up like others~ would kill the stack with (1) and the upcoming objects like others
03:39:478 (1,2,3) - same as last time Might play confusing here because of the stack before, also feels really consistent here.
03:45:240 (1) - maybe move this more to the right or something, so that the end is blanketed by 03:45:918 (2) - It already does? wut
03:53:037 (1,2,3) - same thing as before~ same thing as before~
04:15:071 (2) - I think you could blanket this better Yup, I can and I did.
04:40:834 (2) - I'd bump this to the right 2 times fix'd here l0l0l0l
05:34:393 (1) - looks awkward cause of the curve being extreme on the slider end and not the start nothing wrong with this
All I got ayu <3 good luck with the map~

Pjecoo wrote:

I was just curious if somebody was trying to map this song, then I found you.
It depends on you, if you'll take my suggestion seriously or not..

00:16:427 (2) - I think it looks better if you flip it vertically. Looks fine as is (I also think it looks really neat how it is now)
00:30:664 (1) - Put the beginning of the slider on x:196 y:148. I agree that it would create more structure, although the jump flows really well now and fits the pattern perfectly
02:23:207 (5,1) - Isn't this too big jump? Nerf'd it a bit
02:58:122 (4,5,6,7) - Replace it with reverse slider. Looks better imo. I moved 6 and 7, leaving them as hitcircles because they fit with the music and it creates difference
03:39:478 (1,2,3) - Put them consecutively w/ little DS. (Like you did in here, but smaller DS: 04:44:901 (1,2,3,4) - ) I like this, fixed!
03:53:037 (1,2,3) - Same ^ ^

Also check AIMod.

You have beautiful flow. And this flow w/ this beautful song = awesomness.
My question is: Is this for approved or you'll make another difficulty? Approval

Hope that helps.
Good Luck

1. The bitrate of your mp3 is too high and is unrankable. I've dropped it to 192, and you can get the encoded file here.
   Note: timing may require some re-checking, watch out.
2. To help players, you might want to use the marathon tag. Your map is pretty long and there are no breaks, so, it can be considered as a marathon.
3. Instead of the very-bright (pure) white colour, I would us something darkerlike a gray colour or something similar. The current colours seems too bright and does not look really matching with the BG and its brightness may hut players' eyes a little bit.

1. 00:50:664 (3) - the slider ends kinda too late. Please, check it with 25% playback rate, I believe that it supposed to be finished a bit earlier. (1/8, if I'm not mistaken).
2. 00:54:054 - finishing 00:53:376 (3) - here will fit better with the vocals. We can hear a stop here, and then, the word "but" 00:54:393 - here. You can place a circle at 00:54:393, so, the pattern will look like this.
3. 01:11:342 (4,5) - consider adding a little jump between these two. It would slightly improve your flow and represent the song better.
4. 02:05:410 (3,1) - minor - the transition here would flow better and feel more natural if you make the curve softer. Well, here's an example, so, see if you like it or not!
5. 02:12:359 (4,1) - music goes quite here and the jump does not feel very suitable. Try reducing the DS here to emphasize the quitness of this part?
   Note: 02:58:630 (7,1) - same applies for this jump, I think.
6. 02:27:274 (1,2) - the reverse-arrow on (2) is covered by (1), which is not rankable. It is visible, but it is totally unexpected and quite tricky to read. I highly suggest you avoiding this pattern.
7. 03:16:766 (5) - haven't you missed a new combo here? It would match with your patterns and music.
8. 04:12:190 (8,1,1) - the combo-pattern seems seriously broken here. I would remove the first new combo or move it somewhere else to make the combing more consistent.
9. 05:30:156 (2) - minor - on my 4:3 display the circle gets overlapped with the defaul-skin'd scores.Just to prove it. Not a big deal, but looks untidy.

-Bakari- wrote:

Yo, as requested.

[General]

1. The bitrate of your mp3 is too high and is unrankable. I've dropped it to 192, and you can get the encoded file here.
   Note: timing may require some re-checking, watch out. Fixed!
2. To help players, you might want to use the marathon tag. Your map is pretty long and there are no breaks, so, it can be considered as a marathon. Fixed!
3. Instead of the very-bright (pure) white colour, I would us something darkerlike a gray colour or something similar. The current colours seems too bright and does not look really matching with the BG and its brightness may hut players' eyes a little bit. Fixed!

