Moe star .w.
[GRAVITY]
tbh i expect custom name here xd, but up to you :3
00:07:457 (7457|5,7653|4) - Switch column between these LNs? the PR get noticeably higher here.
00:09:908 - 00:10:104 - 00:10:300 - 00:10:496 - Starting from here, i hear that the snare getting noticeably louder and more intense compared to the former part, i suggest you can make these double to become complete bracket stream to express that noticeably louder sound? since this is harder diff, i think it's fine for you to do that.
00:10:986 (10986|6) - I feel like these LN is 1/2 long beat here.. but since this is a sudden stop of flute sound, i think you can make this ordinary notes to emphasize the sudden stop sound here.. or if you still want LN, 1/2 is good here. maybe you can change in other diff if you apply this.
00:11:182 - 00:12:359 - while here, i think you can add another note for each of timeline for snare like 00:12:751 -
00:23:045 - I really feel like this is missing ... quite strong melody here..
00:23:535 (23535|3,23633|1) - i really do feel that switching this column can make the symmetry much much better ;_;
00:24:614 (24614|5,24712|6) - Switch column these notes ? the note at 00:24:712 - would sync better with 00:24:712 (24712|1) -
00:26:280 (26280|4,26280|6,26476|2) - I think you can make these LNs at different column with the LN before to emphasize the transition of section and different sound which is flute that appearing here.. maybe like
00:28:437 (28437|0,28535|1,28633|2,28829|1) - make these col 2-1-2-3? i feel it will more fluit because the direction went to the left, and then goes to the right there.
00:29:516 - i feel sad this melody got left out xD
00:29:810 (29810|1,30006|0,30104|1,30202|0,30398|1) - Try switch column of them? it will become 1-2-1-2-1 , i really do feel it will comes out more fluid pattern there.
00:31:378 (31378|2) - Shouldn't this LN started at 00:31:182 - ? D: all the diff mapped like this too.. whyyy x.x
00:35:300 - Hmm, tbh this is just suggestion, but i feel the chain of left hand pattern goes around too long imo, i think you can sort of balance this by trying this pattern?
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7513854 , since many of your pattern have kind of 7-5-3 / 1-3-5 / kind of that thing, i think this can give some consistency of it too
00:36:378 (36378|3,36476|2) - Try switch column here? the pattern will be feels more symmetrical here.
00:38:045 - 00:38:437 - 00:38:829 - although you wanna focus on the LN, but this feels rather underwhelm imo xd.. maybe try to add another note for each of these timeline? in col 7, col 4 and col 3 will be great here.
00:44:712 - hmm, since the 1/4 synth here is louder, i think you can try mapping the 1/4 LN like this:
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7514006 . it won't broke the overall patterning and i really thought this will give a better accenting and adding more gimmick!
00:49:614 - Well, since the instrument got stronger and leading to higher emphasis, i think the pattern can be made to show that too like
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/751404900:50:202 - I thought this can be made more tricky since while the current pattern is comfortable to play, i feel the pattern can be added other gimmick with some tricky releasing LN timing to makes the diff have something that keeps player on guard after the bracket stream (the current LN is easier than bracket stream imo), and the one at 00:51:476 - i felt that there is almost no sound that the 1/2 LN followed before , rather already changing into other strong synth melody, so i thought of
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7514128 00:52:359 (52359|5,52555|6) - Maybe try to switch column here? since at 00:52:555 - i thought you want to make col 7 and col 1 empty, so this will support that.
01:01:182 (61182|6) - same as my previous suggestion, i thought maybe you can shorten this to 1/2 or make this normal note to accent the sudden stop flute sound.
01:02:555 (62555|2) - maybe shorten the LN to 01:02:751 - ? because u usually don't do the LN trick when you want to move to the next section like the one you did at 00:12:555 - .
01:20:594 (80594|3,80790|6,81378|3) - there's many space note here xd, i think you can move to col 7, col 6 and col 2? it will make mirror notes between 01:20:594 - and 01:21:182 - which aesthetically good imo.
01:24:712 (84712|2,85006|1) - well.. tbh these kinda aawkward to hit imo x.x .. maybe you can try other symmmetrical approach like
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7514225 ? it won't be harder and more fluid to hit imo.
01:40:071 - 01:40:137 - not mapping 1/6 like you did at 01:35:169 - ,etc ?
01:44:320 - missing the LN that you use at 01:44:712 (104712|0) - ? i think you can arrange it like
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/751425301:49:418 (109418|0) - change this to LN for same reason as above? In exhaust you also use one. you can move 01:49:810 (109810|0) - to col 2 if you apply it.
01:52:947 - add another note? strong drum here.
[EXHAUST]
00:11:771 - this can be added another note for strong drum sound here.
00:23:633 - I think there's a second instrument here, consider adding one here?
00:26:280 - Add note here? the same clap as 00:25:496 - i think.
00:30:790 (30790|5,30888|4) - Switch column will make this more fluid imo.
00:36:476 - add another note here, while deleting one note at 00:36:869 - ? the first one have crash sound, while the second only have kick here.
00:51:378 - If you apply the one at GRV, maybe for this point, you can make 2 LN for the strong synth only imo.
00:53:339 - Add another note for consistency with 00:56:476 - ?
01:11:574 - also add another note here? there's a strong melody that you follow for double like 01:11:967 -
01:38:339 - add another note for the deep drum here?
01:41:574 (101574|5,101967|3) - make these col 4 and col 1? easier to hit here.
01:44:320 - why isn't there a LN like 01:44:712 (104712|6) - ;_;?
[ADVANCED]
00:33:339 - delete one note? although the double + LN maybe for crash, but you didn't use one at 00:31:771 - 00:34:124 - ,etc.
00:36:476 - this too, not sure if it's intentional, but i think single still works and be more consistent imo.
00:49:810 (49810|0,49908|1,50006|2,50104|3,50202|4) - maybe try to move these notes to the right 1 time? it will show the pitch differentiation with 00:50:202 (50202|0,50300|1,50398|2,50496|3) - and 00:49:025 (49025|0,49124|1,49222|2,49320|3) -
01:13:339 (73339|6,73437|5,73535|4,73633|3,73731|2) - Same as before , i think you can move these stairs to the left 1x to show distinct differences with drum before.
01:27:522 - Why the 1/6 dissapear? ;_;
01:31:378 (91378|2) - I find it better in col 6 imo, more intuitively connected with 01:31:574 (91574|6,91574|1) -
01:38:829 - i feel the jack somehow not that fit in with the crash and kick sound that changing all the way down x.x .. maybe try another symmetry approach like
http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7514948 ?
[NOVICE]
00:25:888 (25888|4,26280|6) - I find the movement quite hard here due to 00:25:692 (25692|5,25888|4) - and 00:26:280 (26280|6,26280|4) - makes the pattern alteration hard to manage, maybe try making 00:25:888 (25888|4,26280|6) - at col 7 and col 4?
00:50:202 (50202|3) - maybe move to col 7? im a bit worried of 00:49:614 (49614|3,50202|3,50594|3) -
01:16:574 - 01:16:771 - maybe try to follow 1/4 too? the melody too big to be ignored imo, and 00:44:712 - a lot harder xd
01:49:025 - add one more note here? for consistency with 01:48:241 -
[BEGINNER]
00:52:555 - 00:55:692 - add one note here? since you usually use double note to represent this crash.. the SR doesn't go higher too.
01:49:418 (109418|1,109810|2) - move to the right 1x? i remember i used to have hard time hit 01:49:418 (109418|1,109810|2,109810|0) - xd
Nice one! This is already great :3 , sorry if this isn't much xd
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