This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2014年1月13日 at 10:26:15

Artist: Kawada Mami
Title: Serment (TV Size)
Source: Shakugan no Shana III (Final)
Tags: opening LunaticP
BPM: 212
Filesize: 10731kb
Play Time: 01:29
Difficulties Available:

1. Easy (2.39 stars, 90 notes)
2. Hard (4.99 stars, 235 notes)
3. Insane (4.9 stars, 340 notes)
4. Lunasa's Taiko Oni (4.89 stars, 508 notes)
5. Normal (4.32 stars, 143 notes)
6. Taiko Muzukashii (4.72 stars, 352 notes)

Download: Kawada Mami - Serment (TV Size)
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Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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My 1st beatmap
Opening 2 from Shakugan no Shana III
Easy - Finished
Normal - Finished
Hard - Finished
Taiko Muzukashii - 100%
Taiko Oni - 100% by LunaticP
Insane - Finished
Status: Ranked
Redownload after 13/1 (Changed the BG file)

Hong Kong mapper~ Support~

[General]
Wow, the video quality is really bad
Use this one if you like http://puu.sh/1n3TO

[Insane]
00:06:369 - feels empty, add something here
00:06:511 (5,6) - awkward anti-jump
00:21:086 - add something
00:22:784 - ^
00:24:907 - ^
00:29:435 - ^
00:30:143 - ^
00:31:700 - ^
00:34:671 - ^
00:43:869 - ^
00:56:322 - ^
00:56:747 - ^
01:15:426 (3,4,5,6) - this is awkward as well

[Hard]
ehh, this doesn't look like the same mapper at all
Too many overlaps and awkward patterns, I suggest remapping this

[Normal]
AR+1
I'm concerned about the Slider Velocity here
Same here, not the same mapper
00:08:209 (2,3) - this is really hard to read
00:22:077 (3) - too many repeats, really confusing
00:35:096 (1) - ^
00:43:869 (1) - hidden
00:46:700 (6) - remove 1 repeat
00:52:360 (6,1,2) - un-equal spacing
00:54:907 (4,5,1) - ^
00:56:888 (2) - 1 grid right & down
01:01:983 (6,7,8) - not very friendly
01:18:964 (4,5,6,7,8) - evil ending, don't stack and don't put so many repeats

[Easy]
00:22:360 (3) - this should be at 00:22:077 - and fix spacing afterwards
00:36:228 (6,1) - please avoid this spacing, it's really frustrating D:
00:46:700 (7) - remove a repeat
01:19:530 (1) - end this at 01:20:945 -


This really need a lot of work. Well, don't give up!
Good luck~

Saten wrote:

[General]
Wow, the video quality is really bad
Use this one if you like http://puu.sh/1n3TO

[Insane]
00:06:369 - feels empty, add something here
00:06:511 (5,6) - awkward anti-jump
00:21:086 - add something
00:22:784 - ^
00:24:907 - ^
00:29:435 - ^
00:30:143 - ^
00:31:700 - ^
00:34:671 - ^
00:43:869 - ^
00:56:322 - ^
00:56:747 - ^
01:15:426 (3,4,5,6) - this is awkward as well

[Hard]
ehh, this doesn't look like the same mapper at all
Too many overlaps and awkward patterns, I suggest remapping this

[Normal]
AR+1
I'm concerned about the Slider Velocity here
Same here, not the same mapper
00:08:209 (2,3) - this is really hard to read
00:22:077 (3) - too many repeats, really confusing
00:35:096 (1) - ^
00:43:869 (1) - hidden
00:46:700 (6) - remove 1 repeat
00:52:360 (6,1,2) - un-equal spacing
00:54:907 (4,5,1) - ^
00:56:888 (2) - 1 grid right & down
01:01:983 (6,7,8) - not very friendly
01:18:964 (4,5,6,7,8) - evil ending, don't stack and don't put so many repeats

[Easy]
00:22:360 (3) - this should be at 00:22:077 - and fix spacing afterwards
00:36:228 (6,1) - please avoid this spacing, it's really frustrating D:
00:46:700 (7) - remove a repeat
01:19:530 (1) - end this at 01:20:945 -


This really need a lot of work. Well, don't give up!
Good luck~

Thank you very much for your advice!

