Pattering and Layering:
00:00:925 (925|2) - move to 4
ok00:01:225 (1225|1) - move to 3
ok00:01:375 (1375|3) - move to 2
ok00:09:625 (9625|2,9625|1,9625|0,9775|2,9775|0,9775|1,9925|2,9925|1,9925|3,10075|1,10075|3,10075|2) -
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/224803500:13:375 (13375|1,13450|0,13525|1,13600|2) - make this more pitch relevant, i suggest 00:13:375 (13375|1) - move to 3
ok00:15:475 (15475|0) - move to 2
ok00:21:400 (21400|3) - delete for layering, there's no kick here
ok00:24:625 (24625|0,24662|1,24700|2,24737|3,24775|0,24775|2) - please realize that this pattern is much harder than 01:29:425 (89425|0,89462| 1,89500|2,89537|3,89575|0,89575|1) , either move 00:24:775 (24775|2) - to 2 or maybe something like
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2248071 no00:36:625 (36625|0,36662|1,36700|2,36737|3,36775|0,36775|2) - ^ same issue
no01:43:825 (103825|3,103862|2,103900|1,103937|0,103975|2,103975|1) - ^same issue
no00:29:425 (29425|3,29500|2) - this instead :
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2248080 no00:44:500 (44500|3) - delete, there's only a kick here, no need for double
ok00:45:925 (45925|2,45925|1) - fix pitch relevancy, ctrl + H
no00:47:425 (47425|3,47500|2,47575|1,47725|2,47800|1) -
http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2248104 ok00:49:675 (49675|1,49675|0,49750|3,49750|2,49825|0,49825|1) - no need for doubles
ok00:51:175 (51175|2,51175|3) - the whole stream starting here needs to be redone to fit the pitch of the piano: for example, this note 00:52:675 (52675|0) should definitely be in column 1 because it is the highest point of the whole piano melody here
01:22:375 (82375|2,82425|0,82475|1,82525|2,82575|1,82625|0,82675|1,82675|2) - way too dense for left hand, balance it out a bit more or release the LN in column 4 sooner
ok01:26:875 (86875|3) - make a double
ok01:28:300 (88300|2) - make a double
ok01:28:525 (88525|2) - make a double
ok01:52:075 (112075|2) - move to 4
no01:52:675 (112675|2) - ^
no01:53:275 (113275|2) - ^
no01:56:275 (116275|1,116275|0,116275|3,116425|2,116425|3,116425|0) - these two triples should be the same
okSome of these streams are a little awkward to play, up to you if you want to fix this and re-pattern some of them.
Rhythms:
00:01:075 (1075|0) - grace note like you did at 00:02:075 (2075|0,2125|1,2175|2)
00:03:925 (3925|0) - ^
00:04:375 (4375|0) - ^
00:19:075 (19075|1,19075|2) - ^
00:03:425 (3425|1,3475|2,3525|3) - this grace note is faster than 00:02:075 (2075|0,2125|1,2175|2) , so 1/8 snap instead of 1/6
00:05:950 (5950|2) - delete
00:06:400 (6400|1) - delete
00:07:150 (7150|1) - delete
00:07:600 (7600|1) - delete
00:09:475 (9475|3,9475|2) - delete
00:17:125 - add note here
00:17:950 (17950|0) - delete
00:18:400 (18400|0) - delete
00:20:500 (20500|2) - add a note
00:29:350 (29350|1) - delete
00:30:775 (30775|3,30825|2,30875|1) - i would just keep the 1/4 of the piano here but this is ok too
00:33:475 (33475|0) - delete
00:40:675 (40675|0) - delete yes there is a hi-hat but it sounds and feels so trivial compared to what's going on in the rest of the music)
00:43:525 (43525|1,43525|3) -
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/224808600:45:925 (45925|2,45925|1) - ^same issue
00:48:775 (48775|3,48775|2,48925|0,48925|1) - add 1/4 stream in this measure
between 00:49:525 (49525|0,49525|2,49525|3) and 00:50:125 (50125|3,50125|0) needs 1/4 streams
00:50:200 (50200|2) - add note
00:50:425 (50425|1,50425|0,50425|2,50575|1,50575|2,50575|0,50725|2,50725|3,50725|1,50875|3,50875|2,50875|1) -
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/224803500:56:425 (56425|1,56500|2) - delete
00:56:650 (56650|2) - delete
00:59:500 (59500|3) - delete
01:01:750 (61750|2) - delete
01:02:725 - needs note here
01:06:700 - needs note here. also the pattern around this should be changed a little to fit a note here
01:06:850 - ^
01:08:200 (68200|1) - delete
01:09:100 (69100|3) - delete
01:23:050 (83050|1) - delete
01:23:950 (83950|2) - delete
01:24:250 (84250|1) - delete
01:24:700 - needs note here, also the pattern around this should be changed a little to fit a note here
01:25:300 (85300|2) - 1/6
01:25:525 (85525|2) - delete
01:26:425 (86425|0,86500|1) - delete
01:26:650 (86650|1) - delete
01:26:950 (86950|2) - delete
01:28:000 (88000|3) - delete
01:29:200 (89200|2) - delete
01:33:325 (93325|0,93375|1,93425|2) - too early, push this back an 1/8 or so
01:37:900 (97900|0) - delete
01:47:500 (107500|2) - delete
01:49:525 (109525|2) - delete? or have a little 1/4 run
01:55:675 (115675|0,115675|3) - dude there's some awesome piano stuff happening here! don't just ignore it, it will feel lonely