La Roux - I'm Not Your Toy · forum

Symbolic

Joined June 2008

Topic Starter

Symbolic 2009-10-25T16:45:05+00:00

This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on zondag 15 november 2009 at 15:38:40

Artist: La Roux
Title: I'm Not Your Toy
BPM: 124,3
Filesize: 6800kb
Play Time: 03:17
Difficulties Available:

Hard (4,64 stars, 296 notes)
Jar's False Love and Affection (4,02 stars, 184 notes)
Normal (2,88 stars, 142 notes)

Download: La Roux - I'm Not Your Toy
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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NEW SYMBOLIC MAP! :]
thanks for yor diff jar

Last edited by Symbolic 2009-11-15T15:18:42+00:00, edited 16 times in total.

Larto

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Larto 2009-11-01T13:29:19+00:00

fr

Download: La Roux - I'm Not Your Toy (Symbolic).osb

Lokamp

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Joined January 2009

Lokamp 2009-11-03T16:51:40+00:00

Easy
00:28:039 (1) - start and end this with soft finish
00:51:080 (5) - clap here
00:53:073 (2) - ^
00:59:052 (5) - ^
01:01:046 (2) - ^
02:21:010 (3) - new combo
02:45:072 - new (soft whistle?) beat on the center
02:46:020 - new (normal finish?) beat on the center

Hard
00:40:070 (3) - new combo
01:05:080 (spinner) new spinner here, ending on 01:07:24. If you add it, remember to fill the gap between it and the previous slider!
02:11:045 (spinner) - new spinner here, ending on 02:12:90
02:45:048 - new beat
02:45:072 - new (clap?) beat
02:45:096 - ^
02:46:020 - new (finish?) beat

This map has lots of catchy and intuitive sliders... maybe this can be an example for other maps: well done! Star'd.

Symbolic

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Topic Starter

Symbolic 2009-11-03T17:13:53+00:00

Lokamp wrote:
Easy
00:28:039 (1) - start and end this with soft finish no
00:51:080 (5) - clap here done
00:53:073 (2) - ^ done
00:59:052 (5) - ^ done
01:01:046 (2) - ^ done
02:21:010 (3) - new combo no
02:45:072 - new (soft whistle?) beat on the center no.
02:46:020 - new (normal finish?) beat on the center no

Hard
00:40:070 (3) - new combo no
01:05:080 (spinner) new spinner here, ending on 01:07:24. If you add it, remember to fill the gap between it and the previous slider! no
02:11:045 (spinner) - new spinner here, ending on 02:12:90 no.
02:45:048 - new beat no.
02:45:072 - new (clap?) beat no.
02:45:096 - ^ no.
02:46:020 - new (finish?) beat no.

This map has lots of catchy and intuitive sliders... maybe this can be an example for other maps: well done! Star'd. thanks

mrtn

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mrtn 2009-11-03T17:29:12+00:00

set preview time on both difficulties

[normal]
00:21:39 - note here with finish
00:29:12 - ^
00:32:09 (1) - finishes here
02:13:04 (1,2) - ^

[hard]
00:19:046 (5) - whistles on this
00:27:018 (5) - ^
00:39:073 (1,2) - finishes

Symbolic

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Topic Starter

Symbolic 2009-11-03T17:39:15+00:00

mrtn wrote:
set preview time on both difficulties

[normal]
00:21:39 - note here with finish
00:29:12 - ^
00:32:09 (1) - finishes here
02:13:04 (1,2) - ^

[hard]
00:19:046 (5) - whistles on this
00:27:018 (5) - ^
00:39:073 (1,2) - finishes

fixed all

mrtn

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mrtn 2009-11-03T17:42:56+00:00

bubbled

Lesjuh

Elite Mapper

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Joined October 2008

Lesjuh 2009-11-03T17:48:29+00:00

~~Wait what? There's no storyboard in [Hard] but there is in [Normal]. Is that supposed to? ;[~~

nvm, redownloaded and everything works fine now ;3

Jarby

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Jarby 2009-11-04T04:29:24+00:00

This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.

Ephemeral

Inland Empire

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Joined April 2009

Ephemeral 2009-11-04T04:34:26+00:00

Half-assed trigger strobes, absolutely revolting kiai strobing (this map does not fit kiai strobing one bit) and incredibly obtrusive chorus lyric fragments appearing without warning halfway through a section is by no means a good or even an acceptable storyboard.

If you do decide to keep the kiai strobe, half the scaling on it. The beat is nowhere near prominent enough for such a profound strobe, and the random trigger loop side strobes on finish hitsounds are just dumb.

Your map may be structurally sound, but that doesn't stop it from eating a hefty can of dicks in the aesthetics department. Can't star this because of the crippling storyboarding issues. Fix those and you'll have my star.

I mod this harshly because I want you to succeed. <3

alvisto

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Joined April 2009

alvisto 2009-11-04T06:46:50+00:00

Only 1 suggestion

HARD
02:29:070 - Add a note here.

Star.

Jarby

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Jarby 2009-11-04T09:45:29+00:00

This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.

Download: La Roux - I'm Not Your Toy (Symbolic) [Jar's False Love and Affection].osu

Symbolic

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Symbolic 2009-11-04T11:25:38+00:00

JarJarJacob wrote:
I don't like the kiai usage one bit, but there isn't anything unrankable about it. Dogboy didn't like your strobes. Rena doesn't like letterboxing at breaks.

Normal:

Remove those small breaks and map it. fixed
02:38:048 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - Remove, works better ending earlier.fixed.

Hard:

00:34:018 (2) - Offscreen.
01:56:024 (1,2,3,4,5) - Flip vertically, the overlap is confusing and simply irritating otherwise.fixed
02:30:076 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5) - Remove, works better ending earlier. still working on this.

removed kiai times, sb strobes (on ephemerals suggestion).

alvisto wrote:
Only 1 suggestion

HARD
02:29:070 - Add a note here. added

Star.

moved back to wip for a short while.

Shinde

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Shinde 2009-11-04T11:44:24+00:00

This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.

Symbolic

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Symbolic 2009-11-04T11:51:03+00:00

Shinde wrote:
Just a general mod, everything played well so I don't think it needs too much looking into.

Hard
00:34:018 (2) - Lil offscreen. Doesn't annoy while playing.
20 second break is a little long, some people/BATs might complain since the general guideline is 15 seconds max. Do as you see fit. Same for Normal. I know, but it fits there I think
01:54:031 (1) - The BG pulse looks weird with this spinner during play imo. it does?
02:03:000 (1) - Same on Normal here sort of. ^

Jar's
Hitsounds seemed a little loud to me, turn it down, maybe work on em a little as you see fit. Bit too many claps and finishes for me, but I dunno.
Maybe a little too much Kiai, least on the version I got like 5 minutes ago.

i'll let jar look at his, but i think hitsounds overpower the music at some points indeed

Good use of blanket sliders in Normal, and Orbitals in Jar's. thanks