Taiko mod~
All are suggestions unless in red.

[General]
Disable countdown and letterboxing during breaks.

[Taiko Muzukashii]
01:16:417 - replace with spinner
01:19:954 - replace with spinner
Maybe reduce scroll speed, since it's a bit fast for muzu players?
You can put an inherited timing point at 00:00:568 with silder velocity 0.8x, and change the other two points to 0.8 as well.

[Lunasa's Taiko Oni]
00:27:313 - k
It's a bit overmapped, try reducing some of the 5-streams to 3-streams.

Needs some work~

update

http://puu.sh/1nqkt

ok just these...good luck.

mintong89 wrote:

Taiko Mod ♪
卧槽都懂华文干嘛不用华文!!?? 都欺负我的英文 ;w;

d = don
k = kat
D = BIG DON
K = BIG KAT
re = remove

[Taiko Muzukashii]

00:11:888 - -> 00:18:681 - are you sure you don't want put anything? it seem weird.
00:28:586 - i hear drum sound at here. please put a d.
01:02:549 - i think k is fits better and 01:02:832 - D.

[Taiko Oni]

00:11:888 - -> 00:19:671 - 和Muzu的建议一样 0.0 真不放吗？ ╮(╯_╰)╭

都没问题 0.0....

ok just these...good luck.

Thx a lot

Easy
Some sliders could use some tweaking to look better, and just moving around to look perfect on the grid. Otherwise, this is pretty good

Normal
00:07:926 (1) - My OCD wants this a little to the right. Looks better that way


Hard

Insane

cirno- wrote:

Easy
Some sliders could use some tweaking to look better, and just moving around to look perfect on the grid. Otherwise, this is pretty good

Normal
00:07:926 (1) - My OCD wants this a little to the right. Looks better that way


Hard

SPOILER

circle size 4
00:14:294 (4,6) -
00:41:039 (6) - too short imo
00:58:586 (4) - ^
01:18:539 (3,4,5) - ^
00:41:039 (6,1,2,3,4) - ^

Insane

SPOILER

00:40:190 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - Just to comment, This is the hardest part. Everything else I could pass.
01:01:417 (4) - Delete this perhaps? Sounds a little better without it.
01:04:530 (8,9,10) - Kind of awkward to read

Thx

[General]
- Can you improve the video quality? It's quite bad.
- Disable countdown


[Insane]
00:05:237 (1) - Shorten to 00:05:662 and keep the clap of its end. There is a clap on 00:05:662 in the music.
00:05:945 - Add a note if you fixed previous note.
00:25:756 (5) - Stack correctly under the tail of previous slider
00:30:143 (7) - Uhm... this spacing feels quite close to pervious note.
00:44:435 (5) - This anti jump feels bad in this part imo. Because the song is going to the climax.
00:57:737 (1,2,3,4) - These streams really doesn't fit music.
01:01:417 (4) - Missing clap?
01:11:039 (1,2,3) - Oh well, I'd like to put jumps
01:15:426 (3) - Add clap to reverse arrow
01:17:407 (4,5) - Switch their rhythm http://puu.sh/1sFwP
01:20:379 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Are they really necessary?


[Hard]
OD 6
00:14:435 (4,5) - Spacing trap? Please don't do this. Their shape square doesn't let players know spacing change.
00:23:492 - Add a note
00:30:992 (8,9,10) - Adjust spacings
00:41:888 (1) - Move to somewhere. It's too close to previous slider.
00:44:718 (7) - It touches HP bar.
00:46:134 (4) - Spacing
00:48:964 (8,9,1) - Look at these in test mode. It looks ugly due to stacks.
00:49:247 (1) - Add finish to head
00:51:086 (3) - Spacing
00:54:341 (1) - Remove NC
00:54:624 (2) - NC
01:02:124 (8) - I'd like to unstack this
01:07:077 (12) - Add finish to tail
01:02:549 (3) - I don't know what you are following. The lyrics 'ru~' starts from 01:02:832
01:14:860 (10,11,1) - Triple circles in BPM 212 is may be Insane

This diff really needs to improve rhythm and spacing.