[Upset]

1. 00:50:664 (3) - the slider ends kinda too late. Please, check it with 25% playback rate, I believe that it supposed to be finished a bit earlier. (1/8, if I'm not mistaken). Fixed!
2. 00:54:054 - finishing 00:53:376 (3) - here will fit better with the vocals. We can hear a stop here, and then, the word "but" 00:54:393 - here. You can place a circle at 00:54:393, so, the pattern will look like this. Fixed!
3. 01:11:342 (4,5) - consider adding a little jump between these two. It would slightly improve your flow and represent the song better. Fixed!
4. 02:05:410 (3,1) - minor - the transition here would flow better and feel more natural if you make the curve softer. Well, here's an example, so, see if you like it or not! Fixed! Moved it up instead.
5. 02:12:359 (4,1) - music goes quite here and the jump does not feel very suitable. Try reducing the DS here to emphasize the quitness of this part? Fixed!
   Note: 02:58:630 (7,1) - same applies for this jump, I think. Emphasized the volume increment here, so it kinda fits.
6. 02:27:274 (1,2) - the reverse-arrow on (2) is covered by (1), which is not rankable. It is visible, but it is totally unexpected and quite tricky to read. I highly suggest you avoiding this pattern. Fixed! I kinda liked it, but changed it because I agree.
7. 03:16:766 (5) - haven't you missed a new combo here? It would match with your patterns and music. Nope.
8. 04:12:190 (8,1,1) - the combo-pattern seems seriously broken here. I would remove the first new combo or move it somewhere else to make the combing more consistent. Fixed!
9. 05:30:156 (2) - minor - on my 4:3 display the circle gets overlapped with the defaul-skin'd scores.Just to prove it. Not a big deal, but looks untidy. It's already visible before the slider ends, so it shouldn't be a problem.

Not so much to say. Nicel done and polished map. Have your well-earned Star! ~ ty ♥

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Best of luck! ty ♥

happy30 wrote:

[Upset]
01:04:307 (2) - make prev/next equal
01:27:019 (1) - make this 1/4 longer like 01:24:307 (1,2) -

1. there's nothing wrong with this via ai mod so yea

1. 00:17:189 (1) - this slider looks kinda dumb. you should make it more curvy
2. 01:01:596 (5) - put a curve in this slider to the top so it is more fun thank you
3. 01:54:816 (1,2) - this slider and the other slider are overlapping and it doesn't look too pretty please fix and make it so slider number one is blanketing and not overlapping on slider 2 thank you
4. 02:05:663 (1) - this slider is overlapping with the other thing uh number 1 yea so stack this slider on top of number 1 (it does ita utomatically with distance snap and it looks super cute so yea) and then move the next notes around a bit and it should look beau
5. 02:26:341 (1,3) - just put 3 on the start of 1 instead of the end frowny face it would look super cute
6. 02:34:477 (1,2,3) - you should manually unstack these and bring them to the left so it looks super cute let me get ap icture
7. 02:58:206 (4,5,6,7) - make these lightly spaced
8. 03:08:036 (1,2) - you should make number 2 a straight slider and not a curved one because the way it is right now is that it ends on top of the other slider from before and that ameks people upset like me and I'm really upset right now over this slider so please fix and make me less upset
9. 03:24:307 (3,4) - same thing here frownyface
10. 03:58:884 (1,2) - BLANKET THESE FROWN
11. 04:33:629 (1,4) - oVERLAP FROWN
12. 04:40:240 (1,2) - OVERLAP
13. 05:30:240 (2) - I think this is too far off screen and you should move it in my opinion to a lower place happy face
14. 05:34:477 (1) - THIS SLIDER IS DUMB PLEASE GET RID OF like the ifrst one I mentioned I don't like that one either thank you
15. 05:39:901 - SPINNER PLS

1. Clean mapset !

1. 00:17:189 (1) - I'd suggest you to make a sliderwave here instead cause I'd better see a sliderwave here ! It fits better with the melody imo!
2. 00:31:426 (3) - Be careful ! That note is out of the screen ! Consider to move it to the right ? o.o It's be hard for 4/3 players !
3. 00:34:985 (1) - I don't think that that note is overmapped but I'd suggest you to thibk about it ! It's always better to keep a little gap in timeline !
4. 00:43:291 (1) - I'd suggest you to rotate that slider like that :
   
   Amazing slider rotated

   
5. 00:46:341 (1) - Inconsistent New Combo here !
6. 00:54:816 (5) - You could imagine a original slider ! Maybe you can make it more special I guess :p Use your creativity !
7. 00:58:206 (3) - I don't think is the rhythm is well respected here ! I'd add a note and then , I would've shortened the slider :
   
   Click!

   
8. 01:46:680 (2) - Really nazi but I would have moved that note here for foloow the cursor's movement : x:144 y:40.
9. 01:51:426 - There's an importat vocal here ! It'd be really weird if you don't add a circle here ! But it's up to you , I know that you want to keep a little gap in the timeline for a break !
10. 02:34:477 (1,2,3) - I'd space these notes a little bit ! Like this one for example : 03:39:562 (1,2,3) -
11. 02:38:206 (1) - I'd add a clap in the head of the slider ! I'm probably sure that if fits better with the song !
12. 04:09:392 (1) - I guess that that note is kinda high placed! Consider to move it down ?
13. 04:23:291 - Same thing as 01:51:426 -
14. 05:34:477 (1) - I don't know if that slider is well made but I'd change it !
15. That's all ? Dude , I don't know if it's WIP but you MUST (imo) map till 05:49:053 - , I don't see why you prefered to stop the mapset here !

gokugohan12468 wrote:

NO SB?