[Normal]
00:09:624 (1) - Put finish instead of clap
00:45:851 (4) - It touches HP bar.
00:47:690 (1) - Start from 00:47:832 / End at 00:49:247 and add finish
00:49:247 (1) - Delete this if you fixed previous spinner
00:52:360 (6) - NC
00:52:926 (1) - Remove NC
01:07:360 (1) - Add finish to head
01:13:303 (4) - Spacing
01:19:247 (6) - Maybe stack under 5
01:20:945 - I recommend map to the end of the song


[Easy]
00:09:624 (1) - Put finish instead of clap
00:49:813 (2) - Fix direction like this. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/500100
00:53:775 (3) - Extend to 00:54:341
01:19:530 (1) - Add finish


I think everything is important I modded.
Alright, I'd advise your first map.
Follow the song, then you won't fail at least on the rhythm.
Choose what you wanna follow, vocal or instrument.
That's all that I can say for now.

ykcarrot wrote:

[General]
- Can you improve the video quality? It's quite bad.
- Disable countdown


[Insane]
00:05:237 (1) - Shorten to 00:05:662 and keep the clap of its end. There is a clap on 00:05:662 in the music.
00:05:945 - Add a note if you fixed previous note.
00:25:756 (5) - Stack correctly under the tail of previous slider
00:30:143 (7) - Uhm... this spacing feels quite close to pervious note.
00:44:435 (5) - This anti jump feels bad in this part imo. Because the song is going to the climax.
00:57:737 (1,2,3,4) - These streams really doesn't fit music.
01:01:417 (4) - Missing clap?
01:11:039 (1,2,3) - Oh well, I'd like to put jumps
01:15:426 (3) - Add clap to reverse arrow
01:17:407 (4,5) - Switch their rhythm http://puu.sh/1sFwP
01:20:379 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Are they really necessary?


[Hard]
OD 6
00:14:435 (4,5) - Spacing trap? Please don't do this. Their shape square doesn't let players know spacing change.
00:23:492 - Add a note
00:30:992 (8,9,10) - Adjust spacings
00:41:888 (1) - Move to somewhere. It's too close to previous slider.
00:44:718 (7) - It touches HP bar.
00:46:134 (4) - Spacing
00:48:964 (8,9,1) - Look at these in test mode. It looks ugly due to stacks.
00:49:247 (1) - Add finish to head
00:51:086 (3) - Spacing
00:54:341 (1) - Remove NC
00:54:624 (2) - NC
01:02:124 (8) - I'd like to unstack this
01:07:077 (12) - Add finish to tail
01:02:549 (3) - I don't know what you are following. The lyrics 'ru~' starts from 01:02:832
01:14:860 (10,11,1) - Triple circles in BPM 212 is may be Insane

This diff really needs to improve rhythm and spacing.


[Normal]
00:09:624 (1) - Put finish instead of clap
00:45:851 (4) - It touches HP bar.
00:47:690 (1) - Start from 00:47:832 / End at 00:49:247 and add finish
00:49:247 (1) - Delete this if you fixed previous spinner
00:52:360 (6) - NC
00:52:926 (1) - Remove NC
01:07:360 (1) - Add finish to head
01:13:303 (4) - Spacing
01:19:247 (6) - Maybe stack under 5
01:20:945 - I recommend map to the end of the song


[Easy]
00:09:624 (1) - Put finish instead of clap
00:49:813 (2) - Fix direction like this. http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/500100
00:53:775 (3) - Extend to 00:54:341
01:19:530 (1) - Add finish


I think everything is important I modded.
Alright, I'd advise your first map.
Follow the song, then you won't fail at least on the rhythm.
Choose what you wanna follow, vocal or instrument.
That's all that I can say for now.

Thank you very much for the mod and advise

General, Timing and Design
Combo colours 1 and 4 are pretty close...

Easy
HP Drain lower by one level. And lower slider velocity? It's kinda fast for noobs... And try making the sliders prettier while you're at it.
00:05:096 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This part is kinda boring ^^" Or at least weird? Try making a steady and slow pattern here...
01:00:567 (3) - Distance Snap

Normal
00:36:228 (1) - Make the slider prettier :3
00:59:011 (1) - Avoid double return sliders in Easy. Especially super short ones.
01:12:737 (2,3) - Spread out. Cuz all your previous circles on the same spot were 1/2 a beat apart. People would assume and not know there is a one beat diff.
01:22:360 (5,6,7) - ^ but acceptable

Hard
00:37:360 (3) - Take away one repeat
00:47:124 (4) - Don't hide it...

That's all ^^ not modding insane

You have been modded out by Yurun Neram.

yurunneram wrote:

General, Timing and Design
Combo colours 1 and 4 are pretty close...

Easy
HP Drain lower by one level. And lower slider velocity? It's kinda fast for noobs... And try making the sliders prettier while you're at it.
00:05:096 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - This part is kinda boring ^^" Or at least weird? Try making a steady and slow pattern here...
01:00:567 (3) - Distance Snap

Normal
00:36:228 (1) - Make the slider prettier :3
00:59:011 (1) - Avoid double return sliders in Easy. Especially super short ones.
01:12:737 (2,3) - Spread out. Cuz all your previous circles on the same spot were 1/2 a beat apart. People would assume and not know there is a one beat diff.
01:22:360 (5,6,7) - ^ but acceptable

Hard
00:37:360 (3) - Take away one repeat
00:47:124 (4) - Don't hide it...

That's all ^^ not modding insane

You have been modded out by Yurun Neram.

Thanks

Req. Taiko mod~>.0

All of them are suggestions~

[Taiko Muzukashii]
00:08:917 - add d
00:19:105 - d
00:24:624 - move to 00:24:483

[Lunasa's Taiko Oni]
no problem.

nice map~good luck >.0~

NewibornCLivee wrote:

Req. Taiko mod~>.0

All of them are suggestions~

[Taiko Muzukashii]
00:08:917 - add d
00:19:105 - d
00:24:624 - move to 00:24:483

[Lunasa's Taiko Oni]
no problem.

nice map~good luck >.0~

Thanks

hi :3

[General]
*taiko muzukashii bg.png & taiko oni bg.png
their size are unrankable,you should use 1024x768

*your combo colors are inconsistent ,since there're not many differences , you may change them

*your audio lead-ins are inconsistent ,this is unrankable , change them

*kiai in insane diff is different from the other diff

*about the title , i think you should follow this :http://osu.ppy.sh/b/135588

[Easy]
00:00:568 (1) - it's confusing for beginners , consider changing into a spinner or what?

00:22:926 (4,5,1) - i suggest your making the DS bigger , since pattern like this is unreadable for beginners

00:39:907 (4,5,6) - too hard ...

01:01:417 (5) - begin at 01:01:700 - will be better

by the way ,sliders in this diff are not so good-looking , try make them by the new editor

[Normal]
00:35:945 (2) - hey,this one is too close to the previous one

00:51:794 - had better not make this empty , or it will be strange for players

01:10:756 - ^ better to add a reverse

01:19:105 (5) - too hard , delete this note

*the more empty the map is ,the harder players catch the rhythm ,especially with DT+HR+HD in E/N

[Taiko Muzukashii]
00:00:568 (1,2) - WTF!? there mustn't be two Ds so close ! delete ②

[Hard]
...just saying this diff is too hard for a hard diff

[Insane]
*use CS4 plz since this diff is considered possible to be played with HR

00:52:643 - why make this empty :/

don't be afraid to use bigger DS in I diffs :/

頑張って＼(*⌒0⌒)♪
good luck with rank　(´∀｀)
哭哭哦 写完才发现是香港 不改了 英文不好真是不好意思 加油加油

raririn wrote:

hi :3

[General]
*taiko muzukashii bg.png & taiko oni bg.png
their size are unrankable,you should use 1024x768

*your combo colors are inconsistent ,since there're not many differences , you may change them

*your audio lead-ins are inconsistent ,this is unrankable , change them

*kiai in insane diff is different from the other diff

*about the title , i think you should follow this :http://osu.ppy.sh/b/135588

[Easy]
00:00:568 (1) - it's confusing for beginners , consider changing into a spinner or what?