Maeglwn wrote:

iiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiight

[General]

1. there's nothing wrong with this via ai mod so yea

[Upset]

1. 00:17:189 (1) - this slider looks kinda dumb. you should make it more curvy nope
2. 01:01:596 (5) - put a curve in this slider to the top so it is more fun thank you k
3. 01:54:816 (1,2) - this slider and the other slider are overlapping and it doesn't look too pretty please fix and make it so slider number one is blanketing and not overlapping on slider 2 thank you nah, it's fine
4. 02:05:663 (1) - this slider is overlapping with the other thing uh number 1 yea so stack this slider on top of number 1 (it does ita utomatically with distance snap and it looks super cute so yea) and then move the next notes around a bit and it should look beau moved it a bit up so the slider would follow up more and it won't be visible ingame anyway
5. 02:26:341 (1,3) - just put 3 on the start of 1 instead of the end frowny face it would look super cute no that doesn't look cute it looks inconsistent
6. 02:34:477 (1,2,3) - you should manually unstack these and bring them to the left so it looks super cute let me get ap icture oops i thought i already did this, fixed
7. 02:58:206 (4,5,6,7) - make these lightly spaced no
8. 03:08:036 (1,2) - you should make number 2 a straight slider and not a curved one because the way it is right now is that it ends on top of the other slider from before and that ameks people upset like me and I'm really upset right now over this slider so please fix and make me less upset i shouldn't
9. 03:24:307 (3,4) - same thing here frownyface
10. 03:58:884 (1,2) - BLANKET THESE FROWN
11. 04:33:629 (1,4) - oVERLAP FROWN
12. 04:40:240 (1,2) - OVERLAP
13. 05:30:240 (2) - I think this is too far off screen and you should move it in my opinion to a lower place happy face
14. 05:34:477 (1) - THIS SLIDER IS DUMB PLEASE GET RID OF like the ifrst one I mentioned I don't like that one either thank you
15. 05:39:901 - SPINNER PLS

PUT A DMAN SPINNER AT THE END THANK YOU NEVER.

I LOVE YOU MAP
AND YOU YOU'RE CUTE u2 ♥

OKAY BYE

Secretpipe wrote:

Hello Ayu!

Here's my mod as promised !

[General]

1. Clean mapset !

[Upset]

1. 00:17:189 (1) - I'd suggest you to make a sliderwave here instead cause I'd better see a sliderwave here ! It fits better with the melody imo! I feel like it's way more fitting to the melody this way, since it follows up extremely well with the bump-ish sound at slider start
2. 00:31:426 (3) - Be careful ! That note is out of the screen ! Consider to move it to the right ? o.o It's be hard for 4/3 players ! It's fine, honestly
3. 00:34:985 (1) - I don't think that that note is overmapped but I'd suggest you to thibk about it ! It's always better to keep a little gap in timeline ! Beat is way too dominant to ignore here.
4. 00:43:291 (1) - I'd suggest you to rotate that slider like that : Hmm, I don't see why I'd change it though, currently it fits really well with the design of the map and it wouldn't really change anything anyway.
   
   Amazing slider rotated

   
5. 00:46:341 (1) - Inconsistent New Combo here ! woops, fixed
6. 00:54:816 (5) - You could imagine a original slider ! Maybe you can make it more special I guess :p Use your creativity ! Whaaaat? Sliders like these are EPIC!
7. 00:58:206 (3) - I don't think is the rhythm is well respected here ! I'd add a note and then , I would've shortened the slider : Fixed the rhythm issue
   
   Click!

   
8. 01:46:680 (2) - Really nazi but I would have moved that note here for foloow the cursor's movement : x:144 y:40. Fixed
9. 01:51:426 - There's an importat vocal here ! It'd be really weird if you don't add a circle here ! But it's up to you , I know that you want to keep a little gap in the timeline for a break ! Although the vocal sounds like it's important, it lost its complete dominance because of the background being gone. I left it empty since the gap also emphasizes the beginning of the kiai.
10. 02:34:477 (1,2,3) - I'd space these notes a little bit ! Like this one for example : 03:39:562 (1,2,3) -
11. 02:38:206 (1) - I'd add a clap in the head of the slider ! I'm probably sure that if fits better with the song ! Not sure what made you think that but i'm honestly disagreeing a lot
12. 04:09:392 (1) - I guess that that note is kinda high placed! Consider to move it down ? It's high but it also makes the player move around the field that they actually get, and it also follows the nice structure of the pattern.
13. 04:23:291 - Same thing as 01:51:426 -
14. 05:34:477 (1) - I don't know if that slider is well made but I'd change it !
15. That's all ? Dude , I don't know if it's WIP but you MUST (imo) map till 05:49:053 - , I don't see why you prefered to stop the mapset here ! The map is in WIP because it's a Marathon map without the difficulty name Marathon. But, this is honestly the best place to stop. Song is already 'slowing' down and the part afterward creates probably the best possible outro after playing.

[b]Amazing mapset like I mentionned in the previous post ! ♥ty
Already shooted some stars !I mean 17 m8 B-)

Good luck~~