00:22:926 (4,5,1) - i suggest your making the DS bigger , since pattern like this is unreadable for beginners

00:39:907 (4,5,6) - too hard ...

01:01:417 (5) - begin at 01:01:700 - will be better

by the way ,sliders in this diff are not so good-looking , try make them by the new editor

[Normal]
00:35:945 (2) - hey,this one is too close to the previous one

00:51:794 - had better not make this empty , or it will be strange for players

01:10:756 - ^ better to add a reverse

01:19:105 (5) - too hard , delete this note

*the more empty the map is ,the harder players catch the rhythm ,especially with DT+HR+HD in E/N

[Taiko Muzukashii]
00:00:568 (1,2) - WTF!? there mustn't be two Ds so close ! delete ②

[Hard]
...just saying this diff is too hard for a hard diff

[Insane]
*use CS4 plz since this diff is considered possible to be played with HR

00:52:643 - why make this empty :/

don't be afraid to use bigger DS in I diffs :/

頑張って＼(*⌒0⌒)♪
good luck with rank　(´∀｀)
哭哭哦 写完才发现是香港 不改了 英文不好真是不好意思 加油加油

Thanks a lot

[General]

Audio Lead-in: Lunasa's Taiko Oni has 2007 and Taiko Muzukashii 1985. I suggest to use 1996 like other diffs instead.

BG: taiko oni bg.png is 1020x735 and taiko muzukashii bg.png is 1018x732, I think you should fix it.

Slider Velocity: I think you use a SV too high for the BPM you have. I really suggest you to reduce it (yes, this will mean re-make almost all sliders).

Suggestion:
Easy:   0,80
Normal: 1,00
Hard:   1,20
Insane: 1,40 (optional)

[Easy]
00:02:832 (1) - End this slider on red tick (00:02:973 - )
00:03:681 (2) - Move to 00:03:398 - and add a repeat
00:43:020 (2) - Move to 00:42:879 -
00:47:690 (1) - Since it's easy I suggest to end this spinner at 00:49:247 - with finish+whistle and to delete 00:49:247 (1) - (new combo on 00:49:813 (2) - )
00:52:360 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6) - This part has randomly placed sliders I suggest to place them better, like you did here 00:41:888 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) -

[Normal]
00:02:832 (1) - As easy
00:03:681 (2) - ^
01:27:030 (5) - well, unexpected. I suggest to remove.

[Hard]
HP Drain Rate: 4
Approach Rate: 6
Circle Size: 3 (optional)
00:58:586 (4) - End of this slider is unsnapped. End it at 00:58:728 -

[Insane]
Maybe it's just me, but this diff has no sense in most parts

Kuroneko-sHerald wrote:

[General]

Audio Lead-in: Lunasa's Taiko Oni has 2007 and Taiko Muzukashii 1985. I suggest to use 1996 like other diffs instead.

BG: taiko oni bg.png is 1020x735 and taiko muzukashii bg.png is 1018x732, I think you should fix it.

Slider Velocity: I think you use a SV too high for the BPM you have. I really suggest you to reduce it (yes, this will mean re-make almost all sliders).

Suggestion:
Easy:   0,80
Normal: 1,00
Hard:   1,20
Insane: 1,40 (optional)

[Easy]
00:02:832 (1) - End this slider on red tick (00:02:973 - )
00:03:681 (2) - Move to 00:03:398 - and add a repeat
00:43:020 (2) - Move to 00:42:879 -
00:47:690 (1) - Since it's easy I suggest to end this spinner at 00:49:247 - with finish+whistle and to delete 00:49:247 (1) - (new combo on 00:49:813 (2) - )
00:52:360 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6) - This part has randomly placed sliders I suggest to place them better, like you did here 00:41:888 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) -

[Normal]
00:02:832 (1) - As easy
00:03:681 (2) - ^
01:27:030 (5) - well, unexpected. I suggest to remove.

[Hard]
HP Drain Rate: 4
Approach Rate: 6
Circle Size: 3 (optional)
00:58:586 (4) - End of this slider is unsnapped. End it at 00:58:728 -

[Insane]
Maybe it's just me, but this diff has no sense in most parts

Thanks